Run: 2026-02-25-01KJ95DJ3M7FE27B8R02HT13AV

Run Details

Duration:
26.0s
Cost:
$0.010710
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The damp autumn air of Richmond Park usually carried the scent of wet bracken and the distant, metallic tang of London’s exhaust. But as Aurora Carter pushed through a dense thicket of hawthorn, the world went abruptly, unnervingly sweet. The transition was so sharp it made her teeth ache. One step she was navigating the familiar, muddy outskirts near the Isabella Plantation; the next, she was stumbling into a clearing where the air tasted of crushed jasmine and overripe peaches. Rory stopped, her boots sinking into grass that felt far too lush for a London October. She adjusted the strap of the insulated delivery bag slung over her shoulder. Yu-Fei would have a fit if the Golden Empress’s signature Peking duck went cold, but the delivery instructions had been specific to the point of obsession: *The clearing marked by the ancient oaks. Do not leave the bag at the gate. Bring it to the center. Do not look back.* In the pale, sickly light of a moon she couldn't quite see through the canopy, the Fae Grove stretched out before her. It shouldn't have been there. She knew the geography of this park better than her own flat above Silas' bar, yet this pocket of space defied the maps. Surrounding the clearing were the standing stones—halfway between petrified wood and weathered granite. They were enormous, gnarled trunks of oak that had seemingly turned to stone while twisting in silent agony. They didn't just mark the boundary; they felt like sentinels guarding a door that had been left ajar. Rory reached up, her fingers grazing the Heartstone Pendant tucked beneath her collar. The thumbnail-sized crimson gem was usually cold against her skin, a quiet weight she’d grown used to since it arrived in that anonymous parcel. Tonight, it was different. It didn't just sit; it thrummed. A faint, rhythmic heat radiated from the silver chain, pulsing against her collarbone like a secondary heart. It grew warmer as she moved deeper into the clearing. "Hello?" she called out. Her voice, usually steady and sharp, sounded muffled, as if the air around her were made of heavy velvet. No one answered. There were no owls, no rustle of deer in the underbrush, no hum of the city she knew was only a mile away. The silence was absolute, a physical pressure against her eardrums. She looked down at the wildflowers carpeted beneath her feet. They were vivid, terrifyingly bright colors—electric blues, bruised purples, and amaranth reds—blooming with a vitality that felt predatory. They shouldn't have been in season. As she walked, they didn't crush under her boots; they bent away, then sprang back up, untouched. Rory’s thumb traced the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a nervous habit she’d never quite managed to kill. Her mind, trained by the cold logic of the pre-law studies she’d fled in Cardiff, tried to catalog the wrongness. The temperature had risen at least ten degrees. The light was coming from the flora itself, a faint phosphoric glow that cast long, distorted shadows away from her, as if she were being lit by a fire that gave off no heat. The Heartstone gave a sudden, sharp spike of heat. It wasn't just warm now; it was nearly scalding. She stopped in the exact center of the Grove. The standing stones seemed taller from this vantage point, leaning inward as if eavesdropping on her thoughts. She knelt to place the Golden Empress bag on a flat, mossy rock that looked suspiciously like an altar. "I'm leaving the order here," she said, her blue eyes scanning the perimeter. "It's paid for. I'm going now." She turned to leave, but the path she’d taken was gone. Where there had been a gap between two of the oak stones, there was now a solid wall of brambles, thick with thorns the size of needles. Rory felt a prickle of sweat at the nape of her neck. She was a delivery driver, a girl who had survived an abusive ex and the cutthroat streets of London; she didn't believe in fairy tales. But she did believe in her own instincts, and right now, they were screaming that the geometry of the Grove had shifted. Something moved at the edge of her vision. A flicker of white, light as a moth. When she turned her head, it was gone. Then it appeared on the other side—a tall, spindly shape that didn't so much walk as unfold itself from behind a standing stone. Rory forced herself to breathe. *Cool-headed,* her father used to say. *Think your way out, Aurora.