Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ953V7DDZNPKG5H0BS0TFQN

Run Details

Duration:
24.0s
Cost:
$0.011347
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The chill of the autumn night bit through Rory’s worn leather jacket, a stark contrast to the cloying warmth of the Golden Empress kitchen she’d left hours ago. Richmond Park lay before her, a vast expanse of darkness punctuated only by the distant, diffuse glow of London’s light pollution and the narrow beam of her phone’s flashlight. Her black hair, usually neat, had caught the wind, whipping across her bright blue eyes. She pulled it back, tucking a loose strand behind an ear, and pressed on, the scarred crescent on her left wrist a small, cool reminder of her own history with ill-advised escapades. She had come here looking for answers, following whispered rumours of a woman who’d vanished near the park’s edge, a patron of Silas’s bar, no less. The police had shrugged it off as a runaway. Rory, however, knew better than to trust official dismissals when something felt off. Mrs. Hadley, the missing woman’s neighbour, had spoken of a “strange glow” and “ancient stones” in a secluded section of the park. It was enough for Rory to take the tube and then walk the last two miles, fueled by a deep-seated need to unravel mysteries, a trait that had often landed her in trouble but also made her formidable. The path beneath her boots turned from asphalt to packed earth, then to a soft, yielding carpet of fallen leaves. The sounds of the city, once a low hum, faded with each step, replaced by the rustle of the wind through skeletal branches and the distant hoot of an owl. A disquieting silence settled, deeper than any silence she’d ever experienced in the heart of London. It felt like walking into a soundproof chamber, the air growing thick, muffling. “Ancient oak standing stones,” Rory muttered to herself, echoing Mrs. Hadley’s disjointed account. She scanned the gloom, her flashlight beam cutting through the darkness, illuminating nothing but gnarled roots and towering tree trunks. Richmond Park was immense, a wild lung in the city’s concrete chest. Finding a specific, hidden clearing was like searching for a particular grain of sand on a sprawling beach. Then, there they were. Not the distinct, man-hewn monoliths she’d half-expected, but colossal, ancient oaks, their trunks like twisted, arthritic giants. They stood in a rough circle, their branches interwoven, forming a natural archway, an organic gate. Even in the dim light, she could see they were far older, far larger, than any other tree in the vicinity. They exuded an aura of profound age, a silent, watchful presence. She felt it, a prickle on her skin, a sudden, inexplicable tightening in her chest. This was it. The Fae Grove. A step inside the circle of oaks was like stepping through an invisible curtain. The air grew immediately, impossibly colder, yet the ground underfoot felt strangely soft, almost springy. And then, the wildflowers. They bloomed everywhere, vibrant splashes of crimson, sapphire, and gold, defiantly alive against the encroaching frost of late autumn. Their colours were too bright, their petals too perfect, their scent, cloying and sweet, hanging heavy in the still air. She knelt, touching a violet sprig. It felt real, tangible, yet utterly out of place. This was not a natural ecosystem. The silence here was even more oppressive, a vacuum that pressed in on her ears. Every sound she made – the crunch of her boot on a wildflower, the rasp of her jacket – seemed amplified, then swallowed by the pervasive quiet. Her heart began to thump, a slow, heavy rhythm against her ribs. Rory, despite her cool-headed nature, felt a seed of unease take root. This was beyond odd. This was wrong. She tightened her grip on the small silver chain around her neck, the Heartstone Pendant warm against her skin. It was faint, a barely perceptible heat, but it was there, a distant thrumming beneath the surface. It usually only pulsed with warmth when near something truly *other*, something that defied the natural order of things. She had never felt it react this strongly just to a place. A whisper, like dry leaves skittering across stone, brushed past her ear. Rory spun, flashlight beam slicing through the darkness, but found nothing. Only the silent, watchful oaks and the unnaturally bright wildflowers. “Hello?” she called out, her voice a thin, reedy sound in the vast silence. No answer. Just the echo of her own word, then