Run: 2026-03-09-01KKABW7G5J6EEFHKRMBEVSWS3

Run Details

Duration:
1m 50s
Cost:
$0.072820
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain had worked soot out of Soho and pasted it across the pavement in shining streaks. Aurora came in through the green wash of The Raven’s Nest sign with a delivery bag strap still denting one shoulder and the smell of wet tarmac clinging to her jacket. She kicked the door shut with the heel of her boot, pushed damp black hair behind one ear, and stood a moment in the dimness while her eyes adjusted. Inside, the bar held its usual hour: half-full pints, old maps on the walls curling at the edges, a trumpet line crawling out of the speakers, men pretending not to look at one another. Silas polished a glass behind the counter with the kind of patience that turned the act into surveillance. His silver signet ring flashed each time he rolled the cloth through his hands. “You’re late,” he told her. Aurora dropped the delivery bag on a stool. “Table twelve in Bloomsbury wanted extra chilli oil and a confession.” Silas set the glass down. “Did you give them both?” “I gave them a receipt.” The corner of his mouth moved. He reached for a clean tumbler. “You looked frozen through the window.” “I was bargaining with the weather.” He poured a finger of whisky without asking and nudged it across the bar. Aurora wrapped her hand round the glass, let the heat climb into her palm. The crescent scar on her left wrist showed white against her skin, thin as a clipped moon. She took a sip and breathed through it. The door opened behind her. A gust of rain came in, cold and metallic. Someone stamped water from the soles of their shoes, gave a quick apology to no one in particular, and moved further inside. Aurora glanced over her shoulder because the voice had scraped at something old before her mind caught up. A woman stood under the low amber light, one hand still on the door, the other holding a folded umbrella like a walking stick. Her coat hung open over a dark green dress, expensive wool, neat lines. Her hair, once a rough cloud of copper curls that had gone everywhere at once, had been cut to the jaw and blown smooth. A pale scar nicked one eyebrow. She had become narrow where she had once seemed all elbows and laughter. The woman looked at the room with the quick measurement of a person entering the wrong place and preparing to leave. Then she saw Aurora. For a second neither of them moved. The years between Cardiff and Soho rose up intact, all the missed calls and deleted messages, all the streets not walked together. “Megan?” Aurora heard her own voice come out stripped bare. Megan Price gave one small, disbelieving breath. “Christ.” Silas looked from one face to the other. He reached for another glass and thought better of it. Aurora set her whisky down. “You’re in London.” “I could say the same.” “I live here.” “Clearly.” Megan’s eyes flicked to the delivery bag, then back to Aurora’s face. “I didn’t know this was your place.” “It isn’t. I live upstairs.” Silas put a dry hand flat on the bar. “If this reunion needed witness protection, I had a back room.” Aurora almost smiled. “Silas, this is Megan. University. Cardiff.” Megan nodded with the automatic politeness of someone raised well enough to wear manners even when wrong-footed. “Hello.” “Silas Blackwood.” He inclined his head. “You looked soaked. Drink?” “Red wine.” “House red or the bottle I kept hidden from the accountants?” Megan blinked once. “The hidden one.” Silas moved away with that slight drag in his left leg, subtle unless you knew to watch for it. Aurora kept her eyes on Megan because looking anywhere else would have made the moment skittish and absurd. “You cut your hair,” Aurora said. “You vanished.” There it was. No warm-up. No gentle circling. Aurora picked up her glass again though she did not drink. “That too.” Megan rested the umbrella against the bar and shrugged out of her coat. The green dress fit like a choice made after several better options. She used to dress in whatever came off the floor first. Once she had gone to a lecture in a rugby shirt and silver boots and argued contract law so well the lecturer lost his notes halfway through listening. Silas returned with a glass of wine and set it before Megan. He lingered long enough to ask, “Food?” They both answered at once. “No.” “Maybe.” They looked at one another. Something old and easy nearly surfaced, then sank again. Silas gave Aurora a look that measured weather fronts. “Kitchen’s got bread and olives.” Megan touched the stem of her glass. “That would be lovely.” When he left, the bar noise filled the gap. Cutlery tapped. Someone laughed