Run: 2026-02-26-01KJCS19TQZR34974S5F92JCKC

Run Details

Model:
LFM2 24B
Duration:
32.4s
Cost:
$0.000323
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles that reflected the fractured neon glow of Soho’s night. Rain drummed against her leather jacket, each drop a cold reminder of the case she couldn’t close—three years since DS Morris vanished, his disappearance tangled in threads of the supernatural. She didn’t dare think about that now; she focused on the figure ahead, hood pulled low, stride purposeful despite the downpour. The suspect veered into an alley choked with shadows. Harlow’s breath hitched. She’d seen that turn before—twelve hours earlier, a witness described a man slipping into “the Veil Market” after hearing whispers about a deal gone wrong. The place existed only during full moons, a black market beneath Camden’s Tube station, trading in forbidden relics and secrets. Tonight, the air smelled of damp earth and something metallic, like blood left too long in the rain. “Stop,” she barked, her voice cutting through the storm. The man froze. His gloved hand hovered near his belt, fingers twitching. Harlow recognized the scar on his forearm—a jagged line from a knife fight years ago. Not a man who backed down. “You’re coming with me,” she said, stepping closer. The suspect’s eyes flicked up, pupils dilated, reflecting the neon like wet stone. His breath came quick, shallow. “You know what happens if you don’t.” A flicker of movement. The man turned, vanishing into a narrow passage between two crumbling brick walls. Harlow followed, her flashlight beam slicing through the dark. The passage reeked of mildew and incense, the walls lined with rusted signs in languages she couldn’t name. Somewhere, water dripped in a rhythm that matched her heartbeat. Then the ground gave way. A trapdoor creaked open beneath her feet. Harlow plunged into darkness, landing hard on a wooden platform. The impact knocked the wind from her lungs. Above, the suspect stood, silhouetted against a flickering bulb overhead. His face was half-hidden by the hood, but his posture screamed readiness—shoulders squared, hands loose but alert. “You shouldn’t have come here,” he muttered, voice low. “Neither should you,” she shot back, drawing her gun. The metal felt cold against her palm, familiar. “Hand over the package. Now.” He laughed, a sound like gravel shifting. “You think this is about packages?” His gaze swept the market—a labyrinth of stalls piled with oddities. A woman in a crimson cloak sold vials of liquid shadow. A man in a tuxedo haggled over a skull encased in glass. The air thrummed with unspoken deals. Harlow’s eyes locked onto a figure near the back, hunched over a table littered with bones and coins. The suspect’s gaze followed hers. A signal. “You’re not the only one with connections,” she said, stepping forward. The suspect didn’t move. “Who’s the buyer?” The man in red turned, revealing a face lined with age and secrets. His smile was a blade. “Detective. How quaint. You’ve always been too curious.” Harlow’s finger tightened on the trigger. The market pulsed around them, alive with whispers. She’d come too far to let him slip away now. But the air felt thick, charged—like the moment before lightning splits the sky. The suspect took a step toward her, voice a purr. “You want answers? Ask the one who’s been waiting in the dark.” Above them, the trapdoor groaned. A distant shout echoed—someone else was closing in. Harlow’s mind raced. The Veil Market wasn’t just a place; it was a labyrinth designed to trap the unwary. She could feel the weight of unseen eyes, the pull of forces beyond comprehension. “Hand over the package,” she repeated, louder. The man in red tilted his head. “You’ll have to go through me first.” A clatter. The trapdoor shuddered. Harlow’s heart pounded. The suspect lunged, not at her, but toward the exit. A distraction. “Run!” she screamed, firing into the ceiling. Sparks flew. The market erupted into chaos—stalls overturned, shadows writhing. The suspect vanished into a side passage, leaving Harlow alone in the storm of her own panic. She sprinted after him, boots slipping on wet stone. The passage twisted, leading deeper into the earth. Her flashlight died. Darkness swallowed her whole. Then—a voice, close behind. “You shouldn’t have followed.” The suspect grabbed her arm, grip iron. His breath was warm, tainted with something sweet and rotten. “This isn’t your fight.” “No,” she growled, twisting free. “But it’s mine.” A flash of movement. The suspect ducked under a low beam, vanishing into a tunnel lined with glowing glyphs. Harlow followed, her pulse roaring. The air grew colder, the walls pulsing faintly, as if alive. “Where are you taking me?” she demanded. “To the heart of the market,” he said, turning. His eyes glowed now, twin embers in the gloom. “Where secrets die.” The tunnel opened into a cavernous chamber. At its center stood a pedestal, upon which rested a mirror framed in twisted iron. The surface rippled like water. The suspect stepped closer, his reflection warping. “Look,” he whispered. Harlow’s breath caught. The mirror showed not her face, but a memory—DS Morris, standing in this same chamber, his eyes wide with terror as shadows coiled around him. The memory dissolved. “You knew,” she breathed. The suspect smiled. “I always do.” Behind her, the tunnel collapsed. Dust rained down. She spun, gun raised, but the chamber was empty. Only the mirror remained, its surface now clear. And in it, a figure stood behind her. Harlow spun, but the space was vacant. Her hand trembled. The mirror’s surface rippled again, and this time, she saw the suspect’s face—his scar visible, his eyes hungry. “You’re not the first,” he said softly. “But you might be the last.” The chamber shook. The mirror cracked. And in the chaos, Harlow lunged—not at the suspect, but at the glass itself. It shattered with a sound like a scream. Shards rained down. The chamber collapsed. She fell, gasping, into the rain-soaked streets above. The city blurred around her. Somewhere, a siren wailed. But the mirror’s fragments still glowed faintly in her hand. And the suspect’s voice echoed in her skull: *You’ll find me again.* The chase wasn’t over. Not by a long shot.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
