Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFCD7265554G7R1GWS315G0

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Duration:
1m 38s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Nvidia

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora pulled the collar of her jacket tighter against the night’s bite, the silver chain of the Heartstone pendant catching the weak glow of a streetlamp far behind her. The pendant’s crimson stone throbbed once, a slow, warm pulse against her sternum, then fell silent. She frowned, thumb brushing the smooth facet. It had been quiet all the way from the Golden Empress, but now, as she stepped through the moss‑choked gap between two ancient oaks, the warmth returned—faint, insistent, like a heartbeat pressed to her palm. The grove opened before her, a clearing that seemed to swallow the night’s darkness whole. Wildflowers—bluebells, oxeye daisies, something pale and luminous she couldn’t name—blanketed the ground in colors that should have belonged to noon. Their scent rose, sweet and cloying, mingling with the damp earth and a hint of something metallic, like old blood left to rust in a bucket. Aurora inhaled, the smell filling her lungs, and for a moment the world narrowed to the soft press of petals against her boots. She had come here because the pendant had whispered. Not literally—there had been no voice, only a tug in her chest, a sensation that the stone grew warmer when she faced a certain direction. Eva had warned her not to chase shadows, but Rory had never been good at ignoring a puzzle. The pendant had been a gift from an unknown benefactor, its origins as murky as the waters of the Thames at low tide. If it pulsed near a Hel portal, then perhaps the stories Eva had muttered over cheap lager about doors between worlds held a kernel of truth. Rory needed to know if the stories were true, if the pendant was more than a trinket, if there was something she could use to protect herself—and the people she cared about—if the veil ever tore. Her boots sank slightly into the loam as she crossed the threshold of the standing stones. The oaks, massive and gnarled, formed a rough circle, their bark etched with symbols that looked like runes but felt more like scratches made by frightened claws. The air inside the circle was still, too still; even the night’s usual chorus of crickets and distant traffic was muffled, as if the grove swallowed sound whole. She stopped, heart hammering against her ribs, and listened. The pendulum of her thoughts swung between rational explanation and creeping dread. It was just the wind, she told herself, the way it funneled through the trees, playing tricks on ears accustomed to the constant hum of London. Yet the wind didn’t explain the faint, rhythmic tapping she heard—like fingertips drumming on hollow wood—coming from nowhere and everywhere at once. She lifted the pendant, letting it dangle from her fingers. The crimson stone glowed faintly, its inner light pulsing in time with the tapping. Warmth spread up her wrist, a comforting heat that made the scar on her left palm throb in sympathy. She pressed the pendant to her chest, feeling the beat of her own heart sync with the stone’s throb. A rustle to her left made her whip her head sideways. Nothing but a sway of tall grass, the flowers bending as if brushed by an invisible hand. She exhaled, laughing softly at herself. “Get a grip, Rory,” she muttered, the words sounding too loud in the hushed space. “It’s just the grove playing tricks.” She took another step forward, the pendant now warm enough to make her skin prickle. The wildflowers seemed to shift under her gaze, their petals turning ever so slightly, as if following her movement. She stopped again, staring at a clump of oxeye daisies that had, a moment ago, faced east. Now their heads were turned west, their white faces tilted toward the dark line of trees beyond the circle. “Okay,” she said, voice steadier than she felt. “Time to see what you really are.” She closed her eyes, focusing on the pendant’s warmth, letting it guide her. When she opened them, the grove looked the same—yet something had shifted. The standing stones, which had seemed immovable, now appeared to lean inward, their tops almost touching, forming a natural archway that framed a patch of ground darker than the surrounding moss. It was not a shadow cast by any visible source; it was an absence of light, a void that drank the moonlight and gave nothing back. She approached cautiously, each step sinking into the earth as though the soil had grown softer, more yielding. The tapping grew louder, now accompanied by a low, almost subsonic hum that vibrated in her molars. She felt it in her teeth, in the marrow of her bones. At the edge of the void, she halted. The pendant’s glow flared, casting a crimson halo that made the edges of the darkness flicker like a candle in a draft. She reached out, her fingertips trembling, and hovered them just above the threshold. The air there was cold, not the chill of night but a biting cold that seemed to sap warmth from her skin, making her breath plume in tiny, ghostly puffs that vanished before they could fully form. A whisper slithered from the void, not in any language she knew but in a tone that resonated with the marrow of her bones—a feeling