too loudly at the far end. Rain rattled against the windows and slid down in crooked paths. Megan took a sip. “I was meeting a client two doors down. He cancelled by text after I got out of the cab. I saw the sign, thought I’d salvage the trip.” “You still hate wasting lipstick on empty rooms.” “You remember that.” “You wore red to torts because you thought the lecturer feared women with opinions.” “He did.” Aurora let out a short breath that could have been a laugh. It disappeared fast. “You look different.” “You don’t.” Megan’s reply landed with no softness on it. Her eyes moved over Aurora’s face as if checking for damage hidden in plain sight. Aurora leaned one elbow on the bar. “That wasn’t a compliment.” “It wasn’t an insult.” Megan held the glass by the bowl, not the stem. Same as before. “You still look like you’re waiting for someone to make a move so you can get there first.” “You used to call that efficient.” “I used to call a lot of things charming.” Silas arrived with a plate of bread torn into rough pieces, olives shining in a dish of oil, and a wedge of hard cheese. He set them down between the two women like a truce drafted on short notice. Aurora picked up a piece of bread and tore it smaller without eating it. “What brought you to client dinners in Soho? Last I heard, you were heading to Bristol for chambers.” “Last you heard was a long time ago.” Megan took an olive, bit it clean from the stone. “I’m in London. Commercial litigation. Too many hours, too much coffee, not enough daylight. The usual prize for making your tutors proud.” “You wanted that.” “I did.” Megan turned the empty stone in her fingers, then left it beside the plate. “I also wanted to keep my friends.” Aurora’s grip tightened around the bread until oil pressed into her fingertips. “You had every right to be angry.” “That’s the first straight thing you’ve said.” Silas kept his distance now, polishing bottles that did not need polishing. He had the tact of a man who knew when conversation turned into live wire. Aurora stared at the old map of the Black Sea behind the bar. Cracks ran across the glass frame like age in a face. “I left fast.” “You left in silence.” “I know.” “No note. No call. Nothing.” Megan spoke in an even tone that made the words cut cleaner. “Your number died. Your student room got emptied by a woman from the letting agency who thought your books were mould. I went back three times. I rang your parents. Your mother told me you were safe and that was all she’d say.” Aurora looked down at her wrist, thumb grazing the pale scar there. A childish wound. Old enough to stop meaning anything. “Mum always did believe in saying less.” Megan gave a dry smile that vanished at once. “I thought you were dead for two weeks.” The bar thinned around them. Someone paid cash and left. The trumpet on the speakers gave way to a piano recording full of spaces between notes. Aurora lifted her head. “I’m sorry.” Megan laughed once under her breath. Not with humour. “I used to imagine this moment. You know that? In Tesco. On a train. At some funeral where everyone looked surprised by the wrong thing. In every version, you had a speech prepared.” “I’m not good at speeches.” “You used to be.” “I used to stand in lecture halls and pretend I believed anything I was arguing.” “That wasn’t what I meant.” Aurora took a drink. The whisky burned lower this time, slower. “What did you mean?” Megan rested both palms on the bar. Her nails were short, unpainted. “You used to trust me with the ugly bits.” Aurora felt that one low in the ribs. “I trusted you with a lot.” “Not the part that mattered.” The air near the counter had gone close. Aurora unzipped her jacket an inch. She could smell wet wool from Megan’s coat, wine, old wood, a trace of citrus from the rind Silas had dropped in a gin at the far end. “I didn’t know how to talk about it then,” she said. “Evan.” Aurora looked up at the sound of his name. Megan did not flinch. She only watched. Silas set down a bottle a touch too hard. Glass clicked on wood. He looked elsewhere. Aurora’s mouth flattened. “You always did enjoy ripping plasters off.” “And you always did leave them on until the skin went rotten.” For a moment the old university library seemed to rise between them: stale carpet, high windows, Megan sprawled over case notes, Aurora with a yellow marker tucked behind one ear, both of them twenty and insolent and certain that damage happened to other people. Then another room crowded in over it. Evan by a kitchen sink in a student flat. A mug broken in the basin. His quiet voice turned sharp as wire. Aurora set her glass down before it slipped. Megan softened first, though