Run: 2026-03-09-01KKACA4DKCFKHXMJFQJPGP8A1

Run Details

Duration:
1m 7s
Cost:
$0.043844
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last stretch of Richmond Park looked ordinary enough to insult the walk. Rory stood with her hands buried in the pockets of her jacket and stared through a stand of old oaks that leaned over the frost-bitten grass. Dog walkers moved in the distance. A cyclist rattled past on the path behind them. The sky hung low and pale over London, a flat sheet of winter light. Then her Heartstone pendant throbbed once against her chest. Warm. Distinct. Like a second pulse. Nyx lifted their head. In the daylight they held shape with effort, a tall human outline cut from a deeper kind of dark, edges rippling where the weak sun touched them. Their violet eyes glimmered under the branches. “You felt that.” Rory drew the pendant free of her jumper. The deep crimson stone glowed from within, not bright enough to cast light, but alive enough to make the silver chain tremble against her fingers. “I did.” “It isn’t Hel.” “No,” Nyx murmured. “This tasted cleaner.” Ahead, the trees crowded together around a ring of ancient standing stones. Not stone, exactly. Oak trunks. Each one wider than Rory’s shoulders, bark gone silver with age, roots humped up through the earth like the backs of sleeping animals. They had no business standing in a perfect circle. No business feeling older than the park around them. Isolde waited between two of the trunks, silver hair loose to her waist, pale as river water under cloud. Her dress caught the wind without moving. Grass bent under Rory’s boots, but where Isolde stood, frost lay unmarked. “You found the threshold,” Isolde said. “You made it sound less dramatic over the phone.” “Doors dislike honesty. They become self-conscious.” Rory snorted and stepped closer. The air changed before she reached the ring. The smell of wet soil deepened. Birdsong from the park thinned to a few distant notes, as if the sound had to cross water to reach them. Nyx stopped at the edge of the shadow cast by the nearest oak. “This place remembers names,” they said. Isolde’s lavender eyes flicked to them. “So do you.” Rory looked from one to the other. “Right. Lovely. Before the trees start asking for my National Insurance number, are we going in?” Isolde turned and slipped between the trunks. Not one twig cracked underfoot. “Come before the grove changes its mind.” Rory touched the crescent scar on her left wrist without thinking, then grabbed the pendant and stepped through. Cold struck first. Not winter cold. This felt fine and sharp, a blade laid along the inside of her arms. The world buckled around her with a soft rush. Colours stretched. Sound folded in on itself. For one horrible second she felt the park peel away behind her like paper in water. Then the ground steadied. She sucked in a breath. The clearing inside the ring bore no relation to the park outside. The sky overhead had no proper colour. It shifted in slow currents from pearl to blue to a green so pale it looked poured from glass. Branches rose around them in impossible heights, the trees white-barked and smooth, their leaves made of thin translucent blades that chimed when the breeze touched them. Wildflowers spilled across the ground in every season at once: foxgloves beside crocuses, bluebells under roses, star-shaped white flowers that opened and shut with a faint clicking sound. The air carried too many scents for one place—honey, rain on stone, crushed mint, smoke, apples split with a knife. Rory turned in a slow circle. “This is in Richmond.” Isolde glanced back. “In the same way a reflection lives in a mirror.” Nyx stepped through after her, and the shadows under the trees seemed to breathe in relief. Their outline sharpened. Their shoulders settled. “They built the boundary into living wood.” They rested a hand against one of the silver trunks. “Old craft. Older than the Veil in some places.” The word lodged under Rory’s ribs. The Veil. The barrier everyone kept talking around, as if naming it too clearly might put cracks in it. Here she could almost see it: a shimmer in the air at the far edge of the clearing, like heat above a road, except the distortion bent light inward instead of up. She reached towards it. Isolde caught her wrist. The Fae woman’s fingers felt cool and dry as leaves. “Touch the skin of the place after it touches you back.” Rory looked at her hand, then at Isolde. “That meant something in your head.” “It will mean more in a moment.” A shape darted through the flowers. Rory flinched and crouched at once, instinct outrunning pride. Something the size of a rabbit paused beside a stone covered in silver moss. It had six delicate legs and a face like a deer carved from milk glass. Fern fronds grew from its spine. It lowered its head, tore a mouthful of violets from the ground, and stared at Rory with huge black eyes. Nyx tilted their head. “It has no shadow.” The creature bounded away in three clean leaps and vanished behind a drift of luminous ferns. Rory rose, brushing dirt from her knee. “Please tell me that wasn’t normal even by your standards.” Isolde smiled without warmth. “Normal is a habit, not a law.” They followed her along a path Rory could have sworn had not existed a second earlier. Smooth black stones pressed up through the earth in a winding line. They were warm through the soles of her boots. The flowers leaned aside as they passed. Somewhere above them, water ran uphill with a low silver hiss. The deeper they went, the less human scale