Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8W1GNYCW0BQZQ99TW1CREA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 9s
Cost:
$0.067030
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last dog-walker had left Richmond Park an hour ago, and the darkness that settled over the hills was the particular kind of dark that only existed at the edges of London — not quite rural, not quite urban, a bruised purple sky backlit by the city's restless glow. Rory kept to the tree line where the shadows pooled thickest, her trainers silent on the damp grass. She shouldn't have come alone. Eva would have said as much, would have grabbed her by the sleeve of her jacket and physically held her back. Silas would have poured her a whiskey and told her to sleep on it. But the text had come at half-ten — an unknown number, six words: *The grove. Midnight. Come alone.* And under the words, a photograph of the Heartstone Pendant, identical to the one currently pressing its faint warmth against her sternum beneath two layers of cotton and canvas. She hadn't told anyone. That was the first mistake, and she knew it even as she was making it. The oaks of Richmond Park were old — centuries old, some of them — and at night their canopies merged into a single dark mass that swallowed the sky. Rory moved between their trunks with one hand outstretched, fingers brushing bark that felt too smooth, too warm for a November night. Her phone's torch picked out roots and mud and the occasional pale scatter of fungi, but she kept the beam low and close. Something about the idea of throwing light ahead of her, of announcing herself to whatever waited in that clearing, felt deeply, instinctively wrong. She found the standing stones by touch before she found them by sight. Her palm met the first one and she jerked it back as though burned. Not because it was hot — it wasn't. It was cold, the deep mineral cold of stone that had never seen sunlight, and the texture under her fingers was not oak bark at all but something ridged and grooved, like the whorls of an enormous fingerprint pressed into rock. She lifted her phone. The standing stone was exactly where it had been three weeks ago, when Isolde had first shown her the grove. Waist-high, grey-green with lichen, leaning slightly inward as though straining to hear something whispered at its base. There were seven of them, she remembered, arranged in a rough crescent that marked the boundary of the pocket — the place where the world thinned and something else pressed close. But tonight there were eight. Rory counted them twice, moving the phone's light from stone to stone. She counted a third time, walking the perimeter, her breath clouding in the air. Eight stones. The new one stood at the far end of the crescent, slightly taller than the others, its surface darker and unmarked by lichen. As though it had just grown there. As though it had just arrived. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed once against her chest, a single heavy throb like a second heartbeat finding its rhythm. Not warmth this time. Not exactly. More like a vibration, a deep subsonic hum that traveled through the silver chain and into her bones. Rory stepped between the stones and into the grove. The shift was immediate. The distant hum of the M3, the subsonic rumble of London existing — gone. Not faded. Severed. The silence that replaced it was so complete that she could hear the blood moving through her own ears, a soft oceanic rush that suddenly seemed very loud. The wildflowers were blooming. She could see them in the phone's light — clusters of foxglove and primrose and something blue she didn't have a name for, all of them open and trembling slightly as though a breeze were moving through the clearing. But there was no breeze. The air in the grove was perfectly, unnaturally still. Rory checked her phone. 11:47. Thirteen minutes. She turned in a slow circle, scanning the tree line. The oaks that bordered the grove were different on this side — their branches grew inward, reaching toward the center of the clearing like arms frozen mid-grasp. Between them, shadows stacked upon shadows in layers too dense to read. Anything could be standing just inside that dark. Anything at all. Nothing moved. She sat on the flattest of the standing stones and waited. The pendant hummed its low steady hum against her chest and she wrapped her fingers around it through her jacket, feeling the crimson facets press into her palm even through the fabric. Whoever had sent that text knew about the Heartstone. Knew what it looked like. That narrowed things considerably, and none of the remaining possibilities were comforting. At 11:52, she heard the sound. It came from behind her and slightly to the left — a wet, organic sound, like someone pressing their tongue against the roof of their mouth and slowly pulling it away. A click. A soft adhesive release. Then nothing. Rory turned. The clearing was empty. The foxgloves trembled. She was on her feet now, phone raised, the light cutting a narrow white corridor through the dark. The trees stared back at her with their frozen reaching limbs. Between two of the oaks, right at the edge of the light's reach, something glistened. Something wet on the bark, a thin vertical streak that caught the torchlight and held it for a moment before the angle shifted and it was just bark again, just tree, just wood. The click came again. Closer. To her right this time. Rory pivoted, her heart slamming once, hard, against her ribs before settling into something too fast and too steady, the kind of pulse her body adopted when it had already decided to be afraid and was simply waiting for her mind to catch up. She'd felt it before — in the flat in Cardiff, lying in