only by a degree. “I knew he was wrong for you.” “Everyone did.” “No.” Megan shook her head. “Everyone knew he was arrogant. That’s different. I knew you shrank around him.” Aurora rubbed at a drop of oil on the bar with the side of her thumb. “You told me once.” “I told you more than once.” “You also told me he’d get bored and leave.” Megan’s jaw shifted. “I was twenty-one.” “So was I.” “I still should’ve done more.” Aurora looked at her then, properly. Beneath the polished coat and controlled voice, tiredness had settled under Megan’s eyes in half-moons. The scar through her eyebrow pulled slightly when she frowned. She had become somebody who held herself together by arrangement, not instinct. “You aren’t the reason I left,” Aurora said. “I know that.” “Do you?” Megan drank wine before answering. “Some days.” Aurora exhaled through her nose. “He put his fist through a door two inches from my head.” Megan’s fingers froze around the glass. Aurora kept going because stopping would have been cowardice dressed as dignity. “Not my head. The door. That mattered to me then. I built whole legal arguments out of that difference.” She gave a brittle smile. “Very on brand.” Megan said nothing. “He smashed my phone the next week because I laughed at the wrong moment. Then he cried. Then I stayed.” Aurora picked up an olive and rolled it through the oil. “When I finally left, I couldn’t bear the audience. Not my parents, not tutors, not you. Especially not you.” “Why me?” “Because you’d have looked at me and known exactly what I’d allowed.” Megan’s face changed then, not much, but enough. The set of the mouth loosened. Her shoulders dropped a fraction. “Rory.” Aurora winced at the old nickname. She had not heard Megan use it in years. Eva still did, sometimes Silas when he wanted something from her, but from Megan it came carrying lecture halls and late chips on Queen Street and cigarette smoke outside the students’ union. “I didn’t need you to be impressed,” Megan said. “I needed you alive.” The room blurred for one quick, infuriating second. Aurora blinked it clear. “I know that now.” “And then?” “Then I needed to disappear before I changed my mind.” Silas drifted over and collected an empty glass from two stools down, giving them cover without pretending not to listen. His presence steadied the room. Megan turned the wine stem between her fingers. “Eva knew where you were?” Aurora nodded. “She wouldn’t tell me.” “I asked her not to.” “I hated her for a year.” “She hated me for six months.” “That tracked.” Aurora almost smiled again. This time it stayed a little longer. “You two always did compete for dramatic loyalty.” “Neither of us won.” Rain thudded harder, then eased, the window shivering under it. Outside, a cab crawled past in yellow blur. Inside, Silas lit a candle that had burned low on a table by the wall, his signet ring flashing in the flame. Megan reached for bread at last and tore it neatly. “You worked deliveries?” “I worked whatever paid quickly and asked few questions.” “And now?” “And now I still work deliveries.” Aurora tipped her head towards the kitchen door. “Golden Empress. Evenings mostly. I help Silas here when he needs an extra pair of eyes.” Megan looked round the bar with fresh attention. “An extra pair of eyes for what?” “Spilled drinks. bad lies. the end of civilisation.” Silas spoke without turning. “In that order.” Megan’s mouth twitched. “You live upstairs, carry takeaway through the rain, and drink whisky in a spy novel of a pub.” “When you make it sound like that, I seem underqualified.” “You were never underqualified.” “That’s rich from a woman billing six-minute units.” She accepted that with a dip of the chin. “Fair.” Aurora watched her for a moment. “What happened to your eyebrow?” Megan touched the scar by reflex, as though she had forgotten it was there. “Cyclist in Clerkenwell. He believed red lights were bourgeois.” “That’s disappointingly ordinary.” “You sound disappointed.” “I expected a duel.” “I aged out of duels.” Megan paused. “Though I did throw a stapler at a senior associate last winter.” Aurora laughed then, a clean sound that startled both of them. The tightness in Megan’s face cracked. For one brief stretch of seconds they looked like themselves, or some earlier draft. Then Megan set down the bread and asked, quieter, “Why didn’t you come back?” Aurora’s laugh died with no struggle. She looked at the maps, the bottles, Silas’s bent head, anywhere but Megan. “To Cardiff?” “To me.” The question sat between the olives and the cheese like another plate. Aurora pressed her thumb into the scar on her wrist until feeling sharpened. “Because every month that passed made