Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VV8BSQ2HCPETNDGTG2BPC

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.075055
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last dog walker had left Richmond Park an hour ago. Rory had watched from a bench near the car park, her hood pulled low, her fingers turning the pendant over and over beneath her jacket until the silver chain bit a groove into the back of her neck. She'd waited until the woman and her arthritic spaniel had disappeared beyond the rise, and then she'd waited ten minutes more, because the smart thing was never the first thing. Now she stood at the edge of the treeline with her phone torch pointed at the ground and the certain, bone-deep knowledge that she should not be here. She went in anyway. The reason was simple. Three nights running, the Heartstone had woken her at two in the morning — not with the faint, companionable warmth it gave off when she carried it through Southwark or rode the bus past Battersea, but with a sharp, insistent heat, like a coal pressed flat against her sternum. Three nights of sitting upright in her narrow bed above Silas's bar, listening to the thump of bass through the floorboards and the pendant's silent demand. Each time, the warmth had pulled in the same direction: southwest. Richmond. The grove. Someone — something — wanted her attention. The path through the oaks was one she'd walked twice before, both times in daylight, both times with company. Alone and in the dark, the wood felt like a different country. Her torch caught the bark of the nearest tree and made it shine wet, though it hadn't rained in days. The leaf litter was soft and silent under her trainers. She could hear her own breathing and, beneath it, the ambient murmur of the park at night — foxes, wind, distant traffic on the A307. Normal sounds. Sounds she knew. She followed the pendant's warmth like a dowsing rod, angling off the path and into the undergrowth. Brambles caught her jeans. A branch swung back and clipped her temple, and she swore under her breath and kept moving. The oaks thickened around her, their canopy closing overhead until her torch beam was the only light, a pale cone that made everything beyond it blacker by contrast. The standing stones appeared sooner than she expected. They rose from the earth at irregular intervals, five of them, each as tall as her shoulder and carved from ancient oak so old it had petrified to something harder than heartwood. In daylight they looked like a curiosity, an art installation someone had forgotten to plaque. At night, under the thin wash of her phone's LED, they looked like figures standing with their backs to her. Rory stopped at the boundary they described and made herself breathe. The pendant was almost uncomfortably hot against her chest now, its crimson glow visible through the fabric of her shirt — a dull red pulse, steady as a second heartbeat. She pulled it out and held it in her palm. The thumbnail-sized gem threw faint light across her fingers, and she watched the glow intensify, fade, intensify, fade, each cycle slightly faster than the last. She stepped between two of the stones. The temperature dropped. Not gradually, not the way autumn chill settles in. One step, and the air was ten degrees colder, and the sounds of the park — the foxes, the wind, the traffic — stopped. Not faded. Stopped. As if someone had pressed a mute button on the world beyond the stones. The silence was so complete that she could hear blood moving in her own ears. In front of her, the grove opened up: a clearing perhaps forty feet across, ringed by oaks so massive their branches interlocked overhead like the vaulting of a cathedral. Wildflowers carpeted the ground — bluebells and foxglove and something pale and star-shaped she didn't know the name of — all of them in full, impossible bloom despite it being the dead of November. They should have been beautiful. They were beautiful. But beauty and wrongness are not mutually exclusive, and Rory had learned, over the past several weeks, to trust the difference between something that looked right and something that felt it. This did not feel right. She swept her torch across the clearing in a slow arc. Nothing moved. The flowers didn't sway, because there was no wind. The branches overhead didn't creak, because there was no air current to flex them. The stillness was absolute, and it pressed against her skin like water pressure, like the grove was holding its breath. Or holding hers. The pendant pulsed. Hot, then hotter, then hot enough that she nearly dropped it. She curled her fingers around it and hissed through her teeth and took three steps into the clearing, because that was what she'd come here to do — to answer whatever was calling, to find out why the Heartstone wouldn't let her sleep. That was when she heard the sound. It came from her left, low and rhythmic, and for a disoriented moment she thought it was her own footsteps echoing back at her. But she was standing still. The sound continued — a soft, measured tread through undergrowth, the compression of leaf litter underfoot, pace steady, unhurried. Circling. Something was walking the perimeter of the clearing. Rory turned her torch toward the tree line. The beam caught trunks and shadow and nothing else. The footsteps didn't stop. They didn't speed