Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ954C61W39P332E1EQ9BVJP

Run Details

Duration:
25.5s
Cost:
$0.014132
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pulled the collar of her jacket tighter against the damp chill that seemed to seep right through the fabric. Her breath plumed in the air, a fleeting ghost in the oppressive silence. Richmond Park at night was one thing; the isolated pocket of the Fae Grove was another entirely. She’d parked her scooter a good twenty minutes back, opting for the deceptive comfort of the familiar path before veering off into the untamed wildness that marked Isolde's grove. The ancient oaks, gnarled and thick as fortress walls, stood like forgotten sentinels, silent and imposing. It was the only way to tell she was truly there, for the air shimmered with an almost invisible distortion, a subtle wavering that gave the world a dreamlike quality. Her bright blue eyes, usually sharp and quick, struggled to pierce the gloom. The moonlight, usually so generous, seemed to be swallowed whole by the Grove’s canopy. Only slivers of silver-white light managed to filter through, dappling the ground in a shifting mosaic that played tricks on her vision. "Stupid," she muttered, the sound swallowed immediately by the encompassing quiet. "Stupid, stupid, stupid." She wasn't stupid, not usually. Her mind, quick and out-of-the-box, had always been her greatest asset. But coming here, alone, in the dead of night, felt like an act of profound idiocy. Yet, the whisper she’d heard, a fleeting suggestion overheard at Silas’s bar, had lodged itself in her brain like a splinter. A feeling that something important, something *dangerous*, had found its way into the Grove. The old stories, the warnings, they tugged at the edges of her memory. Time moved differently here. An hour could be minutes, or days. It was a good way to get lost, to truly disappear. The thought sent a fresh tremor down her spine, colder than the night air. The wildflowers, true to their nature, bloomed impossibly. Their scent, usually a sweet, earthy perfume, was cloying tonight, almost suffocating. It hung heavy in the air, masking any other potential odors. Rory stepped carefully, her worn trainers crunching softly on unseen twigs and leaves, each sound magnified in the unnatural quiet. Her fingers traced the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, an old habit from childhood, a nervous tic she hadn't realized she still possessed. It was a comfort, a reminder of solid, tangible reality, unlike the current surroundings. A faint warmth bloomed against her sternum. The Heartstone Pendant. It pulsed once, soft and deep, like a slow, deliberate heartbeat, then faded. Rory's breath caught. She pulled the silver chain out from beneath her jacket, the deep crimson gem, roughly the size of her thumbnail, glowed with a faint inner light. It wasn't near a Hel portal – or at least, she hoped not – but it had never stirred like that unless something… *else* was present. Something powerful. The silence pressed in around her, thick and weighted. It wasn't the natural quiet of a sleeping forest; it was an expectant silence, a pregnant pause before an unheard crescendo. Rory stopped, straining her ears. Nothing. Not a rustle of leaves that wasn't her own doing, not the chirp of a solitary night bird, not even the distant hum of city traffic that usually permeated even the deepest parts of Richmond Park. It was as if the Grove had ingested sound, chewed it up, and swallowed it whole. Her eyes scanned the periphery. The gnarled branches, dark against the marginally lighter sky, looked like skeletal fingers reaching, twisting. Every shadow seemed to deepen, to take on mass, to shift at the very edge of her vision. She blinked, hard, trying to clear her sight, but the distortions persisted. Was it just her mind, playing tricks in the isolated darkness? Or was the Grove *itself* distorting her perception? "Just imagining things," she whispered again, louder this time. Her voice, usually steady, sounded brittle, thin. It wavered in the air, refusing to be absorbed, hanging there like an accusation. She forced herself to move, one careful step after another, her eyes darting from side to side. Her mind raced, sifting through possibilities. An animal? Unlikely to cause this level of oppressive stillness. Another person? If so, they were far better at stealth than she was. A soft, almost imperceptible sound carried on what felt like a sudden, shallow breath of wind. *Rustle.