Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VFT5H7KE6K0FBGSY077FD

Run Details

Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.076155
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last dog-walker had disappeared down the path twenty minutes ago, and Rory stood at the edge of the treeline with her phone's torch cutting a thin blade through the dark, telling herself she was not afraid. She was, of course. But she'd learned long ago that fear was just another voice in the room, and you didn't have to let it speak loudest. Richmond Park at eleven o'clock on a Tuesday night was a different creature from the sun-drenched sprawl she'd cycled through on deliveries. The deer were somewhere out in that blackness — she could feel them the way you feel someone watching from across a pub. Hundreds of dark eyes in hundreds of dark skulls, standing perfectly still in the long grass. She kept her torch fixed ahead and walked. The Heartstone pendant lay flat against her sternum, cold as a coin left on a windowsill. It had been warm when she left the flat, warm enough that she'd noticed it through her shirt on the Tube, warm enough to make her press her fingers to it every few stops to make sure it wasn't just her imagination. By the time she reached Richmond station it was almost hot. Now it was cold. She didn't know what that meant. She found the first oak standing stone by nearly walking into it. Her torch swept across bark so old it had turned to something closer to stone — grey and grooved in deep vertical channels, like the thing had been clawed by centuries of patient fingers. It stood apart from any living tree, rooted in a circle of bare earth where nothing else grew. She reached out and touched it. The wood was dry and strangely warm, as if it held the memory of a sun that had set a thousand years ago. There were supposed to be more of them. She turned slowly, sweeping the torch in a wide arc, and found the second stone twenty feet to her left. The third, another twenty feet beyond that. She followed them like breadcrumbs, counting under her breath — three, four, five — until the trees around her thickened and the canopy overhead closed like a fist and the sounds of the park fell away. Not faded. Fell away. As if someone had pressed a mute button on the world. She stopped walking. Held her breath. Listened. No traffic noise. No wind. No foxes. The silence was so complete it had texture — a cottony pressure against her eardrums, the way silence feels in a room that's been soundproofed. She swallowed and heard the click of her own throat with surgical clarity. The Fae Grove. She stepped between the last two standing stones and the clearing opened before her like a held breath finally released. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in defiance of November — bluebells and primroses and things she couldn't name, all leached of colour by the darkness but visible somehow, as though they generated their own faint luminescence. The sky overhead was wrong. She knew it was overcast tonight — she'd checked the weather, she'd seen the low orange ceiling of London clouds from the train — but here the sky was clear and full of stars she didn't recognise. Too many stars. Too bright. Arranged in constellations that looked almost right but weren't, the way a word looks almost right when you've stared at it too long. Rory lowered her phone and switched off the torch. The starlight was enough. More than enough. It painted the grove in shades of blue and silver and made the standing stones at its perimeter look like the fingers of a buried hand reaching up through the earth. She'd come because the message told her to come. Three words on a piece of paper slipped under her door at the flat, written in ink so dark it looked like it had been extracted from the space between things: *The grove. Midnight.* Stupid. Coming here was stupid. She knew that. She'd known it while lacing her boots and she'd known it on the Tube and she'd known it walking through the dark with her phone held out like a talisman. But the pendant had been hot and the message had been there and she had the particular curse of needing to know. She checked the time. 11:47. The flowers at her feet moved. Not from wind — there was no wind — but a slow, directional swaying, as though something was passing through them just below her line of sight. She tracked the movement as it curved wide around the clearing's edge, a rippling wake in the bluebells that traced a lazy semicircle and then stopped. She stared at the spot where the motion had ceased. Nothing there. Just flowers and starlight and the black line of the standing stones. But the pendant was warm again. Not hot. A gentle, almost apologetic warmth, like a hand placed tentatively on her shoulder. "Hello?" Her voice came out smaller than she wanted. The grove swallowed it without echo. She was aware, suddenly and completely, that she should not have spoken. The certainty arrived fully formed, not as a thought but as a physical sensation — the same lurch in the gut she'd felt the night she realised Evan had locked the front door from the inside. A signal from some ancient part of the brain that understood danger before the conscious mind had finished forming the question. Something had heard her. She couldn't say how she knew. Nothing moved. Nothing breathed. The stars overhead continued their alien glittering. But the quality of the silence had changed. Before, it had been the silence of an empty room. Now it was the silence of a room with someone standing very still in the corner, waiting for you to turn