Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8VX8ZY45A71XFYGRB5NEEM

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Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.100535
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Tuesday crowd at The Raven's Nest was thin enough that Rory could hear the ice settling in her glass. She sat at the far end of the bar, closest to the wall of old maps, her delivery bag slumped on the stool beside her like a tired companion. The last run of the night had taken her to a Mayfair flat where the woman who opened the door held a Pomeranian in one arm and tipped sixty pence with the other. Rory had smiled. She'd walked back to Soho in the rain. Silas set a fresh gin and tonic in front of her without being asked, his silver signet ring catching the low light as he placed the glass precisely on a coaster. He moved behind the bar with the quiet economy of a man who'd spent decades making himself unobtrusive in rooms, his limp barely noticeable unless you knew to look for it. "You're dripping on my bartop," he said. "Your bartop's seen worse." "That's not the counterargument you think it is." He draped a clean towel over her shoulder, the gesture almost fatherly, then moved down the bar to tend to a couple murmuring over whiskeys. Rory pressed the towel against her hair, wringing the rain from the black strands, and pulled out her phone. Two missed calls from her mother. A text from Yu-Fei asking her to cover a Saturday shift. She was composing a reply when the door opened and the green neon from the sign outside bled briefly across the floor. The woman who entered wore a camel-colored coat that looked like it cost more than Rory's rent. Her dark hair was pulled back in a low chignon, and she carried herself with that particular London posture — shoulders back, chin steady, the body language of someone who'd learned to take up space in rooms full of men. She was scanning the bar for a table when her eyes passed over Rory, continued to the far wall, and then snapped back. Rory felt the recognition hit her stomach before it reached her brain. "Rory? Rory Carter?" Gemma Price. She was already crossing the room, heels clicking against the old hardwood, her face breaking into an expression of such unguarded surprise that for a moment she looked exactly like the girl who used to fall asleep in Torts lectures with a highlighter still uncapped in her hand. "Gemma," Rory said. She stood, and the delivery bag tumbled off the stool to the floor. She left it there. Gemma pulled her into a hug that smelled like expensive perfume and the particular warmth of someone who'd just come out of a heated car. When she pulled back, she held Rory at arm's length and studied her face with the openness of someone who hadn't yet calculated what to say. "God, it's been — what, four years? Five?" Gemma slid onto the stool beside her, already shrugging off the coat to reveal a charcoal blazer, a thin gold chain at her throat. "I didn't know you were in London. Last I heard you were still in Cardiff finishing your articles. Or was it the LPC? I can't remember." "I didn't finish," Rory said. She sat back down and took a sip of her gin. The tonic had gone flat while she'd been wringing out her hair. "I moved here about two years ago." "Two years, and I haven't run into you once? London, honestly." Gemma caught Silas's eye and ordered a Sauvignon Blanc with the easy decisiveness of someone used to being served quickly. "What firm are you with?" "I'm not with a firm." "In-house, then? Don't tell me you went corporate. You swore you'd rather eat glass." "I deliver food," Rory said. "For a Chinese restaurant in Soho." The silence that followed lasted only a second, but Rory watched it move through Gemma's face like weather. Surprise. A flicker of something that might have been pity. Then a careful rearrangement into neutrality that Rory recognized as lawyerly discipline. "Right," Gemma said. "Well. That's — is it good? Do you like it?" "The owner's brilliant. She makes this kung pao chicken that could end wars." Rory turned her glass on the coaster. "It's just a job, Gem. I'm not curing cancer. But I'm not pretending I am, either." Silas brought the wine without comment, though Rory felt his gaze linger for a moment before he withdrew. He had that instinct — the quiet triangulation of a man who'd once read rooms for a living. Gemma took a long sip, and when she set the glass down, some of the professional veneer had softened. "I just — I think about that mock trial in second year, you know? Richards said you were the sharpest student he'd seen in a decade. He told Professor Montague the same thing at the faculty dinner. You had this way of — you'd find the one thread everyone else had missed and just pull." "Richards said a lot of things. He also said the European Court of Human Rights was a passing fad." "I'm serious, Rory." "I know you are. That's why I'm deflecting." Gemma laughed — a short, honest sound — and for a moment the years collapsed and they were sitting in the student union sharing a plate of chips, talking