Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ950YVJFG9X37Y84DRE2Z8J

Run Details

Duration:
35.5s
Cost:
$0.003482
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pulled her jacket tighter against the damp London chill. The scent of fried noodles and ginger, residual from her shift at the Golden Empress, clung to her like a second skin. Streetlights bled into the fogged-up windows of passing buses, their colours blurring into streaks of indifferent light. Soho hummed with its usual nocturnal pulse, a frantic energy she usually found comforting, a counterpoint to the quiet desperation that had followed her from Cardiff. She’d meant to walk straight home, up the narrow stairs to her small flat above Silas’s bar, but her feet had faltered outside The Raven’s Nest. Through the window, she could see him. Silas, a fixed point of calm in the swirling city. The dim glow of the bar was a warm invitation, his familiar silhouette behind the polished wood counter a constant presence. Tonight, though, seeing him felt different. Years seemed to stretch between her last properly significant conversation with him and this moment. Years where she’d shed one life and painstakingly cobbled together another, where the girl who’d arrived with nothing but a suitcase and a scream trapped in her throat felt like a ghost haunting this new existence. She hesitated, her fingers tracing the worn leather of her delivery bag. Then, almost against her will, she pushed the door. The chime above the door announced her arrival, a small, polite sound swallowed by the bar’s quiet thrum. The air inside was thick with the comforting scent of aged wood, stale beer, and something faintly spicy, a ghost of a forgotten evening. Maps, faded and sepia-toned, covered the walls, alongside a gallery of austere, black-and-white faces from a bygone era. Silas looked up from polishing a glass, his hazel eyes, usually sharp with an almost unnerving perceptiveness, softening with recognition. A slight limp accompanied his movement as he pushed off the counter and came around toward her. His auburn hair, streaked liberally with grey, was neatly trimmed, as was his beard, a picture of contained composure. "Aurora," he said, his voice a low rumble, deeper than the background murmur of a few solitary patrons nursing their thoughts at scattered tables. "A long shift?" "You could say that, Si," she replied, forcing a smile. She scanned the mostly empty room. The usual haunts occupied by lone drinkers were just that tonight – occupied by lone drinkers, their faces shadowed in the low light. "Just getting some air before I head upstairs." He came to a stop beside her, his gaze appraising but kind. He always managed to strike that balance, a quiet authority that never felt oppressive. "The air in here is often better than outside, I find. And it offers more in the way of comfort." He gestured towards an empty stool at the bar. "Join me for a moment?" She nodded, sliding onto the worn leather seat. It molded itself around her like memory, soft and familiar. Silas moved back behind the counter, his movements economical, practiced. He poured a measure of whisky without asking. It was usually his way, an almost telepathic understanding that she often needed something stronger than conversation after a grueling day. He slid the glass towards her. The amber liquid caught the dim light, a small pool of warmth. "To breathing," he offered, raising his own half-empty pint in a silent toast. "To breathing," she echoed, the word feeling heavy, earned. She took a slow sip of the whisky. It burned, then settled pleasantly, a familiar, grounding warmth spreading through her chest. Silas watched her, his expression unreadable, that quiet authority that had always both intimidated and reassured her. "You haven't been in often of late," he observed, his hand resuming its meticulous work with a clean bar towel. "Been busy," she said, which was a truth, but far from the whole truth. Busy trying to outrun the silence, the echoes of things left undone, and the gnawing what-ifs. "Deliveries back up. Yu-Fei’s been… particular about her timings." He smiled, a brief crinkling at the corners of his eyes. "The Empress has always been a demanding mistress. But you manage. You always do." That was the thing, wasn't it? Managing. Surviving. It felt increasingly like a poor substitute for living. She looked at him, at the faint lines etched around his eyes, the silver threading his hair. He had always been an older presence, a steady anchor in the choppy waters of her London arrival. But tonight, more than ever, she saw the layers beneath the proprietor, the retired operative. His quiet authority now felt like a mantle woven from countless unseen battles, a life lived in the shadows. "Do you ever think," she started, then stopped, the question lodging itself behind her teeth like a shard of glass. What she wanted to ask was: *Do you ever regret it? All of it?