Run: 2026-03-09-01KKABVYERRM9PFG2Y33650NQ7

Run Details

Duration:
1m 42s
Cost:
$0.061855
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon above The Raven’s Nest bled across the wet pavement and turned the puddles the colour of bottle glass. Aurora ducked in under it with the last of the rain on her leather jacket, helmet under one arm, hair flattened where the strap had pressed it down. The bar smelled of beer, old wood, and the peel of oranges Silas cut with a knife that looked too sharp for garnish. A low record crackled behind the murmur of voices. Maps curled on the walls in their frames. A man at the far end laughed into his stout. A couple leaned over a bowl of salted almonds like they were sharing a secret. Silas looked up from drying a tumbler. His hazel eyes swept over her soaked jeans, the insulated delivery bag hanging from her shoulder, the blue veins of cold in her fingers. “You looked drier on the motorbike.” Aurora dropped the bag on the stool nearest the till. “London found a fresh way to spit in my face.” Silas slid a towel across the bar. “You missed the dinner rush by eight minutes. Yu-Fei rang. Sounded like he wanted to have words with the weather.” “He could queue behind me.” She rubbed rain from her face and glanced towards the room, not really seeing it at first. The Nest always arrived in layers. Green light from the sign. Gold light over bottles. The dark sheen of old tables. Then people. Strangers, regulars, tourists who walked in by accident and stayed because the place looked like it knew things. Her gaze snagged on a woman at the corner table beneath a black-and-white photograph of dockworkers in heavy coats. The woman sat alone with a whisky she had hardly touched. Dark wool coat folded over the back of the chair. A pale hand around the glass. Hair cut shorter than fashion demanded and streaked at the temples with silver that caught the lamplight. Her face had narrowed. Her mouth looked as if it had learned not to give much away. She had the sort of stillness that made the noise around her bend. Aurora kept staring because the angle of the jaw tugged at memory before the rest of it did. Then the woman lifted her head. The years between them rose at once, then fell. “Rory?” The name landed softly, but it went through her like a dropped coin through water. Aurora straightened. “Nia.” Silas’s hands slowed on the glass. He glanced from one of them to the other, took in enough, and set the tumbler down. “You know each other.” Aurora gave a short laugh that had no humour in it. “That depends which century we’re counting from.” Nia stood. She had been shorter than Aurora once, all elbows and untied laces, forever in scuffed trainers. Now she matched her eye line in heeled boots and wore a charcoal jumper that looked expensive in a way that tried not to look expensive. A thin gold band flashed at one ear. Her eyes were the same, though. Brown with that amber ring around the pupil. Quick eyes. They used to dart ahead of every thought. Now they held still. “I nearly didn’t recognise you,” Nia said. Aurora hooked the towel over her shoulder. “That made two of us.” Silas flicked his gaze towards the table. “Take the booth. Less draught there.” Aurora looked at him. He had already turned away, giving them privacy with the sort of precision that came from long practice. Nia picked up her glass. Aurora lifted her own untouched pint from the bar and followed her to the corner. For a moment neither sat. They stood with the table between them like they needed an object in the room to explain why they had stopped moving. Nia pulled out her chair first. “You still pause before you sit down when you’re annoyed.” Aurora sat. “You still notice things no one asked you to.” That almost brought a smile. Almost. Nia lowered herself opposite. Rain tapped the window beside them. Outside, people passed under umbrellas that looked black under the neon. “You live here now?” Nia asked. “Upstairs.” Aurora jerked her chin towards the ceiling. “Silas rents me the flat. I work deliveries for Golden Empress. Sometimes I help downstairs if he’s short.” Nia looked around the room again, slower this time. “This is yours, then. Or near enough.” “Don’t make it sound romantic. It’s a bar and a staircase with opinions.” “I’m in London for a conference.” Aurora leaned back. “You say conference like you expect me to fill in the rest.” Nia ran a thumb around the rim of her whisky. “Cardiff Crown Prosecution Service sent me.” That knocked into something old and brittle. Aurora saw them at nineteen in the law library, books open, Nia drawing scales of justice in the margin of her notes and crossing them out because she hated being obvious. Aurora lifted her pint. “So you made it.” Nia’s mouth shifted. “I made a version.” Aurora drank. The beer tasted cold enough to scrub. For a few beats they listened to the room. Glasses clinked at the bar. Someone fed coins into the old jukebox and changed the song. Silas moved behind the counter with his slight limp, carrying three clean tumblers in one hand. Nia set