about nothing that mattered. But the moment passed, because moments like that always do, and Rory watched Gemma's eyes drop to the delivery bag on the floor, the Golden Empress logo visible on its side, grease-stained and fraying at one strap. "What happened?" Gemma asked quietly. "I tried to call. After you left Cardiff, I must have rung you twenty times. Eva said you needed space, so I gave you space, but — Christ, Rory, you just vanished." Rory traced the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist with her thumb, an old habit she hadn't managed to break. The scar was from childhood — she'd caught it on a fence climbing after a neighbour's cat — but the gesture had taken on new meaning in the years since, a touchstone she reached for when she needed to remind herself that not every hurt left a mark you could see. "I had some things to sort out," she said. "What kind of things?" "The kind that don't make for good bar conversation." Gemma set her wine down. "We used to talk about everything." "We used to be twenty-one. We used to think the world was a problem set with a solution at the back of the book." Rory looked at her. "You're doing well. I can tell. Where did you end up?" The redirect worked, mostly. Gemma was at a mid-size firm in the City — commercial litigation, she said, which meant she spent most of her days arguing about contract clauses and the rest of them trying to remember why she'd wanted to. She'd made junior partner eight months ago. She had a flat in Bermondsey. A fiancé named Oliver who worked in sustainable architecture and owned too many succulents. "He proposed in Lisbon," Gemma said. "On a rooftop. With port wine. It was disgustingly romantic." "Sounds lovely." "It was. It is." Gemma paused. "He's kind, Rory. He's genuinely kind. That was the thing I didn't know I was looking for until I found it." Something tightened behind Rory's ribs. She thought of Evan — not the Evan she'd first met, the one who brought her coffee before lectures and learned her mother's birthday, but the other one. The one who'd surface at two in the morning smelling of whiskey and certainty, who knew exactly how to make an apology sound like an accusation. She thought of the night she'd left, the way she'd packed a bag with her hands shaking so badly she'd zipped her own thumb into the suitcase. She thought of the three buses it had taken to get to Eva's flat, and how she'd stood on the doorstep for five full minutes before she could make herself knock, because some part of her was still calculating whether she deserved to. "Kindness is underrated," Rory said. Gemma watched her with those careful brown eyes, and Rory could see the questions stacking up behind them, organized and precise — Gemma had always been good at building a case from fragments. She'd be connecting the disappearance from Cardiff, the dropped career, the vague language about things to sort out. Rory could see the shape of the word forming before Gemma said it. "Was it Evan?" Rory didn't flinch. She'd trained herself out of flinching. But she took a breath that went deeper than it needed to, and when she exhaled, the sound was steady in a way that was its own kind of answer. "Gem." "You don't have to tell me. I know you don't have to tell me." "Then don't ask." "I should have asked sooner. I should have — when we were still in Cardiff, I saw things. Small things. The way you'd go quiet when your phone buzzed, or cancel plans at the last minute, or show up to lectures wearing long sleeves in June. I told myself it was stress. I told myself it wasn't my business." Gemma's voice cracked on the last word, and she pressed her fingertips against the base of her wineglass as though steadying herself. "I've thought about it. More than you'd believe. I've thought about what I should have said." The bar hummed around them — the low murmur of the couple by the window, a jazz track drifting from speakers mounted above the black-and-white photographs on the wall, Silas polishing glasses with quiet, deliberate strokes. The green neon sign outside threw its glow against the rain-streaked window, making everything look slightly subaqueous. Rory looked at Gemma and saw two people at once: the girl who used to leave annotated notes in her locker before exams, and the woman who'd spent the last four years carrying guilt for a silence she'd chosen when they were barely more than kids. The distance between those two people was the same distance Rory felt between herself and the girl who'd once believed she'd end up in a courtroom. Time didn't erase people; it just laid new versions over the old ones like acetate on a map, so the original lines showed through if you held it to the light. "You couldn't have fixed it," Rory said. "No one could have fixed it except me. And even I couldn't fix it — I could only leave." "And you did." "And I did." Gemma nodded slowly. She picked up her wine and drank, and when she set it down again her eyes were bright but her jaw was set, the way it used to get before closing arguments. "I'm sorry I let you vanish." "I'm sorry I