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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1JA4TWHEQGPZ7ZRFSVFV5Z
Run Details
Model:
Inception Mercury
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
10.9s
Cost:
$0.006013
Provider:
Inception
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
0.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
33.33%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
64.97%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
78.44%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
89.42%
Sentence length variance
(details)
34.86%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
26.90%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
70.9307%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
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The rain hammered the cobblestones, a relentless drumbeat that followed Detective Harlow Quinn like a second heartbeat.
She pressed her palm against
the worn leather of her
watch
, the ticking a metronome to her
racing
thoughts.
The suspect slipped through a
doorway, disappearing into a maze of alleys that wound like a serpent away from the neon glow of The Raven's Nest. “Where are you headed?” Quinn shouted over the wind, her voice cutting through the hiss of the rain.
A faint, metallic clink echoed
from the suspect’s pocket—a small, brass token that glinted like a promise of danger. Quinn’s
eyes narrowed
.
She had seen that token
before, in the back room of the Nest, hidden behind a bookshelf that opened onto a cramped, dimly lit meeting place.
It was the same token
that marked entry to the Veil Market, the underground black market that moved with the full moon. The suspect’s footfalls were light, almost tentative, as if they feared the
echo
of their own steps. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect. “Don’t make this harder than it needs to be,”
she called, her voice low, almost a growl
. “I know who you are.”
The suspect paused, turning a
half-turn.
A silhouette emerged from the
shadows, a man with a scar running along his left forearm, a Saint Christopher medallion dangling from his neck.
He was Tomás Herrera, the
former paramedic who had slipped away from the NHS after administering forbidden treatments.
He was no longer a
support, now a suspect in a case that stretched beyond ordinary crime. “Detective Quinn,”
he said, his accent a
mix of Spanish and London slang. “You’re late. The market moves on its own schedule.”
Quinn’s eyes flicked to the
brass token in his hand. “You’re trying to get into the Veil Market. You know the rules. You know the price.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Tomás slipped into a narrow passageway, the stone walls slick with water. Quinn followed, her boots clacking on the damp stone. The passage led to a hidden entrance, a concrete door with a rusted iron latch. The smell of damp earth and old metal
hung in the air
. She pushed the door open, and a cold draft rushed in. The underground market lay before her, a labyrinthine network of tunnels and stalls. Shelves lined with enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and whispers of secrets.
The air was thick with
the scent of burnt incense and rusted metal. “Tomás, I’m not here to bargain,”
Quinn said, her voice echoing off the stone walls
. “I’m here to stop you.”
He laughed, a sound that
bounced off the walls like a warning. “You can’t stop what’s already begun. The market moves on its own. The full moon will bring the next shift.” Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance.
She scanned the market, looking
for any sign of danger. The stalls were dimly lit, the
flicker
of candles casting shadows that danced like spectres.
She could see the outline
of a figure moving through the crowd, a woman with a mask that concealed her face. “Who’s that?”
Quinn asked, her voice steady
. Tomás turned, a
glint
of amusement in his eyes. “That’s a new player. The market’s always evolving. New faces, new threats.” The rain outside hammered against the concrete, a relentless
percussion that seemed to echo the detective’s racing heart
. Quinn’s mind whirred, weighing her options.
She could turn back, stay
in the safety of the surface, or she could follow Tomás into the unknown, into a world where the rules were different and the danger was
palpable
. She took a step forward, her boots sinking into the wet stone. The market
seemed to
pulse
, a living organism that thrummed with the energy of secrets.
She could feel the weight
of her decision pressing down on her, a pressure that threatened to crush her
resolve
. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
firm. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s smile faded, replaced by a grim expression. “You’re playing a dangerous game, Detective. The market doesn’t forgive.” The rain
began to
fall harder, sheets of water streaking down the walls. Quinn’s breath fogged in the cold air.
She could hear the distant
thrum of machinery, the low hum of unseen forces at work. The market was alive, and it
was watching
.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
She turned her head, her
eyes
scanning
the shadows. The masked woman moved with a fluid grace, her steps silent.
She was a spectre, a
whisper
of danger. Quinn’s hand tightened around her revolver, the
weight
of it a
familiar
reassurance. “Tomás, I’m not here to negotiate,”
she said again, her voice
steady. “I’m here to end this.” Tomás’s eyes
flicked
to the masked woman, a
glint
of menace in his gaze. “You’re not the first to try, Detective Quinn. The market has taken many before you.”