nothing. She told herself it was the wind, the rustle of distant branches. Her mind, sharp and analytical, sought rational explanations. The wildflowers, beautiful aberrations, were merely a strange microclimate. The cold was a trick of air currents. The whisper was her imagination, frayed by the unusual circumstances and the lateness of the hour. But the warmth of the Heartstone grew, a deeper, undeniable pulse against her collarbone. Not alarmingly hot, but a steady, insistent warmth that radiated through her shirt, a warning. Rory took a cautious step deeper into the clearing. The oaks loomed, their branches forming an increasingly dense canopy overhead, blotting out the already faint light from above. The wildflowers grew thicker, their colours almost glowing with an inner luminescence. She felt a profound sense of disorientation, as if the ground itself had shifted beneath her. Was the path behind her still there? Could she even tell which way was out? A faint scratching sound, like claws on bark, echoed from somewhere to her left. Rory froze, her breath catching in her throat. She swung her flashlight with a practiced hand, sweeping it high and low. Nothing. Only the rough bark of an oak. But the sound had been distinct, too sharp, too deliberate to be a natural settling of wood. It spoke of movement. She started walking again, slowly, trying to maintain a semblance of direction, her eyes and ears strained. The silence, once absolute, was now fractured by these tiny, unsettling noises. A persistent *drip-drip* that faded when she stopped to listen. A low, continuous hum she couldn’t place, like the vibration of a string unheard. And still, the occasional, almost imperceptible rustle, always just at the edge of her vision, always just out of the flashlight’s beam. She felt it then, a distinct pressure, like someone watching her from behind, impossibly close. The hairs on her neck prickled. She whipped around, her flashlight cutting a frantic arc through the air. For a split second, she thought she saw it—a flicker of shadow, deeper than the surrounding darkness, too angular to be a tree trunk, too quick to be real. It was gone before her brain could truly register it, leaving only a lingering chill in its wake. “Okay, Rory,” she whispered to herself, trying to keep her voice steady. “Think. What would Eva say? Probably, ‘Get out, you idiot.’” But Eva wasn't here. Rory breathed deeply, trying to calm the frantic flutter in her chest. Her intelligence told her to observe, to analyze. Her gut screamed at her to flee. She focused, forcing her eyes to pierce the gloom between the trees. The moonlight, what little there was, seemed to behave strangely here. Instead of casting clear shadows, it distorted them, elongating familiar shapes into grotesque forms. An innocuous bush became a hunched figure. A tangled root system twisted into clawed fingers. For a moment, she thought she saw a pair of gleaming eyes reflecting her light from deep within the foliage, but then they winked out, replaced by the innocent glitter of dew on a spiderweb. The Heartstone was truly warm now, a steady, comforting heat against her skin, but also a stark reminder that she was stepping into something dangerous. It wasn't just a strange grove. It was a threshold. A distinct, rhythmic *thumpthumpthump…* began from somewhere ahead. Not like footsteps, more like something heavy dragging, or perhaps a slow, deliberate beating. It was low, almost beneath the threshold of hearing, but unwavering. It resonated in the soles of her feet. Rory moved towards it, against every instinct. Curiosity, a powerful, sometimes perilous force, overrode her fear. She had to know. She had come all this way, braved the deepening dread. To turn back now, without understanding, felt like a betrayal. The wildflowers grew denser, taller, their vibrant colours almost assaulting her vision in the patchy darkness. She pushed through them, their silken petals brushing against her face, a sensation that was both soft and subtly invasive. The air grew heavier, thick with that cloying, sweet scent. The *thump* grew louder, more distinct, like a great, slow heart. Then she saw it. Not a creature, not a person, but another circle of oaks, deeper in the grove. These were even larger, their trunks scarred and knotted like ancient knuckles. In the centre of this second circle, something stood. It wasn't a structure, but a column of swirling shadows, a vortex of distorted light and darkness, shimmering faintly with