Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ957DH5ZXVCC6MJV32DH48C

Run Details

Duration:
34.9s
Cost:
$0.019044
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last bus had grumbled its way past an hour ago. Aurora considered herself a Londoner now, though the damp chill of a late autumn night still bit sharper than anything Cardiff had thrown at her. She pulled her jacket tighter, the stiff collar brushing her jaw. Richmond Park stretched out before her, a vast expanse of darkness that swallowed the distant city glow. She had no real reason to be here, not one she could articulate, anyway. A strange, insistent pull had started in her chest mere hours ago, a hum beneath her skin. It wasn't an instruction from Yu-Fei, or a frantic call from Eva. It was… primal. A whisper she couldn't quite catch, a flash of something crimson behind her eyes. *The Grove*, it had urged. *The Grove.* Normally, Rory relied on logic, on the careful dissection of evidence she’d once applied to pre-law textbooks. But the past few weeks had splintered her worldview, leaving cracks for impossible things to seep through. She was here now, following an instinct that felt ancient and irreversible. The park gates were locked, but she knew a break in the fence, a small tear in the wire forgotten by the council. A faint shimmer, like heat haze off asphalt, rippled beyond it. That was her target. She slipped through the gap, her trainers making almost no sound on the wet grass. The air immediately thickened, pressing against her eardrums. The distant murmur of traffic, the general thrum of human existence, vanished. It was replaced by a silence so profound it felt like a physical weight, like the inside of an old tomb. Even the wind, which had been tugging at her shoulder-length black hair just moments before, died. The branches of the oak trees stood stark and unmoving against a sky suddenly devoid of stars, shrouded by a blanket of impenetrable cloud that hadn't been there moments ago. Her bright blue eyes, quick to adapt to the dark, scanned the path. Something felt off. Not dangerous yet, just *unnatural*. A faint light, barely there, pulsed at her throat. The Heartstone. She reached up instinctively, her fingers brushing the cool silver chain, then the smooth, thumbnail-sized crimson gem. It gave off a whisper of warmth, a faint inner glow that was little more than a trick of the eye. It usually reserved its reactions for Hel portals, for the raw tearing of reality. But here, now, it seemed to be responding to something else. She walked deeper, the strange, heavy silence making her own breath sound too loud in her ears. The ground underfoot shifted from damp grass to a carpet of leaves, brittle and ancient, that crackled like burning paper. She searched for the standing stones, the boundary markers she’d heard about in hushed tones from Silas, her landlord, who occasionally spoke of such things with a cryptic edge when he’d had a few too many. Then she saw them. Not a circle, but three massive oak trunks, impossibly thick and scarred, growing out of the earth as if they’d been here since the world was young. They formed a rough triangle, enclosing an inner clearing. Their bark was like wrinkled hide, black in the gloom, and from their gnarled branches hung no leaves – only a strange, translucent moss that shimmered with an eerie phosphorescence, shedding just enough light to illuminate the ground below. The ground was the first true shock. Despite the late autumn chill that had numbed her fingers, wildflowers bloomed everywhere, pushing up through the dead leaves. Irises, bluebells, crocuses – all in impossibly vibrant colours, their petals catching the moss-light with an alien luminescence. Their scent was cloying, sickly sweet, like honey gone bad. Rory stepped between two of the mighty oaks. The air chilled even further, a cold that bit through her jacket and sank into her bones. Her breath plumed in visible white puffs. Her left wrist, where a small crescent-shaped scar from a childhood fall resided, tingled with an unpleasant awareness, a sort of premonitory itch. She stood in The Fae Grove, a place whispered about, a place of impossible beauty and undeniable dread. And she was utterly alone. She took another step, then another, moving to the centre of the overgrown clearing. The ground here felt strangely soft, almost spongy beneath her trainers, as if she were walking on something living. She couldn’t shake the sense of an immense, ancient power thrumming just beneath her feet, a silent heartbeat. Her gaze swept from the impossible flowers to the towering oaks, which seemed to lean in, their moss-draped branches like spectral arms. She couldn't see the sky above, only the dense, swirling darkness. The air was still, heavy, yet she felt a subtle shifting around her, as if something invisible was displacing the air. *Snap*. The sound was distinct, sharp, like a twig breaking underfoot. Rory froze. Her hand instinctively went to her pocket, where a small, sturdy utility knife nestled. She didn’t know what she expected to face, but old