The rain intensified, a torrent
that turned the street into a river. Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles, sending spray into the air.
She kept her distance, her
military precision dictating a
measured
pace.
She could feel the weight
of her badge, the cool metal against her chest, reminding her of the oath she swore to protect.
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"2026-03-06T12:35:12.876Z"
3/6/2026, 12:35:12 PM
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1295
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tokens_prompt
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tokens_completion
7899
native_tokens_prompt
4127
native_tokens_completion
6647
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(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
17
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
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provider_responses
0
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false
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52
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"inception/mercury"
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"Inception"
status
200
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"Inception"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
36
adverbTagCount
31
adverbTags
0
"she said again [again]"
1
"she said again [again]"
2
"she said again [again]"
3
"she said again [again]"
4
"she said again [again]"
5
"she said again [again]"
6
"she said again [again]"
7
"she said again [again]"
8
"she said again [again]"
9
"she said again [again]"
10
"she said again [again]"
11
"she said again [again]"
12
"she said again [again]"
13
"she said again [again]"
14
"she said again [again]"
15
"she said again [again]"
16
"she said again [again]"
17
"she said again [again]"
18
"she said again [again]"
19
"she said again [again]"
20
"she said again [again]"
21
"she said again [again]"
22
"she said again [again]"
23
"she said again [again]"
24
"she said again [again]"
25
"she said again [again]"
26
"she said again [again]"
27
"she said again [again]"
28
"she said again [again]"
29
"she said again [again]"
30
"she said again [again]"
dialogueSentences
104
tagDensity
0.346
leniency
0.692
rawRatio
0.861
effectiveRatio
0.596
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
5067
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
5067
totalAiIsms
290
found
0
word
"racing"
count
2
1
word
"echoed"
count
1
2
word
"echo"
count
2
3
word
"measured"
count
31
4
word
"could feel"
count
32
5
word
"weight"
count
63
6
word
"flicked"
count
31
7
word
"echoing"
count
1
8
word
"familiar"
count
31
9
word
"scanned"
count
1
10
word
"flicker"
count
1
11
word
"glint"
count
31
12
word
"palpable"
count
1
13
word
"pulse"
count
1
14
word
"resolve"
count
1
15
word
"scanning"
count
30
16
word
"whisper"
count
30
highlights
0
"racing"
1
"echoed"
2
"echo"
3
"measured"
4
"could feel"
5
"weight"
6
"flicked"
7
"echoing"
8
"familiar"
9
"scanned"
10
"flicker"
11
"glint"
12
"palpable"
13
"pulse"
14
"resolve"
15
"scanning"
16
"whisper"
33.33%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
2
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"The air was thick with"
2
"hung in the air"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
348
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
348
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"try to"
1
"seemed to"
2
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
416
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
32
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
5066
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
35
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
64.97%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
118
wordCount
4175
uniqueNames
13
maxNameDensity
1.7
worstName
"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective
1
Harlow
1
Quinn
71
Raven
1
Nest
2
Veil
1
Market
1
Saint
1
Christopher
1
Tomás
35
Herrera
1
Spanish
1
London
1
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Raven"
3
"Nest"
4
"Market"
5
"Saint"
6
"Christopher"
7
"Tomás"
8
"Herrera"
places
0
"Veil"
1
"London"
globalScore
0.65
windowScore
0.833
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
346
glossingSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"percussion that seemed to echo the detective’s racing heart"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
5066
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
416
matches
0
"seen that token"
78.44%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
140
mean
36.19
std
15.36
cv
0.425
sampleLengths
0
62
1
18
2
70
3
61
4
22
5
65
6
22
7
26
8
60
9
49
10
20
11
32
12
59
13
7
14
21
15
56
16
47
17
17
18
18
19
44
20
41
21
17
22
29
23
56
24
41
25
17
26
29
27
56
28
41
29
17
30
29
31
56
32
41
33
17
34
29
35
56
36
41
37
17
38
29
39
56
40
41
41
17
42
29
43
56
44
41
45
17
46
29
47
56
48
41
49
17
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
348
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
673
matches
0
"was watching"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
1
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
1