of sorrow, of longing, of something ancient and patient. She pressed her palm against the invisible barrier, feeling a resistance like pressing against a thick membrane. The pendant pulsed harder, its warmth now bordering on painful. Images flashed behind her eyelids, not as visions but as sensations: the scent of wet stone, the sound of distant bells tolling underwater, the sensation of falling through a sky that was both black and blindingly white. She gasped, pulling her hand back as if burned. The tapping ceased. The hum dropped to a single, sustained note that seemed to emanate from the very stone of the standing stones themselves. The wildflowers around her stilled, their heads bowed as if in reverence—or fear. Aurora’s mind raced. She had come seeking proof, a tangible sign that the legends were real. Instead, she felt the weight of something watching her from the other side of the veil, aware of her presence, curious, perhaps hungry. The pendant had warned her of a Hel portal; she now understood that the warmth was not merely a signal but a lure, a beacon that called to whatever lay beyond. She swallowed, forcing her throat to work. “Who’s there?” Her voice came out hoarse, louder than she intended, echoing off the stones and returning to her as a distorted chant, as if spoken by many voices at once. No answer came, only the resumption of the tapping—now faster, more insistent—like someone rapping on a door from the other side. She thought of Eva, of Silas’ bar where she slept above the clink of glasses and low laughter, of the delivery routes that took her through London’s neon-lit streets, of the small crescent scar on her wrist that reminded her of a childhood fall she’d long forgotten. She thought of the life she had built, fragile as it was, and the terror of losing it to something she could not see, could not name. The pendant’s glow dimmed, the warmth receding until the stone lay cool against her skin. The void before her seemed to inhale, drawing the surrounding light inward, making the grove appear even darker, the flowers’ colors leached to pallid shades. A sudden, sharp crack split the silence—a branch snapping somewhere beyond the circle. Aurora jerked upright, eyes darting to the trees. Nothing moved, but the feeling of being watched intensified, a pressure at the base of her skull, as if icy fingers were tracing the ridges of her spine. She turned on her heel, heart hammering, and fled toward the gap in the oaks. The wildflowers slapped at her ankles, their stems surprisingly tough, as if trying to hold her back. The standing stones loomed, their faces now seeming to leer, the runes etched into their bark glowing faintly with an inner light that matched the pendant’s former pulse. She broke through the trees and stumbled onto the familiar path that led back to Richmond Park’s main trail. The night outside the grove was ordinary—streetlights flickered, a distant siren wailed, the rustle of leaves in the wind sounded exactly as it should. Yet as she ran, she could not shake the sensation that the tapping followed her, a faint echo in the cadence of her own footsteps, as if something had latched onto her stride and was walking just behind her, matching each step with a sound that was neither footfall nor breath. She did not look back. She kept running until the lights of Silas’ bar loomed ahead, a warm rectangle of yellow against the darkness. She flung open the door, the bell above jangling loudly, and leaned against the worn wood, breathing hard, the scent of stale ale and fried onions grounding her. Silas looked up from polishing a glass, his eyebrows rising at her disheveled state. “Rough night, Rory?” he asked, voice low and sympathetic. She forced a smile, her fingers instinctively finding the pendant at her throat. It lay cold and dull against her skin, no longer pulsing, no longer warm. “Just… needed some air,” she said, the words feeling thin and inadequate. “Got a little turned around.” Silas nodded, sliding a fresh pint toward her. “You look like you’ve seen a ghost.” She let out a short, humorless laugh that died before it left her lips. “Maybe,” she murmured, staring into the amber liquid. The tapping was gone now, replaced by the low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses. Yet, as she lifted the glass to her lips, she felt a faint pressure against her wrist, the scar there tingling as if reminding her of something she had left behind. She took a sip, the bitter liquid burning her throat, and glanced toward the window. The grove lay beyond the park’s fence, a dark smudge against the night sky, the standing stones indistinguishable from the surrounding trees. Somewhere within that pocket between worlds, the pendant lay dormant, waiting. Aurora tightened her grip on the glass, her knuckles whitening. She had come for answers. Instead, she had earned a warning. And whatever waited beyond the veil, it now knew she had been there. She would not forget the feel of that cold, the sound of the tapping, the way the flowers had turned their faces to watch her leave. She would not forget that, even in the safety of Silas’ bar, she was never truly alone. The grove had marked her, and the mark would linger, a quiet promise that the night was not done with her yet.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1813
