Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1GAMW7AZXFKQ0TV6G2Y3G1

Run Details

Model:
Inception Mercury
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
8.9s
Cost:
$0.003755
Provider:
Inception

Evaluation summary

Score Evaluator
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100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags (details)
98.67% AI-ism adverb frequency (details)
100.00% AI-ism character names (details)
100.00% AI-ism location names (details)
74.81% AI-ism word frequency (details)
0.00% Cliché density (details)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell) (details)
0.00% Filter word density (details)
100.00% Gibberish response detection (details)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse (details)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks) (details)
0.00% Name drop frequency (details)
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing (details)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse (details)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding) (details)
47.30% Paragraph length variance (details)
100.00% Passive voice overuse (details)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse (details)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse (details)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload) (details)
100.00% Repeated phrase echo (details)
85.29% Sentence length variance (details)
49.26% Sentence opener variety (details)
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts (details)
17.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts (details)
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts (details)
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts (details)
100.00% Technical jargon density (details)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions (details)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy) (details)
65.7520% Overall

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The neon green sign flickered above the door, a pulse of static that seemed to echo the rhythm of the city outside. The bar’s interior was a study in shadows, walls plastered with faded maps and black‑and‑white photographs that caught the light like old glass. A low hum of conversation drifted through the air, mingling with the scent of burnt coffee, cheap whiskey, and the faint perfume of rain on cobblestones. Aurora Carter slipped in, her shoulders squared, the faint scar on her left wrist catching the dim light as she adjusted the strap of her messenger bag. She had been delivering a plate of dim sum from Yu‑Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress when the door opened, and the door that closed behind her was a small, unassuming frame that seemed to swallow the sound of her footsteps. The bar was smaller than she remembered. The shelves that once held a collection of obscure spirits now lined with a more modest assortment of gin, vodka, and a few craft ales. In the corner, a battered wooden table held a single newspaper, its pages yellowed with age. The signet ring on the bar’s counter caught her eye—a dark, polished metal that seemed to pulse with a hidden history. Silas Blackwood stood behind the bar, his grey‑streaked auburn hair falling into his eyes in a way that made them look hazel, almost like the color of old maps. He moved with a deliberate grace, the limp in his left leg barely audible as he reached for a bottle. The signet ring perched on his right hand, a silent reminder of a past that had long since faded into the shadows of his mind. He glanced up as she entered, his hazel eyes narrowing in recognition. “Rory,” he said, his voice low, resonant with a weight that seemed to carry the years. Aurora’s breath caught for a moment, then she forced a smile. “Silas,” she replied, her voice steady despite the knot that had formed in her chest. “I didn’t expect to see you here.” He nodded, a faint line of amusement crossing his face. “Never thought I’d find you in a place like this.” He slid a glass of amber liquid toward her, the liquid catching the light like liquid gold. “A drink?” She took the glass, feeling the coolness of the glass against her palm. “Sure.” She lifted the glass, her eyes lingering on the signet ring for a heartbeat before she set it down. “I’ve been… busy.” Silas chuckled softly, the sound echoing off the walls. “Busy, huh? Delivering dim sum in Soho? I guess the city never sleeps, and neither do its delivery people.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “It keeps me moving. It keeps me from… lingering.” “Linger?” he echoed, his voice turning softer. “You always had a way of staying in the moment, Rory. I remember the nights we’d sit on the roof of the university, talking about law, about politics, about the world. You were always the one who could see the cracks before anyone else.” She glanced at the wall, at the old photographs that seemed to capture moments frozen in time. “I was just a kid with a bright blue gaze, trying to make sense of a world that kept changing.” Silas’s eyes softened, a hint of regret flickering across his face. “You were always the one who could see the cracks before anyone else. And now you’re a delivery person, a woman with a scar that reminds you of a childhood accident. You’ve changed, Rory. I can see