Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8X90VJRRK1QERKRD10MBH3

Run Details

Duration:
1m 28s
Cost:
$0.057231
Provider:
Anthropic

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon from outside bled through the window in long, wet ribbons across the floor of The Raven's Nest, and Rory sat at the bar nursing a gin she hadn't asked for but hadn't refused, watching the ice melt. Silas had poured it without ceremony twenty minutes ago, set it down in front of her, and said nothing — which was his particular fluency, the language of a man who had spent decades listening more than he spoke. She appreciated that about him. She'd appreciated that about very few people in her life. It was a Tuesday, which meant the bar was mostly empty. A couple near the window shared a bottle of Rioja and the private grammar of people who had been together long enough to need very few words. An older man at the far end of the bar read a paperback, turning pages with the mechanical patience of someone who had nowhere else to be. The photographs on the walls — all those anonymous black-and-white faces, all those unnamed cities — watched the room with the indifference of the long dead. Rory had stopped noticing them weeks ago. They were wallpaper now. London had a way of making everything wallpaper eventually. She was thinking about nothing in particular, or trying to, when the door opened and brought the night in with it — the smell of rain and diesel and the faint, sweet rot of Soho — and then came the heels on the hardwood floor, confident, practised, the sound of someone who had learned to walk that way deliberately, and Rory turned her head out of habit, the low-grade alertness she'd developed these past months without quite meaning to. The woman who stepped in from the cold was shaking rain from an umbrella that had clearly lost the argument. Dark red coat, tailored. Hair pulled tight at the nape of her neck. She was scanning the room the way people scan a room when they only want a quiet corner and a stiff drink, not company, and then her eyes reached the bar and stopped. Rory felt the recognition land in her chest like something dropped from a height. Niamh Walsh. Three years. Three years and seven months, if she was being honest with herself, and she usually wasn't. Niamh looked exactly like herself, which was somehow the most disorienting thing — the same sharp jaw, the same way of standing with her weight on her left hip, the same furrow between her brows that appeared whenever she was deciding something. Only the coat was different. The coat was new. Everything else was Niamh as she had always been, as if time had moved around her rather than through her. "Aurora Carter," Niamh said, from across the room, and there it was — the name, her full name, the one she'd stopped hearing — and it sat in the air between them like a dropped glass, not yet broken. Silas, behind the bar, went very still in the way he went still when something in the room shifted. He didn't look up from the glass he was polishing. But he went still. "Niamh." Rory's voice was steadier than she'd expected. Niamh crossed the floor and stopped at the bar, one stool between them, not sitting. Her eyes moved over Rory slowly, the way eyes move over a room you used to know, recalibrating. "What are you doing in London?" "I live here." "Since when?" "Since I left Cardiff." Rory picked up her gin. "You're not a detective." Something flickered across Niamh's face — not quite hurt, more like the memory of it. She unbuttoned her coat and sat down on the stool, folding the umbrella across her lap. She looked at the bar as if the question of whether to order a drink was actually a question about something else entirely. Silas materialised, quiet and unhurried, and she ordered a whiskey without looking at him, adding please the way people do when they're being careful about themselves. "I'm here for an interview," Niamh said. "Denholm and Cross. Off the Strand." She let a small, complicated pause go by. "I'm being made a junior partner." "Congratulations." Rory meant it. She was surprised to find that she did. "You could have— " Niamh stopped herself. Started again, differently. "I didn't know what happened to you. After you left. Eva said you needed time." "Eva was right." "Eva's always right." There was no bitterness in it. They'd both grown up knowing that. Niamh wrapped both hands around the whiskey glass Silas set in front of her, though she didn't drink. "I thought about calling. Dozens of times. I never did." "I know." "Do you." Rory turned the crescent scar on her left wrist toward the bar and rested it there, a habit she'd developed without meaning to, as if the scar needed to touch things to remind her it was part of her. "I wasn't reachable," she said. "Not for a while. That wasn't about you." Niamh looked at the photographs on the wall. Rory watched her look at them. It occurred to her that this was what Niamh did in difficult moments — found something to study, something that demanded no reciprocity. She'd done it during torts lectures. She'd done it the night in their second year when Rory had cried in her kitchen for reasons she hadn't explained and Niamh had sat across from her and said nothing and heated soup and that had somehow been exactly right. "I heard about Evan," Niamh said, still looking at the wall. "Heard what." "That it wasn't good." A pause. "From his cousin. Last year, at some thing." Rory nodded, once, slowly. There was nothing to add. It wasn't good was a reduction so total it was almost funny. She'd thought, when she first arrived in London, smelling of the train and clutching Eva's address on a piece of