habits of self-preservation kicked in. "Hello?" she called out, her voice a little louder than she intended, the single word swallowed by the oppressive silence. No echo. Nothing. She waited, listening. Her ears strained, trying to pick up anything beyond the thumping of her own heart. The wildflowers seemed to pulse with their own inner light, their vibrant hues almost painful in the dimness. They shouldn’t be here. Not now. Not like this. Just then, a faint, almost imperceptible whisper brushed past her ear. It wasn't words, not exactly, more like a breath. Cold and intimate. It raised goosebumps on her arms, crawling down her spine. Rory spun. Nothing. Only the leaning trees, the impossible flowers. She was being watched. The certainty slammed into her with the force of a physical blow. Her cool-headedness, usually her greatest asset, was warring with a primal dread that gnawed at her insides. Her mind raced, sifting through every detail, every incongruity. This wasn't natural. This wasn't normal. The Heartstone pulsed again, stronger this time, definitely warm against her skin. It cast a faint reddish glow that seemed to fight against the sickly green moss-light. *Something*. It was reacting to *something* nearby. Not a Hel portal, she thought, but something equally potent, equally… *other*. She tried to move, to circle the clearing, to get a better vantage point, but her feet felt heavy, as if the spongy ground was exerting a subtle pull. The air, already thick, began to weigh down on her lungs. Breathing became a conscious effort. Then she *saw* it. Or thought she did. A flicker, quick as a blink, at the periphery of her vision. A pale form, too tall, too thin, darting behind one of the massive oak trunks. She spun again, but the space behind the tree was empty. Only shadows. "Show yourself," Rory demanded, her voice firm, despite the tremor in her hands. She hated feeling vulnerable, hated the unknown. Better to face it, whatever it was. A rustle, deeper in the grove, beyond the circle of oaks. Not a single snap, but a sustained, slithering sound, like something enormous dragging itself through thick undergrowth. It moved with a slow, deliberate cadence that made her stomach clench. She took a step back, her blue eyes wide, trying to penetrate the gloom. The glow from the Heartstone brightened marginally, making the crimson deeper, more insistent. Then, a sound that made her blood run cold. A laugh. High-pitched, silvery, like bells chiming in a deep well. A child's laugh. But it ended in a dry, rasping gasp, too aged, too hollow to be truly innocent. It echoed from all sides, reverberating off the silent oaks, twisting her sense of direction. Rory felt a prickle of sweat on her forehead despite the bitter cold. This was no prank. This was no animal. This was wrong. Fundamentally, terrifyingly wrong. She looked down at her watch. She’d been in the grove for what felt like an eternity, surely an hour, maybe more. The face glowed: 11:17 PM. She remembered stepping through the fence at 11:05 PM. Twelve minutes. Only twelve minutes? But the cold, the creeping dread, the profound silence, the sense of timelessness… it felt like hours had passed. The grove twisted time, just as Silas had hinted. This place was truly alien. The air around her grew colder still, a biting, raw chill that suggested the presence of death. The sickly-sweet floral scent intensified, becoming almost suffocating. The phosphorescent moss on the oaks began to pulse, not steadily, but erratically, like a troubled heartbeat, casting dancing, distorted shadows that writhed and stretched. The periphery vision trick started again. More forms, fainter this time, like smoke in the dark, weaving through the trees beyond the circle. Sometimes they seemed almost human-shaped, elongated, gangly. Other times, they looked like tangled masses of roots, or branches, or something worse. Too many limbs. Too many eyes. She clutched the utility knife in her pocket, her knuckles white. It was a useless gesture, she knew. If whatever was out there wanted her, a piece of folded metal wasn't going to stop it. Her mind, despite the rising panic, was still trying to process, to find a pattern, an escape. She began to back away slowly, her eyes darting between the trees. The path she came in on, the gap between the monumental oaks, seemed to have shifted. Or perhaps the trees themselves had moved. They looked closer, their gnarled branches reaching down, almost touching the ground. The glow of the moss was now a vibrant, alien green, washing the entire clearing in a spectral light. The flowers, impossibly bright, seemed to lean towards her, their petals unfurling in slow motion, as if watching. A guttural growl vibrated through the earth, directly beneath her feet. It was a low thrum that bypassed her ears and went straight for her internal organs, making her chest ache, her teeth feel loose. The sound was ancient, powerful, and utterly devoid of anything resembling warmth or life. Rory gasped, stumbling back. She had to get out. Now. She turned to run towards where she *thought* the exit was. But the trees were a dense, impenetrable wall. The gap was gone. Or, it had moved. Or, it had never been there at all. Panic, hot and sharp, finally pierced through her cool resolve. The silvery, mocking laugh started again, closer this time, accompanied by that dry, rattling gasp. It was coming from right behind one of the oaks, directly to her left. She pivoted, raising the knife uselessly, her bright blue eyes scanning the darkness. The moss on the tree pulsed with a violent emerald flare. For a split second, she saw it. Not a pale form. Not a shadow. A face. It was vast, ancient, carved into the bark of the oak itself. Its eyes were two gaping, shadowed hollows, but they glowed with the same unnatural green as the moss. Its mouth was a wide, vertical slit, lined with splintered bark that looked like sharpened teeth. And from within that mouth, the hollow, rasping laugh spilled forth, shaking the entire tree. It was the oak. The tree itself was alive, awake, and watching her. The Heartstone on her chest finally flared, a brilliant crimson pulse that bathed the clearing in a brief, fiery glow. It was a warning, a cry of alarm. Then, from the glowing maw of the ancient oak, a voice boomed, deep and resonant, like stones grinding together. It wasn't words, but a sound that scraped against her very soul, a sound of immense age and cold, indifferent power. It was laughter. Rory didn't wait. She bolted. She didn’t know where she was going, only that she had to break free. She plunged into the deeper gloom beyond the oaks, ignoring the rustling sounds, the fleeting shapes, the cold whispers. Her legs pumped, her lungs burned, but she kept running, pushing through invisible resistance, crashing through unseen barriers. She ran until her side poked with stitches, until her vision blurred, until the mocking laughter finally faded behind her, replaced only by the ragged tearing of her own breath. She came to an abrupt halt, collapsing against something hard and cold. She slid down its rough surface, gasping, her body trembling uncontrollably. Her eyes were still wide, darting through the darkness. Slowly, her vision cleared. She was leaning against the iron railings of Richmond Park. Beyond them, a faint hum of distant traffic. The air, though still chilly, was clear and thin, free of the cloying floral scent. Above, through a break in the clouds, pinpoint stars glittered. She fumbled for her phone. 11:20 PM. Only three minutes had passed since she last checked. Twelve minutes inside the Grove had been three minutes outside. The time distortion was real. Her heart hammered against her ribs, but the profound, bone-deep dread slowly began to recede, leaving behind a cold, empty ache. She was out. She was safe. But the image of the laughing tree, its ancient, terrible face, was burned into her mind. And the warmth of the Heartstone, though faded, still lingered, a phantom pulse against her chest. She had gone in seeking an answer, following a whisper. She had found only a deeper mystery, a darker fear, and the chilling certainty that the line between her world and the Fae was terrifyingly thin.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:04:45.613Z" 2/25/2026, 1:04:45 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2233
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count2
2
adverb"truly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count3
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"utterly"
2"truly"
3"slowly"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2233
totalAiIsms52
found
0
word"chill"
count3
1
word"whisper"
count4
2
word"silence"
count4
3
word"profound"
count3
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"stark"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count3
8
word"warmth"
count3
9
word"gloom"
count3
10
word"shimmered"
count1
11
word"chilled"
count1
12
word"sense of"
count3
13
word"spectral"
count2
14
word"sturdy"
count1
15
word"oppressive"
count1
16
word"echo"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count4
18
word"down her spine"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"flicker"
count1
21
word"stomach"
count1
22
word"echoed"
count1
23
word"dancing"
count1
24
word"vibrated"
count1
25
word"resolve"
count1
26
word"scanning"
count1
27
word"maw"
count1
28
word"fleeting"
count1
29
word"chilling"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"whisper"
2"silence"
3"profound"
4"weight"
5"stark"
6"scanned"
7"pulsed"
8"warmth"
9"gloom"
10"shimmered"
11"chilled"
12"sense of"
13"spectral"
14"sturdy"
15"oppressive"
16"echo"
17"pulse"
18"down her spine"
19"raced"
20"flicker"
21"stomach"
22"echoed"
23"dancing"
24"vibrated"
25"resolve"
26"scanning"
27"maw"
28"fleeting"
29"chilling"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences203
matches
0"felt a prickle"
51.37% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount11
narrationSentences203
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences203
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords11
totalWords2235
ratio0.005
matches
0"The Grove"
1"The Grove."