a sickly, internal green luminescence. It pulsed, slowly, rhythmically, with the *thump* she had been following. It was impossibly dark at its core, drinking in whatever ambient light permeated the grove. And from its depths, she heard a sound—a soft, almost inaudible sigh, like a deep exhalation. The pressure of being watched intensified, clawing at her spine. She felt it everywhere now, not just behind her, but all around, a chorus of unseen presences. The Heartstone began to throb, an urgent, frantic pulse against her neck now. It was almost painfully hot, a burning ember against her skin. Its faint inner glow intensified, casting a crimson sheen on her fingers as she instinctively clutched it. Rory finally understood. This wasn't merely a strange pocket of nature. This was a direct, active gateway. And whatever was on the other side, or perhaps *loitering* on this side, felt incredibly close. She could almost taste it, a metallic tang on her tongue. A shadow detached itself from the ring of oaks surrounding the pulsating vortex. It wasn't a shadow cast by light, but a shape itself, darker than anything around it, a hole in reality that moved with impossible grace. It was tall, impossibly thin, and flowed rather than walked. It had no discernible features, only a vague humanoid outline, a consuming void. Rory’s breath wedged in her throat. Her blood turned to ice. This wasn’t a squirrel, not the wind, not her imagination. This was real. And it was looking at her. She felt its gaze, heavy and ancient, though there were no eyes to meet. Her quick mind, usually her greatest asset, seized momentarily, overwhelmed by the sheer, impossible wrongness of it. But then, a flash of her analytical core broke through the terror. The warmth of the Heartstone was now scorching. A warning. Not just of presence, but of proximity. And a clear message: *run*. She turned, not in a panicked scramble, but with the sudden, sharp precision of someone who understood her life depended on it. She didn’t look back. The rustling of the wildflowers, the soft earth, seemed to impede her movement, try to hold her. The air grew thicker, pressing in, as if the grove itself was trying to keep her. The rhythmic *thump* from the central vortex suddenly quickened, becoming a frantic, guttural heartbeat. From behind her, she heard a sound, a slithering, liquid movement on the soft ground, rapidly closing the distance. She ran, propelled by raw, primal fear, her bright blue eyes wide with terror, past the unnaturally blooming wildflowers, towards the outer circle of ancient oaks. The way back felt incredibly long, distorted. Had she been walking for minutes, or hours? The time anomaly of the Fae Grove was now her enemy, stretching the path, twisting the trees into an endless labyrinth. The silver chain of the Heartstone dug into her neck, hot as molten lead. She pushed through the oppressive quiet, through the clinging, sweet scent, her lungs burning. The slithering sound was right behind her now, a cold breath on her neck. She could feel its presence like a palpable hum in the air, a predatory hunger. Finally, she glimpsed the outer ring of the great oak standing stones. They looked impossibly far. She surged forward, her legs pumping, driven by a desperation she hadn’t felt since Evan, her ex, had pinned her against a wall. This was worse. This was the dark, unknowable, and utterly merciless. She burst through the threshold of the trees, stumbling, sprawling onto the leaf-strewn ground of Richmond Park. The sound of her fall was shockingly loud, familiar, real. The biting cold of the true autumn night hit her, sharp and clean, a welcome shock after the Grove’s chilling warmth. She scrambled to her feet, heart hammering, and dared a glance back. The Fae Grove was there, the circle of ancient oaks dark and silent against the faint city glow. The wildflowers were gone, replaced by the browns and greys of dying autumn foliage. The oppressive silence was replaced by the faint, comforting hum of distant traffic. It looked like any other part of Richmond Park, a patch of wilderness, ordinary and benign. But the Heartstone still pulsed, though now with a fading warmth, a distant echo of the sheer intensity it had reached inside. Rory clutched it, her knuckles white. She was out. But she knew, with a terrifying certainty, that she hadn't been alone. And whatever watched from the heart of the grove, it had almost caught her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2236
