Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCRZ78R4KHHVQX043TY40AR

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
24.7s
Cost:
$0.000273
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles that reflected the flickering green neon of the Raven’s Nest sign. Rain drummed against her leather jacket, each drop a tiny drumbeat urging her forward. Tommy Herrera’s silhouette vanished around a corner, swallowed by the labyrinthine alleys of Soho. She’d seen him slip inside, but the narrow passageway offered no clear path—just shadows and the distant hum of a subway train. “Stay sharp,” she muttered, gripping her flashlight. The beam cut through the gloom, catching glints of rust on metal doors and the flicker of a single bulb overhead. A scent of damp earth and something metallic lingered, sharp enough to make her nose twitch. She’d learned to trust her instincts; they’d kept her alive during the case that took DS Morris. A sudden creak echoed from deeper in the alley. Harlow froze, her breath shallow. The sound wasn’t wood settling—it was deliberate, like a footstep. She exhaled slowly, then stepped forward, her hand brushing the worn leather watch on her wrist. Its surface was etched with faint symbols, a relic from a case she’d never solved. “Tommy?” A voice, low and cautious, came from the darkness. Not a shout, but a warning. She pivoted, flashlight sweeping the wall beside her. Nothing. Just the echo of her own pulse. Then, a flicker of movement—a figure darting between two stacked crates. Harlow lunged, her boots skidding on wet cobblestones. The figure vanished into a gap between buildings, leaving a trail of damp footprints that led downward. The air grew colder as she descended the rusted fire escape, each rung groaning under her weight. Below, the alley opened into a cavernous space lit by the sickly green glow of the Veil Market’s sign. The underground market pulsed with life—vendors hawking vials of liquid shadow, stalls draped in black silk, and the low murmur of transactions conducted in hushed tones. A woman with a scarred forearm sold trinkets that glowed faintly, their surfaces etched with runes. “Harlow,” the scarred vendor said, her voice like gravel. “You’re late.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. “Where’s Tommy?” The vendor tilted her head, studying the detective’s rain-soaked coat. “He’s not here. But you’ll need to pass through.” She gestured to a narrow passageway lined with mirrors that reflected nothing. “The market doesn’t let strangers leave easily.” Harlow’s fingers curled into fists. She’d heard whispers about the Veil Market—how it traded in things that shouldn’t exist, how it was a haven for those who operated in the cracks of the law. But this place felt different. The air thrummed with a strange energy, like the hum of a machine just on the verge of breaking. A shadow moved at the edge of her vision. Harlow spun, flashlight beam slicing through the gloom. A man stood at the far end of the passage, his face half-hidden by a hood. His eyes, however, were visible—pale, almost white, and unnervingly still. “Tommy?” she called again, her voice steady despite the chill crawling up her spine. The man didn’t answer. Instead, he raised a hand, and the mirrors around them rippled like water. Harlow’s breath hitched. The reflections showed not the passage, but a different scene: a rooftop, rain pouring down, and a figure in a black coat sprinting across the tiles. “What the hell…” she whispered. The man’s hood fell away, revealing a face she recognized—too well. DS Morris’s face. But the man wasn’t dead. His chest rose and fell, his lips moving in a silent scream. Harlow’s flashlight slipped from her grip, clattering to the floor. The mirrors shattered, their shards scattering like teeth. The man’s body dissolved into smoke, leaving only the scent of ozone and something metallic. A voice echoed from the shadows. “You shouldn’t have come here.” Harlow turned, her heart hammering. The scarred vendor stood there, her expression unreadable. In her hand, a dagger glinted, its blade etched with the same symbols as Harlow’s watch. “Who are you?” she demanded, stepping forward. The vendor’s smile was thin. “Someone who knows what’s waiting for you below.” She gestured to the market’s depths, where the glow of lanterns revealed more stalls—each one more sinister than the last. “The Veil isn’t just a market. It’s a gateway. And you’ve just crossed the threshold.” Harlow’s pulse roared in her ears. The air thickened, pressing against her skin like a living thing. Somewhere in the distance, a bell tolled, deep and resonant, as if the city itself were mourning. She had a choice: turn back, or descend into the unknown. The watch on her wrist pulsed once, a silent command. Her boots moved before her mind could protest.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she called again [again]"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
93.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount780
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount780
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"gloom"
count2
1
word"flicker"
count2
2
word"echoed"
count2
3
word"etched"
count3
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count2
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
11
word"unreadable"
count1
12
word"depths"
count1
13
word"sinister"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"flicker"
2"echoed"
3"etched"
4"echo"
5"pulse"
6"weight"
7"pulsed"
8"silk"
9"chill"
10"shattered"
11"unreadable"
12"depths"
13"sinister"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences63
matches(empty)
97.51% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences63
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences68
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords772
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.86% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount713
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow11
Quinn1
Raven1
Nest1
Herrera1
Soho1
Morris2
Veil2
Market2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
places
0"Soho"
1"Market"
globalScore0.729
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords2.591
wordCount772
matches
0"Not a shout, but a warning"
1"not the passage, but a different scene: a rooftop, rain pouring down"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean33.57
std21.54
cv0.642
sampleLengths
068
161
255
316
452
578
611
75
838
958
1043
1114
1246
135
1431
1533
1611
1729
187
1948
2034
2121
228
99.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences63
matches
0"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs123
matches
0"were mourning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences68
ratio0.132
matches
0"She’d seen him slip inside, but the narrow passageway offered no clear path—just shadows and the distant hum of a subway train."