bed, listening to Evan's key in the lock at 2 a.m. — and she hated how natural the state felt, how quickly her body remembered the architecture of fear. The phone light found nothing. Empty air. Nodding foxgloves. And then, just as she began to lower the beam, she caught the movement. Not in the trees. On the ground. Among the flowers. One of the primrose clusters, about six feet from where she stood, was moving. Not trembling — *rearranging*. The pale yellow heads were turning, slowly, with the patient deliberation of sunflowers tracking the arc of the sun, except there was no sun, and they were all turning toward her. Rory took a step back. Her heel struck a standing stone and she caught herself, one hand slapping the cold grooved surface. Under her palm, the stone vibrated. A low frequency, barely perceptible, like a tuning fork pressed to solid rock. She pulled her hand away and the vibration continued, transmitted now through the soles of her trainers, through the earth itself. The clearing was humming. Not the pendant — though it too was pulsing, faster now, its rhythm falling out of sync with her heartbeat in a way that made her stomach lurch. The ground beneath her feet was producing its own sound, a resonance that lived below hearing and above feeling, and the wildflowers were responding to it, all of them turning now, hundreds of small pale faces orienting on her with blind botanical precision. 11:56. Something was breathing in the trees. She couldn't see it. She couldn't pinpoint the direction. But she could hear it — a long, slow inhalation that went on for far too long, ten seconds, fifteen, twenty, the sound of lungs that were not the right size filling with air that might not be air. Then a pause. Then the exhalation, warm and smelling of copper and wet soil, close enough that it moved the hair at the back of her neck. Rory didn't turn around. Every instinct she had — every good instinct, every one she'd sharpened in the years since Cardiff, since Evan, since learning what it cost to ignore the voice that said *leave now* — every one of them was screaming at her not to turn around. Not because turning would put her in danger. Because turning would mean *seeing*, and whatever stood behind her in the Fae Grove at four minutes to midnight was something that could not be unseen. The breathing continued. In. Out. The exhalation grazed her ear. She could feel the moisture of it on her skin. "I know you're there," she said. Her voice came out level, steady, nothing like the animal panic rioting through her nervous system. Cool-headed Rory. Quick-thinking Rory. Her hands were shaking and she shoved them into her pockets. "I came. Like you asked." The breathing stopped. The silence that followed was somehow worse. Silence in the Fae Grove was not the absence of sound — it was an active presence, a pressure, as though unsound were being manufactured and pumped into the clearing to fill the space where noise should be. Rory's ears rang with it. The pendant flared and went cold against her chest, so suddenly that she gasped, one hand flying to the spot. Through her jacket, the Heartstone felt like a chip of ice. Like a dead thing. And then she heard the voice. It did not come from behind her or in front of her or from any direction that a human throat could produce sound. It came from *inside* the standing stones, from the grove itself, vibrating up through the root systems and the mycelial networks and the ancient compacted earth, and it shaped a word that was not her name but was somehow *about* her, a word in a language she didn't speak that nonetheless communicated its meaning with the clarity of a hand closing around her wrist. It meant *found*. It meant *here*. It meant *at last*. The flowers turned their faces up. In the tree line, something that was not shadow shifted its weight, and for one terrible moment the shape of it was legible — too tall, too narrow, too many joints articulated in the wrong direction — and then the dark closed over it like water and it was gone. Rory stood in the center of the grove with her dead pendant and her shaking hands and the flowers watching her, and the eight standing stones hummed their low impossible chord, and midnight arrived without ceremony, and she understood two things with perfect and devastating clarity. The first was that whoever had sent the text had not sent it to bring her here. The second was that whoever had sent the text had sent it to bring her here *for something else*. The foxgloves swayed. The dark between the oaks rippled, reshaping itself. And Rory Carter, who had spent her life learning when to run, stood very still and did not look behind her, and waited to find out what had been waiting for her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
66.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1807
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count4
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count2
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
3"perfectly"
4"slowly"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.19% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1807
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"throb"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"comforting"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"lurch"
count1
11
word"resonance"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulsed"
2"throb"
3"silence"
4"scanning"
5"comforting"
6"trembled"
7"pulse"
8"vibrated"
9"stomach"
10"lurch"
11"resonance"
12"could feel"
13"weight"
14"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences135
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans10
markdownWords18
totalWords1827
ratio0.01
matches
0"The grove. Midnight. Come alone."
