"She’d meant to bolt straight up the creaky wooden stairs to her flat above the bar, but her feet had carried her here anyway—half curiosity, half the stupid, hollow ache that had been gnawing at her since she’d skipped Silas’ birthday three months prior, since she’d stopped answering his texts."
1
"But then his beard—neat, grey-streaked auburn, just like the hair pulled back in a loose bun at his neck—softened, and his right hand, where the silver signet ring glinted against the faded flannel sleeve, relaxed."
2
"She’d been avoiding this bar, this man, for nearly two years—ever since she’d fled the quiet of Cardiff and crashed into his life like a storm, broken and scared, and then had turned her back on the only person who’d tried to offer her a way out."
3
"Her left wrist brushed the edge of the bar, and she quickly pulled her sleeve down, covering the small crescent scar from her childhood accident—an old slip with a kitchen butter knife, though sometimes she still caught herself pretending it was from something more dramatic, something that fit the mess her life had become."
4
"Silas leaned against the bar, his gaze drifting to the walls—walls covered in old maps and black-and-white photographs, the same ones she’d studied every night when she’d first moved in, when she’d sat in the back corner of the bar, too nervous to talk to anyone."
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
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"She’d hidden in her flat above the bar, surviving on microwave meals and takeaway tea, working double shifts delivering dumplings and stir-fry through London’s …"
1
"Her left wrist brushed the edge of the bar, and she quickly pulled her sleeve down, covering the small crescent scar from her childhood accident—an old slip wit…"
2
"Eva, her oldest friend, the one who’d driven three hours from Cardiff to pick her up the night Evan had thrown his coffee mug at her, who’d stuffed a duffel bag…"
3
"There was a map of Prague, tucked above the hidden bookshelf that led to the back room, the one Silas had once told her was for clandestine meetings, for the ol…"
4
"Silas told her about the Prague consulting gig, about the old contacts he’d reconnected with, about the secret room behind the bookshelf, where he’d started a s…"
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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15
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7
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"She’d, but her feet had carried her here anyway—half curiosity, half the stupid, hollow ache that had been gnawing at her since she’d skipped Silas’ birthday three months prior, since she’d stopped answering his texts"
1
"she repeated, but her voice wavered, and she hated herself for it"
2
"he said, and his voice was soft, not sharp, not like the barrister father she’d grown up avoiding"
3
"he said, his thumb brushing the edge of the scar gently"
4
"she whispered, and the words poured out of her before she could stop them"
5
"he said, and his voice was thick, like he was holding back his own tears"