Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ94QM7RE1CXZBNBWYNYDYNS

Run Details

Duration:
25.1s
Cost:
$0.009962
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn’s lungs burned with the metallic tang of city grit and exertion as her boots hammered the cracked pavement of Camden High Street. Thirty paces ahead, the curly dark hair of Tomás Herrera bobbed through the throngs of late-night revelers, his olive skin slick with sweat and rain. He moved with a frantic, liquid grace that mocked her own military-drilled precision. "Herrera! Stop!" The command tore from her throat, sharp and useless. A group of tourists in neon-bright plastic ponchos balked at her approach, dragging their suitcases into her path. Harlow didn't slow. She shouldered through them, her leather watch strap digging into her wrist as she used her forearm to clear a path. Eighteen years of service didn't make the knees any younger, but they provided a stubborn, singular focus that Herrera lacked. Tommy pivoted on a dime, darting left into a narrow, soot-stained alleyway that smelled of rancid cooking oil and damp cardboard. Harlow reached the mouth of the alley just in time to see him leap over a stack of sodden wooden crates. He didn't look back. He never did. That was the problem with his lot; they always looked toward the next shadow, the next secret, the next lie. She felt the heavy weight of her service weapon against her hip, a comfort that felt increasingly inadequate in this borough. "You're making this worse, Tommy!" The Spaniard’s Saint Christopher medallion flared against his collar as he glanced over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes wide with a frantic, cornered light. He didn't speak. He shoved a heavy iron fire door open, the screech of metal on stone echoing like a dying bird. Harlow surged forward, her hand slapping the cold damp brick of the building as she swung herself around the corner. The door was still vibrating. She kicked it harder, the impact jarring up her leg, and stepped into the sudden, cloying heat of a service corridor. The air here felt different—thicker, charged with a low-frequency hum that vibrated in her molars. She tracked the wet, muddy footprints across the grey concrete floor. They led toward a staircase that shouldn't have been there, descending into a darkness that seemed to swallow the light from the flickering overhead hum-buzz of the fluorescent tubes. At the bottom of the stairs, the architecture shifted. The modern concrete gave way to Victorian brickwork, the curved, soot-blackened walls of a forgotten Tube station. "Detective, go home." Tommy stood twenty feet away, framed by a rusted iron gate that led deeper into the subterranean gloom. He held a small white rectangular bone token between his thumb and forefinger. "Not happening. You’re coming in for questioning regarding the unauthorized medical treatments in Soho." "Those people would be dead if I hadn't stepped in. You know that. You just don't like the 'how'." "I don't care about the 'how'. I care about the law. Move away from the gate." Tommy shook his head, his face softening into something that looked dangerously like pity. He pressed the bone token against a recessed indentation in the brickwork. The wall didn't just open; it bled away, the reality of the tunnel rippling like a disturbed pond. "You aren't ready for what's behind this, Quinn. You still think the world works on warrants and handcuffs." "Last warning, Herrera." He stepped backward, his figure blurring as he crossed the threshold. Harlow didn't hesitate. She threw herself forward, her fingers brushing the rough fabric of his jacket just as the air turned cold enough to frost her eyelashes. She tumbled through the opening, hitting the floor hard. The concrete was gone. Instead, her palms pressed into a fine, silver-grey sand that felt like crushed glass. Harlow scrambled to her feet, her hand instinctively hovering over her holster. The silence was the first thing that hit her—a heavy, suffocating quiet that made the blood rushing in her ears sound like a waterfall. Then, the smell arrived. It wasn't the London underground’s usual scent of ozone and dust. This was a suffocating mix of bruised lavender, hot copper, and something sweet, like rotting peaches. She stood in a cavernous abandoned station, but the tracks were overgrown with shimmering blue-black vines that pulsed with a rhythmic, bioluminescent glow. This was the Veil Market. Rows of stalls crafted from salvaged mahogany and polished brass lined the platforms. Merchants with faces hidden behind intricate porcelain masks or heavy silk veils moved with a slow, deliberate lethargy. They traded items that defied the logic Harlow had spent two decades enforcing: jars containing flickering sparks of light, scrolls that wept ink like blood, and jagged shards of glass that reflected different rooms entirely. Tommy was already thirty yards down the platform, weaving through a crowd of figures draped in heavy, ornate furs. "Stay back, Detective!" His voice carried an edge of genuine fear now, but it wasn't for himself. He was looking at the figures around them. Harlow ignored him, stepping further into the market’s heart. She passed a stall where a tall, gaunt man was measuring out a shimmering violet alchemical powder into a set of silver scales. The man looked up, his eyes entirely black, showing no whites or pupils. He tilted his head, sniffing