around. Rory did not turn around. She stood perfectly still and breathed through her nose and let her eyes adjust to the periphery. Something was there — not behind her, she decided, but to her left. At the edge of the clearing. She could feel it the way she'd felt the deer: a weight, a presence, a displacement of the dark. It was standing among the stones. The pendant pulsed. A single, clear beat of warmth against her chest, like a second heartbeat. She turned her head, slowly, and looked. It was nothing. A shadow that was slightly too deep between two of the standing stones. A darkness that didn't match the angle of the starlight. But as she stared at it, the darkness seemed to resolvenot into a shape exactly, but into the *suggestion* of a shape. Something tall and narrow. Something that stood the way a person stands when they've forgotten how people are supposed to stand, the angles subtly, horribly wrong. Rory's mouth went dry. The shape didn't move. Didn't advance. It simply occupied its space between the stones with a patience that made the hairs on her arms lift one by one. She had the terrible impression that it was studying her with the same careful attention she was giving it — that they were locked in a mutual observation, predator and prey, and she wasn't sure which one she was. She stepped backward. One step. The flowers gave beneath her trainers with a wet sound that was too loud. The shadow shifted. A lateral movement, smooth and unhurried, like something sliding behind a curtain. It moved from between the two stones to behind one, and then the standing stone was just a standing stone and the shadow was just the dark behind it and Rory was alone again. She wasn't alone. She knew this the way she knew her own name. She could feel it in the changed weight of the air, the way the grove seemed to have contracted around her by some imperceptible degree, the flowers a little closer, the stones a little nearer, the sky a little lower. The thing hadn't left. It had simply stopped letting her see it. The pendant was hot now. Properly hot. She pressed her hand to it through her shirt and felt the crimson stone throb against her palm— a rhythm that didn't match her heartbeat. Faster. Urgent. A warning she couldn't decode. A sound reached her. The first sound she'd heard in the grove that she hadn't made herself. It came from below. From the ground. A low, resonant vibration that she felt in the soles of her feet before her ears caught up — a hum, almost musical, almost beautiful, rising through the earth like something vast turning over in its sleep and beginning to wake. The wildflowers shivered. All of them, all at once, a collective tremor that rippled outward from the centre of the clearing. From where she was standing. Rory looked down. The flowers directly beneath her feet had changed. They'd been bluebells a moment ago — she was certain of that — but now they were something else. Dark. Almost black. Petals curled inward like fingers making fists. And where they met the bare skin of her ankles above her socks, they were warm. Warm and faintly damp. She lurched sideways, out of the dark patch, and the flowers she stepped into were normal again — pale, cool, ordinary. But the black patch remained where she'd been standing, visible in the starlight like a bruise on the clearing floor. As she watched, it spread. Slowly. A stain soaking into fabric. The dark flowers multiplied, pushing aside the bluebells and primroses, reaching toward the edge of the clearing with organic inevitability. The pendant was almost too hot to bear. Something laughed. Not a human laugh. Not an animal sound. A single, low exhalation that nevertheless contained in it the architecture of laughter — the rhythm, the breath pattern, the suggestion of amusement — translated into a register that human vocal cords couldn't produce. It came from everywhere and nowhere. It came from the spaces between the standing stones and from the ground beneath her feet and from the alien sky overhead. Rory ran. She bolted for the gap between the stones where she'd entered the grove and the standing stones reared up around her like sentries and the bluebells lashed at her ankles and the silence pressed against her ears like water. She hit the treeline at full sprint and crashed through undergrowth that grabbed and tore and suddenly the sounds of the world came roaring back — wind and distant traffic and a fox screaming somewhere to the west — and she was stumbling through ordinary English woodland in ordinary English dark with branches whipping at her face and her heart hammering so hard she could feel it in her teeth. She didn't stop until she reached the path. The wide, paved, lamp-lit path with its reassuring council signage and its dog-waste bins and its iron benches bolted to concrete. She bent double, hands on her knees, breathing in great ragged gulps. Her phone had survived — somehow still clutched in her left hand, the hand with the crescent scar, her knuckles bone-white around it. She checked the time. 3:14 AM. She'd been in the grove for thirteen minutes. More than three hours had passed outside. The pendant lay against her sternum, cooling steadily, its crimson glow fading to something barely visible through the fabric of her shirt. A dying ember. She pressed her fingers to it and felt the last threads of warmth unravel. Behind her, deep in the park, the fox screamed again. Rory straightened up. Pushed her hair out of her face with shaking hands. Walked toward the station with quick, measured steps, eyes forward, not looking back. She did not look back, because she understood now — the way the body understands before the mind catches up — that the grove had let her leave. That speed and will had nothing to do with it. Whatever stood among those stones had opened its fingers and allowed her to pass through them, the way you lift your hand from a beetle to watch which direction it runs. The Heartstone cooled to nothing against her chest. The stars overhead were London's stars again — dim and sparse and mercifully, blessedly wrong in all the right ways.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.35% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2028