up. They maintained their patient, circling rhythm, and she tracked them with the light — left to right, past the gap between two oaks, behind a stand of bracken, around the curve of the clearing's edge — and saw nothing. Not a shape, not a reflection, not even the displacement of a branch. The sound moved, and the source of the sound did not exist. Her mouth had gone dry. She swallowed and tasted copper. "Hello?" Her voice came out level. She was grateful for that. Cardiff vowels carrying across the silent clearing, absorbed by the canopy above. No echo. The word simply stopped existing the moment it left her lips. The footsteps stopped too. The silence that followed was worse. Before, the quiet had been ambient, a condition of the place. Now it was attentive. She could feel the quality of it change against her skin, the way you feel someone's gaze on the back of your neck in a crowded room. Something was listening. Something nearby was standing very, very still and listening to her, and the Heartstone in her palm was burning like a lit match, its crimson glow now bright enough to throw her shadow long and stark against the wildflowers at her feet. She turned in a slow circle. The torch beam carved across the trees. On her second rotation, she saw the flowers. Not all of them. Just a patch, perhaps six feet from where she stood, slightly to her right. The bluebells there were bent. Not trampled — bent, pressed gently sideways, their stems bowed in a pattern she recognized because she'd been looking down at her own feet a moment ago. It was the impression of a footprint. Then, as she watched, the flower beside it bent. And the one beside that. Slowly, deliberately, the way grass flattens under an invisible weight. Something was walking toward her. Rory took a step backward. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist ached — an old, childish injury that had no reason to hurt but did, the way old things sometimes wake when new things go wrong. She held the pendant out in front of her like a talisman, and its light threw crimson across the approaching trail of crushed flowers, catching petals as they folded, stem by stem, closer. Ten feet. Eight. Six. The air in front of her thickened. Not visibly — there was nothing to see, no ripple, no outline, no cinematic shimmer. But she could feel it. A density. A presence occupying space the way a held breath occupies a chest. It radiated cold, a focused, directional cold that prickled the skin of her face and throat, and beneath the cold there was something else, something that operated below the register of sensation and above the register of thought. A pressure against the inside of her skull. An invitation. Or an inspection. The pendant's glow peaked — a single, brilliant pulse of crimson that lit the entire clearing for half a heartbeat, turning everything the colour of old blood. In that flash, she saw something. Not clearly. Not in a way she could describe afterward. An impression of height. An impression of angles that didn't correspond to any anatomy she knew. An impression of attention so vast and focused that it felt like standing at the base of a dam and hearing the first crack. Then the light receded, and there was only darkness, and she was alone, and she was absolutely not alone. The flowers at her feet were flat now. Whatever stood in front of her had stopped less than an arm's length away. Close enough that she could feel its cold on her lips when she exhaled. Close enough that if she extended her hand, she would touch it. She kept her hand at her side. She did not extend her hand. Seconds passed. Ten. Twenty. The pressure inside her skull shifted, and she had the sudden, vertiginous impression of being read — not her thoughts, not her memories, but something more fundamental, something structural, as if whatever stood before her was examining the architecture of what she was. The pendant cooled by a single degree. Then another. Rory held still. She did not speak. She did not breathe. The flowers to her right bent. One, then the next, then the next — a trail leading away from her, back toward the tree line, measured and unhurried. The pressure receded. The cold retreated by inches, like a tide pulling back from shore. The footsteps resumed their soft, rhythmic tread, and this time they moved away, around the clearing's edge, past the standing stones, and into the dark between the oaks. She listened until she couldn't hear them anymore. She listened for two minutes after that. The ambient sounds of the park filtered back slowly — first the wind, then a fox's bark somewhere to the north, then the faint, blessed hum of traffic. The air warmed. The pendant dimmed to its usual faint glow, a drowsy coal against her sternum. She looked down and saw that the wildflowers around her were upright again, every stem pristine, every petal unbruised. No trail. No impression. As if nothing had walked here. As if nothing had stood so close she could have counted its breaths, if it breathed. Rory's legs gave out, and she sat heavily among the bluebells. She pressed both palms to the ground and felt the cool earth and the damp and the roots of small living things beneath her fingers, and she sat there until her hands stopped shaking. Then she stood, and she walked back through the standing stones, and she did not run, because running felt