it.” She felt the weight of his words settle over her like a blanket. “I’ve changed. I’ve been forced to change. I left Ireland, I left the law, I left the man who hurt me. I’ve been running, always running.” Silas leaned back, the bar’s wooden stool creaking beneath him. “Running is a good way to keep the past at bay. But sometimes the past catches up, doesn’t it?” She nodded, the scar on her wrist catching the light as she ran her fingers over it. “It does. It’s a reminder that I’m not invincible. That I made choices that led me here.” Silas’s grin was thin, a line that didn’t quite reach his eyes. “Choices. I know that well. I left Prague. I left my career. I left the life that was built around me. I retreated to a bar, to a quiet life. I think we both left things behind.” She looked at him, at the signet ring that glinted in the dim light. “You left your signet ring behind, didn’t you? It’s a symbol of a life you left behind.” Silas’s eyes flicked to the ring, then back to her. “I kept it. It’s a reminder of who I was. A reminder of what I could have been. I kept it because I couldn’t let it go.” She took a breath, the sound of the bar’s low hum filling the space between them. “I kept my scar. It’s a reminder of who I am. A reminder of where I came from.” Silas’s expression softened, a hint of tenderness emerging. “You’re still the same girl I knew, Rory. You’re still the one who could see the cracks before anyone else. You’re still the one who can think on her feet.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “I’m still the same girl, Silas. I’m still the one who can see the cracks before anyone else. I’m still the one who can think on her feet.” He nodded, a quiet acknowledgment of the truth in her words. “We’re both still the same, then. We’re still the same, but we’re also different.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “I think we both have regrets, Rory. I regret leaving the life that was built around me. I regret leaving the people who cared about me. I regret leaving the world that I once knew.” She nodded, the scar on her wrist catching the light as she ran her fingers over it. “I regret leaving Ireland. I regret leaving the law. I regret leaving the man who hurt me. I regret leaving the world that I once knew.” Silas’s eyes softened, a hint of tenderness emerging. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.” Silas nodded, his eyes flicking to the signet ring, then back to her. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She smiled, a genuine, unforced smile that seemed to light up the room. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, then on her face. “We both have regrets, then. We both have regrets. We both have regrets.” She let out a breath that sounded like a sigh. “I think that’s what time does, Silas. It changes us. It makes us who we are.”
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model"inception/mercury"
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tokens_prompt867
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
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provider_responses
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences132
tagDensity0.038
leniency0.076
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
98.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3772
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3772
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count6
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"sense of"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"tenderness"
count2
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"echo"
3"footsteps"
4"reminder"
5"weight"
6"echoing"
7"echoed"
8"sense of"
9"flicked"
10"tenderness"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches30
maxInWindow8
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count29
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences144
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount32
narrationSentences144
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences271
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3771
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1846
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.3
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Blackwood1
Aurora2
Silas61
persons
0"Carter"
1"Cheung"
2"Blackwood"
3"Aurora"
4"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0.167
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences144
glossingSentenceCount62
matches
0"static that seemed to echo the rhythm of the city outside"
1"frame that seemed to swallow the sound of her footsteps"
2"metal that seemed to pulse with a hidden history"
3"weight that seemed to carry the years"
4"sounded like a sigh"
5"photographs that seemed to capture moments frozen in time"
6"quite reach his eyes"
7"smile that seemed to light up the room"
8"sounded like a sigh"
9"sounded like a sigh"
10"smile that seemed to light up the room"
11"sounded like a sigh"
12"smile that seemed to light up the room"
13"sounded like a sigh"
14"smile that seemed to light up the room"
15"sounded like a sigh"
16"smile that seemed to light up the room"
17"sounded like a sigh"
18"smile that seemed to light up the room"
19"sounded like a sigh"
20"smile that seemed to light up the room"
21"sounded like a sigh"