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count3
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
2"suddenly"
3"completely"
4"very"
5"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
35.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2028
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"could feel"
count4
1
word"silence"
count6
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"lurch"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"resolve"
count1
9
word"predator"
count1
10
word"throb"
count1
11
word"lurched"
count1
12
word"roaring"
count1
13
word"unravel"
count1
14
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"could feel"
1"silence"
2"traced"
3"warmth"
4"echo"
5"lurch"
6"weight"
7"pulsed"
8"resolve"
9"predator"
10"throb"
11"lurched"
12"roaring"
13"unravel"
14"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences165
matches(empty)
99.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences165
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"look"
2"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences165
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords2054
ratio0.002
matches
0"The grove. Midnight."
1"suggestion"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount2053
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.39
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory8
Park1
Tuesday1
Heartstone2
Tube2
Richmond2
Fae1
Grove1
November1
London2
Stupid1
Evan1
English2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Evan"
places
0"Park"
1"Richmond"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences101
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like it had been extracted from th"
53.94% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.461
wordCount2054
matches
0"not as a thought but as a physical sensation"
1"not behind her, she decided, but to her left"
2"not into a shape exactly, but into the *suggestion* of a shape"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences165
matches
0"up — that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean38.75
std31.17
cv0.804
sampleLengths
037
127
269
379
412
581
671
715
87
945
103
11125
1247
1343
1460
155
1683
1721
1815
1969
204
2157
225
2361
2416
257
2676
274
2867
2919
3049
313
3262
3339
3417
3569
365
3760
3872
398
402
4170
422
43109
4464
456
4615
4739
4810
4926
92.50% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences165
matches
0"been clawed"
1"were supposed"
2"been soundproofed"
3"been extracted"
4"are supposed"
5"were locked"
74.61% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs319
matches
0"was passing"
1"was standing"
2"was studying"
3"was giving"
4"was standing"
5"was stumbling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences165
ratio0.121
matches
0"The deer were somewhere out in that blackness — she could feel them the way you feel someone watching from across a pub."
1"Her torch swept across bark so old it had turned to something closer to stone — grey and grooved in deep vertical channels, like the thing had been clawed by centuries of patient fingers."
2"She followed them like breadcrumbs, counting under her breath — three, four, five — until the trees around her thickened and the canopy overhead closed like a fist and the sounds of the park fell away."
3"The silence was so complete it had texture — a cottony pressure against her eardrums, the way silence feels in a room that's been soundproofed."
4"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in defiance of November — bluebells and primroses and things she couldn't name, all leached of colour by the darkness but visible somehow, as though they generated their own faint luminescence."
5"She knew it was overcast tonight — she'd checked the weather, she'd seen the low orange ceiling of London clouds from the train — but here the sky was clear and full of stars she didn't recognise."
6"Not from wind — there was no wind — but a slow, directional swaying, as though something was passing through them just below her line of sight."
7"The certainty arrived fully formed, not as a thought but as a physical sensation — the same lurch in the gut she'd felt the night she realised Evan had locked the front door from the inside."
8"Something was there — not behind her, she decided, but to her left."
9"But as she stared at it, the darkness seemed to resolve — not into a shape exactly, but into the *suggestion* of a shape."
10"She had the terrible impression that it was studying her with the same careful attention she was giving it — that they were locked in a mutual observation, predator and prey, and she wasn't sure which one she was."
11"She pressed her hand to it through her shirt and felt the crimson stone throb against her palm— a rhythm that didn't match her heartbeat."
12"A low, resonant vibration that she felt in the soles of her feet before her ears caught up — a hum, almost musical, almost beautiful, rising through the earth like something vast turning over in its sleep and beginning to wake."
