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Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X5A02S51T7AWE6JP2F7BZ
Run Details
Model:
Aion 2.0
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
1m 28s
Cost:
$0.006014
Provider:
AionLabs
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
30.99%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
74.50%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
66.85%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
71.05%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
86.22%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
57.55%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
91.53%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.64%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
36.83%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
53.76%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
45.81%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
89.95%
Technical jargon density
(details)
58.33%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
75.2674%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The Raven’s Nest was quiet
for a Tuesday.
Rory Carter wiped down the
mahogany bar, her movements automatic.
The green neon sign from
the street bled a sickly light through the front window, painting the old maps on the walls in aquatic shadows.
She liked this hour, the
lull between the afternoon drinkers and the evening crowd.
It gave the place a
museum-like hush, broken only by the soft clink of glass and the distant hum of London. Silas was in the back, inventorying stock.
She could hear the slight
drag of his left leg, the
familiar
sound of his limp as he moved between crates.
The silver signet ring on
his right hand would be catching the low light as he worked.
Rory glanced at the small
crescent scar on her own left wrist, a pale souvenir from a treehouse fall when she was seven. It seemed a lifetime ago, a different person entirely.
The door opened, slicing a
wedge of grey afternoon into the dimness.
A man stood silhouetted for
a moment before stepping inside, letting the door sigh shut behind him.
He was tall, lean, dressed
in a charcoal overcoat that looked both expensive and
slightly
worn.
He scanned the room with
a slow, deliberate sweep, the way someone reads a
familiar
page. Rory put down her cloth. “We’re open. What can I get you?”
The man’s eyes settled on
her.
They were a pale, watery
blue, the color of a winter sky. He didn’t smile. “I’m looking for Silas Blackwood.”
His voice was low, graveled
by cigarettes or time. There was an accent there, something she couldn’t
quite place—maybe Eastern European, softened by years elsewhere
. “He’s in the back,”
she said, her tone neutral
. Silas had visitors, but they usually had an appointment, a certain look. This man had the look, but it was faded, like newsprint left in the sun. “Can I tell him who’s asking?” “Just tell him Leo is here.”
She nodded and pushed through
the curtain behind the bar, into the narrow corridor that led to the storeroom. Silas
was perched
on a stool, a clipboard in hand, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the glow of a single bare bulb. The beard, neatly trimmed, gave his face a solemn cast. “There’s a man out front,” Rory said. “Says his name is Leo. Wants to see you.” Silas went
very
still. The clipboard lowered an inch. The hazel eyes, usually so composed,
flickered
with something—surprise, then a swift, deep caution.
He didn’t speak for a
long moment.
Then he set the clipboard
down
carefully
on a crate of gin bottles. The signet ring tapped against the wood. “Leo,”
he repeated, the word flat
. “You know him?” “I did.” Silas stood, adjusting his
weight
off his bad knee. “A long time ago.”
He didn’t look at her
as he moved past, his limp more pronounced than usual. Rory followed, hovering at the edge of the curtain.
She watched as Silas emerged
into the bar’s main room. The man called Leo had taken a seat at a corner table, his back to the wall. He hadn’t removed his coat. The two men looked at each other across the empty space. The air in the bar
seemed to
thicken, to pull taut. “Silas,” Leo said. It wasn’t a greeting. It was an identification. “I heard you were dead,” Silas replied, his voice even, devoid of its usual warm rumble. A faint, humourless smile touched Leo’s lips. “Reports were exaggerated.” Silas approached the table but did not sit.
He stood, his hands resting
lightly
on the back of the opposite chair. Rory could see the
tension
in his shoulders, the old operative’s posture returning like a muscle memory. “What do you want, Leo?” “A drink. A conversation. Is that so strange? Old friends catching up.” “We were never friends.” “Colleagues, then. Comrades-in-arms. Does that term still mean anything?” Leo’s pale eyes drifted past Silas, taking in the bar, the maps, the photographs of a London that no longer existed. “You’ve done well for yourself. A cozy nest. I always pictured you in a cottage somewhere, growing roses. Not this.” “What did you picture for yourself?” Silas asked, finally pulling out the chair and sitting down. The movement was stiff, deliberate. Leo’s smile faded.