her glass down. “When did you leave Cardiff?” Aurora looked at the condensation running down her pint. “You know when.” “I knew you vanished.” “You had the outline.” “I had silence.” Aurora rubbed the crescent scar on her left wrist with her thumb. She had done it since she was six and split herself open on a broken fence post. Her mother used to catch her at it and push her hand away. Don’t pick at what’s already shut. It’ll only open again. “People vanish for reasons.” Nia met that without blinking. “I know.” Aurora let out a breath through her nose. “Do you.” The words hung there, not loud, not dramatic. Worse for being plain. Nia took the hit and did not dodge. “No. Not then.” Aurora looked at her properly. The silver at Nia’s temples was wrong at thirty, unless thirty had turned harsher in Cardiff without asking. Fine lines bracketed her mouth. Her right hand bore the faint white marks where a ring had sat for years and then hadn’t. There was a stiffness in the shoulders that no tailoring hid. “What happened to you?” Aurora asked. Nia glanced towards the window as if the answer might be written in the rain. “Life became efficient.” “That sounded grim even for a prosecutor.” “It paid well. People praised me in rooms with bad coffee. I learned how to stand up and make grief sound tidy. Then Dafydd left. Mam got ill. I carried one thing into the next until I forgot I’d put anything down.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the glass. “You married Dafydd.” “I did.” She looked at the pale mark on her hand and gave a small shrug that looked painful. “Then I didn’t.” Aurora remembered him dimly. Med school. Loud laugh. A rugby neck. The sort of man Nia used to mock until one day she didn’t. “You always swore you’d never marry a man who owned more than one navy suit.” “He bought six.” That pulled a real laugh from Aurora before she could stop it. It flashed and was gone, but it had happened. Nia heard it and lifted her eyes, startled by the sound of something from before. “There you are,” Nia murmured. Aurora’s expression closed again. “Don’t do that.” “Do what?” “Talk like I’ve been hidden in a cupboard and you’ve found me.” Nia folded her hands. “I didn’t mean—” “I know what you meant.” Aurora looked past her at the photograph on the wall. Men bent beneath sacks on a dock, faces half turned from the camera, caught between one burden and the next. “You sent me three messages after I left,” Aurora said. “Then nothing.” Nia took a breath. “I sent more than three.” “I changed numbers.” “I went to your parents’ house.” That brought her head round. “When?” “The week after graduation. Your mum opened the door. Your father stood in the hall behind her as if the wallpaper had called him in to witness. She told me you needed space.” Aurora barked a dry laugh. “She would.” Nia leaned forward. “I asked if you were safe.” Aurora looked down at the table. Someone had carved initials near the edge and tried to sand them out. The wood held the ghost of them anyway. “Mam hated scenes,” she said. “As long as the curtains stayed shut, nothing had happened.” Nia’s face softened and sharpened at once, grief and anger sharing the same bone. “He hit you.” It came out stripped bare. No cushion. No lowered voice. The truth sat between the glasses with its coat still on. Aurora stared at her. The room around them kept moving. A stool scraped. A woman laughed near the door. Somewhere a bottle knocked another bottle. Nothing in the bar shifted to acknowledge the sentence, and that made it feel more real. “He didn’t start there,” Aurora said. Nia swallowed. “I knew he was wrong. I didn’t know that.” “You liked him.” “I didn’t like him. I tolerated him because you made jokes every time I looked worried, and I let you.” Aurora’s jaw tightened. “I covered it well.” “You used to cover everything well.” That one landed. Nia saw it and looked down at her hands. “At uni,” she went on, “you’d go quiet for two days and turn up with coffee and a smile like nothing had cracked. You missed seminars. You stopped swimming. You stopped wearing short sleeves in summer. I noticed and I filed it away because I had exams and a boyfriend and a hundred righteous speeches about women who should never settle. I had all that language and I never used one word of it on you.” Aurora stared at the amber in Nia’s whisky. “You weren’t my keeper.” “No.” Nia lifted the glass but did not drink. “I was your friend.” Silence spread out, deep and cold. Aurora watched Silas in the mirror behind the bar. He polished a bottle that did not need polishing. He never looked over directly. He had the manners of someone who had once lived among secrets and learned the weight of not intruding. Aurora rested her forearms on the table. “I thought if I left, the whole city would peel off me,” she said. “Cardiff. Law. Him. My parents. That version of me who kept bargaining with disaster as if disaster had rules. I came here with one rucksack and seventy quid. Eva put me on her sofa. I took whatever work came. Kept my head down. Learned roads. Learned how