it uglier.” “That wasn’t the real reason.” “No?” Megan held her gaze. “No.” Aurora could have lied. The old skill still lived in her bones, polished by years of keeping men calm and landlords patient and customers cheerful. Instead she rested both hands on the bar and let the truth stand up. “You knew me before I got frightened,” she said. Megan did not move. “You knew the version of me who answered lecturers back, who never missed deadlines, who thought she could outthink any room.” Aurora swallowed. “I could not bear your face if it showed me I’d lost her.” Megan looked down into her wine. The bar hummed around them, low and grainy. When she looked up again, something in her own expression had gone unguarded. “I lost things too,” she said. Aurora waited. Megan rubbed at a water mark with her thumb. “My father died the year after you left.” Aurora stilled. “Meg.” “It was quick. Stroke. He’d been shouting at the television ten minutes before.” Megan gave a hollow sort of smile. “One minute he wanted tea. Next minute I was picking a blouse for the funeral because my mother couldn’t remember where she kept black.” She drew breath through her nose. “I rang your old number that night. Stupid habit. I wanted to tell you. I knew it wouldn’t work.” Aurora’s throat tightened. “I didn’t know.” “Of course you didn’t.” “I’m sorry.” Megan’s eyes shone but stayed dry. “I got married as well.” Aurora blinked. “You what?” “Briefly.” That pulled a startled breath from Aurora that almost became a laugh and didn’t dare. “Briefly?” “Eighteen months if you’re counting legal facts. Two years if you count the furniture.” Megan took another sip. “Her name was Hannah. She made ceramic lamps and hated my billable hours.” Aurora stared, then let her surprise show because anything else would have insulted them both. “You married a lamp maker and never told me.” “You were missing.” “I see the obstacle.” Megan’s shoulder shifted under the green dress. “We ended it without bloodshed. That felt like a triumph.” Aurora nodded slowly. “You changed.” Megan met that with a steady look. “So did you.” Silas came near enough to wipe the bar between them though there was nothing there to wipe. “Another round?” Aurora looked at Megan. Megan looked at the half-empty wine, then at Aurora’s whisky, then at Silas. “Yes.” “Same again?” he asked. Aurora slid her empty glass forward. “Please.” Silas collected both. “You two looked as though you’d earned it.” When he moved off, Megan let her hand rest on the bar, palm open, not reaching, just there. Aurora noticed the faint white line where a ring had once sat. “Eva still in Hackney?” Megan asked. “Last week she was. This week she could be in Marrakesh for all I know.” “That also tracked.” Aurora traced a knot in the wood with one fingertip. “She’d like to know I saw you.” “Would she?” “She pretends she doesn’t collect people. Then she notices when one goes missing.” Megan nodded and looked towards the window where the rain had thinned to a sheen on the glass. “I nearly walked out when I saw you.” “Why didn’t you?” “You looked tired.” Aurora let out a breath. “That convinced you to stay?” “You used to stay for people on their worst day. I thought I owed the ghost of that girl a drink.” Aurora absorbed the hit and the kindness inside it. “She was smug.” “She was unbearable.” “She still is.” Megan gave her a long look, then leaned in a fraction. “Good.” Silas set down the fresh drinks. Aurora’s whisky glowed amber; Megan’s wine held the candlelight in its bowl like a dark ruby. Neither woman reached at once. “On the house?” Megan asked. Silas braced one hand on the bar. “No. I’m sentimental, not reckless.” Aurora snorted. Megan looked from Silas to Aurora. “How long have you known each other?” “Long enough,” Silas answered. “She turned up with one bag and a face like a locked door,” he added. “I had a room upstairs and poor judgement.” Aurora touched the rim of her glass. “He means charity.” “I mean rent paid late but in full.” Megan studied Silas with fresh curiosity, then Aurora again, as if fitting this version of her into place. “So this is where you landed.” “For now.” “Is it good?” Aurora thought about the deliveries through rain and traffic, the stairs up to her flat, the black-and-white photographs on the walls, Silas’s quiet knock when he sensed she had been upstairs too long with the lights off. “Sometimes,” she said. “More than before.” Megan accepted the answer. She lifted her glass, not quite a toast, more an acknowledgement of terms. Aurora raised hers in return, and the two women drank while the rain withdrew from the street outside and the green neon sign kept breathing over the door.