13"They'd been bluebells a moment ago — she was certain of that — but now they were something else."
14"She lurched sideways, out of the dark patch, and the flowers she stepped into were normal again — pale, cool, ordinary."
15"A single, low exhalation that nevertheless contained in it the architecture of laughter — the rhythm, the breath pattern, the suggestion of amusement — translated into a register that human vocal cords couldn't produce."
16"She hit the treeline at full sprint and crashed through undergrowth that grabbed and tore and suddenly the sounds of the world came roaring back — wind and distant traffic and a fox screaming somewhere to the west — and she was stumbling through ordinary English woodland in ordinary English dark with branches whipping at her face and her heart hammering so hard she could feel it in her teeth."
17"Her phone had survived — somehow still clutched in her left hand, the hand with the crescent scar, her knuckles bone-white around it."
18"She did not look back, because she understood now — the way the body understands before the mind catches up — that the grove had let her leave."
19"The stars overhead were London's stars again — dim and sparse and mercifully, blessedly wrong in all the right ways."
95.38% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2032
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount92
adverbRatio0.045275590551181105
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.012795275590551181
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences165
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences165
mean12.45
std11.66
cv0.937
sampleLengths
037
14
223
322
423
516
68
716
842
911
104
116
1212
1334
1418
156
1623
178
1820
197
2036
212
222
2311
243
253
261
273
282
292
3025
3113
323
3320
3435
355
3637
373
382
3923
409
414
423
4331
449
4533
461
471
484
493
40.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.3170731707317073
totalSentences164
uniqueOpeners52
94.56% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences141
matches
0"Too many stars."
1"More than enough."
2"Just flowers and starlight and"
3"More than three hours had"
ratio0.028
72.48% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences141
matches
0"She was, of course."
1"She kept her torch fixed"
2"It had been warm when"
3"She didn't know what that"
4"She found the first oak"
5"Her torch swept across bark"
6"It stood apart from any"
7"She reached out and touched"
8"She turned slowly, sweeping the"
9"She followed them like breadcrumbs,"
10"She stopped walking."
11"She swallowed and heard the"
12"She stepped between the last"
13"She knew it was overcast"
14"It painted the grove in"
15"She'd come because the message"
16"She knew that."
17"She'd known it while lacing"
18"She checked the time."
19"She tracked the movement as"
ratio0.369
80.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences141
matches
0"The last dog-walker had disappeared"
1"She was, of course."
2"Richmond Park at eleven o'clock"
3"The deer were somewhere out"
4"Hundreds of dark eyes in"
5"She kept her torch fixed"
6"The Heartstone pendant lay flat"
7"It had been warm when"
8"She didn't know what that"
9"She found the first oak"
10"Her torch swept across bark"
11"It stood apart from any"
12"She reached out and touched"
13"The wood was dry and"
14"She turned slowly, sweeping the"
15"The third, another twenty feet"
16"She followed them like breadcrumbs,"
17"She stopped walking."
18"The silence was so complete"
19"She swallowed and heard the"
ratio0.759
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences141
matches
0"By the time she reached"
1"Now it was cold."
2"As if someone had pressed"
3"Before, it had been the"
4"Now it was the silence"
ratio0.035
57.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences75
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The last dog-walker had disappeared down the path twenty minutes ago, and Rory stood at the edge of the treeline with her phone's torch cutting a thin blade thr…"
1"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in defiance of November — bluebells and primroses and things she couldn't name, all leached of colour by the darkness but visibl…"
2"Arranged in constellations that looked almost right but weren't, the way a word looks almost right when you've stared at it too long."
3"Not from wind — there was no wind — but a slow, directional swaying, as though something was passing through them just below her line of sight."
4"She tracked the movement as it curved wide around the clearing's edge, a rippling wake in the bluebells that traced a lazy semicircle and then stopped."
5"She pressed her hand to it through her shirt and felt the crimson stone throb against her palm— a rhythm that didn't match her heartbeat."
6"All of them, all at once, a collective tremor that rippled outward from the centre of the clearing."
7"She hit the treeline at full sprint and crashed through undergrowth that grabbed and tore and suddenly the sounds of the world came roaring back — wind and dist…"
8"The pendant lay against her sternum, cooling steadily, its crimson glow fading to something barely visible through the fabric of her shirt."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
85.7552%