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"cautiously"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
6
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"ever so slightly"
3"really"
4"cautiously"
5"very"
6"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1813
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count7
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"etched"
count2
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"comforting"
count1
7
word"throb"
count2
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"resonated"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"tangible"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"beacon"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"silence"
count1
19
word"tracing"
count1
20
word"loomed"
count2
21
word"familiar"
count1
22
word"flickered"
count1
23
word"echo"
count1
24
word"footsteps"
count1
25
word"footfall"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"pulsed"
4"etched"
5"rhythmic"
6"comforting"
7"throb"
8"vibrated"
9"flicker"
10"chill"
11"whisper"
12"resonated"
13"raced"
14"tangible"
15"weight"
16"beacon"
17"echoing"
18"silence"
19"tracing"
20"loomed"
21"familiar"
22"flickered"
23"echo"
24"footsteps"
25"footfall"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences96
matches
0"b in sympathy"
1"a feeling of sorrow"
53.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1800
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"It was just the wind, she told herself, the way it funneled through the trees, playing tricks on ears accustomed to the …"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount1693
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.3
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory2
Thames1
Hel2
Eva3
London1
Richmond1
Park1
Silas2
Aurora5
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Silas"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Golden"
1"Thames"
2"Hel"
3"London"
4"Richmond"
5"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"looked like runes but felt more like scra"
1"as if following her movement"
2"seemed immovable now appeared to lean inward, their tops almost touching, forming a natural archway that framed a patch of ground darker than the surrounding moss"
3"note that seemed to emanate from the very stone of the standing stones themselves"
4"as if trying to hold her back"
5"as if reminding her of something she had left behind"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.333
wordCount1800
matches
0"not to chase shadows, but Rory had never been good at ignoring a puzzle"
1"not the chill of night but a biting cold"
2"not in any language she knew but in a tone"
3"not as visions but as sensations: the scent of wet stone, the sound of distant"
4"not merely a signal but a lure, a beacon"
5"neither footfall nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"understood that the"
82.61% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean60
std26.35
cv0.439
sampleLengths
087
184
2137
371
469
562
655
770
815
982
1047
1180
1261
1346
1437
1570
1638
1721
1874
1940
2049
2160
2294
2352
2423
2544
2615
2770
2848
2999
97.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences96
matches
0"was muffled"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs285
matches
0"were tracing"
1"was walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences100
ratio0.14
matches
0"It had been quiet all the way from the Golden Empress, but now, as she stepped through the moss‑choked gap between two ancient oaks, the warmth returned—faint, insistent, like a heartbeat pressed to her palm."
1"Wildflowers—bluebells, oxeye daisies, something pale and luminous she couldn’t name—blanketed the ground in colors that should have belonged to noon."
2"Not literally—there had been no voice, only a tug in her chest, a sensation that the stone grew warmer when she faced a certain direction."
3"Rory needed to know if the stories were true, if the pendant was more than a trinket, if there was something she could use to protect herself—and the people she cared about—if the veil ever tore."
4"The air inside the circle was still, too still; even the night’s usual chorus of crickets and distant traffic was muffled, as if the grove swallowed sound whole."
5"Yet the wind didn’t explain the faint, rhythmic tapping she heard—like fingertips drumming on hollow wood—coming from nowhere and everywhere at once."
6"When she opened them, the grove looked the same—yet something had shifted."
7"It was not a shadow cast by any visible source; it was an absence of light, a void that drank the moonlight and gave nothing back."
8"A whisper slithered from the void, not in any language she knew but in a tone that resonated with the marrow of her bones—a feeling of sorrow, of longing, of something ancient and patient."
9"The wildflowers around her stilled, their heads bowed as if in reverence—or fear."
10"The pendant had warned her of a Hel portal; she now understood that the warmth was not merely a signal but a lure, a beacon that called to whatever lay beyond."
11"No answer came, only the resumption of the tapping—now faster, more insistent—like someone rapping on a door from the other side."
12"A sudden, sharp crack split the silence—a branch snapping somewhere beyond the circle."