needed to." They sat with that for a while. Outside, a bus hissed past. Someone laughed on the street. The ordinary machinery of London grinding forward without regard for the small, enormous things that happened in bars after dark. "I should go," Gemma said eventually. "Oliver's cooking, and if I'm late he'll worry. He's a worrier." She paused. "Can I give you my number? My new one?" Rory pulled out her phone. Gemma typed her number in and handed it back. Their fingers brushed, and for a moment neither of them moved. "You were the sharpest person I ever met," Gemma said. "You still are. I can tell because you're the only person who's ever made me feel stupid for being successful." "That's not what I'm doing." "I know. That's why it works." Gemma pulled on her coat and lifted her bag. She stood there for a moment, and Rory could feel her wanting to say more — to argue the case, to build toward some closing statement about potential and waste and roads not taken. But Gemma had always known when to rest her case. "Take care of yourself, Rory." "Yeah. You too, Gem." She watched Gemma walk to the door, watched her pause just before stepping out into the rain, watched her choose not to look back. The door swung shut. The green light swallowed her. Silas appeared at Rory's elbow, replacing her flat gin and tonic with a fresh one. He leaned against the bar, arms folded, and looked at the door. "Old friend?" he asked. "Old life." He nodded, as though the distinction needed no explanation, and moved away to tend to his quiet bar. Rory sat for a long time with the new drink untouched in front of her, turning her phone over in her hands. Gemma's number glowed on the screen. She stared at it the way she used to stare at case law, looking for the argument that would hold up under pressure. Then she saved the contact, shouldered her delivery bag, and went upstairs to her flat. The rain had stopped by the time she reached the landing, and through the window she could see the green neon of The Raven's Nest sign reflected in the wet street below, pulsing gently, like something still alive.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:21:56.103Z" 2/24/2026, 10:21:56 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Gemma asked quietly [quietly]"
1"Gemma said eventually [eventually]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.067
88.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2177
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"quickly"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2177
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"calculated"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"calculating"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"potential"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"stomach"
2"warmth"
3"calculated"
4"silence"
5"flicker"
6"traced"
7"calculating"
8"could feel"
9"potential"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen80
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2195
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions86
wordCount1610
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.8
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Tuesday1
Raven2
Nest2
Rory29
Mayfair1
Pomeranian1
Soho1
Yu-Fei1
Saturday1
London2
Price1
Torts1
Silas5
Sauvignon1
Blanc1
Gemma27
Golden1
Empress1
City1
Bermondsey1
Oliver1
Evan2
Eva1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Price"
3"Silas"
4"Gemma"
5"Oliver"
6"Evan"
7"Eva"
places
0"Mayfair"
1"Soho"
2"London"
3"City"
4"Bermondsey"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore0.599
windowScore0.333
42.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like it cost more than Rory's rent"
1"smelled like expensive perfume and the par"
2"as though steadying herself"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2195
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"had that instinct "
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean31.81
std29.13
cv0.916
sampleLengths
093
162
27
34
433
558
680
712
83
950
1020
1151
1258
1335
1436
155
1614
1711
1840
1913
2036
2136
2274
2319
243
258
2670
2737
2871
299
304
319
3211
3339
3469
3516
362
3727
38129
395
4064
413
4239
431
4414
453
4697
4753
48103
4926
94.74% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences100
matches
0"being asked"
1"was pulled"
2"being served"
82.21% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs283
matches
0"was composing"
1"was scanning"
2"was already crossing"
3"were sitting"
4"was still calculating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences138
ratio0.072
matches
0"Her dark hair was pulled back in a low chignon, and she carried herself with that particular London posture — shoulders back, chin steady, the body language of someone who'd learned to take up space in rooms full of men."
1"He had that instinct — the quiet triangulation of a man who'd once read rooms for a living."
2"Gemma laughed — a short, honest sound — and for a moment the years collapsed and they were sitting in the student union sharing a plate of chips, talking about nothing that mattered."
