Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X7X41TTSP7BQWED8R95QK

Run Details

Duration:
1m 56s
Cost:
$0.113960
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Tuesday crowd at The Raven's Nest was thin enough that Rory could hear the ice settling in her glass. She sat at the far end of the bar with a half-finished ginger ale, still wearing her Golden Empress jacket with the embroidered dragon on the back, her helmet tucked under the stool. The last delivery of the night had taken her to a fourth-floor walkup in Covent Garden where a man in a bathrobe had tipped her sixty pence and called her "love." She'd smiled. She always smiled. It was easier than anything else. Silas was behind the bar, drying pint glasses with a towel he kept draped over his shoulder. He moved with his usual economy, each gesture deliberate despite the slight hitch in his left leg when he turned toward the sink. The green neon from the sign outside filtered through the front window and caught the silver of his signet ring. Old maps covered the walls around them — Ottoman trade routes, Napoleonic campaigns, a faded survey of the Thames estuary — and the black-and-white photographs tucked between them showed faces Rory had never asked about. Silas wasn't the kind of man you asked. "You're brooding," he said without looking up. "I'm sitting." "You're sitting broodily. There's a difference." He set a glass on the rack with a soft clink. "Bad delivery?" "Average delivery. Which might be worse." He made a sound that could have been agreement or dismissal, and moved down the bar to pour a whisky for a man reading the Financial Times. Rory turned the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist toward her, pressing her thumb against it the way she did when she was thinking — an old habit, mechanical, the gesture as involuntary as blinking. She was calculating whether she had enough in her account for both the electric bill and the replacement brake pads for her bicycle when the door opened and the cold came in. She didn't look up right away. People came and went at the Nest, drawn by the Soho foot traffic or the promise of a quiet drink away from the louder places on Old Compton Street. She heard heels on the hardwood — sharp, purposeful — and the rustle of a coat being removed, and then a voice she hadn't heard in three years said her name. "Aurora?" No one called her Aurora. Not anymore. The name landed in her chest like a stone dropped into still water, and the ripples went somewhere deep. She looked up. Niamh Brennan stood six feet away, a camel-hair coat folded over one arm and her dark auburn hair cut into a precise bob that ended at her jawline. She was thinner than Rory remembered. Sharper. The roundness in her face had been replaced by angles, and her clothes — a charcoal blazer, silk blouse, trousers that cost more than Rory's monthly rent — seemed to belong to a different woman entirely. But her eyes were the same. Dark brown, wide-set, still carrying that startled quality, as if she'd just been told something slightly alarming. When they'd studied together in the Cardiff law library, Rory used to joke that Niamh looked permanently ambushed by the world. The world, apparently, had caught up. "Niamh," Rory said, and the name felt strange in her mouth, a word from a language she'd stopped speaking. "Christ. It is you." Niamh came closer, and Rory could smell her perfume — something expensive, something with bergamot. "I almost didn't — your hair is different." "Yours too." "God, yes. The firm prefers a certain — well." Niamh gestured vaguely at herself, as if presenting evidence. "You know how it is." Rory didn't know how it was. That was rather the point. But she nodded. "Can I?" Niamh gestured at the stool beside her. "Yeah. Of course." She sat. Her posture was straighter than Rory remembered, her movements more contained. The Niamh from university had been all sprawl and gesture — feet on desks, hands perpetually waving, the kind of person who took up space as a moral principle. This version kept her elbows close and placed her coat on the bar with careful precision. Silas appeared in front of them with the quiet inevitability of weather. "What can I get you?" "A glass of Sancerre, if you have it," Niamh said. "We have it." He poured without commentary, set the glass down, and retreated to his end of the bar. But Rory caught the way his hazel eyes lingered for a half-second on the space between the two women, reading it the way he read everything — as intelligence. "So," Niamh said, wrapping both hands around the stem of her glass. "London." "London." "How long?" "Two years. Roughly." Two years, three months, eleven days, but who was measuring the distance from a life you'd fled. "You?" "Just transferred. Clifford Chance recruited me out of the Cardiff office. I started Monday." She said it the way people said things they'd