paper, that she'd feel more like herself once she got some distance. She hadn't counted on the distance from herself. She was still calibrating, even now. She was still learning what was hers. "Are you happy?" Niamh asked. She'd finally turned to look at Rory directly, and there was something nakedly earnest in her face that Rory remembered from years ago, from before they'd both acquired the armour of education and ambition and disappointment. The Niamh who had once stayed up until four in the morning debating whether justice was procedural or substantive because she'd actually cared about the answer, not the grade. Rory considered the question seriously. She considered the restaurant deliveries she did mornings and evenings, the cold and the rain, the particular satisfaction of the city moving under her on a bicycle with nowhere to be but forward. She considered the flat upstairs with its slanted ceiling and the pipes that knocked in winter and the window that faced the wrong direction for sunlight but the right direction for watching the street come alive in the early hours. She considered Silas, who had taken her in the way people take in strays — not with pity but with the practical generosity of someone who has learned that the world runs on small, unremarkable acts of decency. "Not yet," she said. "But I think I'm learning the right things." Niamh nodded. She looked like she wanted to say something else and was choosing not to, which was its own kind of maturity. She drank her whiskey instead, and Rory drank her gin, and they sat in the particular silence of people who had once been essential to each other and were now something more ambiguous — not strangers, not quite still friends, but bound by the specific intimacy of shared time, of having known the same version of a city and a decade that no longer existed. After a while, Silas refilled both glasses without being asked. He exchanged no look with Rory. He turned back to his glasses and his quiet and his own long thoughts. "I looked for you online," Niamh admitted. "A few months ago. You'd disappeared." "I know." Rory smiled, a small one. "I deleted things." "Your whole degree. Your entire plan. Just — gone." Niamh turned the glass in her hands. "I used to envy how brave that looked." "It didn't feel brave." "What did it feel like?" Rory thought of the night she'd left — the suitcase she'd had to borrow from Eva because she hadn't owned one, the strange lightness of carrying only what mattered, the train pulling out of Cardiff Central while it rained, which it always was, while the city she'd grown up knowing drew back like something deciding to let her go. She thought of how the fear and the relief had been indistinguishable from each other, two hands pressing on the same door. "It felt like running," she said. "For a long time, that's all it felt like." Niamh absorbed that. She absorbed it the way Niamh absorbed most things — completely, without argument, making room for it. "And now?" she asked. The neon green from outside had shifted with the cloud cover, and the bar wore it differently, the maps on the walls lit in cool, uncertain light. The couple by the window were leaving, pulling coats on, laughing at something, and the man at the end of the bar had turned his paperback over and was looking at nothing, resting in the comfortable vacancy of someone whose inner life was sufficient. The Raven's Nest settled around them all like a held breath. "Now," Rory said, "I'm just here." It wasn't enough. It wasn't the answer Niamh deserved after three years and seven months and all those calls she'd never made and all the ones Rory had never returned. But Niamh was a lawyer, and a good one — she understood that sometimes the evidence was incomplete and you built what case you could from what you had, and she understood that some things between people resolved not through honesty but through proximity, through the willingness to simply sit together again with your drinks and your separate wounds and see what the silence made room for. She stayed another hour. They talked — about Eva, who was apparently planning a wedding; about a lecturer they'd both despised and both secretly learned the most from; about the rain, which was London's constant editorial comment on everything. They didn't talk about Evan. They didn't talk about the law firm waiting for Rory if she'd stayed, the trajectory that had been laid out like a road she'd been walking before she'd realised she could step off it. Some things were more usefully left as the shape of their absence. When Niamh finally stood to go, she left a business card on the bar. She slid it across without comment, didn't ask Rory to take it, didn't make it into a moment. Just left it there, white and precise, with the firm's name in small black letters. "Don't disappear again," she said. "I live here," Rory said. Niamh put her coat on. She picked up the broken umbrella and looked at it with mild resignation. At the door, she turned. She didn't wave — she never had been a person who waved — but she looked at Rory for a moment in the specific way of someone committing a face to memory, and then she was gone, and the door closed, and the sound of her heels faded into the wet street. Rory sat very still. Silas moved along the bar without urgency and collected Niamh's empty glass. He didn't speak. He had the gift — rare and learned, she imagined, the hard way — of understanding the difference between comfort and intrusion. She picked up the business card. Set it down. Left it there on the wood like a question she hadn't decided yet whether to answer. Outside, the green neon buzzed softly against the rain.