3"The scar was from childhood — she'd caught it on a fence climbing after a neighbour's cat — but the gesture had taken on new meaning in the years since, a touchstone she reached for when she needed to remind herself that not every hurt left a mark you could see."
4"Gemma was at a mid-size firm in the City — commercial litigation, she said, which meant she spent most of her days arguing about contract clauses and the rest of them trying to remember why she'd wanted to."
5"She thought of Evan — not the Evan she'd first met, the one who brought her coffee before lectures and learned her mother's birthday, but the other one."
6"Gemma watched her with those careful brown eyes, and Rory could see the questions stacking up behind them, organized and precise — Gemma had always been good at building a case from fragments."
7"The bar hummed around them — the low murmur of the couple by the window, a jazz track drifting from speakers mounted above the black-and-white photographs on the wall, Silas polishing glasses with quiet, deliberate strokes."
8"Time didn't erase people; it just laid new versions over the old ones like acetate on a map, so the original lines showed through if you held it to the light."
9"She stood there for a moment, and Rory could feel her wanting to say more — to argue the case, to build toward some closing statement about potential and waste and roads not taken."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1607
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount51
adverbRatio0.031736154324828875
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.01120099564405725
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean15.91
std13.37
cv0.84
sampleLengths
020
129
233
33
48
531
631
77
84
933
1019
116
1211
1322
1417
1540
1623
1712
183
192
2048
213
2213
234
2425
2526
2632
2726
285
2911
3012
317
3231
335
345
3514
365
376
3818
391
409
4112
423
4310
4420
4516
4618
4718
4819
4955
43.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3188405797101449
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners44
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"Then a careful rearrangement into"
1"Then she saved the contact,"
ratio0.024
92.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences85
matches
0"She sat at the far"
1"She'd walked back to Soho"
2"He moved behind the bar"
3"He draped a clean towel"
4"She was composing a reply"
5"Her dark hair was pulled"
6"She was scanning the bar"
7"She was already crossing the"
8"She stood, and the delivery"
9"She left it there."
10"She sat back down and"
11"He had that instinct —"
12"She'd made junior partner eight"
13"She had a flat in"
14"She thought of Evan —"
15"She thought of the night"
16"She thought of the three"
17"She'd be connecting the disappearance"
18"She'd trained herself out of"
19"She picked up her wine"
ratio0.318
7.06% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences85
matches
0"The Tuesday crowd at The"
1"She sat at the far"
2"The last run of the"
3"Rory had smiled."
4"She'd walked back to Soho"
5"Silas set a fresh gin"
6"He moved behind the bar"
7"He draped a clean towel"
8"Rory pressed the towel against"
9"A text from Yu-Fei asking"
10"She was composing a reply"
11"The woman who entered wore"
12"Her dark hair was pulled"
13"She was scanning the bar"
14"Rory felt the recognition hit"
15"She was already crossing the"
16"She stood, and the delivery"
17"She left it there."
18"Gemma pulled her into a"
19"Gemma slid onto the stool"
ratio0.906
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
12.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"He moved behind the bar with the quiet economy of a man who'd spent decades making himself unobtrusive in rooms, his limp barely noticeable unless you knew to l…"
1"The woman who entered wore a camel-colored coat that looked like it cost more than Rory's rent."
2"Her dark hair was pulled back in a low chignon, and she carried herself with that particular London posture — shoulders back, chin steady, the body language of …"
3"She was already crossing the room, heels clicking against the old hardwood, her face breaking into an expression of such unguarded surprise that for a moment sh…"
4"Gemma pulled her into a hug that smelled like expensive perfume and the particular warmth of someone who'd just come out of a heated car."
5"Gemma laughed — a short, honest sound — and for a moment the years collapsed and they were sitting in the student union sharing a plate of chips, talking about …"
6"Gemma was at a mid-size firm in the City — commercial litigation, she said, which meant she spent most of her days arguing about contract clauses and the rest o…"
7"A fiancé named Oliver who worked in sustainable architecture and owned too many succulents."
8"But she took a breath that went deeper than it needed to, and when she exhaled, the sound was steady in a way that was its own kind of answer."
9"The ordinary machinery of London grinding forward without regard for the small, enormous things that happened in bars after dark."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.217
leniency0.433
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.8841%