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count2
1
adverb"truly"
count3
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"truly"
2"slowly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2236
totalAiIsms64
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"stark"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count7
3
word"reminder"
count2
4
word"unravel"
count1
5
word"silence"
count6
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count2
9
word"profound"
count2
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"tangible"
count1
12
word"oppressive"
count3
13
word"pulsed"
count3
14
word"whisper"
count2
15
word"echo"
count2
16
word"pulse"
count2
17
word"loomed"
count1
18
word"sense of"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"fractured"
count1
21
word"flicker"
count1
22
word"familiar"
count2
23
word"gleaming"
count1
24
word"comforting"
count2
25
word"rhythmic"
count2
26
word"footsteps"
count1
27
word"unwavering"
count1
28
word"resonated"
count1
29
word"structure"
count1
30
word"depths"
count1
31
word"throb"
count1
32
word"quickened"
count1
33
word"could feel"
count1
34
word"palpable"
count1
35
word"pumping"
count1
36
word"chilling"
count1
37
word"intensity"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"stark"
2"warmth"
3"reminder"
4"unravel"
5"silence"
6"echoing"
7"scanned"
8"gloom"
9"profound"
10"perfect"
11"tangible"
12"oppressive"
13"pulsed"
14"whisper"
15"echo"
16"pulse"
17"loomed"
18"sense of"
19"echoed"
20"fractured"
21"flicker"
22"familiar"
23"gleaming"
24"comforting"
25"rhythmic"
26"footsteps"
27"unwavering"
28"resonated"
29"structure"
30"depths"
31"throb"
32"quickened"
33"could feel"
34"palpable"
35"pumping"
36"chilling"
37"intensity"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences176
matches
0"d with warmth"
1"e with terror"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences176
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
2"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences176
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords10
totalWords2236
ratio0.004
matches
0"other"
1"drip-drip"
2"thump… thump… thump…"
3"thump"
4"thump"
5"loitering"
6"run"
7"thump"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount2215
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.59
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory13
Golden1
Empress1
Park4
London2
Silas1
Mrs2
Hadley2
Fae3
Grove4
Heartstone7
Pendant1
Eva1
Evan1
Richmond4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Mrs"
3"Hadley"
4"Heartstone"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
82.89% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences149
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like walking into a soundproof cha"
1"seemed amplified then swallowed by the pervasive quiet"
2"felt like a betrayal"
3"looked like any other part of Richmond Pa"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords3.131
wordCount2236
matches
0"Not the distinct, man-hewn monoliths she’d half-expected, but colossal, ancient oaks, their trunks like twisted, arthritic"
1"Not alarmingly hot, but a steady, insistent warmth"
2"Not a creature, not a person, but another circle of oaks, deeper in the grove"
3"not a person, but another circle of oaks, deeper in the grove"
4"not just behind her, but all around, a chorus of unseen presences"
5"Not just of presence, but of proximity"
6"not in a panicked scramble, but with the sudden, sharp precision of someone who understood h"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences176
matches(empty)
44.27% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean62.11
std18.94
cv0.305
sampleLengths
0104
1108
279
363
490
593
673
767
858
953
1029
1171
1264
1375
1480
1553
1687
1735
1843
1940
2057
2176
2258
2341
2444
2561
2644
2751
2859
2933
3062
3157
3250
3348
3473
3557
97.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences176
matches
0"was gone"
1"was, seemed"
2"were gone"
3"was replaced"
96.48% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs322
matches
0"was like searching"
1"was like stepping"
2"was stepping"
3"was looking"
4"was trying"
94.16% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences176
ratio0.017
matches
0"Every sound she made – the crunch of her boot on a wildflower, the rasp of her jacket – seemed amplified, then swallowed by the pervasive quiet."
1"For a split second, she thought she saw it—a flicker of shadow, deeper than the surrounding darkness, too angular to be a tree trunk, too quick to be real."