rehearsed — not proudly, exactly, but with the careful emphasis of someone who needed the sentence to mean what it was supposed to mean. "I'm in Canary Wharf." "That's a long way from Cathays," Rory said. Cathays — the student district in Cardiff where they'd lived two streets apart, where Niamh had once made spaghetti carbonara at three in the morning and set off the smoke alarm and they'd stood on the pavement in their pajamas laughing until they couldn't breathe. "It is," Niamh said. She took a sip of wine. "Rory, I've been wanting to — I tried calling. After you left Cardiff. Your number was disconnected." "I changed it." "I gathered that." The silence that followed had weight. Rory could feel it pressing on her sternum, the particular density of a conversation that was circling what it actually needed to say. On the wall behind Niamh, a photograph of two men in military uniforms gazed out with expressions of resolute opacity. Rory envied them their silence. "I didn't know where you went," Niamh said. "Nobody did. Your mum wouldn't say. Eva told me you were fine, but she wouldn't tell me where, and I thought —" She stopped. Reset. The lawyer in her reorganizing the argument. "I was worried about you." "You could have asked Eva harder." "I did. She was very firm about it." Rory almost smiled. Eva would have been. Eva had been the one to arrange the flat above the Nest, to talk to Silas, to orchestrate the disappearance with the kind of maternal ferocity that left no room for negotiation. Eva had understood what needed to happen without being told because Eva had seen the bruise on Rory's collarbone that Rory had blamed on a kitchen cupboard, and Eva had not believed her, and that refusal to believe had been the first honest thing anyone had offered her in months. "I had my reasons," Rory said. "I know." Niamh set her glass down. "Evan." The name hit different than her own had. Harder. A blunt syllable with edges. "You know," Rory said. It wasn't a question. "Not then. After. Rachel Murray told me — she'd heard from someone, I don't remember who. About what he —" Niamh's jaw tightened. Her throat worked. "I didn't know, Aurora. When you were in it. I swear I didn't know." "I know you didn't." "But I should have. Shouldn't I?" Niamh looked at her, and for a moment the corporate veneer cracked and the old Niamh surfaced — raw, too much, those ambushed eyes full of something that had apparently been living in her for years. "I was your best friend. I was right there. And I didn't see it." "He was good at what he did," Rory said. She kept her voice level, the way she'd learned to keep it level — not from practice, exactly, but from necessity, from the understanding that if she let the foundation shift even slightly, the whole structure would come down. "It wasn't your job to see it." "Wasn't it?" "No." Niamh pressed her lips together. She reached for her wine and then didn't drink it, just held it, the glass trembling almost imperceptibly in her fingers. "I replayed every conversation. Every time I saw you and him together. Trying to find the thing I missed. And the worst part is, I keep finding them. Little things. The way he'd answer your phone. The way you stopped coming out. I catalogued them all, like evidence briefs, and there were dozens, and I saw none of them at the time." "Niamh." "He came to my birthday party — do you remember? — and you spilled your drink and I watched your face and I thought, she's embarrassed, she's clumsy tonight, and I didn't — I couldn't —" "Stop." Rory said it gently, but it was a wall, and Niamh ran into it and went quiet. Down the bar, Silas polished a glass with meticulous attention, his back half-turned, giving them the performance of privacy while missing nothing. Rory knew him well enough to know that. She looked at Niamh — this sharpened, tailored version of someone she'd once known entirely — and felt the strange vertigo of seeing a person you love at two distances simultaneously: who they were then, who they were now, and the dark gap between. "You couldn't have stopped it," Rory said. "I couldn't have stopped it. Not then. Not until I could. That's how it works." "That's not a comfort." "No. It isn't." Niamh exhaled. She drank her wine. The neon green from outside played across the angles of her face and made her look almost spectral — a ghost of someone still alive, which was perhaps the most common kind. "Look at us," Niamh said after a while. Her voice had steadied, the crack sealed over with professional composure. "You were supposed to be the barrister. Like your dad. That was the plan." "Plans change." "And I was supposed to — God, what was I supposed to be? A poet? A protestor?" She laughed, but it was a dry sound, drained of humor. "I had that awful sign in my kitchen window. 