like the kind of thing that might attract attention. She moved through the trees toward the path, and the path toward the gate, and the gate toward the road outside Richmond Park, where a lone night bus groaned past with its interior lights blazing, full of strangers going home, and the sheer mundane beauty of it almost made her cry. She rode the bus back to Southwark with her hand around the pendant and her back pressed flat against the seat. Her reflection stared at her from the dark window — blue eyes wide, black hair tangled with bits of leaf and bracken, face the color of chalk. She looked like someone who'd seen something. She hadn't. That was the worst part. She hadn't seen a damn thing. But something had seen her. Something had come close enough to read her like a page and had chosen, for reasons she did not understand, to walk away. The pendant lay cool and quiet against her chest, its crimson light extinguished, offering nothing.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:20:49.933Z" 2/24/2026, 10:20:49 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2006
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count2
4
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"gently"
3"slowly"
4"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
35.19% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2006
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count2
6
word"footsteps"
count4
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"measured"
count2
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count3
11
word"stark"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"absolutely"
count1
14
word"pristine"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulse"
2"chill"
3"silence"
4"pulsed"
5"rhythmic"
6"footsteps"
7"echoing"
8"measured"
9"echo"
10"could feel"
11"stark"
12"weight"
13"absolutely"
14"pristine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences159
matches
0"was grateful"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences159
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2027
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount2026
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.35
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park2
Heartstone3
Southwark2
Battersea1
Silas1
November1
Rory7
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Southwark"
3"Battersea"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences103
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"felt like a different country"
1"appeared sooner than she expected"
2"looked like a curiosity, an art installat"
3"looked like figures standing with their b"
4"Not visibly — there was nothing"
5"felt like standing at the base of a dam"
6"felt like the kind of thing that might"
7"looked like someone who'd seen something"
52.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.48
wordCount2027
matches
0"no reason to hurt but"
1"not her thoughts, not her memories, but something more fundamental, something structural, as if what"
2"not her memories, but something more fundamental, something structural, as if what"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences159
matches
0"focused that it"
1"saw that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean41.37
std33.7
cv0.815
sampleLengths
079
128
24
393
47
591
666
78
867
976
107
1153
1215
13102
145
1556
163
1757
187
1949
208
2189
2210
2336
244
2593
2613
278
2881
295
3070
314
3289
333
3483
3519
3655
376
3856
3911
4071
418
427
4390
4445
4579
4668
4728
4815
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs295
matches
0"was holding"
1"was calling"
2"was standing"
3"was walking"
4"was listening"
5"was standing"
6"was burning"
7"was walking"
8"was examining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences159
ratio0.107
matches
0"Three nights running, the Heartstone had woken her at two in the morning — not with the faint, companionable warmth it gave off when she carried it through Southwark or rode the bus past Battersea, but with a sharp, insistent heat, like a coal pressed flat against her sternum."
1"Someone — something — wanted her attention."
2"She could hear her own breathing and, beneath it, the ambient murmur of the park at night — foxes, wind, distant traffic on the A307."
3"The pendant was almost uncomfortably hot against her chest now, its crimson glow visible through the fabric of her shirt — a dull red pulse, steady as a second heartbeat."
4"One step, and the air was ten degrees colder, and the sounds of the park — the foxes, the wind, the traffic — stopped."
5"Wildflowers carpeted the ground — bluebells and foxglove and something pale and star-shaped she didn't know the name of — all of them in full, impossible bloom despite it being the dead of November."
6"She curled her fingers around it and hissed through her teeth and took three steps into the clearing, because that was what she'd come here to do — to answer whatever was calling, to find out why the Heartstone wouldn't let her sleep."
7"The sound continued — a soft, measured tread through undergrowth, the compression of leaf litter underfoot, pace steady, unhurried."
8"They maintained their patient, circling rhythm, and she tracked them with the light — left to right, past the gap between two oaks, behind a stand of bracken, around the curve of the clearing's edge — and saw nothing."