22"smile that seemed to light up the room"
23"sounded like a sigh"
24"smile that seemed to light up the room"
25"sounded like a sigh"
26"smile that seemed to light up the room"
27"sounded like a sigh"
28"smile that seemed to light up the room"
29"sounded like a sigh"
30"smile that seemed to light up the room"
31"sounded like a sigh"
32"smile that seemed to light up the room"
33"sounded like a sigh"
34"smile that seemed to light up the room"
35"sounded like a sigh"
36"smile that seemed to light up the room"
37"sounded like a sigh"
38"smile that seemed to light up the room"
39"sounded like a sigh"
40"smile that seemed to light up the room"
41"sounded like a sigh"
42"smile that seemed to light up the room"
43"sounded like a sigh"
44"smile that seemed to light up the room"
45"sounded like a sigh"
46"smile that seemed to light up the room"
47"sounded like a sigh"
48"smile that seemed to light up the room"
49"sounded like a sigh"
50"smile that seemed to light up the room"
51"sounded like a sigh"
52"smile that seemed to light up the room"
53"sounded like a sigh"
54"smile that seemed to light up the room"
55"sounded like a sigh"
56"smile that seemed to light up the room"
57"sounded like a sigh"
58"smile that seemed to light up the room"
59"sounded like a sigh"
60"smile that seemed to light up the room"
61"sounded like a sigh"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3771
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences271
matches(empty)
47.30% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs132
mean28.57
std9.01
cv0.316
sampleLengths
071
166
269
374
428
533
639
736
828
919
1051
1137
1249
1339
1429
1534
1649
1731
1837
1934
2038
2141
2225
2326
2446
2543
2621
2726
2826
2926
3024
3126
3226
3326
3424
3526
3626
3726
3824
3926
4026
4126
4224
4326
4426
4526
4624
4726
4826
4926
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs332
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences271
ratio0.004
matches
0"The signet ring on the bar’s counter caught her eye—a dark, polished metal that seemed to pulse with a hidden history."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1847
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount65
adverbRatio0.03519220357336221
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0010828370330265296
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences271
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
85.29% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences271
mean13.92
std5.05
cv0.363
sampleLengths
022
123
226
327
439
57
625
716
821
929
1020
1125
1212
1316
1411
1515
167
1710
1827
192
2013
2120
223
239
2419
2510
269
277
2844
2917
3020
3111
3238
3313
3426
3510
3619
3717
3817
3912
4037
4114
4217
4310
4427
4516
4618
478
4830
4913
49.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.06642066420664207
totalSentences271
uniqueOpeners18
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
ratio0
17.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount73
totalSentences144
matches
0"She had been delivering a"
1"He moved with a deliberate"
2"He glanced up as she"
3"he said, his voice low,"
4"she replied, her voice steady"
5"He nodded, a faint line"
6"He slid a glass of"
7"She took the glass, feeling"
8"She lifted the glass, her"
9"She let out a breath"
10"he echoed, his voice turning"
11"She glanced at the wall,"
12"She felt the weight of"
13"She nodded, the scar on"
14"She looked at him, at"
15"She took a breath, the"
16"She smiled, a genuine, unforced"
17"He nodded, a quiet acknowledgment"
18"She let out a breath"
19"She nodded, the scar on"
ratio0.507
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount143
totalSentences144
matches
0"The neon green sign flickered"
1"The bar’s interior was a"
2"A low hum of conversation"
3"Aurora Carter slipped in, her"
4"She had been delivering a"
5"The bar was smaller than"
6"The shelves that once held"
7"The signet ring on the"
8"Silas Blackwood stood behind the"
9"He moved with a deliberate"
10"The signet ring perched on"
11"He glanced up as she"
12"he said, his voice low,"
13"Aurora’s breath caught for a"
14"she replied, her voice steady"
15"He nodded, a faint line"
16"He slid a glass of"
17"She took the glass, feeling"
18"She lifted the glass, her"
19"Silas chuckled softly, the sound"
ratio0.993
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences135
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The neon green sign flickered above the door, a pulse of static that seemed to echo the rhythm of the city outside."
1"The bar’s interior was a study in shadows, walls plastered with faded maps and black‑and‑white photographs that caught the light like old glass."
2"She had been delivering a plate of dim sum from Yu‑Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress when the door opened, and the door that closed behind her was a small, unassuming…"
3"Silas Blackwood stood behind the bar, his grey‑streaked auburn hair falling into his eyes in a way that made them look hazel, almost like the color of old maps."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He slid, the liquid catching the light like liquid gold"
1"he echoed, his voice turning softer"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences132
tagDensity0.015
leniency0.03
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
65.7520%