'No Justice, No Peace.' Rory, I went on three marches a term." "Four. You went to the housing one twice." "That's right. I forgot you kept count." "Someone had to. You were rubbish at organizing." Something softened between them. Not much — a degree, a fraction — but enough for Rory to feel it. Niamh turned on her stool to face her fully, and for a moment they were just two women in a Soho bar with too much behind them and not enough language for any of it. "What are you doing now?" Niamh asked. "In London." "Delivering food. For a Chinese restaurant around the corner." She watched Niamh absorb this — watched the struggle play out across her face, the effort not to react with surprise or pity, the lawyerly discipline of managing visible response. Niamh almost succeeded. "Is it —" "It's fine. It's good. The owner, Yu-Fei — she's brilliant. She makes this broth that could raise the dead. And I live upstairs." Rory tilted her head toward the ceiling. "Silas — the man behind the bar — he rents me the flat." Niamh looked around The Raven's Nest as if seeing it for the first time. The maps. The photographs. The low amber light that made everything look both warmer and older than it was. "It's not what I pictured for you," she said carefully. "What did you picture?" "I don't know. Something with arguments. Briefs. You were brilliant at arguments." "Still am. You should hear me negotiate on the phone when a customer claims their order was wrong." Niamh smiled, and for one unguarded second her face became the face Rory remembered — open, generous, undamaged by whatever had sharpened it into this sleek professional instrument. Then it passed? and the angles returned. "I'm not the same person," Rory said. She said it simply, the way you state a geographical fact. London is south of Edinburgh. The Thames runs east. I am not who I was. "Neither am I," Niamh said. "I can see that." "Does it bother you?" Rory considered this. She looked at Niamh's blazer, her precise hair, the careful economy of her gestures. She thought about the girl who'd set off smoke alarms and marched four times a term and believed that the world could be fixed by shouting at it loudly enough. She thought about what gets lost and what gets traded and whether there's a difference. "It doesn't bother me," she said. "It makes me sad. But that's not the same thing." Niamh's eyes went bright. She blinked it away, fast, a reflex that looked well-practiced. "Yeah," she said. "Yeah, I know exactly what you mean." They sat for a while without talking. Silas moved past them once to collect an empty glass, his limp barely perceptible, and as he passed he set a small bowl of olives between them without a word. It was the kindest gesture Rory had witnessed in weeks — the quiet recognition that two people sitting in pain might need something to do with their hands. Niamh ate an olive. Rory turned her scar toward the bar light and then away. "I should give you my new number," Niamh said eventually. "Yeah. You should." "Will you actually call?" Rory looked at her. At this woman who was and wasn't her friend, who carried three years of retroactive guilt like an invisible briefcase, who had changed her hair and her clothes and her posture but still had those same wide startled eyes. She thought about everything that couldn't be fixed by a phone number. She thought about everything that might begin with one. "I'll call," Rory said. Outside, a bus rumbled past and the green neon sign buzzed and the city went on being itself — vast, indifferent, full of people who'd once known each other. Niamh typed her number into Rory's phone and their fingers touched briefly during the handoff and neither of them mentioned it. When Niamh left, twenty minutes later, Rory watched the door close behind her and sat very still. The Raven's Nest settled back into its quiet. A man turned a page of his newspaper. The photographs on the walls held their unknowable silence. Silas came and stood in front of her. He set both hands flat on the bar, his signet ring clicking against the wood. "Old friend?" he asked. "Used to be." "And now?" Rory picked up an olive and held it for a moment, feeling its small weight. "Now we find out," she said.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:45:12.97Z" 2/24/2026, 10:45:12 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Niamh gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"she said carefully [carefully]"
2"Niamh said eventually [eventually]"
dialogueSentences91
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0.086
effectiveRatio0.066
87.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2421
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"gently"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2421
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"mechanical"
count1
1
word"calculating"
count1
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"structure"
count1
8
word"spectral"
count1
highlights
0"mechanical"
1"calculating"
2"electric"