to make myself small when I needed and sharp when I didn’t.” Nia listened with her face still. “You wanted to be a barrister.” Aurora let her gaze drift towards the bar, the maps, the bottles lined up in exact rows under warm light. “I wanted a lot of things that belonged to a person I couldn’t carry.” “That sounded like surrender.” “It sounded like survival.” Nia nodded once, taking the correction. “Fair.” Aurora rubbed the scar on her wrist again, then stopped herself. “You look older,” she said. Nia laughed under her breath. “That was elegant.” “You didn’t before. Not in the normal way. You looked like the same girl in new coats. Now—” “Now I look lived in.” “You look as if sleep had to book an appointment.” “That too.” Nia finally drank. The whisky disappeared in one go. She set the empty glass down and turned it a quarter inch. “I saw your name once,” she said. Aurora frowned. “Where?” “On a bike receipt tucked into a Crown file. One of the witnesses ordered food while we waited for a verdict. Aurora Carter. I thought there must be hundreds. Then I looked up the restaurant. I kept the receipt in my briefcase for three weeks.” Aurora stared. “You could’ve called the restaurant.” “I could’ve.” “You didn’t.” Nia’s fingers tightened on the empty glass. “I had a speech ready. It sounded polished and rotten. I kept hearing my own voice and wanting to slam a door on it.” “So you did nothing.” “Yes.” Aurora let that sit. It had enough company already. Across the room, Silas approached with a fresh whisky and set it by Nia’s hand, then another pint by Aurora’s elbow. He nodded at the empty glasses. “On the house. Old wars burn thirsty.” Aurora glanced up. “You eavesdropping, Si?” “I own the walls. They report to me.” That brought a flicker at the edge of Nia’s mouth. Silas rested his knuckles on the table for a moment. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the light. “You need food, wave. If you need me not to hear, lower your voices and I’ll pretend age took my ears.” He moved away before either answered. Nia watched him settle back behind the bar. “He’s kind.” “He’s nosy with good timing.” “Useful combination.” Aurora took a drink. “So. Prosecutor in London. Failed husband. Ill mother. Receipt in a briefcase. Why this bar tonight?” Nia looked at her for a long moment. “The conference hotel had a lobby full of people congratulating themselves for caring. I walked out. I saw the sign. Then I saw you through the window before you came in.” Aurora blinked. “You saw me first?” “You were parking the bike. You swore at the chain. Nothing in the world looked more familiar.” Aurora looked down at her wet sleeve. “You could’ve left.” “I nearly did.” “But you stayed.” Nia nodded. “I got tired of letting years make decisions because they’d already started.” Aurora turned her pint between her palms. “You always did hate unfinished arguments.” “This wasn’t an argument.” “What was it, then?” Nia held her gaze. “A friendship I let starve because I didn’t know how to knock on a locked door without making it about me.” Aurora’s throat moved. She looked away first, towards the rain-slick glass, the green neon breathing in and out over the street. “When Mam died,” Nia said, quieter now, “I reached for my phone to call you.” Aurora turned back. Nia’s eyes had reddened, though her face stayed composed. “I hadn’t spoken to you in four years. I still reached for you before I remembered I’d lost the right.” Aurora sat very still. “When?” “February.” “I’m sorry.” Nia accepted that with a dip of her head. “She loved you, you know. Used to ask whether you were still reading in cafés instead of your own flat because you liked the noise.” Aurora smiled despite herself. “I hated reading in silence. Made me feel supervised.” “She knew.” The smile faded, but not all the way. Nia touched the fresh whisky and then left it alone. “I don’t expect anything from this,” she said. “No repair job. No clean line through old damage. I just—” She stopped, jaw tightening for the first time since Aurora had recognised her. “I didn’t want to walk past the window and become another thing I failed to face.” Aurora watched her. Watched the restraint in the set of her shoulders, the tiredness under the eyes, the careful hands. She could still see the girl who once stole traffic cones after fresher’s week and lined them outside a lecturer’s office in strict descending order. She could see the woman who had learned to stand in court and call pain by its proper name. Both sat there at once, and the years between them did not cancel either one. Aurora reached across the table and turned Nia’s empty whisky glass upright because she had left it at a slight tilt. “You always leave glasses like they’re about to confess,” she said. Nia looked at the glass, then at Aurora. “And you always fix small crooked things while pretending the large ones can burn.” Aurora let out a breath that almost became a laugh. “Still unbearable.” “Still here.” Aurora’s fingers stayed on the rim of the glass a beat longer than they needed to. Then she drew her hand back and took up her pint. Outside, the rain thinned to a fine spray and ran down the window in narrow silver tracks. Inside, the record crackled into the next song. Silas opened a fresh bottle for someone at the bar. The Nest held its low, warm murmur around them while they sat with their drinks and the years they had finally brought into the room.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences125