* The risks, the choices, the people lost, the Prague operation that had cost him so dearly? But that wasn't her regret to voice, and he had always been discreet about his past, a past he’d only hinted at as a brutal, necessary education. Silas, as if sensing the unspoken weight of her thoughts, tilted his head slightly. "Think what, Aurora?" She traced the rim of her glass, the condensation cool against her fingertip. "Cardiff. University. Pre-Law." The words felt alien, remnants of a life that belonged to someone else, a distant melody from a forgotten song. She saw herself there, bright-eyed, on the cusp of a future meticulously planned by her parents, by her own youthful ambition and sharp intellect. Before Evan. Before the shattering, the slow erosion of everything she thought she was. Before Laila, the persona she’d tried on and shed like a second skin, and then Aurora, the name she’d landed with, like a paratrooper dropped into unfamiliar, hostile territory. The bright blue of her eyes, usually so sharp and observant, often clouded with a distant sorrow she tried to mask with practiced neutrality. It was a sorrow that had settled in the corners of her vision, a perpetual guest since she’d fled Cardiff. The girl who’d excelled at everything, who’d dreamt of a life in the courtroom, now spent her days navigating sticky pavements and the whims of restaurant owners, her only ambition to make rent and disappear into the anonymity of her small flat. The weight of that divergence pressed down, heavy as the London fog. "A different path," Silas said softly, his hazel gaze meeting hers. He didn't push, didn't pry. That was another of his formidable skills – knowing when silence was an invitation and when it was a necessary wall. But he knew she often felt adrift, tethered precariously to this London life, a life built on necessity rather than desire. "Too different, I think," she admitted, the confession a small tremor that shook her carefully constructed composure. "Sometimes I look at old photos, or my parents talk about my cousin’s graduation… and I feel like I’m watching a movie about someone I used to know. Someone who was supposed to be more." She felt a prickle behind her eyes, an unwelcome surge of emotion. She’d built walls around that person, brick by careful brick, but the foundations were starting to show cracks. Silas picked up another clean glass, polished it with a soft cloth, his movements slow and deliberate. "Ambitious young women often find their intended paths are not the only ones available. Life has a way of rerouting us." He paused, the slight limp more noticeable as he shifted his weight, a constant reminder of a past that had irrevocably altered his present. "And sometimes," he continued, his voice holding a deep resonance, "the detours lead to places one couldn't have imagined. Not necessarily worse, just… different. And ultimately, it's the living you do on the path you're on that matters." "Or just survival," Rory murmured, the whisky suddenly tasting less comforting, more like a potent numbing agent. Her left wrist throbbed, an old phantom itch beneath the sleeve of her jacket, a reminder of a childhood accident her mother had always called it, but Rory knew better than to believe that innocent explanation. It was from a fight, a desperate, foolish attempt to prove something she couldn't articulate even to herself. Like so many things with her. Silas’s gaze, for a fleeting second, dropped to her left wrist as she gestured. He saw the pale, delicate curve barely visible beneath her sleeve, a crescent moon etched into her skin. He didn't ask. He wouldn't. His job had taught him the stories skin could tell, the secrets it held, and the resilience needed to bear them. It was a mark not of weakness, but of survival, a testament to a moment when things had nearly gone terribly wrong, and she had, somehow, pulled herself back from the brink. "There's never shame in survival, Aurora," he said, his voice low and steady, laced with an understanding that spanned years and experiences. "Not when the world tries to break you. The shame," he paused, his hand resting on his silver signet ring, the metal glinting under the low lights, "is in letting it win. In letting the fear or the regret keep you from living on the path you've chosen, no matter how it came to be." He was talking about her, but she suspected he was also talking about himself. The botched Prague operation, the knee injury, the quiet retirement that was anything but – the ghosts trailing him were surely as numerous as hers, just dressed in different uniforms. He carried the weight of choices made under duress, the burden of knowledge, the price of competence. "But what if… what if you left things behind that mattered more?" she whispered, the question so raw it surprised her. "What if the price of survival was… the person you were meant to be?" Silas leaned forward, resting his forearms on the bar. His gaze was steady, direct, holding hers without wavering. "No one is 'meant' to be anything, Aurora," he said, his voice dropping lower, a private confidence shared across the worn oak. "Not definitively. We become who we have to be. And sometimes, the 'meant to be' is just a story we tell ourselves, a convenient narrative to mask the messier, more interesting truth of who we actually become." He looked around the quiet bar, his eyes settling on a faded photograph of men in uniforms, faces grim, standing against what looked like a bombed-out European street. Faces he likely knew; men who became ghosts. "The real regret, I've found, isn't in the paths not taken, or the lives we might have lived. It's in looking back and realizing you didn't truly *live* on the path you chose, because you were too busy being afraid of failure, of judgment, of becoming someone you didn't recognize." She absorbed his words, feeling their truth resonate, sharp and unwelcome where it pricked her armor. She was afraid. Afraid of the future, afraid of her