* Not from the trees above, but from the low undergrowth to her left. Rory froze. It was too deliberate, too distinct, for just a rodent or an invisible gust. Her 5'6" frame felt unnervingly small tonight. She stared into the darkness, holding her breath, listening. The smell of wildflowers intensified, almost sickly sweet now, making her stomach churn. Her heart hammered against her ribs, a frantic drum in the silent Grove. One minute passed. Then another. Only the thrumming of her own blood in her ears and the distant, maddening buzz inside her head. Then, a faint flash of something pale, almost luminous, appeared between two of the ancient oaks, deep within the shadows. It was gone almost as soon as she registered it, a trick of the light, an optical illusion. She told herself that. It *had* to be. But the logical part of her brain, the part that always found the quickest route, the best solution, screamed a silent warning. This wasn't right. The Heartstone pulsed again, a warmer, more insistent throb this time. The faint inner glow brightened, casting a tiny, almost insignificant crimson beacon in the overwhelming darkness. It no longer felt like a mere warning; it felt like an alarm. Rory took a cautious step back, then another. She needed to reassess, to get out and rethink. Her usual cool-headedness was fraying at the edges, stretched thin by the unnatural quiet and the things that refused to be there, yet stubbornly were. A soft, melodic hum, like a forgotten lullaby, barely audible at first, reached her ears. It was high, sweet, intoxicating. It didn’t sound human. It sounded… *ancient*. The sound seemed to drift from nowhere and everywhere at once, chilling her to the bone even as it lulled her with its strange beauty. It was beautiful in the way a predator is beautiful, poised and deadly. Her vision blurred for a moment, the trees seeming to swim. She shook her head, trying to clear it. Her body tensed, every muscle coiled. This wasn't merely 'off' anymore. This was a trap. "Show yourself," she demanded, her voice a reedy whisper, barely breaking through the hum. It sounded foolish, a child’s plea in the face of something ancient and unknowable. The humming stopped abruptly. The silence that followed was even more profound, more absolute, than before. It felt like a physical weight, pressing down on her, stealing the air from her lungs. Then, from the deep shadows directly ahead, where the luminous flash had been, a pair of eyes opened. They were points of light, not reflecting what little moonlight there was, but *generating* their own faint, ethereal glow. They were too far apart to be human, too unnervingly still. They watched her, unblinking. Rory’s mind, despite the encroaching terror, worked furiously. Her hand went to her jacket pocket, fumbling for the small, incredibly bright tactical flashlight she always carried on her delivery routes. She flicked it on. The powerful beam cut through the oppressive darkness, dispelling the shadows in an instant. It illuminated… nothing. Just the trunk of an ancient oak, rough bark, and twisting roots. The eyes were gone. The humming was gone. Only the overwhelming scent of wildflowers and the frantic pounding of her own heart remained. She swept the beam left, then right, then up into the canopy, her gaze scrutinizing every branch, every patch of darkness. Her hands were shaking now, a fine tremor she couldn't control. *Blink*. The luminous eyes opened again, this time to her right, much closer. Framed by a tangle of dark, hair-like tendrils that seemed to writhe of their own accord. And just behind them, a suggestion of a form, elongated and impossibly slender, shifting like smoke against the deeper gloom. It was tall, taller than any human, and imbued with an alien grace that froze Rory in place. The Heartstone pulsed frantically now, a steady, rhythmic thrumming against her skin. The crimson glow intensified, almost painful in its vibrancy. It screamed danger, not just Fae, but something deeper, something *other*. No sounds of footsteps. No rustling of cloth. Nothing. Just the silent, watching eyes, and the ephemeral shape that seemed to drink the light. The fear was a cold, sharp blade, pressing against her throat. Her mind scrambled for a known threat, anything to anchor herself. Evan, her ex, had used fear against her, but it was a clumsy, human fear. This was different. This was primal. This was the dark forest come alive. Her quick out-of-the-box thinking kicked in, a desperate spark in the gloom. What did this *thing* want? If it wanted to hurt her, it could have done so already. It was… *toying* with her. Or simply observing. She remembered the warnings about the Fae, their cruel games, their fascination with mortals. She had to break the connection, disrupt its rhythm, whatever it was doing. She knew, with a certainty that chilled her more than the lingering cold, that if she let it hold her gaze, if she let its silent presence consume her, she would be lost. Lost to the time-warped Grove, lost to something far worse than Evan’s control. With a sudden, violent surge of adrenaline, Rory screamed. A raw, guttural sound ripped from her throat, tearing through the pristine vacuum of the Grove. It was an act of pure defiance, a refusal to be silenced, to be hunted in this insidious ballet of fear. The eyes widened, just barely, as if surprised. The ethereal form rippled, withdrawing deeper into the shadows, a faint, metallic tang now mingled with the cloying sweetness of the wildflowers. It was still there, she knew, lurking, watching. But Rory had bought herself a moment. She spun, flashlight beam sweeping wildly, no longer caring about stealth. She just needed to move, to run, to get to the oak sentinels, to the boundary, to the place where Earth truly began. The Fae Grove might twist time, might drain sound, might conjure horrors from the edges of perception, but it still had a boundary. And she would find it. She would run as if the hounds of Hel themselves were at her heels. Because for all she knew, they might well be.