survived. A fallen trunk lay to their left, hollowed and turned into a corridor of amber light, its inner wood glowing like banked coals. Mushroom caps the size of umbrellas clustered at its base, breathing out gold spores that hung in the air like dust in cathedral light. On their right, a pool spread between roots thicker than roads. Its surface reflected not the shifting sky above but a black field crowded with stars. Every now and then one of the reflected stars moved, dragging a white trail across the water. Rory stopped at the pool. “That’s not a reflection.” “No,” Isolde replied. Rory crouched near the edge. The water smelled of frost and iron. She could see her own face in it if she tilted her head, but behind her reflection lay the star-filled dark, immense and depthless. “What happens if I fall in?” “You arrive elsewhere,” Isolde said. “Where?” “Yes.” Rory looked over her shoulder. “Do you ever answer a straight question?” “I answered the shape of it.” Nyx stood on the opposite side of the pool, the false starlight washing their silhouette in blue-white lines. “This water touches more than one realm.” Rory rose. “You can tell that from a puddle?” Nyx’s mouth shifted, not quite a smile. “I spent centuries being dragged along the seams.” That shut her up for a beat. They moved on. The grove had a way of stretching distance without seeming to. A cluster of trees ahead would stay the same size no matter how long they walked, then suddenly stand beside them. Sounds travelled strangely. Once Rory heard laughter, light and high and close enough to raise the hairs on her neck. She spun towards it and found only a curtain of willow branches swaying over empty ground. Another time she heard what sounded like cutlery laid on porcelain, neat little chinks from somewhere under the roots. Nyx heard it too. Their head turned sharply. “Do not follow music here.” “That wasn’t music.” “In this place, it was.” The path sloped down into a wide hollow where the air glowed blue. No source. Just blue suspended through the space, bright enough to silver the edges of their clothes. The ground dipped under a canopy of branches braided so tightly they formed a roof. From that woven ceiling hung long strands of crystal pods, each one filled with a slow swirl of light. Some held green mist. Some amber sparks. Some a dark red fluid thick as wine. Rory stared up. “What are those?” “Memories that grew teeth,” Isolde said. Rory gave her a look. “Useful.” “One of my kinder explanations.” The pods clicked together overhead like glass bones. In the centre of the hollow stood a stone table half swallowed by roots. Not carved by any mason Rory knew. The surface seemed worn by centuries of hands, and yet the edges still held delicate patterns: leaves, antlers, eyes, waves, all worked into one another until they became impossible to separate. Around it lay offerings, some fresh, some ancient. A braid of black hair tied with gold thread. Three pears with silver skin. A cup full of teeth. A child’s wooden whistle split down one side. Rory slowed. “Who left those?” “Those who wanted something,” Isolde replied. “And did they get it?” Isolde ran a finger over the rim of the cup without touching the teeth. “They got an answer.” “That is not the same thing.” “It is here.” Nyx bent near the stone table. Shadows pooled at their feet, deeper than the blue glow allowed. Their eyes fixed on a crack running across the centre of the slab. “This cut came from iron.” Isolde’s expression sharpened. “You see old wounds.” “I am one.” Rory stepped to the table and set a hand on the edge before Isolde could stop her. The stone shivered. Not under her palm. Through her. A tremor shot up her arm and into her teeth. The blue light in the hollow dimmed. Every crystal pod above them turned at once. Rory jerked back. “What did I do?” The answer came from the grove itself. A long note rang through the trees, rich and metallic, like a bell struck underwater. The flowers at the edges of the hollow folded shut. The roots around the table tightened with a sound like knuckles cracking. In the crack across the slab, something gold gleamed. Nyx moved in front of Rory without thought, shadow climbing their arms like smoke made solid. “Stay behind me.” “Oh, now you tell me.” Isolde stepped to the table, face gone still. Not blank. Alert, sharpened, listening with her whole body. Her bare feet hovered a breath above the earth. “It woke,” she murmured. The gold in the crack brightened. Not metal. An eye. Large as a coin. Slitted pupil. Iris made of molten amber. Rory’s hand flew to the cold hilt tucked under her coat. The Fae-forged blade came free in one clean motion. Moonsilver caught the blue light and answered with its own pale glow. The dagger felt as cold as river ice, steady in her grip. The eye blinked. The entire hollow inhaled. Pods overhead swelled with light. The woven branches creaked. Somewhere beneath the roots, many feet shifted in dry earth. Rory set her stance and kept the blade low. “Isolde.” The Seer did not look away from the crack in the stone. “You crossed the first skin of the grove,” she said. “Now it asks whether you came as guest, thief, or wound.” Rory’s grip tightened on the dagger. “And how do I answer that?” The eye in the table widened, amber light spilling across the carved leaves and antlers, over the old offerings, over Nyx’s shadowed hands, over the scar at Rory’s wrist where her sleeve had slipped back. Isolde finally turned her head and met Rory’s gaze. “With something it cannot bear to misunderstand.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.172