1"rearranging"
2"leave now"
3"seeing"
4"inside"
5"about"
6"found"
7"here"
8"at last"
9"for something else"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount1818
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.77
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
London2
Heartstone4
Pendant2
November1
Isolde1
Cardiff2
Evan2
Fae2
Grove2
Rory14
Carter1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Isolde"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
5"Carter"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Fae"
5"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
55.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as though straining to hear something whispered at its base"
1"seemed very loud"
2"felt like a chip of ice"
90.53% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.095
wordCount1827
matches
0"not oak bark at all but something ridged"
1"not her name but was somehow *about* her, a word in a language she didn't spe"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences136
matches
0"sent that text"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean41.52
std31.07
cv0.748
sampleLengths
067
187
219
397
480
568
65
764
843
99
1049
1157
127
1360
142
1569
166
1739
189
1977
2010
2185
2223
2310
2449
2562
264
2771
281
296
3075
3183
3220
3342
343
3585
366
3797
386
3950
4046
4117
4219
4343
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences135
matches
0"being manufactured"
1"was gone"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount13
totalVerbs272
matches
0"was making"
1"were blooming"
2"were moving"
3"was simply waiting"
4"were turning"
5"was humming"
6"was pulsing"
7"was producing"
8"were responding"
9"was breathing"
10"was screaming"
11"were shaking"
12"were being"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences136
ratio0.125
matches
0"The last dog-walker had left Richmond Park an hour ago, and the darkness that settled over the hills was the particular kind of dark that only existed at the edges of London — not quite rural, not quite urban, a bruised purple sky backlit by the city's restless glow."
1"But the text had come at half-ten — an unknown number, six words: *The grove."
2"The oaks of Richmond Park were old — centuries old, some of them — and at night their canopies merged into a single dark mass that swallowed the sky."
3"Not because it was hot — it wasn't."
4"There were seven of them, she remembered, arranged in a rough crescent that marked the boundary of the pocket — the place where the world thinned and something else pressed close."
5"The distant hum of the M3, the subsonic rumble of London existing — gone."
6"She could see them in the phone's light — clusters of foxglove and primrose and something blue she didn't have a name for, all of them open and trembling slightly as though a breeze were moving through the clearing."
7"The oaks that bordered the grove were different on this side — their branches grew inward, reaching toward the center of the clearing like arms frozen mid-grasp."
8"It came from behind her and slightly to the left — a wet, organic sound, like someone pressing their tongue against the roof of their mouth and slowly pulling it away."
9"She'd felt it before — in the flat in Cardiff, lying in bed, listening to Evan's key in the lock at 2 a.m."
10"— and she hated how natural the state felt, how quickly her body remembered the architecture of fear."
11"Not trembling — *rearranging*."
12"Not the pendant — though it too was pulsing, faster now, its rhythm falling out of sync with her heartbeat in a way that made her stomach lurch."
13"But she could hear it — a long, slow inhalation that went on for far too long, ten seconds, fifteen, twenty, the sound of lungs that were not the right size filling with air that might not be air."
14"Every instinct she had — every good instinct, every one she'd sharpened in the years since Cardiff, since Evan, since learning what it cost to ignore the voice that said *leave now* — every one of them was screaming at her not to turn around."
15"Silence in the Fae Grove was not the absence of sound — it was an active presence, a pressure, as though unsound were being manufactured and pumped into the clearing to fill the space where noise should be."
16"In the tree line, something that was not shadow shifted its weight, and for one terrible moment the shape of it was legible — too tall, too narrow, too many joints articulated in the wrong direction — and then the dark closed over it like water and it was gone."