He looked down at his
hands, which
were resting
on the table. They were long-fingered, elegant, but the knuckles
were scarred
, the skin weathered. “I pictured a lot of things. None of them came to pass.” Rory moved quietly behind the bar, pretending to polish glasses, her ears straining. She caught the faint clink as Silas fetched two tumblers and a bottle of single malt from the shelf without
being asked
. He poured two fingers into each glass and pushed one across the table. Leo took it, raised it to his nose, inhaled. “Still the good stuff. Some habits die hard.” “Some don’t die at all.” They drank in
silence
. Rory watched Leo’s face. He was older than Silas, she thought, though it was hard to tell. His hair was steel-grey, cut short, but his face
was lined
with a deep, weary erosion. He
looked like a man who had been carved by
harsh winds. “I heard about Prague,” Leo said finally, setting his glass down. “The knee.” “It’s manageable.” “Is it?” Leo’s gaze was direct, probing. “You walk like it pains you. We all carry our souvenirs, don’t we? Some are just more visible.” “Why are you here, Leo? It’s been, what, twenty years?” “Twenty-two.” Leo took another sip. “I was in the city. Thought I’d look you up. See how the other half lives.” “The other half?” “The half that got out.” There was no bitterness in the words, only a flat, factual emptiness. “The half that has a name, a place, a… neon sign.” He gestured vaguely toward the window. Silas swirled the amber liquid in his glass. “You could have had that.” “Could I?” Leo’s voice dropped, became almost confidential. “You know what they offered me. A desk in Vauxhall. Pushing papers until my eyes bled. After what we did? After Belgrade? After that fucking mess in Kiev?” He shook his head. “I wasn’t built for a desk, Silas. Neither were you, but you took it. You took the pension and the pat on the head and you walked away.” “I limped away,” Silas corrected
softly
. “Semantics.” Leo leaned forward, his elbows on the table. “Do you ever miss it? The game. The rush. Knowing that what you did mattered, even if no one else ever would.” “It mattered to the people who got burned,” Silas said. His voice was low, but it carried. “It mattered to the ones left holding the bag when the music stopped. I don’t miss that.” Leo sat back, studying him. “You’ve changed.” “Haven’t we all?” “Not like this. You were the best of us, Silas. The sharpest mind, the coldest nerve. The Spymaster. And now you’re a… publican.” He said the word like it was a foreign term, something quaint and
slightly
ridiculous. “And what are you, Leo?”
Silas asked, his gaze steady
. “If not a desk man, then what? A consultant? A ghost? What do they call what you do now?” A shadow passed over Leo’s face. He looked down into his glass, as if the answer might be floating in the whisky. “I survive,” he said simply. “I find things out for people who can pay. I move from place to place. I have no sign. I have no nest. I have a series of rooms that all look the same.” He finished his drink. “It’s a living.” “It’s a half-life.” “Perhaps.” Leo looked up, and for a
fleeting
second, Rory saw something raw in his eyes—a loneliness so vast it
was like looking
into a cold sea.
Then it was gone, shuttered
behind the pale blue calm. “But it’s the one I chose. Or the one that chose me. The distinction blurs after a while.” Silas didn’t reply. He poured them both another measure, his movements slow, ceremonial. The
silence
stretched, filled with all the unsaid things, the operations gone wrong, the friends lost, the ideals tarnished. The
weight
of two decades sat between them, heavy as a stone. “Do you remember Anna?” Leo asked quietly. Silas’s hand tightened around his glass. “Yes.” “She asked about you, before the end. Wanted to know if you were happy.” “What did you tell her?” “I told her I didn’t know.” Leo’s voice was barely a
whisper
now. “I didn’t have the heart to lie.” Rory felt a sudden, sharp ache in her chest. She looked away, pretending to examine a bottle label. She thought of her own flight from Cardiff, the desperate train ride to London, the fear that had been a constant companion. She thought of Evan’s face, contorted in anger, and the soothing calm of Eva’s voice on the phone. She thought of the small, safe flat above this
very
bar, and the man who had offered it without question, without prying. Everyone had their before and after. Everyone
carried the weight
of the person they used to be. When she looked back, Leo
was standing
. He placed a few notes on the table, far more than the drinks cost. “I should go,” he said. “It was… good to see you, Silas.” Silas remained seated. He didn’t look up. “Take care of yourself, Leo.” Leo nodded once, a curt, military motion. He turned, his coat swirling, and walked to the door. He didn’t look back. The door opened, then closed, and the grey light
was gone
, leaving the bar once more in its green-
tinged
twilight. Silas sat motionless for a long time, staring at the empty glass in front of him. Rory came out from behind the bar and approached the table. She didn’t speak. She just began clearing the glasses. “He was the best of us, once,”
Silas said, his voice so low she almost didn’t hear it
. He
wasn’t talking
to her, not
really
. He
was talking
to the ghost in the room, to the man who had just left, to the man he himself used to be. “He could read a room, a document, a person… like no one else. He saved my life in Budapest. Did I ever tell you that?” “No,” Rory said
softly
. “He did. Took a bullet meant for me. It was a through-and-through, shoulder. He joked about it afterward.” Silas finally looked up, his hazel eyes clouded with memory. “That man who was just here… that’s not him. That’s what’s left after the world takes its pound of flesh, year after year, until there’s nothing left but the scars and the survival.” Rory placed a hand on his shoulder. He didn’t flinch. He covered her hand with his own, his signet ring cool against her skin. “We all change, Silas,” she said. “We do,”
he agreed, his gaze returning to the door
. “But God, it’s a heavy thing, to see the measure of what’s been lost.” He squeezed her hand once, then released it, pushing himself to his feet with a grimace. The limp
seemed more pronounced as he walked back toward the storeroom, back to the inventory, back to the life he had built from the ashes of the old one
. Rory stood alone in the quiet bar, the ghost of the conversation lingering in the air like smoke. She picked up Leo’s empty glass. It still held the faint, peaty scent of whisky, and the cold imprint of his fingers. She washed it
carefully
, watching the water rinse away the last traces, until it was clean, empty, and shining under the green neon light, ready to be filled again.