past catching up, afraid of being found out as not being enough. Afraid of disappointing the idea of herself that had felt so solid, so attainable, back in Cardiff. A comfortable silence settled between them, not the strained silence of strangers, but the quiet understanding of two people who had navigated darkness, each in their own way. The ambient sounds of the bar – the hum of the ancient refrigerator, the distant clatter of a glass, the muted thrum of traffic outside – seemed amplified in the stillness. "Thank you, Si," she said finally, her voice a little choked. She pushed the whisky glass back towards him. "I should… I should try and sleep. And maybe unpack some of those old feelings." He nodded, his gaze never wavering, a silent acknowledgment of the unspoken shared between them. He didn't try to keep her, didn't offer platitudes beyond the truth he’d just imparted. "Rest well, Aurora. And remember," he added, a ghost of a smile touching his lips, "even rerouted, a journey can still lead you somewhere worthwhile." She managed another weak smile. As she slid off the stool, he gave a small nod, his left knee protesting the movement almost imperceptibly. It was the subtle signs, the almost invisible tells, that allowed him to see the world so clearly. And tonight, he had seen a glimpse of her, too. She walked towards the door, the chime sounding again, this time like a soft farewell entering the night. The London air, still damp and cool, felt less oppressive now, the weight of time and regret still present, but perhaps, just perhaps, a fraction lighter.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:01:13.979Z" 2/25/2026, 1:01:13 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
18.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"she started then [then]"
1"Silas said softly [softly]"
2"He looked around [around]"
3"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.71
leniency1
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.182
88.12% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2104
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"carefully"
3"suddenly"
4"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2104
totalAiIsms46
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count3
3
word"familiar"
count3
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"solitary"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"oppressive"
count2
8
word"warmth"
count2
9
word"echoed"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
11
word"silence"
count4
12
word"echoes"
count1
13
word"etched"
count2
14
word"unspoken"
count2
15
word"weight"
count4
16
word"traced"
count1
17
word"navigating"
count1
18
word"desire"
count1
19
word"constructed"
count1
20
word"reminder"
count2
21
word"resonance"
count1
22
word"throbbed"
count1
23
word"fleeting"
count1
24
word"testament"
count1
25
word"glinting"
count1
26
word"carried the weight"
count1
27
word"wavering"
count2
28
word"comfortable"
count1
29
word"navigated"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pulse"
2"comforting"
3"familiar"
4"tracing"
5"solitary"
6"scanned"
7"oppressive"
8"warmth"
9"echoed"
10"unreadable"
11"silence"
12"echoes"
13"etched"
14"unspoken"
15"weight"
16"traced"
17"navigating"
18"desire"
19"constructed"
20"reminder"
21"resonance"
22"throbbed"
23"fleeting"
24"testament"
25"glinting"
26"carried the weight"
27"wavering"
28"comfortable"
29"navigated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences113
matches
0"felt a prickle"
1"was afraid"
92.29% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
2"tried to"
3"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen66
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords9
totalWords2109
ratio0.004
matches
0"Do you ever regret it? All of it?"
1"live"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1727
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
London5
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff3
Silas10
Raven1
Nest1
Busy1
Prague2
Evan1
Laila1
Aurora1
Rory3
European1
Faces1
persons
0"Empress"
1"Silas"
2"Busy"
3"Evan"
4"Laila"
5"Rory"
places
0"London"
1"Golden"
2"Cardiff"
3"Raven"
4"Prague"
5"European"
6"Faces"
globalScore1
windowScore1
29.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"felt like a ghost haunting this new exi"
1"felt like a mantle woven from countless"
2"as if sensing the unspoken weight of her thoughts, tilted his head slightly"
3"looked like a bombed-out European street"
4"seemed amplified in the stillness"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.948
wordCount2109
matches
0"not of weakness, but of survival, a testament to a moment"
1"not the strained silence of strangers, but the quiet understanding of two people who had navigated dark"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences122
matches
0"strike that balance"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean70.3
std41.4
cv0.589
sampleLengths
0101
1116
2116
327
447
560
675
713
847
920
1039
1125
1286
1377
1417
15201
1658
1782
18100
1977
2090
2177
2261
2335
24163
2555
2659
2734
2855
2996
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"being found"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs275
matches
0"were starting"
1"was talking"
2"was also talking"
25.76% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences122
ratio0.041
matches
0"The usual haunts occupied by lone drinkers were just that tonight – occupied by lone drinkers, their faces shadowed in the low light."