95.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1030
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1030
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"reminder"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"unspoken"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count2
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"roaring"
count1
14
word"gloom"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"reminder"
2"flicked"
3"flicker"
4"familiar"
5"unspoken"
6"pulsed"
7"charged"
8"echoed"
9"raced"
10"could feel"
11"weight"
12"pulse"
13"roaring"
14"gloom"
15"trembled"
16"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"e with terror"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords4
totalWords1019
ratio0.004
matches
0"You’ll find me again."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.31% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount901
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.55
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow14
Quinn1
Soho1
Morris2
Camden1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Sparks1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Camden"
4"Market"
5"Sparks"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.723
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.944
wordCount1019
matches
0"not at her, but toward the exit"
1"not her face, but a memory"
2"not at the suspect, but at the glass itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences122
matches
0"seen that turn"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean23.7
std17.59
cv0.742
sampleLengths
067
175
242
333
454
55
652
79
822
953
1025
1118
1226
1337
1422
1546
167
1714
1820
1934
2024
218
2221
238
2435
257
2621
2734
283
2931
304
316
3225
338
3428
3513
3628
376
3817
3910
4012
414
425
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs177
matches
0"was closing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences122
ratio0.115
matches
0"Rain drummed against her leather jacket, each drop a cold reminder of the case she couldn’t close—three years since DS Morris vanished, his disappearance tangled in threads of the supernatural."
1"She didn’t dare think about that now; she focused on the figure ahead, hood pulled low, stride purposeful despite the downpour."
2"She’d seen that turn before—twelve hours earlier, a witness described a man slipping into “the Veil Market” after hearing whispers about a deal gone wrong."
3"Harlow recognized the scar on his forearm—a jagged line from a knife fight years ago."
4"His face was half-hidden by the hood, but his posture screamed readiness—shoulders squared, hands loose but alert."
5"“You think this is about packages?” His gaze swept the market—a labyrinth of stalls piled with oddities."
6"But the air felt thick, charged—like the moment before lightning splits the sky."
7"A distant shout echoed—someone else was closing in."
8"The Veil Market wasn’t just a place; it was a labyrinth designed to trap the unwary."
9"The market erupted into chaos—stalls overturned, shadows writhing."
10"Then—a voice, close behind."
11"The mirror showed not her face, but a memory—DS Morris, standing in this same chamber, his eyes wide with terror as shadows coiled around him."
12"The mirror’s surface rippled again, and this time, she saw the suspect’s face—his scar visible, his eyes hungry."
13"And in the chaos, Harlow lunged—not at the suspect, but at the glass itself."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount914
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.02188183807439825
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005470459518599562
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean8.35
std5.36
cv0.642
sampleLengths
016
130
221
39
43
525
620
718
89
93
109
1115
126
138
1413
155
167
174
1813
199
2018
2110
225
237
2410
258
2610
2717
289
299
308
315
327
3317
3411
3512
366
3718
385
392
4011
414
423
4313
445
458
466
478
4810
4913
45.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.29508196721311475
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences103
matches
0"Somewhere, water dripped in a"
1"Then the ground gave way."
2"Then—a voice, close behind."
3"Only the mirror remained, its"
4"Somewhere, a siren wailed."
ratio0.049
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences103
matches
0"She didn’t dare think about"
1"She’d seen that turn before—twelve"
2"she barked, her voice cutting"
3"His gloved hand hovered near"
4"she said, stepping closer"
5"His breath came quick, shallow."
6"His face was half-hidden by"
7"he muttered, voice low"
8"she shot back, drawing her"
9"He laughed, a sound like"
10"His gaze swept the market—a"
11"she said, stepping forward"
12"His smile was a blade."
13"She’d come too far to"
14"She could feel the weight"
15"she repeated, louder"
16"she screamed, firing into the"
17"She sprinted after him, boots"
18"Her flashlight died."
19"His breath was warm, tainted"
ratio0.272
37.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences103
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed"
1"Rain drummed against her leather"
2"She didn’t dare think about"
3"The suspect veered into an"
4"Harlow’s breath hitched."
5"She’d seen that turn before—twelve"
6"The place existed only during"
7"Tonight, the air smelled of"
8"she barked, her voice cutting"
9"The man froze."
10"His gloved hand hovered near"
11"Harlow recognized the scar on"
12"she said, stepping closer"
13"The suspect’s eyes flicked up,"
14"His breath came quick, shallow."
15"A flicker of movement."
16"The man turned, vanishing into"
17"Harlow followed, her flashlight beam"
18"The passage reeked of mildew"
19"A trapdoor creaked open beneath"
ratio0.845
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences103
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles that reflected the fractured neon glow of Soho’s night."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"She’d, a witness described a man slipping into"
1"she barked, her voice cutting through the storm"
2"he muttered, voice low"
3"she repeated, louder"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
1"he muttered (mutter)"
2"she repeated (repeat)"
3"she screamed (scream)"
4"she growled (growl)"
5"she demanded (demand)"
6"he whispered (whisper)"
7"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.593
75.4549%