9"Not trampled — bent, pressed gently sideways, their stems bowed in a pattern she recognized because she'd been looking down at her own feet a moment ago."
10"The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist ached — an old, childish injury that had no reason to hurt but did, the way old things sometimes wake when new things go wrong."
11"Not visibly — there was nothing to see, no ripple, no outline, no cinematic shimmer."
12"The pendant's glow peaked — a single, brilliant pulse of crimson that lit the entire clearing for half a heartbeat, turning everything the colour of old blood."
13"The pressure inside her skull shifted, and she had the sudden, vertiginous impression of being read — not her thoughts, not her memories, but something more fundamental, something structural, as if whatever stood before her was examining the architecture of what she was."
14"One, then the next, then the next — a trail leading away from her, back toward the tree line, measured and unhurried."
15"The ambient sounds of the park filtered back slowly — first the wind, then a fox's bark somewhere to the north, then the faint, blessed hum of traffic."
16"Her reflection stared at her from the dark window — blue eyes wide, black hair tangled with bits of leaf and bracken, face the color of chalk."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2009
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"certain, bone-deep knowledge"
adverbCount80
adverbRatio0.039820806371329016
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.008461921353907416
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean12.75
std11.3
cv0.886
sampleLengths
011
138
230
328
44
54
649
726
811
91
102
117
1219
1312
1420
1510
1625
172
183
1917
204
2117
2228
238
2432
2515
2620
2711
2830
2910
3025
317
323
339
3424
352
361
3714
3815
3929
4034
415
423
4331
445
4511
462
479
4814
4920
33.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats27
diversityRatio0.3018867924528302
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences138
matches
0"Just a patch, perhaps six"
1"Then, as she watched, the"
2"Slowly, deliberately, the way grass"
3"Then the light receded, and"
4"Then she stood, and she"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences138
matches
0"She'd waited until the woman"
1"She went in anyway."
2"Her torch caught the bark"
3"She could hear her own"
4"She followed the pendant's warmth"
5"They rose from the earth"
6"She pulled it out and"
7"She stepped between two of"
8"They should have been beautiful."
9"They were beautiful."
10"She swept her torch across"
11"She curled her fingers around"
12"It came from her left,"
13"They didn't speed up."
14"They maintained their patient, circling"
15"Her mouth had gone dry."
16"She swallowed and tasted copper."
17"Her voice came out level"
18"She was grateful for that."
19"She could feel the quality"
ratio0.268
97.68% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences138
matches
0"The last dog walker had"
1"Rory had watched from a"
2"She'd waited until the woman"
3"She went in anyway."
4"The reason was simple."
5"Each time, the warmth had"
6"Someone — something — wanted"
7"The path through the oaks"
8"Her torch caught the bark"
9"The leaf litter was soft"
10"She could hear her own"
11"She followed the pendant's warmth"
12"Brambles caught her jeans."
13"A branch swung back and"
14"The oaks thickened around her,"
15"The standing stones appeared sooner"
16"They rose from the earth"
17"Rory stopped at the boundary"
18"The pendant was almost uncomfortably"
19"She pulled it out and"
ratio0.725
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences138
matches
0"Now she stood at the"
1"As if someone had pressed"
2"Before, the quiet had been"
3"Now it was attentive."
4"As if nothing had walked"
5"As if nothing had stood"
ratio0.043
84.94% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The oaks thickened around her, their canopy closing overhead until her torch beam was the only light, a pale cone that made everything beyond it blacker by cont…"
1"But beauty and wrongness are not mutually exclusive, and Rory had learned, over the past several weeks, to trust the difference between something that looked ri…"
2"The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist ached — an old, childish injury that had no reason to hurt but did, the way old things sometimes wake when new things…"
3"It radiated cold, a focused, directional cold that prickled the skin of her face and throat, and beneath the cold there was something else, something that opera…"
4"The pendant's glow peaked — a single, brilliant pulse of crimson that lit the entire clearing for half a heartbeat, turning everything the colour of old blood."
5"The pressure inside her skull shifted, and she had the sudden, vertiginous impression of being read — not her thoughts, not her memories, but something more fun…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
82.5736%