created_at
"2026-02-24T22:43:47.85Z"
2/24/2026, 10:43:47 PM
model
"aion-labs/aion-2.0-20260223"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
2348
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
88078
tokens_prompt
867
tokens_completion
3657
native_tokens_prompt
919
native_tokens_completion
3299
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
678
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.0060136
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"1e93b0bb-eb0f-49bc-8fda-947105413b86"
id
"9675cd7b-7d6b-43c9-baa9-37a4e5b9fcae"
is_byok
false
latency
161
model_permaslug
"aion-labs/aion-2.0-20260223"
provider_name
"AionLabs"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771973027-PXCQZ82DLtk1jEGzvyjU"
upstream_id
"9675cd7b-7d6b-43c9-baa9-37a4e5b9fcae"
total_cost
0.0060136
cache_discount
(null)
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"AionLabs"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
30.99%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
30
adverbTagCount
6
adverbTags
0
"Leo said finally [finally]"
1
"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
2
"Silas corrected softly [softly]"
3
"he said simply [simply]"
4
"Leo asked quietly [quietly]"
5
"Rory said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences
71
tagDensity
0.423
leniency
0.845
rawRatio
0.2
effectiveRatio
0.169
74.50%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1961
totalAiIsmAdverbs
10
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
1
adverb
"very"
count
2
2
adverb
"carefully"
count
2
3
adverb
"lightly"
count
1
4
adverb
"softly"
count
2
5
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"very"
2
"carefully"
3
"lightly"
4
"softly"
5
"really"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
66.85%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1961
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"familiar"
count
2
1
word
"scanned"
count
1
2
word
"flickered"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
2
4
word
"tension"
count
1
5
word
"silence"
count
2
6
word
"fleeting"
count
1
7
word
"whisper"
count
1
8
word
"carried the weight"
count
1
9
word
"tinged"
count
1
highlights
0
"familiar"
1
"scanned"
2
"flickered"
3
"weight"
4
"tension"
5
"silence"
6
"fleeting"
7
"whisper"
8
"carried the weight"
9
"tinged"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
129
matches
0
"d in anger"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
129
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
167
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
38
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1958
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
27
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
68
wordCount
1359
uniqueNames
13
maxNameDensity
1.62
worstName
"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity
5
worstWindowName
"Leo"
discoveredNames
Raven
1
Nest
1
Tuesday
1
Carter
1
London
3
Eastern
1
European
1
Silas
22
Rory
14
Leo
20
Cardiff
1
Evan
1
Eva
1
persons
0
"Raven"
1
"Carter"
2
"European"
3
"Silas"
4
"Rory"
5
"Leo"
6
"Evan"
7
"Eva"
places
0
"London"
1
"Cardiff"
globalScore
0.691
windowScore
0
71.05%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
95
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"quite place—maybe Eastern European, softened by years elsewhere"
1
"looked like a man who had been carved by"
2
"seemed more pronounced as he walked back toward the storeroom, back to the inventory, back to the life he had built from the ashes of the old one"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1958
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
167
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
68
mean
28.79
std
23.44
cv
0.814
sampleLengths
0
78
1
77
2
61
3
12
4
26
5
25
6
42
7
6
8
51
9
16
10
50
11
6
12
3
13
30
14
41
15
22
16
11
17
16
18
10
19
38
20
5
21
12
22
4
23
50
24
21
25
39
26
48
27
17
28
5
29
49
30
13
31
2
32
25
33
10
34
21
35
3
36
34
37
13
38
68
39
6
40
31
41
34
42
7
43
3
44
38
45
29
46
68
47
3
48
55
49
44
86.22%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
7
totalSentences
129
matches
0
"was perched"
1
"were scarred"
2
"being asked"
3
"was lined"
4
"been carved"
5
"was gone"
6
"was gone"
57.55%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
5
totalVerbs
234
matches
0
"were resting"
1
"was like looking"
2
"was standing"
3
"wasn’t talking"
4
"was talking"
91.53%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
3
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
3
totalSentences
167
ratio
0.018
matches
0
"There was an accent there, something she couldn’t quite place—maybe Eastern European, softened by years elsewhere."