the air with a predatory twitch of his nostrils. "Mundane," the merchant hissed, the word sounding like a shard of ice scraping against a plate. "You smell of stale tea and regulation, little bird." "Metropolitan Police," Harlow snapped, her voice cracking the stillness. "I'm looking for a suspect. Out of my way." A low, guttural tittering rose from the surrounding stalls. The shifting shadows of the market seemed to lean in closer. Harlow felt the sharp jaw of her training tighten. She moved toward Tommy, but a massive figure in a tattered grey greatcoat stepped into her path. The creature—for it was too tall and its proportions too wrong for a man—held a heavy iron staff topped with a glowing amber orb. "No tokens, no trade," the guardian rumbled. The sound came from somewhere deep within its chest, vibrating the very air in Harlow's lungs. "No law but the Market's law." "I'm not here to trade," Harlow said, her hand finally closing around the grip of her sidearm. "I'm here for him." She-pointed at Tommy, who had stopped by a stall draped in black-and-white photographs that looked disturbingly similar to the maps in the Raven's Nest. He looked at her, his eyes darting to the guardian, then back to her. "Quinn, just leave. If you draw that gun, they won't let you walk out. The bone token only buys entry, it doesn't buy immunity." "I don't need immunity. I have a badge." The guardian moved with a speed that defied its bulk. The iron staff slammed into the ground inches from Harlow’s boot, cracking the stone platform and sending a spray of silver sparks into the air. At the same moment, the flickering blue lanterns hanging from the ceiling flared to a blinding, violent intensity. The merchants ceased their bartering. Every masked face turned toward Quinn, their movements synchronized and oily. Across the market, a bell began to toll—a deep, bronze-heavy sound that felt like a physical blow to the chest. The shadows beneath the stalls began to detach themselves, flowing across the sand like spilt ink, rising into jagged, man-shaped forms. Tommy’s face went pale, his Saint Christopher medallion swinging wildly as he backed toward a shelf filled with ancient jars. "The moon," he whispered, his voice barely audible over the tolling bell. "The cycle's shifting. It’s moving. Quinn, get out!" The floor beneath her boots shuddered. The entire station groaned, the sound of grinding stone and shrieking metal filling the air as the Veil Market prepared to jump its location. The walls began to dissolve into mist, revealing a terrifying glimpse of a void filled with swirling stars and jagged white light. The guardian raised its staff, the amber orb glowing with a sickly, necrotic light. Harlow drew her weapon, the cold steel of the barrel a familiar weight, but as she leveled it at the towering figure, the gun began to glow. The metal softened, turning into a cluster of writhing, leaden snakes that hissed and bit at her palm. She dropped the weapon, the snakes dissolving into smoke before they hit the ground. The crowd surged forward, a wave of masks and claws and ancient hunger. "Herrera!" Harlow screamed, reaching for her belt even as the first shadow-hand clamped onto her shoulder. The station gave one final, violent lurch, and the world went white.
created_at"2026-02-25T00:56:08.193Z" 2/25/2026, 12:56:08 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"charged"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"intricate"
count1
9
word"porcelain"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
12
word"synchronized"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"lurch"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"echoing"
2"charged"
3"vibrated"
4"gloom"
5"silence"
6"pulsed"
7"rhythmic"
8"intricate"
9"porcelain"
10"silk"
11"intensity"
12"synchronized"
13"familiar"
14"lurch"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
23.81% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences84
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1430
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1264
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn2
Camden1
High1
Street1
Tomás1
Herrera2
Spaniard1
Saint2
Christopher2
Victorian1
Tube1
London1
Veil2
Market2
Harlow15
Tommy7
She-pointed1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Spaniard"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Harlow"
7"Tommy"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Victorian"
4"London"
5"Raven"
globalScore0.907
windowScore0.833
47.26% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"darkness that seemed to swallow the light from the flickering overhead hum-buzz of the fluorescent tubes"
1"felt like crushed glass"
2"felt like a physical blow to the chest"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.699
wordCount1430
matches
0"No law but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean31.78
std20.25
cv0.637
sampleLengths
062
12
271
321
469
55
647
761
840
926
103
1131
1214
1319
1416
1544
1618
173
1838
1927
2067
2128
2266
2319
243
2522
2659
2725
2818
2970
3029
3121
3238
3324
348
3535
3634
3741
3820
3920
4052
4159
4227
4316
4412
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs210
matches
0"was still vibrating"
1"was looking"
2"was measuring"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences100
ratio0.06
matches
0"That was the problem with his lot; they always looked toward the next shadow, the next secret, the next lie."