13"The night outside the grove was ordinary—streetlights flickered, a distant siren wailed, the rustle of leaves in the wind sounded exactly as it should."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1139
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03511852502194908
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.010535557506584723
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean18
std9.46
cv0.525
sampleLengths
029
116
27
335
415
520
626
723
89
925
1018
1123
1226
1336
1416
1527
1628
179
1812
1926
2022
2110
2214
2319
2419
2511
2617
276
2815
296
3015
3119
3217
3319
348
357
3613
3712
3831
3926
4018
4117
4212
438
4422
4513
4637
4734
4817
4910
46.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.33
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners33
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences96
matches
0"Instead, she felt the weight"
1"Somewhere within that pocket between"
2"Instead, she had earned a"
ratio0.031
49.17% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences96
matches
0"She frowned, thumb brushing the"
1"It had been quiet all"
2"Their scent rose, sweet and"
3"She had come here because"
4"Her boots sank slightly into"
5"She stopped, heart hammering against"
6"It was just the wind,"
7"She lifted the pendant, letting"
8"She pressed the pendant to"
9"She exhaled, laughing softly at"
10"she muttered, the words sounding"
11"She took another step forward,"
12"She stopped again, staring at"
13"she said, voice steadier than"
14"She closed her eyes, focusing"
15"It was not a shadow"
16"She approached cautiously, each step"
17"She felt it in her"
18"She reached out, her fingertips"
19"She pressed her palm against"
ratio0.427
27.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences96
matches
0"Aurora pulled the collar of"
1"The pendant’s crimson stone throbbed"
2"She frowned, thumb brushing the"
3"It had been quiet all"
4"The grove opened before her,"
5"Wildflowers—bluebells, oxeye daisies, something pale"
6"Their scent rose, sweet and"
7"Aurora inhaled, the smell filling"
8"She had come here because"
9"Eva had warned her not"
10"The pendant had been a"
11"Rory needed to know if"
12"Her boots sank slightly into"
13"The oaks, massive and gnarled,"
14"The air inside the circle"
15"She stopped, heart hammering against"
16"The pendulum of her thoughts"
17"It was just the wind,"
18"She lifted the pendant, letting"
19"The crimson stone glowed faintly,"
ratio0.865
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences96
matches
0"If it pulsed near a"
1"Now their heads were turned"
2"Yet, as she lifted the"
ratio0.031
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"The oaks, massive and gnarled, formed a rough circle, their bark etched with symbols that looked like runes but felt more like scratches made by frightened claw…"
1"The air inside the circle was still, too still; even the night’s usual chorus of crickets and distant traffic was muffled, as if the grove swallowed sound whole…"
2"Warmth spread up her wrist, a comforting heat that made the scar on her left palm throb in sympathy."
3"Nothing but a sway of tall grass, the flowers bending as if brushed by an invisible hand."
4"The wildflowers seemed to shift under her gaze, their petals turning ever so slightly, as if following her movement."
5"She closed her eyes, focusing on the pendant’s warmth, letting it guide her."
6"The standing stones, which had seemed immovable, now appeared to lean inward, their tops almost touching, forming a natural archway that framed a patch of groun…"
7"It was not a shadow cast by any visible source; it was an absence of light, a void that drank the moonlight and gave nothing back."
8"She approached cautiously, each step sinking into the earth as though the soil had grown softer, more yielding."
9"The tapping grew louder, now accompanied by a low, almost subsonic hum that vibrated in her molars."
10"The air there was cold, not the chill of night but a biting cold that seemed to sap warmth from her skin, making her breath plume in tiny, ghostly puffs that va…"
11"A whisper slithered from the void, not in any language she knew but in a tone that resonated with the marrow of her bones—a feeling of sorrow, of longing, of so…"
12"Images flashed behind her eyelids, not as visions but as sensations: the scent of wet stone, the sound of distant bells tolling underwater, the sensation of fal…"
13"The hum dropped to a single, sustained note that seemed to emanate from the very stone of the standing stones themselves."
14"Nothing moved, but the feeling of being watched intensified, a pressure at the base of her skull, as if icy fingers were tracing the ridges of her spine."
15"The wildflowers slapped at her ankles, their stems surprisingly tough, as if trying to hold her back."
16"The standing stones loomed, their faces now seeming to leer, the runes etched into their bark glowing faintly with an inner light that matched the pendant’s for…"
17"Yet as she ran, she could not shake the sensation that the tapping followed her, a faint echo in the cadence of her own footsteps, as if something had latched o…"
18"Yet, as she lifted the glass to her lips, she felt a faint pressure against her wrist, the scar there tingling as if reminding her of something she had left beh…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she muttered, the words sounding too loud in the hushed space"
1"she said, voice steadier than she felt"
2"he asked, voice low and sympathetic"
3"she said, the words feeling thin and inadequate"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.4
67.8308%