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:03:05.927Z" 2/25/2026, 1:03:05 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she whispered again [again]"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
82.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1757
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"truly"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"carefully"
2"softly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1757
totalAiIsms52
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"fleeting"
count2
2
word"oppressive"
count3
3
word"silence"
count4
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"sentinels"
count2
6
word"imposing"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"wavering"
count1
9
word"gloom"
count3
10
word"mosaic"
count1
11
word"profound"
count2
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"down her spine"
count1
14
word"potential"
count1
15
word"traced"
count1
16
word"reminder"
count1
17
word"tangible"
count1
18
word"warmth"
count1
19
word"pulsed"
count3
20
word"solitary"
count1
21
word"scanned"
count1
22
word"wavered"
count1
23
word"raced"
count1
24
word"stomach"
count1
25
word"churn"
count1
26
word"throb"
count1
27
word"beacon"
count1
28
word"chilling"
count1
29
word"predator"
count1
30
word"weight"
count1
31
word"flicked"
count1
32
word"pounding"
count1
33
word"rhythmic"
count1
34
word"footsteps"
count1
35
word"ephemeral"
count1
36
word"disrupt"
count1
37
word"chilled"
count1
38
word"pristine"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"fleeting"
2"oppressive"
3"silence"
4"familiar"
5"sentinels"
6"imposing"
7"shimmered"
8"wavering"
9"gloom"
10"mosaic"
11"profound"
12"whisper"
13"down her spine"
14"potential"
15"traced"
16"reminder"
17"tangible"
18"warmth"
19"pulsed"
20"solitary"
21"scanned"
22"wavered"
23"raced"
24"stomach"
25"churn"
26"throb"
27"beacon"
28"chilling"
29"predator"
30"weight"
31"flicked"
32"pounding"
33"rhythmic"
34"footsteps"
35"ephemeral"
36"disrupt"
37"chilled"
38"pristine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung heavy in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
19.40% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords11
totalWords1759
ratio0.006
matches
0"dangerous"
1"else"
2"itself"
3"Rustle."
4"had"
5"ancient"
6"generating"
7"Blink"
8"other"
9"thing"
10"toying"
75.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"With a sudden, violent surge of adrenaline, Rory screamed. A raw, guttural sound ripped from her throat, tearing through…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1738
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Park2
Fae4
Grove9
Isolde1
Silas1
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Hel2
Richmond2
Rory10
Evan2
Earth1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
3"Evan"
4"Earth"
places
0"Park"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
3"Hel"
4"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"chill that seemed to seep right through the fabric"
1"felt like an act of profound idiocy"
2"It was as if the Grove had ingested sound, chewed it up, and swallowed it whole"
3"looked like skeletal fingers reaching, tw"
4"felt like a sudden, shallow breath of w"
5"felt like a mere warning; it felt like"
6"felt like an alarm"
7"felt like a physical weight, pressing d"
8"tendrils that seemed to writhe of their own accord"
9"shape that seemed to drink the light"
29.45% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.706
wordCount1759
matches
0"Not from the trees above, but from the low undergrowth to her left"
1"not reflecting what little moonlight there was, but *generating* their own faint, ethereal glow"
2"not just Fae, but something deeper, something *other*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"feeling that something"
95.49% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean54.97
std26.62
cv0.484
sampleLengths
0125
149
214
3116
490
580
688
769
830
946
1053
1158
1271
1340
1442
1565
1634
1728
1832
1952
2034
2152
2232
231
2466
2532
2674
2751
2859
2946
3045
3185
92.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"get lost"
1"was gone"
2"were gone"
3"was gone"
82.21% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs283
matches
0"was cloying"
1"was fraying"
2"were shaking"
3"was… *toying"
4"was doing"
3.48% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences82
ratio0.049
matches
0"Richmond Park at night was one thing; the isolated pocket of the Fae Grove was another entirely."