3"silk"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"could feel"
7"structure"
8"spectral"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences138
matches
0"t with surprise"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences138
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences194
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2455
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions39
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions113
wordCount1823
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.92
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Niamh"
discoveredNames
Tuesday1
Raven3
Nest5
Rory35
Golden1
Empress1
Covent1
Garden1
Ottoman1
Napoleonic1
Thames2
Financial1
Times1
Soho2
Old2
Compton1
Street1
Aurora1
Brennan1
Cardiff2
Niamh33
Two1
Cathays1
Reset1
Silas7
Eva5
Edinburgh1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Brennan"
4"Niamh"
5"Silas"
6"Eva"
places
0"Covent"
1"Garden"
2"Thames"
3"Soho"
4"Old"
5"Compton"
6"Street"
7"Cardiff"
8"Two"
9"Edinburgh"
globalScore0.54
windowScore0.333
4.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"The world, apparently, had caught up"
1"as if presenting evidence"
2"appeared in front of them with the quiet inevitability of weather"
3"thing that had apparently been living in her"
4"as if seeing it for the first time"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.815
wordCount2455
matches
0"not proudly, exactly, but with the careful emphasis of someone who needed the sentence"
1"not from practice, exactly, but from necessity, from the understanding"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences194
matches
0"joke that Niamh"
1"believed that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs95
mean25.84
std26.97
cv1.044
sampleLengths
095
1103
27
32
419
56
694
766
81
926
103
11121
1219
1327
142
1523
1614
179
183
1958
2017
2110
2248
2313
241
252
2621
2751
2853
2927
303
313
3254
3345
346
358
3689
376
388
3914
408
4140
424
4356
4455
452
461
4788
481
4936
92.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences138
matches
0"been replaced"
1"been told"
2"was supposed"
3"being told"
4"gets traded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs316
matches
0"was thinking "
1"was calculating"
2"was measuring"
3"was circling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences194
ratio0.093
matches
0"Old maps covered the walls around them — Ottoman trade routes, Napoleonic campaigns, a faded survey of the Thames estuary — and the black-and-white photographs tucked between them showed faces Rory had never asked about."
1"Rory turned the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist toward her, pressing her thumb against it the way she did when she was thinking — an old habit, mechanical, the gesture as involuntary as blinking."
2"She heard heels on the hardwood — sharp, purposeful — and the rustle of a coat being removed, and then a voice she hadn't heard in three years said her name."
3"The roundness in her face had been replaced by angles, and her clothes — a charcoal blazer, silk blouse, trousers that cost more than Rory's monthly rent — seemed to belong to a different woman entirely."
4"\"Christ. It is you.\" Niamh came closer, and Rory could smell her perfume — something expensive, something with bergamot."
5"The Niamh from university had been all sprawl and gesture — feet on desks, hands perpetually waving, the kind of person who took up space as a moral principle."
6"But Rory caught the way his hazel eyes lingered for a half-second on the space between the two women, reading it the way he read everything — as intelligence."
7"\"Just transferred. Clifford Chance recruited me out of the Cardiff office. I started Monday.\" She said it the way people said things they'd rehearsed — not proudly, exactly, but with the careful emphasis of someone who needed the sentence to mean what it was supposed to mean."
8"Cathays — the student district in Cardiff where they'd lived two streets apart, where Niamh had once made spaghetti carbonara at three in the morning and set off the smoke alarm and they'd stood on the pavement in their pajamas laughing until they couldn't breathe."
9"\"But I should have. Shouldn't I?\" Niamh looked at her, and for a moment the corporate veneer cracked and the old Niamh surfaced — raw, too much, those ambushed eyes full of something that had apparently been living in her for years."
10"She kept her voice level, the way she'd learned to keep it level — not from practice, exactly, but from necessity, from the understanding that if she let the foundation shift even slightly, the whole structure would come down."
11"She looked at Niamh — this sharpened, tailored version of someone she'd once known entirely — and felt the strange vertigo of seeing a person you love at two distances simultaneously: who they were then, who they were now, and the dark gap between."