1"That was another of his formidable skills – knowing when silence was an invitation and when it was a necessary wall."
2"The botched Prague operation, the knee injury, the quiet retirement that was anything but – the ghosts trailing him were surely as numerous as hers, just dressed in different uniforms."
3"Faces he likely knew; men who became ghosts."
4"The ambient sounds of the bar – the hum of the ancient refrigerator, the distant clatter of a glass, the muted thrum of traffic outside – seemed amplified in the stillness."
88.03% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1730
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"own half-empty pint"
adverbCount81
adverbRatio0.04682080924855491
lyAdverbCount30
lyAdverbRatio0.017341040462427744
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean17.29
std10.96
cv0.634
sampleLengths
010
122
217
326
426
57
610
721
86
915
1036
1112
129
1318
1424
1518
1620
1717
1819
1924
203
2110
226
2323
248
2512
2614
2729
285
298
3010
3110
328
3321
346
3512
3613
379
388
3913
4017
4120
4214
4316
449
4511
4614
476
481
491
57.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4016393442622951
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners49
30.58% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences109
matches
0"Then, almost against her will,"
ratio0.009
3.49% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount59
totalSentences109
matches
0"She’d meant to walk straight"
1"She hesitated, her fingers tracing"
2"His auburn hair, streaked liberally"
3"he said, his voice a"
4"she replied, forcing a smile"
5"She scanned the mostly empty"
6"He came to a stop"
7"He always managed to strike"
8"He gestured towards an empty"
9"She nodded, sliding onto the"
10"It molded itself around her"
11"He poured a measure of"
12"It was usually his way,"
13"He slid the glass towards"
14"he offered, raising his own"
15"she echoed, the word feeling"
16"She took a slow sip"
17"It burned, then settled pleasantly,"
18"he observed, his hand resuming"
19"she said, which was a"
ratio0.541
28.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences109
matches
0"Rory pulled her jacket tighter"
1"The scent of fried noodles"
2"Streetlights bled into the fogged-up"
3"Soho hummed with its usual"
4"She’d meant to walk straight"
5"Silas, a fixed point of"
6"The dim glow of the"
7"Tonight, though, seeing him felt"
8"Years seemed to stretch between"
9"Years where she’d shed one"
10"She hesitated, her fingers tracing"
11"The chime above the door"
12"The air inside was thick"
13"Maps, faded and sepia-toned, covered"
14"Silas looked up from polishing"
15"A slight limp accompanied his"
16"His auburn hair, streaked liberally"
17"he said, his voice a"
18"she replied, forcing a smile"
19"She scanned the mostly empty"
ratio0.862
91.74% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"Before the shattering, the slow"
1"Before Laila, the persona she’d"
ratio0.018
27.31% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Streetlights bled into the fogged-up windows of passing buses, their colours blurring into streaks of indifferent light."
1"Soho hummed with its usual nocturnal pulse, a frantic energy she usually found comforting, a counterpoint to the quiet desperation that had followed her from Ca…"
2"Years where she’d shed one life and painstakingly cobbled together another, where the girl who’d arrived with nothing but a suitcase and a scream trapped in her…"
3"Silas watched her, his expression unreadable, that quiet authority that had always both intimidated and reassured her."
4"All of it?* The risks, the choices, the people lost, the Prague operation that had cost him so dearly?"
5"Silas, as if sensing the unspoken weight of her thoughts, tilted his head slightly."
6"The girl who’d excelled at everything, who’d dreamt of a life in the courtroom, now spent her days navigating sticky pavements and the whims of restaurant owner…"
7"The botched Prague operation, the knee injury, the quiet retirement that was anything but – the ghosts trailing him were surely as numerous as hers, just dresse…"
8"Afraid of the future, afraid of her past catching up, afraid of being found out as not being enough."
9"Afraid of disappointing the idea of herself that had felt so solid, so attainable, back in Cardiff."
10"A comfortable silence settled between them, not the strained silence of strangers, but the quiet understanding of two people who had navigated darkness, each in…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she echoed, the word feeling heavy, earned"
1"she whispered, the question so raw it surprised her"
2"she said finally, her voice a little choked"
3"he added, a ghost of a smile touching his lips,"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
1"she admitted (admit)"
2"he continued (continue)"
3"Rory murmured (murmur)"
4"she whispered (whisper)"
5"he added (add)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.419
leniency0.839
rawRatio0.462
effectiveRatio0.387
70.5104%