created_at"2026-02-24T22:45:49.562Z" 2/24/2026, 10:45:49 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"very"
count4
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"deliberately"
2"slowly"
3"completely"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"mechanical"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"comfortable"
count1
6
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"mechanical"
1"scanning"
2"weight"
3"flickered"
4"silence"
5"comfortable"
6"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences113
matches
0"was surprised"
1"t with pity"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences113
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1997
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1809
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.44
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Niamh"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Rory26
Tuesday1
Rioja1
Soho1
Walsh1
Niamh25
Silas7
Started1
London3
Eva3
Cardiff1
Central1
Evan1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Walsh"
4"Niamh"
5"Silas"
6"Eva"
7"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.781
windowScore0.5
51.32% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"not quite hurt, more like the memory of it"
1"looked like she wanted to say something e"
2"t Eva, who was apparently planning a wedding"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.003
wordCount1997
matches
0"not with pity but with the practical generosity of someone who has learned"
1"not strangers, not quite still friends, but bound by the specific intimacy of shared time, of having kno"
2"not quite still friends, but bound by the specific intimacy of shared time, of having kno"
3"not through honesty but through proximity, through the willingness to simply sit tog"
66.42% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences133
matches
0"walk that way"
1"find that she"
2"learned that the"
3"understood that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean37.68
std34.78
cv0.923
sampleLengths
094
1111
279
366
414
52
689
739
833
98
1039
113
122
1313
1480
1527
1612
1725
183
1943
202
212
2252
2384
2411
252
2614
2774
2870
29116
3012
3188
3230
3313
3410
3524
364
375
3881
3915
4020
414
4282
436
4497
4590
4647
475
485
4975
92.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences113
matches
0"was surprised"
1"being asked"
2"been laid"
3"was gone"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount12
totalVerbs314
matches
0"was thinking"
1"was shaking"
2"was scanning"
3"was being"
4"was deciding"
5"was polishing"
6"was still calibrating"
7"was still learning"
8"was choosing"
9"were leaving"
10"was looking"
11"was apparently planning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences133
ratio0.113
matches
0"Silas had poured it without ceremony twenty minutes ago, set it down in front of her, and said nothing — which was his particular fluency, the language of a man who had spent decades listening more than he spoke."
1"The photographs on the walls — all those anonymous black-and-white faces, all those unnamed cities — watched the room with the indifference of the long dead."
2"She was thinking about nothing in particular, or trying to, when the door opened and brought the night in with it — the smell of rain and diesel and the faint, sweet rot of Soho — and then came the heels on the hardwood floor, confident, practised, the sound of someone who had learned to walk that way deliberately, and Rory turned her head out of habit, the low-grade alertness she'd developed these past months without quite meaning to."
3"Niamh looked exactly like herself, which was somehow the most disorienting thing — the same sharp jaw, the same way of standing with her weight on her left hip, the same furrow between her brows that appeared whenever she was deciding something."
4"\"Aurora Carter,\" Niamh said, from across the room, and there it was — the name, her full name, the one she'd stopped hearing — and it sat in the air between them like a dropped glass, not yet broken."
5"Something flickered across Niamh's face — not quite hurt, more like the memory of it."
6"It occurred to her that this was what Niamh did in difficult moments — found something to study, something that demanded no reciprocity."
7"She considered Silas, who had taken her in the way people take in strays — not with pity but with the practical generosity of someone who has learned that the world runs on small, unremarkable acts of decency."
8"She drank her whiskey instead, and Rory drank her gin, and they sat in the particular silence of people who had once been essential to each other and were now something more ambiguous — not strangers, not quite still friends, but bound by the specific intimacy of shared time, of having known the same version of a city and a decade that no longer existed."
9"Rory thought of the night she'd left — the suitcase she'd had to borrow from Eva because she hadn't owned one, the strange lightness of carrying only what mattered, the train pulling out of Cardiff Central while it rained, which it always was, while the city she'd grown up knowing drew back like something deciding to let her go."
10"She absorbed it the way Niamh absorbed most things — completely, without argument, making room for it."