tagDensity0.112
leniency0.224
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2781
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"softly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
85.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2781
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"efficient"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"silence"
2"efficient"
3"weight"
4"flicker"
5"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count2
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences200
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences200
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences311
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen76
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2781
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions113
wordCount1734
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity3.17
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest3
Silas10
Aurora55
Nia43
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Aurora"
4"Nia"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences125
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like it knew things"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2781
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences311
matches
0"let that sit"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs225
mean12.36
std15.25
cv1.234
sampleLengths
072
142
231
36
410
510
67
720
85
958
1019
1174
1218
136
149
151
1615
172
181
1923
204
2111
227
2380
247
257
265
277
286
2922
3020
3127
326
3310
342
359
3610
3717
386
391
407
4118
429
437
4413
456
463
4712
4810
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences200
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs299
matches
0"were sharing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences311
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1737
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.03626943005181347
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.0051813471502590676
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences311
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences311
mean8.94
std8.35
cv0.933
sampleLengths
021
128
223
39
48
510
615
77
824
96
1010
1110
127
1320
145
1517
166
175
184
196
202
2118
2219
2311
2410
256
2617
274
2813
2913
3018
316
329
331
3415
352
361
376
3817
394
4011
417
422
4316
4426
458
466
478
482
498
45.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.22508038585209003
totalSentences311
uniqueOpeners70
57.80% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences173
matches
0"Then the woman lifted her"
1"Somewhere a bottle knocked another"
2"Then she drew her hand"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences173
matches
0"His hazel eyes swept over"
1"She rubbed rain from her"
2"Her gaze snagged on a"
3"Her face had narrowed."
4"Her mouth looked as if"
5"She had the sort of"
6"He glanced from one of"
7"She had been shorter than"
8"Her eyes were the same,"
9"They used to dart ahead"
10"He had already turned away,"
11"They stood with the table"
12"She had done it since"
13"Her mother used to catch"
14"It’ll only open again."
15"Her right hand bore the"
16"She looked at the pale"
17"It flashed and was gone,"
18"It came out stripped bare."
19"she went on"
ratio0.179
17.80% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount153
totalSentences173
matches
0"The green neon above The"
1"Aurora ducked in under it"
2"The bar smelled of beer,"
3"A low record crackled behind"
4"Maps curled on the walls"
5"A man at the far"
6"A couple leaned over a"
7"Silas looked up from drying"
8"His hazel eyes swept over"
9"Aurora dropped the bag on"
10"Silas slid a towel across"
11"She rubbed rain from her"
12"The Nest always arrived in"
13"The dark sheen of old"
14"Strangers, regulars, tourists who walked"
15"Her gaze snagged on a"
16"The woman sat alone with"
17"A pale hand around the"
18"Hair cut shorter than fashion"
19"Her face had narrowed."
ratio0.884
57.80% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences173
matches
0"Now she matched her eye"
1"Now they held still."
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Now she matched her eye line in heeled boots and wore a charcoal jumper that looked expensive in a way that tried not to look expensive."
1"Outside, people passed under umbrellas that looked black under the neon."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nia murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences125
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.208
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.016
88.6377%