1"The air here felt different—thicker, charged with a low-frequency hum that vibrated in her molars."
2"The wall didn't just open; it bled away, the reality of the tunnel rippling like a disturbed pond."
3"The silence was the first thing that hit her—a heavy, suffocating quiet that made the blood rushing in her ears sound like a waterfall."
4"The creature—for it was too tall and its proportions too wrong for a man—held a heavy iron staff topped with a glowing amber orb."
5"Across the market, a bell began to toll—a deep, bronze-heavy sound that felt like a physical blow to the chest."
60.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1284
adjectiveStacks7
stackExamples
0"own military-drilled precision."
1"neon-bright plastic ponchos"
2"narrow, soot-stained alleyway"
3"small white rectangular bone"
4"fine, silver-grey sand"
5"deep, bronze-heavy sound"
6"jagged, man-shaped forms."
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.024143302180685357
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.009345794392523364
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean14.3
std7.16
cv0.501
sampleLengths
024
125
213
32
49
518
63
721
820
921
1021
114
123
1320
1421
155
1625
173
1819
1920
205
2121
2215
2311
2429
259
2617
273
2818
2913
3014
3119
3216
3314
3412
3518
3618
373
3811
393
4024
419
424
4314
4412
4524
464
4711
4816
4923
43.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.32
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners32
79.37% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences84
matches
0"Instead, her palms pressed into"
1"Then, the smell arrived."
ratio0.024
91.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences84
matches
0"He moved with a frantic,"
1"She shouldered through them, her"
2"He didn't look back."
3"He never did."
4"She felt the heavy weight"
5"He didn't speak."
6"He shoved a heavy iron"
7"She kicked it harder, the"
8"She tracked the wet, muddy"
9"They led toward a staircase"
10"He held a small white"
11"He pressed the bone token"
12"He stepped backward, his figure"
13"She threw herself forward, her"
14"She tumbled through the opening,"
15"It wasn't the London underground’s"
16"She stood in a cavernous"
17"They traded items that defied"
18"His voice carried an edge"
19"He was looking at the"
ratio0.321
1.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences84
matches
0"Harlow Quinn’s lungs burned with"
1"He moved with a frantic,"
2"The command tore from her"
3"A group of tourists in"
4"Harlow didn't slow."
5"She shouldered through them, her"
6"Tommy pivoted on a dime,"
7"Harlow reached the mouth of"
8"He didn't look back."
9"He never did."
10"That was the problem with"
11"She felt the heavy weight"
12"The Spaniard’s Saint Christopher medallion"
13"He didn't speak."
14"He shoved a heavy iron"
15"Harlow surged forward, her hand"
16"The door was still vibrating."
17"She kicked it harder, the"
18"The air here felt different—thicker,"
19"She tracked the wet, muddy"
ratio0.917
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"He moved with a frantic, liquid grace that mocked her own military-drilled precision."
1"Tommy pivoted on a dime, darting left into a narrow, soot-stained alleyway that smelled of rancid cooking oil and damp cardboard."
2"She felt the heavy weight of her service weapon against her hip, a comfort that felt increasingly inadequate in this borough."
3"The air here felt different—thicker, charged with a low-frequency hum that vibrated in her molars."
4"They led toward a staircase that shouldn't have been there, descending into a darkness that seemed to swallow the light from the flickering overhead hum-buzz of…"
5"Tommy shook his head, his face softening into something that looked dangerously like pity."
6"Instead, her palms pressed into a fine, silver-grey sand that felt like crushed glass."
7"The silence was the first thing that hit her—a heavy, suffocating quiet that made the blood rushing in her ears sound like a waterfall."
8"They traded items that defied the logic Harlow had spent two decades enforcing: jars containing flickering sparks of light, scrolls that wept ink like blood, an…"
9"She-pointed at Tommy, who had stopped by a stall draped in black-and-white photographs that looked disturbingly similar to the maps in the Raven's Nest."
10"The iron staff slammed into the ground inches from Harlow’s boot, cracking the stone platform and sending a spray of silver sparks into the air."
11"Across the market, a bell began to toll—a deep, bronze-heavy sound that felt like a physical blow to the chest."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Harlow snapped, her voice cracking the stillness"
1"Harlow said, her hand finally closing around the grip of her sidearm"
2"he whispered, his voice barely audible over the tolling bell"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"the merchant hissed (hiss)"
1"Harlow snapped (snap)"
2"he whispered (whisper)"
3"Harlow screamed (scream)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.227
leniency0.455
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.364
69.0321%