11"But Niamh was a lawyer, and a good one — she understood that sometimes the evidence was incomplete and you built what case you could from what you had, and she understood that some things between people resolved not through honesty but through proximity, through the willingness to simply sit together again with your drinks and your separate wounds and see what the silence made room for."
12"They talked — about Eva, who was apparently planning a wedding; about a lecturer they'd both despised and both secretly learned the most from; about the rain, which was London's constant editorial comment on everything."
13"She didn't wave — she never had been a person who waved — but she looked at Rory for a moment in the specific way of someone committing a face to memory, and then she was gone, and the door closed, and the sound of her heels faded into the wet street."
14"He had the gift — rare and learned, she imagined, the hard way — of understanding the difference between comfort and intrusion."
98.87% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1792
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.041294642857142856
lyAdverbCount29
lyAdverbRatio0.016183035714285716
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean15.02
std14.77
cv0.984
sampleLengths
040
139
25
310
411
527
627
726
87
94
109
1179
1220
134
149
1533
1614
172
182
1916
2042
215
224
2320
2439
2519
2610
274
288
2915
3018
316
323
332
349
354
3615
3716
3823
3926
407
4114
426
434
448
457
463
4715
483
499
43.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.3609022556390977
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences99
matches
0"Dark red coat, tailored."
1"Only the coat was different."
2"Just left it there, white"
ratio0.03
46.26% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences99
matches
0"She appreciated that about him."
1"She'd appreciated that about very"
2"It was a Tuesday, which"
3"They were wallpaper now."
4"She was thinking about nothing"
5"She was scanning the room"
6"He didn't look up from"
7"Her eyes moved over Rory"
8"She unbuttoned her coat and"
9"She looked at the bar"
10"She let a small, complicated"
11"She was surprised to find"
12"They'd both grown up knowing"
13"It occurred to her that"
14"She'd done it during torts"
15"She'd done it the night"
16"It wasn't good was a"
17"She'd thought, when she first"
18"She hadn't counted on the"
19"She was still calibrating, even"
ratio0.434
35.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences99
matches
0"The green neon from outside"
1"Silas had poured it without"
2"She appreciated that about him."
3"She'd appreciated that about very"
4"It was a Tuesday, which"
5"A couple near the window"
6"An older man at the"
7"The photographs on the walls"
8"Rory had stopped noticing them"
9"They were wallpaper now."
10"London had a way of"
11"She was thinking about nothing"
12"The woman who stepped in"
13"Hair pulled tight at the"
14"She was scanning the room"
15"Rory felt the recognition land"
16"Niamh looked exactly like herself,"
17"The coat was new."
18"Everything else was Niamh as"
19"Niamh said, from across the"
ratio0.848
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Silas had poured it without ceremony twenty minutes ago, set it down in front of her, and said nothing — which was his particular fluency, the language of a man…"
1"A couple near the window shared a bottle of Rioja and the private grammar of people who had been together long enough to need very few words."
2"An older man at the far end of the bar read a paperback, turning pages with the mechanical patience of someone who had nowhere else to be."
3"She was thinking about nothing in particular, or trying to, when the door opened and brought the night in with it — the smell of rain and diesel and the faint, …"
4"Niamh looked exactly like herself, which was somehow the most disorienting thing — the same sharp jaw, the same way of standing with her weight on her left hip,…"
5"Rory turned the crescent scar on her left wrist toward the bar and rested it there, a habit she'd developed without meaning to, as if the scar needed to touch t…"
6"It occurred to her that this was what Niamh did in difficult moments — found something to study, something that demanded no reciprocity."
7"The Niamh who had once stayed up until four in the morning debating whether justice was procedural or substantive because she'd actually cared about the answer,…"
8"She considered the flat upstairs with its slanted ceiling and the pipes that knocked in winter and the window that faced the wrong direction for sunlight but th…"
9"She considered Silas, who had taken her in the way people take in strays — not with pity but with the practical generosity of someone who has learned that the w…"
10"She drank her whiskey instead, and Rory drank her gin, and they sat in the particular silence of people who had once been essential to each other and were now s…"
11"They talked — about Eva, who was apparently planning a wedding; about a lecturer they'd both despised and both secretly learned the most from; about the rain, w…"
12"She didn't wave — she never had been a person who waved — but she looked at Rory for a moment in the specific way of someone committing a face to memory, and th…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Niamh admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.293
leniency0.585
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.049
71.4011%