1
"The hazel eyes, usually so composed, flickered with something—surprise, then a swift, deep caution."
2
"“Perhaps.” Leo looked up, and for a fleeting second, Rory saw something raw in his eyes—a loneliness so vast it was like looking into a cold sea."
94.64%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1366
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
63
adverbRatio
0.046120058565153735
lyAdverbCount
24
lyAdverbRatio
0.017569546120058566
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
167
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
167
mean
11.72
std
7.75
cv
0.661
sampleLengths
0
8
1
10
2
25
3
14
4
21
5
7
6
21
7
17
8
23
9
9
10
12
11
17
12
16
13
16
14
5
15
7
16
6
17
12
18
3
19
5
20
9
21
16
22
9
23
12
24
15
25
6
26
6
27
19
28
22
29
10
30
7
31
9
32
4
33
5
34
14
35
7
36
13
37
7
38
6
39
3
40
11
41
19
42
9
43
10
44
17
45
5
46
11
47
11
48
3
49
4
36.83%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
22
diversityRatio
0.25149700598802394
totalSentences
167
uniqueOpeners
42
53.76%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"Then he set the clipboard"
1
"Then it was gone, shuttered"
ratio
0.016
45.81%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
54
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"She liked this hour, the"
1
"It gave the place a"
2
"She could hear the slight"
3
"It seemed a lifetime ago,"
4
"He was tall, lean, dressed"
5
"He scanned the room with"
6
"They were a pale, watery"
7
"He didn’t smile."
8
"His voice was low, graveled"
9
"she said, her tone neutral"
10
"She nodded and pushed through"
11
"He didn’t speak for a"
12
"he repeated, the word flat"
13
"He didn’t look at her"
14
"She watched as Silas emerged"
15
"He hadn’t removed his coat."
16
"It wasn’t a greeting."
17
"It was an identification."
18
"He stood, his hands resting"
19
"He looked down at his"
ratio
0.435
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
119
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"The Raven’s Nest was quiet"
1
"Rory Carter wiped down the"
2
"The green neon sign from"
3
"She liked this hour, the"
4
"It gave the place a"
5
"Silas was in the back,"
6
"She could hear the slight"
7
"The silver signet ring on"
8
"Rory glanced at the small"
9
"It seemed a lifetime ago,"
10
"The door opened, slicing a"
11
"A man stood silhouetted for"
12
"He was tall, lean, dressed"
13
"He scanned the room with"
14
"Rory put down her cloth."
15
"The man’s eyes settled on"
16
"They were a pale, watery"
17
"He didn’t smile."
18
"His voice was low, graveled"
19
"she said, her tone neutral"
ratio
0.96
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
124
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
89.95%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
54
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"He was tall, lean, dressed in a charcoal overcoat that looked both expensive and slightly worn."
1
"Rory moved quietly behind the bar, pretending to polish glasses, her ears straining."
2
"She thought of her own flight from Cardiff, the desperate train ride to London, the fear that had been a constant companion."
3
"She thought of the small, safe flat above this very bar, and the man who had offered it without question, without prying."
58.33%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
30
uselessAdditionCount
4
matches
0
"she said, her tone neutral"
1
"Silas asked, his gaze steady"
2
"Silas said, his voice so low she almost didn’t hear it"
3
"he agreed, his gaze returning to the door"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
18
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"he repeated (repeat)"
1
"Silas corrected softly (correct)"
2
"he agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences
71
tagDensity
0.254
leniency
0.507
rawRatio
0.167
effectiveRatio
0.085
75.2674%