2"And from its depths, she heard a sound—a soft, almost inaudible sigh, like a deep exhalation."
75.58% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2221
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"sickly, internal green luminescence."
1"was right behind her"
adverbCount116
adverbRatio0.05222872579918955
lyAdverbCount49
lyAdverbRatio0.022062134173795586
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences176
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences176
mean12.7
std6.92
cv0.544
sampleLengths
028
129
215
332
426
59
613
71
821
938
1020
1130
1216
1313
1410
153
1620
1712
1818
194
2017
2116
2221
2311
2415
253
263
2714
2815
294
3019
3120
326
339
346
3515
3627
3712
3812
394
403
4119
4217
4319
4412
4512
4611
4710
4814
492
34.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.23295454545454544
totalSentences176
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences171
matches
0"Then, there they were."
1"Only the silent, watchful oaks"
2"Just the echo of her"
3"Only the rough bark of"
4"Instead of casting clear shadows,"
5"Then she saw it."
6"Finally, she glimpsed the outer"
ratio0.041
72.63% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences171
matches
0"Her black hair, usually neat,"
1"She pulled it back, tucking"
2"She had come here looking"
3"It was enough for Rory"
4"It felt like walking into"
5"She scanned the gloom, her"
6"They stood in a rough"
7"They exuded an aura of"
8"She felt it, a prickle"
9"They bloomed everywhere, vibrant splashes"
10"Their colours were too bright,"
11"She knelt, touching a violet"
12"It felt real, tangible, yet"
13"Her heart began to thump,"
14"She tightened her grip on"
15"It was faint, a barely"
16"It usually only pulsed with"
17"She had never felt it"
18"she called out, her voice"
19"She told herself it was"
ratio0.368
62.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences171
matches
0"The chill of the autumn"
1"Richmond Park lay before her,"
2"Her black hair, usually neat,"
3"She pulled it back, tucking"
4"She had come here looking"
5"The police had shrugged it"
6"Rory, however, knew better than"
7"Hadley, the missing woman’s neighbour,"
8"It was enough for Rory"
9"The path beneath her boots"
10"The sounds of the city,"
11"A disquieting silence settled, deeper"
12"It felt like walking into"
13"Rory muttered to herself, echoing"
14"Hadley’s disjointed account."
15"She scanned the gloom, her"
16"Richmond Park was immense, a"
17"They stood in a rough"
18"They exuded an aura of"
19"She felt it, a prickle"
ratio0.795
58.48% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences171
matches
0"Even in the dim light,"
1"To turn back now, without"
ratio0.012
79.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences112
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She had come here looking for answers, following whispered rumours of a woman who’d vanished near the park’s edge, a patron of Silas’s bar, no less."
1"It was enough for Rory to take the tube and then walk the last two miles, fueled by a deep-seated need to unravel mysteries, a trait that had often landed her i…"
2"It usually only pulsed with warmth when near something truly *other*, something that defied the natural order of things."
3"Not alarmingly hot, but a steady, insistent warmth that radiated through her shirt, a warning."
4"The oaks loomed, their branches forming an increasingly dense canopy overhead, blotting out the already faint light from above."
5"She pushed through them, their silken petals brushing against her face, a sensation that was both soft and subtly invasive."
6"It wasn't a shadow cast by light, but a shape itself, darker than anything around it, a hole in reality that moved with impossible grace."
7"She turned, not in a panicked scramble, but with the sudden, sharp precision of someone who understood her life depended on it."
8"The time anomaly of the Fae Grove was now her enemy, stretching the path, twisting the trees into an endless labyrinth."
9"She pushed through the oppressive quiet, through the clinging, sweet scent, her lungs burning."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she called out, her voice a thin, reedy sound in the vast silence"
1"she whispered, trying to keep her voice steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"she called out (call out)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
75.9797%