2"unnatural"
3"Snap"
4"Something"
5"something"
6"other"
7"saw"
8"thought"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount2232
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.36
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Londoner1
Cardiff1
Park2
Yu-Fei1
Eva1
Normally1
Rory8
Heartstone5
Hel2
Silas2
Fae2
Grove4
Richmond2
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Park"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Normally"
4"Fae"
5"Grove"
6"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
10.14% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences143
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"quite catch, a flash of something crimson behind her eyes"
1"felt like a physical weight, like the i"
2"glow that seemed to fight against the sickly green moss-light"
3"felt like an eternity, surely an hour,"
4"felt like hours had passed"
5"looked like tangled masses of roots, or b"
6"as if watching"
7"looked like sharpened teeth"
21.03% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.79
wordCount2235
matches
0"Not a circle, but three massive oak trunks, impossibly thick"
1"Not a Hel portal, she thought, but something equally potent, equally…"
2"Not a single snap, but a sustained, slithering sound, like something enormous dragg"
3"not steadily, but erratically, like a troubled heartbeat, casting dancing, dis"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences203
matches(empty)
95.05% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean44.7
std21.58
cv0.483
sampleLengths
064
167
246
338
4102
521
674
773
879
954
1055
1123
1251
1354
141
1541
1623
1745
1843
1948
2046
2145
2248
2327
2440
2527
2654
2727
2874
2950
3050
3152
3284
3349
3410
3545
3629
3738
382
3961
4013
4128
4243
435
4481
4536
4643
4731
4827
4968
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences203
matches
0"was replaced"
1"was gone"
2"was burned"
1.59% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount10
totalVerbs336
matches
0"was cloying"
1"were walking"
2"was displacing"
3"was being"
4"was warring"
5"was reacting"
6"was exerting"
7"was still trying"
8"was coming"
9"was going"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences203
ratio0.01
matches
0"Their bark was like wrinkled hide, black in the gloom, and from their gnarled branches hung no leaves – only a strange, translucent moss that shimmered with an eerie phosphorescence, shedding just enough light to illuminate the ground below."
1"Irises, bluebells, crocuses – all in impossibly vibrant colours, their petals catching the moss-light with an alien luminescence."
57.10% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2243
adjectiveStacks5
stackExamples
0"smooth, thumbnail-sized crimson"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
2"was distinct, sharp, like"
3"sickly-sweet floral scent"
4"profound, bone-deep dread"
adverbCount116
adverbRatio0.05171645118145341
lyAdverbCount52
lyAdverbRatio0.0231832367365136
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences203
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences203
mean11.01
std7.17
cv0.651
sampleLengths
011
125
211
317
414
517
612
72
81
914
105
112
1217
1317
1412
1523
1611
174
1815
198
2012
2121
2216
2330
2413
253
265
279
282
2917
3021
3114
3211
3317
3420
3536
364
3727
389
3939
407
4119
4218
4310
448
4517
467
4723
4818
495
36.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.2413793103448276
totalSentences203
uniqueOpeners49
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount15
totalSentences183
matches
0"Normally, Rory relied on logic,"
1"Even the wind, which had"
2"Then she saw them."