1"She’d learned to trust her instincts; they’d kept her alive during the case that took DS Morris."
2"The sound wasn’t wood settling—it was deliberate, like a footstep."
3"Then, a flicker of movement—a figure darting between two stacked crates."
4"The underground market pulsed with life—vendors hawking vials of liquid shadow, stalls draped in black silk, and the low murmur of transactions conducted in hushed tones."
5"She’d heard whispers about the Veil Market—how it traded in things that shouldn’t exist, how it was a haven for those who operated in the cracks of the law."
6"His eyes, however, were visible—pale, almost white, and unnervingly still."
7"The man’s hood fell away, revealing a face she recognized—too well."
8"“Someone who knows what’s waiting for you below.” She gestured to the market’s depths, where the glow of lanterns revealed more stalls—each one more sinister than the last."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount723
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03319502074688797
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006915629322268326
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences68
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences68
mean11.35
std6.53
cv0.576
sampleLengths
018
114
214
322
47
521
616
717
89
95
1010
1116
1215
1310
146
158
161
177
1811
198
2017
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2219
2326
2416
259
262
273
282
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3021
317
325
3329
345
3519
369
378
3816
3910
4014
414
4213
433
4426
455
4611
473
485
4912
63.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.39705882352941174
totalSentences68
uniqueOpeners27
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences61
matches
0"Just the echo of her"
1"Then, a flicker of movement—a"
2"Instead, he raised a hand,"
3"Somewhere in the distance, a"
ratio0.066
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences61
matches
0"She’d seen him slip inside,"
1"she muttered, gripping her flashlight"
2"She’d learned to trust her"
3"She exhaled slowly, then stepped"
4"Its surface was etched with"
5"She pivoted, flashlight sweeping the"
6"She gestured to a narrow"
7"She’d heard whispers about the"
8"His eyes, however, were visible—pale,"
9"she called again, her voice"
10"His chest rose and fell,"
11"she demanded, stepping forward"
12"She gestured to the market’s"
13"She had a choice: turn"
14"Her boots moved before her"
ratio0.246
33.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences61
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed"
1"Rain drummed against her leather"
2"Tommy Herrera’s silhouette vanished around"
3"She’d seen him slip inside,"
4"she muttered, gripping her flashlight"
5"The beam cut through the"
6"A scent of damp earth"
7"She’d learned to trust her"
8"A sudden creak echoed from"
9"Harlow froze, her breath shallow."
10"The sound wasn’t wood settling—it"
11"She exhaled slowly, then stepped"
12"Its surface was etched with"
13"A voice, low and cautious,"
14"She pivoted, flashlight sweeping the"
15"Harlow lunged, her boots skidding"
16"The figure vanished into a"
17"The air grew colder as"
18"The underground market pulsed with"
19"A woman with a scarred"
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
75.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles that reflected the flickering green neon of the Raven’s Nest sign."
1"She’d learned to trust her instincts; they’d kept her alive during the case that took DS Morris."
2"The figure vanished into a gap between buildings, leaving a trail of damp footprints that led downward."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she called again, her voice steady despite the chill crawling up her spine"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.462
74.9088%