99.61% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1805
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount73
adverbRatio0.04044321329639889
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.011634349030470914
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean13.43
std12.92
cv0.962
sampleLengths
049
118
25
321
414
515
61
731
84
915
1029
1122
1223
1323
1413
1514
168
1741
184
1920
2017
2131
225
2312
2414
252
2623
277
286
2919
304
312
3218
339
344
3514
362
371
3828
394
4039
415
429
434
441
452
4610
4727
4812
498
45.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.35074626865671643
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners47
86.96% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences115
matches
0"More like a vibration, a"
1"Then a pause."
2"Then the exhalation, warm and"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences115
matches
0"She shouldn't have come alone."
1"She hadn't told anyone."
2"Her phone's torch picked out"
3"She found the standing stones"
4"Her palm met the first"
5"It was cold, the deep"
6"She lifted her phone."
7"She counted a third time,"
8"She could see them in"
9"She turned in a slow"
10"She sat on the flattest"
11"It came from behind her"
12"She was on her feet"
13"She'd felt it before —"
14"Her heel struck a standing"
15"She pulled her hand away"
16"She couldn't see it."
17"She couldn't pinpoint the direction."
18"She could feel the moisture"
19"Her voice came out level,"
ratio0.226
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences115
matches
0"The last dog-walker had left"
1"Rory kept to the tree"
2"She shouldn't have come alone."
3"Eva would have said as"
4"Silas would have poured her"
5"She hadn't told anyone."
6"That was the first mistake,"
7"The oaks of Richmond Park"
8"Rory moved between their trunks"
9"Her phone's torch picked out"
10"Something about the idea of"
11"She found the standing stones"
12"Her palm met the first"
13"It was cold, the deep"
14"She lifted her phone."
15"The standing stone was exactly"
16"Rory counted them twice, moving"
17"She counted a third time,"
18"The new one stood at"
19"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed once"
ratio0.678
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences115
matches
0"As though it had just"
1"As though it had just"
2"Whoever had sent that text"
3"To her right this time."
4"— and she hated how"
5"Because turning would mean *seeing*,"
ratio0.052
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount18
matches
0"The oaks of Richmond Park were old — centuries old, some of them — and at night their canopies merged into a single dark mass that swallowed the sky."
1"Rory moved between their trunks with one hand outstretched, fingers brushing bark that felt too smooth, too warm for a November night."
2"It was cold, the deep mineral cold of stone that had never seen sunlight, and the texture under her fingers was not oak bark at all but something ridged and gro…"
3"Waist-high, grey-green with lichen, leaning slightly inward as though straining to hear something whispered at its base."
4"There were seven of them, she remembered, arranged in a rough crescent that marked the boundary of the pocket — the place where the world thinned and something …"
5"She counted a third time, walking the perimeter, her breath clouding in the air."
6"More like a vibration, a deep subsonic hum that traveled through the silver chain and into her bones."
7"She could see them in the phone's light — clusters of foxglove and primrose and something blue she didn't have a name for, all of them open and trembling slight…"
8"The oaks that bordered the grove were different on this side — their branches grew inward, reaching toward the center of the clearing like arms frozen mid-grasp…"
9"Something wet on the bark, a thin vertical streak that caught the torchlight and held it for a moment before the angle shifted and it was just bark again, just …"
10"Rory pivoted, her heart slamming once, hard, against her ribs before settling into something too fast and too steady, the kind of pulse her body adopted when it…"
11"Not the pendant — though it too was pulsing, faster now, its rhythm falling out of sync with her heartbeat in a way that made her stomach lurch."
12"The ground beneath her feet was producing its own sound, a resonance that lived below hearing and above feeling, and the wildflowers were responding to it, all …"
13"But she could hear it — a long, slow inhalation that went on for far too long, ten seconds, fifteen, twenty, the sound of lungs that were not the right size fil…"
14"Every instinct she had — every good instinct, every one she'd sharpened in the years since Cardiff, since Evan, since learning what it cost to ignore the voice …"
15"Because turning would mean *seeing*, and whatever stood behind her in the Fae Grove at four minutes to midnight was something that could not be unseen."
16"It came from *inside* the standing stones, from the grove itself, vibrating up through the root systems and the mycelial networks and the ancient compacted eart…"
17"In the tree line, something that was not shadow shifted its weight, and for one terrible moment the shape of it was legible — too tall, too narrow, too many joi…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.1641%