3"Just then, a faint, almost"
4"Only the leaning trees, the"
5"Then she *saw* it."
6"Then, a sound that made"
7"Fundamentally, terrifyingly wrong."
8"Only twelve minutes?"
9"Sometimes they seemed almost human-shaped,"
10"Too many limbs."
11"Too many eyes."
12"Then, from the glowing maw"
13"Slowly, her vision cleared."
14"Only three minutes had passed"
ratio0.082
53.88% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount76
totalSentences183
matches
0"She pulled her jacket tighter,"
1"She had no real reason"
2"It wasn't an instruction from"
3"She was here now, following"
4"She slipped through the gap,"
5"It was replaced by a"
6"Her bright blue eyes, quick"
7"She reached up instinctively, her"
8"It gave off a whisper"
9"It usually reserved its reactions"
10"She walked deeper, the strange,"
11"She searched for the standing"
12"They formed a rough triangle,"
13"Their bark was like wrinkled"
14"Their scent was cloying, sickly"
15"Her breath plumed in visible"
16"Her left wrist, where a"
17"She stood in The Fae"
18"She took another step, then"
19"She couldn’t shake the sense"
ratio0.415
91.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount135
totalSentences183
matches
0"The last bus had grumbled"
1"Aurora considered herself a Londoner"
2"She pulled her jacket tighter,"
3"Richmond Park stretched out before"
4"She had no real reason"
5"A strange, insistent pull had"
6"It wasn't an instruction from"
7"A whisper she couldn't quite"
8"*The Grove*, it had urged."
9"She was here now, following"
10"The park gates were locked,"
11"A faint shimmer, like heat"
12"That was her target."
13"She slipped through the gap,"
14"The air immediately thickened, pressing"
15"The distant murmur of traffic,"
16"It was replaced by a"
17"The branches of the oak"
18"Her bright blue eyes, quick"
19"Something felt off."
ratio0.738
81.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences183
matches
0"If whatever was out there"
1"Or, it had moved."
2"Or, it had never been"
ratio0.016
27.03% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences111
technicalSentenceCount18
matches
0"Richmond Park stretched out before her, a vast expanse of darkness that swallowed the distant city glow."
1"She was here now, following an instinct that felt ancient and irreversible."
2"Even the wind, which had been tugging at her shoulder-length black hair just moments before, died."
3"The branches of the oak trees stood stark and unmoving against a sky suddenly devoid of stars, shrouded by a blanket of impenetrable cloud that hadn't been ther…"
4"Not a circle, but three massive oak trunks, impossibly thick and scarred, growing out of the earth as if they’d been here since the world was young."
5"Their bark was like wrinkled hide, black in the gloom, and from their gnarled branches hung no leaves – only a strange, translucent moss that shimmered with an …"
6"The ground here felt strangely soft, almost spongy beneath her trainers, as if she were walking on something living."
7"Her gaze swept from the impossible flowers to the towering oaks, which seemed to lean in, their moss-draped branches like spectral arms."
8"The air was still, heavy, yet she felt a subtle shifting around her, as if something invisible was displacing the air."
9"Her cool-headedness, usually her greatest asset, was warring with a primal dread that gnawed at her insides."
10"It cast a faint reddish glow that seemed to fight against the sickly green moss-light."
11"She tried to move, to circle the clearing, to get a better vantage point, but her feet felt heavy, as if the spongy ground was exerting a subtle pull."
12"The flowers, impossibly bright, seemed to lean towards her, their petals unfurling in slow motion, as if watching."
13"It was a low thrum that bypassed her ears and went straight for her internal organs, making her chest ache, her teeth feel loose."
14"Its mouth was a wide, vertical slit, lined with splintered bark that looked like sharpened teeth."
15"The Heartstone on her chest finally flared, a brilliant crimson pulse that bathed the clearing in a brief, fiery glow."
16"It wasn't words, but a sound that scraped against her very soul, a sound of immense age and cold, indifferent power."
17"She slid down its rough surface, gasping, her body trembling uncontrollably."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she called out (call out)"
1"Rory demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
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