* She took a step toward what she thought was the north, toward the sound of a distant, low vibration she hoped was the road. But the vibration wasn't rhythmic; it was melodic. It was a hum, a three-note drone that seemed to vibrate in her marrow. "Is someone there?" she asked. The humming stopped. A few yards away, a wildflower—a deep, veined orchid—suddenly wilted, its petals turning to grey ash in seconds. Another followed, then another, a line of decay tracing a path toward her. It was as if something invisible were walking across the grass, and its very footprint was poison. The Heartstone was now a coal against her chest. Rory reached for it, pulling the pendant out from under her shirt. The deep crimson gem was glowing fiercely, a frantic, red strobe light that illuminated the clearing in flashes. In the brief pulses of red, she saw them. They weren't people. They didn't have faces, not really—just smooth, pale surfaces where features should be, like wet clay that hadn't been finished. There were dozens of them, standing perfectly still between the oak stones. They were tall, their limbs long and too many-jointed, dressed in rags that looked like woven cobwebs. Each time the pendant flashed, they were a foot closer. They weren't moving when she looked at them. They only moved in the darkness between the pulses of the stone. Rory didn't scream. Screaming was for people who had hope of being heard. Instead, she backed away, her mind racing. The pendant reacted to Hel portals. If the stone was this hot, the Grove wasn't just a clearing; it was a thinning of the skin between worlds. The "delivery" hadn't been an order; it had been bait. She glanced at her wrist. The crescent scar was throbbing, a dull ache that mirrored the pendant’s pulse. A sound finally broke the silence—a wet, tearing noise, like someone pulling a heavy boot out of thick mud. It came from behind the altar stone. Rory spun around. The delivery bag had been opened. Not unzipped, but shredded. The Peking duck was gone, replaced by a pile of something that looked like polished teeth. "You're late," a voice whispered. It didn't come from any of the pale figures. It came from the wind, from the stones, from the very grass beneath her. It was a voice that sounded like grinding glass. Rory’s hand went to the Heartstone, clutching it. The heat was blistering now, but she didn't let go. She felt the power of the artifact—a strange, ancient weight that felt like an anchor in a storm. If this was a portal, she needed a way to close the distance back to the world that made sense. "I don't have anything else for you," Rory said, her voice iron-flat despite the trembling in her knees. The pale figures moved again in the blink of an eye. They were only ten feet away now. One of them raised a hand—a long, spindly thing with too many fingers—and pointed at her chest. At the pendant. The heat of the Heartstone suddenly changed. It went from a burn to a pull. It was tugging her, not toward the brambles, but toward one of the standing stones. This stone didn't look like the others. It was darker, its surface etched with runes that seemed to bleed a slow, silver sap. Rory didn't hesitate. Intelligence tucked away the fear and replaced it with a desperate, calculated gamble. She ran. The grass beneath her feet began to hiss. The jasmine scent turned to the stench of stagnant water and old copper. The pale things didn't run; they simply *were* further along their path each time she blinked. They were shimmering in and out of existence, closing the circle. She reached the dark stone just as the first cold, porcelain-like finger brushed the back of her jacket. The touch didn't feel like skin; it felt like a winter frost that bit through the fabric and into her spine. She slammed her hand, Heartstone and all, against the silver-sap runes of the oak stone. The world didn't explode. It imploded. The sweetness, the light, the pale figures—all of it was sucked into a single, silent point of crimson light. Rory felt a sensation of falling upward, the wind ripped from her lungs by a vacuum. The scent of jasmine was replaced by the cold, biting smell of wet mud and diesel. She hit the ground hard, the air leaving her chest in a painful grunt. For a long time, she lay there, her face pressed into the dirt. Slowly, the world began to fill with noise. The distant roar of an airplane overhead. The hum of a distant siren. The rustle of actual, mundane leaves in a standard London breeze. Rory sat up, coughing. She was back in Richmond Park, just outside the Isabella Plantation. The hawthorn thicket was behind her, looking entirely ordinary. The moon was visible now, a pale, natural white behind the clouds. She looked at her hand. The Heartstone Pendant was dark again, its crimson depths dull and quiet. But her palm was red, blistered in the shape of the silver runes she had touched. She checked her watch. She had left the Golden Empress at 7:00 PM. The walk to the Grove should have taken twenty minutes. The watch face stared back at her. The digital numbers were flickering wildly, but they finally settled. It was 3:14 AM. Rory stood up, her legs shaking, and brushed the dirt from her jeans. She looked back at the thicket. No Jasmin. No glowing flowers. Only the dark, silent woods of a city park at night. She reached into her pocket and found her phone. Twenty-four missed calls from Yu-Fei. Three from Silas. She didn't call them back. Not yet. She just stood there in the cold, her fingers trailing over the crescent scar on her wrist, wondering if the things in the Grove were still eating the teeth she’d left behind, or if they were still standing there, waiting for the red light to flash again. Rory Carter turned and began the long walk out of the park, her pace quick, her head down, and for the first time in her life, she didn't look back.