created_at"2026-03-09T22:35:55.28Z" 3/9/2026, 10:35:55 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences190
tagDensity0.163
leniency0.326
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3294
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"quickly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3294
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count3
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"efficient"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"flicked"
2"measured"
3"efficient"
4"silence"
5"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences218
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences218
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences378
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3294
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions161
wordCount2068
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity3.19
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity7
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Raven1
Nest1
Aurora66
Cardiff1
Price1
Silas25
Megan60
Black1
Sea1
Queen1
Street1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Aurora"
2"Price"
3"Silas"
4"Megan"
5"Queen"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"Street"
globalScore0
windowScore0
64.97% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences147
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"seemed all elbows and laughter"
1"as if checking for damage hidden in plain sight"
2"looked like themselves, or some earlier d"
3"as if fitting this version of her into place"
4"not quite a toast, more an acknowledgement of terms"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.304
wordCount3294
matches
0"not much, but enough"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences378
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs215
mean15.32
std15.34
cv1.002
sampleLengths
077
166
25
319
410
55
618
76
853
936
1018
1180
1221
134
1429
151
169
178
1818
198
205
213
2220
235
2420
259
2618
2710
282
2911
306
3137
326
332
348
3513
3664
3719
385
391
401
4114
4214
4311
4430
4532
468
473
4814
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences218
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs353
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences378
ratio0.003
matches
0"Aurora’s whisky glowed amber; Megan’s wine held the candlelight in its bowl like a dark ruby."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1772
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.030474040632054177
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.006207674943566591
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences378
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences378
mean8.71
std7.11
cv0.816
sampleLengths
017
131
229
334
418
514
65
78
811
95
105
115
126
136
146
156
1614
1714
1817
198
205
219
2222
2318
2424
2513
2624
276
2813
2921
304
317
3222
331
349
357
361
378
3810
395
403
415
423
4313
447
455
469
4711
483
496
45.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2275132275132275
totalSentences378
uniqueOpeners86
84.60% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences197
matches
0"Then she saw Aurora."
1"Once she had gone to"
2"Then another room crowded in"
3"Then Megan set down the"
4"Instead she rested both hands"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences197
matches
0"She kicked the door shut"
1"His silver signet ring flashed"
2"he told her"
3"He reached for a clean"
4"He poured a finger of"
5"She took a sip and"
6"Her coat hung open over"
7"Her hair, once a rough"
8"She had become narrow where"
9"He reached for another glass"
10"He inclined his head"
11"She used to dress in"
12"He lingered long enough to"
13"They both answered at once."
14"They looked at one another."
15"It disappeared fast."
16"Her eyes moved over Aurora’s"
17"He set them down between"
18"He had the tact of"
19"Her nails were short, unpainted."
ratio0.168
10.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount177
totalSentences197
matches
0"The rain had worked soot"
1"Aurora came in through the"
2"She kicked the door shut"
3"Silas polished a glass behind"
4"His silver signet ring flashed"
5"he told her"
6"Aurora dropped the delivery bag"
7"Silas set the glass down."
8"The corner of his mouth"
9"He reached for a clean"
10"He poured a finger of"
11"Aurora wrapped her hand round"
12"The crescent scar on her"
13"She took a sip and"
14"The door opened behind her."
15"A gust of rain came"
16"Someone stamped water from the"
17"Aurora glanced over her shoulder"
18"A woman stood under the"
19"Her coat hung open over"
ratio0.898
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences197
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Silas kept his distance now, polishing bottles that did not need polishing."
1"Megan touched the scar by reflex, as though she had forgotten it was there."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Megan set down, quieter,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"He lingered (linger)"
1"Megan spoke (speak)"
2"Megan set down (set dow)"
3"he added (add)"
dialogueSentences190
tagDensity0.084
leniency0.168
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.042
86.2451%