12"The neon green from outside played across the angles of her face and made her look almost spectral — a ghost of someone still alive, which was perhaps the most common kind."
13"Not much — a degree, a fraction — but enough for Rory to feel it."
14"She watched Niamh absorb this — watched the struggle play out across her face, the effort not to react with surprise or pity, the lawyerly discipline of managing visible response."
15"Niamh smiled, and for one unguarded second her face became the face Rory remembered — open, generous, undamaged by whatever had sharpened it into this sleek professional instrument."
16"It was the kindest gesture Rory had witnessed in weeks — the quiet recognition that two people sitting in pain might need something to do with their hands."
17"Outside, a bus rumbled past and the green neon sign buzzed and the city went on being itself — vast, indifferent, full of people who'd once known each other."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1248
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03766025641025641
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.014423076923076924
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences194
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences194
mean12.65
std11.74
cv0.928
sampleLengths
020
133
233
33
46
517
623
720
835
98
107
112
1217
132
146
1527
1635
1732
186
1929
2031
211
225
232
2419
253
2628
276
281
2936
306
3117
3221
336
3419
3519
368
372
3818
395
406
415
423
439
443
452
4611
4729
4816
4912
48.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.33505154639175255
totalSentences194
uniqueOpeners65
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences114
matches
0"Dark brown, wide-set, still carrying"
1"Then it passed?"
ratio0.018
90.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences114
matches
0"She sat at the far"
1"She always smiled."
2"It was easier than anything"
3"He moved with his usual"
4"he said without looking up"
5"He set a glass on"
6"He made a sound that"
7"She was calculating whether she"
8"She didn't look up right"
9"She heard heels on the"
10"She looked up."
11"She was thinner than Rory"
12"Her posture was straighter than"
13"He poured without commentary, set"
14"She said it the way"
15"She took a sip of"
16"It wasn't a question."
17"Her throat worked."
18"She kept her voice level,"
19"She reached for her wine"
ratio0.325
30.18% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences114
matches
0"The Tuesday crowd at The"
1"She sat at the far"
2"The last delivery of the"
3"She always smiled."
4"It was easier than anything"
5"Silas was behind the bar,"
6"He moved with his usual"
7"The green neon from the"
8"Silas wasn't the kind of"
9"he said without looking up"
10"He set a glass on"
11"He made a sound that"
12"Rory turned the crescent-shaped scar"
13"She was calculating whether she"
14"She didn't look up right"
15"People came and went at"
16"She heard heels on the"
17"The name landed in her"
18"She looked up."
19"Niamh Brennan stood six feet"
ratio0.86
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
ratio0
8.09% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"He made a sound that could have been agreement or dismissal, and moved down the bar to pour a whisky for a man reading the Financial Times."
1"Niamh Brennan stood six feet away, a camel-hair coat folded over one arm and her dark auburn hair cut into a precise bob that ended at her jawline."
2"The roundness in her face had been replaced by angles, and her clothes — a charcoal blazer, silk blouse, trousers that cost more than Rory's monthly rent — seem…"
3"Dark brown, wide-set, still carrying that startled quality, as if she'd just been told something slightly alarming."
4"The Niamh from university had been all sprawl and gesture — feet on desks, hands perpetually waving, the kind of person who took up space as a moral principle."
5"Rory could feel it pressing on her sternum, the particular density of a conversation that was circling what it actually needed to say."
6"The low amber light that made everything look both warmer and older than it was."
7"She blinked it away, fast, a reflex that looked well-practiced."
8"At this woman who was and wasn't her friend, who carried three years of retroactive guilt like an invisible briefcase, who had changed her hair and her clothes …"
9"Outside, a bus rumbled past and the green neon sign buzzed and the city went on being itself — vast, indifferent, full of people who'd once known each other."
96.43% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags35
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Rory said, and the name felt strange in her mouth, a word from a language she'd stopped speaking"
1"Niamh gestured vaguely, as if presenting evidence"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags25
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences91
tagDensity0.275
leniency0.549
rawRatio0.04
effectiveRatio0.022
77.5110%