created_at"2026-02-25T01:08:06.906Z" 2/25/2026, 1:08:06 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1827
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"really"
3"perfectly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1827
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"navigating"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"rhythmic"
count2
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"electric"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"tracing"
count1
12
word"racing"
count1
13
word"pulse"
count1
14
word"etched"
count1
15
word"calculated"
count1
16
word"porcelain"
count1
17
word"standard"
count1
18
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"navigating"
1"familiar"
2"sentinels"
3"weight"
4"rhythmic"
5"velvet"
6"silence"
7"electric"
8"traced"
9"scanning"
10"flicker"
11"tracing"
12"racing"
13"pulse"
14"etched"
15"calculated"
16"porcelain"
17"standard"
18"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blink of an eye"
count1
highlights
0"in the blink of an eye"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences150
matches
0"felt a prickle"
76.19% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences150
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"tried to"
2"seemed to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences151
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords31
totalWords1815
ratio0.017
matches
0"The clearing marked by the ancient oaks. Do not leave the bag at the gate. Bring it to the center. Do not look back."
1"Cool-headed,"
2"Think your way out, Aurora."
3"were"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1780
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.84
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
London4
Aurora2
Carter2
Isabella2
Plantation2
October1
Golden3
Empress3
Peking2
Fae1
Grove6
Surrounding1
Heartstone7
Pendant2
Cardiff1
Hel1
Jasmin1
Yu-Fei2
Silas1
Rory15
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Empress"
3"Heartstone"
4"Pendant"
5"Jasmin"
6"Silas"
7"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Isabella"
4"Plantation"
5"Peking"
6"Fae"
7"Grove"
8"Cardiff"
9"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"quite see through the canopy, the Fae Grove stretched out before her"
1"f oak that had seemingly turned to stone whi"
2"felt like sentinels guarding a door tha"
3"as if eavesdropping on her thoughts"
4"seemed taller from this vantage point, leaning inward as if eavesdropping on her thoughts"
5"drone that seemed to vibrate in her marrow"
6"It was as if something invisible were walking across the grass, and its very footprint was poison"
7"looked like woven cobwebs"
8"looked like polished teeth"
9"sounded like grinding glass"
10"felt like an anchor in a storm"
11"runes that seemed to bleed a slow, silver sap"
12"felt like a winter frost that bit throu"
89.81% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.102
wordCount1815
matches
0"Not unzipped, but shredded"
1"not toward the brambles, but toward one of the standing stones"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences151
matches
0"screaming that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean42.21
std24.01
cv0.569
sampleLengths
080
179
299
374
459
551
682
718
845
919
1097
1147
1216
1346
145
153
1648
1748
1862
1920
2057
2118
2255
235
2432
2556
2618
2738
2853
2918
3048
3139
3215
3357
3414
3545
3636
3733
3823
3921
4052
4154
4230
79.53% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount11
totalSentences150
matches
0"been left"
1"were made"
2"being lit"
3"was gone"
4"was gone"
5"been finished"
6"being heard"
7"been opened"
8"was gone"
9"was sucked"
10"was replaced"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount14
totalVerbs283
matches
0"was navigating"
1"was stumbling"
2"was coming"
3"was nearly scalding"
4"were screaming"
5"were walking"
6"was glowing"
7"was throbbing"
8"was blistering"
9"was tugging"
10"were shimmering"
11"were flickering"
12"were still eating"
13"were still standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount11
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences151
ratio0.132
matches
0"One step she was navigating the familiar, muddy outskirts near the Isabella Plantation; the next, she was stumbling into a clearing where the air tasted of crushed jasmine and overripe peaches."
1"Surrounding the clearing were the standing stones—halfway between petrified wood and weathered granite."
2"They didn't just mark the boundary; they felt like sentinels guarding a door that had been left ajar."
3"It didn't just sit; it thrummed."
4"They were vivid, terrifyingly bright colors—electric blues, bruised purples, and amaranth reds—blooming with a vitality that felt predatory."
5"As she walked, they didn't crush under her boots; they bent away, then sprang back up, untouched."
6"It wasn't just warm now; it was nearly scalding."
7"She was a delivery driver, a girl who had survived an abusive ex and the cutthroat streets of London; she didn't believe in fairy tales."
8"Then it appeared on the other side—a tall, spindly shape that didn't so much walk as unfold itself from behind a standing stone."