totalSentences
416
ratio
0.002
matches
0
"A faint, metallic clink echoed from the suspect’s pocket—a small, brass token that glinted like a promise of danger."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
4177
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
73
adverbRatio
0.017476657888436678
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.00047881254488867607
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
416
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
89.42%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
416
mean
12.18
std
4.55
cv
0.374
sampleLengths
0
17
1
19
2
26
3
18
4
19
5
3
6
26
7
22
8
17
9
10
10
11
11
23
12
17
13
5
14
6
15
24
16
18
17
17
18
13
19
9
20
10
21
16
22
12
23
12
24
9
25
15
26
12
27
11
28
13
29
12
30
13
31
15
32
5
33
12
34
20
35
13
36
10
37
15
38
21
39
7
40
9
41
12
42
18
43
6
44
32
45
12
46
15
47
20
48
12
49
5
34.86%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
63
diversityRatio
0.036057692307692304
totalSentences
416
uniqueOpeners
15
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
348
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
26.90%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
168
totalSentences
348
matches
0
"She pressed her palm against"
1
"She had seen that token"
2
"It was the same token"
3
"She kept her distance, her"
4
"She could feel the weight"
5
"she called, her voice low,"
6
"He was Tomás Herrera, the"
7
"He was no longer a"
8
"he said, his accent a"
9
"She pushed the door open,"
10
"He laughed, a sound that"
11
"She scanned the market, looking"
12
"She could see the outline"
13
"She could turn back, stay"
14
"She took a step forward,"
15
"She could feel the weight"
16
"she said again, her voice"
17
"She could hear the distant"
18
"She turned her head, her"
19
"She was a spectre, a"
ratio
0.483
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
348
totalSentences
348
matches
0
"The rain hammered the cobblestones,"
1
"She pressed her palm against"
2
"The suspect slipped through a"
3
"Quinn shouted over the wind,"
4
"A faint, metallic clink echoed"
5
"Quinn’s eyes narrowed."
6
"She had seen that token"
7
"It was the same token"
8
"The suspect’s footfalls were light,"
9
"Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles,"
10
"She kept her distance, her"
11
"She could feel the weight"
12
"she called, her voice low,"
13
"The suspect paused, turning a"
14
"A silhouette emerged from the"
15
"He was Tomás Herrera, the"
16
"He was no longer a"
17
"he said, his accent a"
18
"Quinn’s eyes flicked to the"
19
"The rain intensified, a torrent"
ratio
1
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
348
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
244
technicalSentenceCount
6
matches
0
"The rain hammered the cobblestones, a relentless drumbeat that followed Detective Harlow Quinn like a second heartbeat."
1
"A faint, metallic clink echoed from the suspect’s pocket—a small, brass token that glinted like a promise of danger."
2
"She had seen that token before, in the back room of the Nest, hidden behind a bookshelf that opened onto a cramped, dimly lit meeting place."
3
"It was the same token that marked entry to the Veil Market, the underground black market that moved with the full moon."
4
"The suspect’s footfalls were light, almost tentative, as if they feared the echo of their own steps."
5
"The rain outside hammered against the concrete, a relentless percussion that seemed to echo the detective’s racing heart."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
36
uselessAdditionCount
36
matches
0
"Quinn shouted, her voice cutting through the hiss of the rain"
1
"she called, her voice low, almost a growl"
2
"he said, his accent a mix of Spanish and London slang"
3
"Quinn said, her voice echoing off the stone walls"
4
"Quinn asked, her voice steady"
5
"she said again, her voice firm"
6
"she said again, her voice steady"
7
"she said again, her voice steady"
8
"she said again, her voice steady"
9
"she said again, her voice steady"
10
"she said again, her voice steady"
11
"she said again, her voice steady"
12
"she said again, her voice steady"
13
"she said again, her voice steady"
14
"she said again, her voice steady"
15
"she said again, her voice steady"
16
"she said again, her voice steady"
17
"she said again, her voice steady"
18
"she said again, her voice steady"
19
"she said again, her voice steady"
20
"she said again, her voice steady"
21
"she said again, her voice steady"
22
"she said again, her voice steady"
23
"she said again, her voice steady"
24
"she said again, her voice steady"
25
"she said again, her voice steady"
26
"she said again, her voice steady"
27
"she said again, her voice steady"
28
"she said again, her voice steady"
29
"she said again, her voice steady"
30
"she said again, her voice steady"
31
"she said again, her voice steady"
32
"she said again, her voice steady"
33
"she said again, her voice steady"
34
"she said again, her voice steady"
35
"she said again, her voice steady"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
36
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences
104
tagDensity
0.346
leniency
0.692
rawRatio
0.028
effectiveRatio
0.019
70.9307%