leniency0.345
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1934
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sharply"
2"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1934
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"crystal"
count2
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"perfect"
3"flicked"
4"warmth"
5"porcelain"
6"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences173
matches
0"e in relief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences173
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences221
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1933
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
55.26% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions70
wordCount1636
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
London1
Heartstone1
Ahead1
Rory31
Isolde18
Veil1
Fae2
Fae-forged1
Seer1
Nyx11
persons
0"Ahead"
1"Rory"
2"Isolde"
3"Seer"
4"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.553
windowScore0.667
59.91% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences111
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"as if naming it too clearly might put cracks in it"
1"not quite a smile"
2"sounded like cutlery laid on porcelain, ne"
3"seemed worn by centuries of hands, and yet the edges still held delicate patterns: leaves, antlers, eyes, waves, all worked into one another until they became impossible to separate"
96.53% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.035
wordCount1933
matches
0"not bright enough to cast light, but alive enough to make the silver chain tremble against her fi"
1"not the shifting sky above but a black field crowded with stars"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences221
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs128
mean15.1
std20.15
cv1.335
sampleLengths
013
155
29
36
438
53
633
72
83
96
1058
1138
126
139
146
1540
1613
176
186
193
207
2116
2212
237
2418
2552
264
275
2812
29100
306
314
323
3310
3422
3526
3657
374
384
3910
4011
418
426
437
4470
454
464
4716
487
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs262
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences221
ratio0.005
matches
0"The air carried too many scents for one place—honey, rain on stone, crushed mint, smoke, apples split with a knife."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1643
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.032866707242848445
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004869141813755326
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences221
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences221
mean8.75
std6.48
cv0.741
sampleLengths
013
126
26
39
414
59
61
71
84
94
1027
117
123
138
1425
152
163
173
183
1912
203
212
2223
239
249
2519
267
2712
286
299
306
315
328
336
3421
3513
366
376
383
397
4016
417
425
437
4418
453
463
4714
489
492
55.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3665158371040724
totalSentences221
uniqueOpeners81
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences151
matches
0"Then her Heartstone pendant throbbed"
1"Then the ground steadied."
2"Somewhere above them, water ran"
3"Once Rory heard laughter, light"
4"Just blue suspended through the"
5"Somewhere beneath the roots, many"
ratio0.04
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences151
matches
0"Their violet eyes glimmered under"
1"They had no business standing"
2"Her dress caught the wind"
3"She sucked in a breath."
4"It shifted in slow currents"
5"Their outline sharpened."
6"Their shoulders settled."
7"They rested a hand against"
8"She reached towards it."
9"It had six delicate legs"
10"It lowered its head, tore"
11"They followed her along a"
12"They were warm through the"
13"Its surface reflected not the"
14"She could see her own"
15"They moved on."
16"She spun towards it and"
17"Their head turned sharply."
18"Their eyes fixed on a"
19"Her bare feet hovered a"
ratio0.132
42.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount126
totalSentences151
matches
0"The last stretch of Richmond"
1"Rory stood with her hands"
2"Dog walkers moved in the"
3"A cyclist rattled past on"
4"The sky hung low and"
5"Nyx lifted their head."
6"Their violet eyes glimmered under"
7"Rory drew the pendant free"
8"The deep crimson stone glowed"
9"Each one wider than Rory’s"
10"They had no business standing"
11"Isolde waited between two of"
12"Her dress caught the wind"
13"Grass bent under Rory’s boots,"
14"Rory snorted and stepped closer."
15"The air changed before she"
16"The smell of wet soil"
17"Birdsong from the park thinned"
18"Nyx stopped at the edge"
19"Isolde’s lavender eyes flicked to"
ratio0.834
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences151
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Rory stood with her hands buried in the pockets of her jacket and stared through a stand of old oaks that leaned over the frost-bitten grass."
1"Branches rose around them in impossible heights, the trees white-barked and smooth, their leaves made of thin translucent blades that chimed when the breeze tou…"
2"Wildflowers spilled across the ground in every season at once: foxgloves beside crocuses, bluebells under roses, star-shaped white flowers that opened and shut …"
3"Mushroom caps the size of umbrellas clustered at its base, breathing out gold spores that hung in the air like dust in cathedral light."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.155
leniency0.31
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.069
89.3305%