1"It wasn't near a Hel portal – or at least, she hoped not – but it had never stirred like that unless something…"
2"It wasn't the natural quiet of a sleeping forest; it was an expectant silence, a pregnant pause before an unheard crescendo."
3"The Heartstone pulsed again, a warmer, more insistent throb this time. The faint inner glow brightened, casting a tiny, almost insignificant crimson beacon in the overwhelming darkness. It no longer felt like a mere warning; it felt like an alarm."
71.76% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount747
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.060240963855421686
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.025435073627844713
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean21.45
std19.16
cv0.893
sampleLengths
020
113
217
329
416
530
613
714
822
911
103
115
1211
1316
1421
1514
1613
174
187
1911
2014
218
2212
2311
2420
2525
2614
277
283
2913
303
3126
3223
333
342
359
3621
375
381
3936
4016
415
4215
4318
4412
4511
468
479
487
4914
59.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3780487804878049
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners31
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences74
matches
0"Only slivers of silver-white light"
1"Then, a faint flash of"
2"Then, from the deep shadows"
ratio0.041
47.03% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences74
matches
0"Her breath plumed in the"
1"She’d parked her scooter a"
2"It was the only way"
3"Her bright blue eyes, usually"
4"she muttered, the sound swallowed"
5"She wasn't stupid, not usually."
6"Her mind, quick and out-of-the-box,"
7"It was a good way"
8"Their scent, usually a sweet,"
9"It hung heavy in the"
10"Her fingers traced the small,"
11"It was a comfort, a"
12"It pulsed once, soft and"
13"She pulled the silver chain"
14"It wasn't near a Hel"
15"It wasn't the natural quiet"
16"It was as if the"
17"Her eyes scanned the periphery."
18"She blinked, hard, trying to"
19"she whispered again, louder this"
ratio0.432
47.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences74
matches
0"Rory pulled the collar of"
1"Her breath plumed in the"
2"Richmond Park at night was"
3"She’d parked her scooter a"
4"The ancient oaks, gnarled and"
5"It was the only way"
6"Her bright blue eyes, usually"
7"The moonlight, usually so generous,"
8"she muttered, the sound swallowed"
9"She wasn't stupid, not usually."
10"Her mind, quick and out-of-the-box,"
11"A feeling that something important,"
12"The old stories, the warnings,"
13"Time moved differently here."
14"An hour could be minutes,"
15"It was a good way"
16"The thought sent a fresh"
17"The wildflowers, true to their"
18"Their scent, usually a sweet,"
19"It hung heavy in the"
ratio0.824
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences74
matches
0"Yet, the whisper she’d heard,"
1"If so, they were far"
ratio0.027
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"It was the only way to tell she was truly there, for the air shimmered with an almost invisible distortion, a subtle wavering that gave the world a dreamlike qu…"
1"Not a rustle of leaves that wasn't her own doing, not the chirp of a solitary night bird, not even the distant hum of city traffic that usually permeated even t…"
2"She stared into the darkness, holding her breath, listening. The smell of wildflowers intensified, almost sickly sweet now, making her stomach churn. Her heart …"
3"Rory took a cautious step back, then another. She needed to reassess, to get out and rethink. Her usual cool-headedness was fraying at the edges, stretched thin…"
4"The humming stopped abruptly. The silence that followed was even more profound, more absolute, than before. It felt like a physical weight, pressing down on her…"
5"She swept the beam left, then right, then up into the canopy, her gaze scrutinizing every branch, every patch of darkness. Her hands were shaking now, a fine tr…"
6"The luminous eyes opened again, this time to her right, much closer. Framed by a tangle of dark, hair-like tendrils that seemed to writhe of their own accord. A…"
7"No sounds of footsteps. No rustling of cloth. Nothing. Just the silent, watching eyes, and the ephemeral shape that seemed to drink the light. The fear was a co…"
8"She had to break the connection, disrupt its rhythm, whatever it was doing. She knew, with a certainty that chilled her more than the lingering cold, that if sh…"
9"The eyes widened, just barely, as if surprised. The ethereal form rippled, withdrawing deeper into the shadows, a faint, metallic tang now mingled with the cloy…"
10"She spun, flashlight beam sweeping wildly, no longer caring about stealth. She just needed to move, to run, to get to the oak sentinels, to the boundary, to the…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she demanded, her voice a reedy whisper, barely breaking through the hum"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered again (whisper)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
63.5400%