9"But the vibration wasn't rhythmic; it was melodic."
10"A few yards away, a wildflower—a deep, veined orchid—suddenly wilted, its petals turning to grey ash in seconds."
11"They didn't have faces, not really—just smooth, pale surfaces where features should be, like wet clay that hadn't been finished."
12"If the stone was this hot, the Grove wasn't just a clearing; it was a thinning of the skin between worlds."
13"The \"delivery\" hadn't been an order; it had been bait."
14"A sound finally broke the silence—a wet, tearing noise, like someone pulling a heavy boot out of thick mud."
15"She felt the power of the artifact—a strange, ancient weight that felt like an anchor in a storm."
16"One of them raised a hand—a long, spindly thing with too many fingers—and pointed at her chest."
17"The pale things didn't run; they simply *were* further along their path each time she blinked."
18"The touch didn't feel like skin; it felt like a winter frost that bit through the fabric and into her spine."
19"The sweetness, the light, the pale figures—all of it was sucked into a single, silent point of crimson light."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount213
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.03755868544600939
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.018779342723004695
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences151
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences151
mean12.02
std7.42
cv0.617
sampleLengths
022
117
210
331
416
513
633
78
85
94
1022
115
1223
1313
1418
1518
1613
1724
184
196
2017
2110
224
2319
243
2523
2610
2710
2818
296
3017
3120
3220
338
3434
359
369
379
3817
3919
4013
416
4211
4327
4412
4525
4622
478
488
498
38.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2781456953642384
totalSentences151
uniqueOpeners42
91.95% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences145
matches
0"Then it appeared on the"
1"Instead, she backed away, her"
2"Slowly, the world began to"
3"Only the dark, silent woods"
ratio0.028
82.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences145
matches
0"She adjusted the strap of"
1"It shouldn't have been there."
2"She knew the geography of"
3"They were enormous, gnarled trunks"
4"They didn't just mark the"
5"It didn't just sit; it"
6"It grew warmer as she"
7"she called out"
8"Her voice, usually steady and"
9"She looked down at the"
10"They were vivid, terrifyingly bright"
11"They shouldn't have been in"
12"Her mind, trained by the"
13"It wasn't just warm now;"
14"She stopped in the exact"
15"She knelt to place the"
16"she said, her blue eyes"
17"She turned to leave, but"
18"She was a delivery driver,"
19"She took a step toward"
ratio0.345
73.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences145
matches
0"The damp autumn air of"
1"The transition was so sharp"
2"Rory stopped, her boots sinking"
3"She adjusted the strap of"
4"Yu-Fei would have a fit"
5"It shouldn't have been there."
6"She knew the geography of"
7"They were enormous, gnarled trunks"
8"They didn't just mark the"
9"Rory reached up, her fingers"
10"The thumbnail-sized crimson gem was"
11"Tonight, it was different."
12"It didn't just sit; it"
13"A faint, rhythmic heat radiated"
14"It grew warmer as she"
15"she called out"
16"Her voice, usually steady and"
17"The silence was absolute, a"
18"She looked down at the"
19"They were vivid, terrifyingly bright"
ratio0.772
68.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences145
matches
0"If the stone was this"
1"If this was a portal,"
ratio0.014
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"They were enormous, gnarled trunks of oak that had seemingly turned to stone while twisting in silent agony."
1"Her voice, usually steady and sharp, sounded muffled, as if the air around her were made of heavy velvet."
2"They were vivid, terrifyingly bright colors—electric blues, bruised purples, and amaranth reds—blooming with a vitality that felt predatory."
3"The light was coming from the flora itself, a faint phosphoric glow that cast long, distorted shadows away from her, as if she were being lit by a fire that gav…"
4"The standing stones seemed taller from this vantage point, leaning inward as if eavesdropping on her thoughts."
5"It was as if something invisible were walking across the grass, and its very footprint was poison."
6"The deep crimson gem was glowing fiercely, a frantic, red strobe light that illuminated the clearing in flashes."
7"They were tall, their limbs long and too many-jointed, dressed in rags that looked like woven cobwebs."
8"The crescent scar was throbbing, a dull ache that mirrored the pendant’s pulse."
9"She just stood there in the cold, her fingers trailing over the crescent scar on her wrist, wondering if the things in the Grove were still eating the teeth she…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, her blue eyes scanning the perimeter"
1"Rory said, her voice iron-flat despite the trembling in her knees"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"a voice whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
73.3199%