Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFMZPJFREBKNNPASBMFJCT0

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Duration:
53.9s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Richmond Park gates had closed hours ago, but Aurora Carter slipped through a gap in the ancient ironwork like a whisper. The city’s glow was a muted amber smear behind her; ahead, the park dissolved into a deeper, more absolute darkness. She moved with a purposeful stride, her breath clouding in the unseasonably cold air, the strap of her courier bag cutting a familiar line across her chest. Beneath her jacket, the Heartstone pendant lay cool against her sternum, a steady, silent weight. She’d found the note in her flat that afternoon, tucked beneath the Golden Empress takeout menu. No signature, just precise, ink-black script on cream paper. *The Grove requires you. After midnight. Come alone.* Below the words, a map, sketched with uncanny accuracy, leading from the park’s outer edge to a place marked only with a small, intricate star. There was no question of ignoring it. The pendant—her only link to a world she was only beginning to understand—had been a gift from another such note. Whoever this benefactor was, they knew where she lived, they knew what she carried, and their communications carried a weight that felt less like a request and more like a gravitational pull. The path on the map wasn’t a path at all. It was a memory, a faint depression in the grass that led toward a copse of ancient oaks, their branches gnarled and intertwined like the fingers of praying crones. As she neared them, the air changed. The low hum of distant London traffic didn’t just fade; it was swallowed, erased, replaced by a silence so profound it felt pressurized in her ears. The stars overhead, previously veiled by city haze, now burned with a cold, diamond-hard clarity. She passed between two of the oaks, their bark slick with a dew that glowed faintly blue in the starlight, and stepped into the Fae Grove. The effect was instantaneous. It wasn’t a shift in scenery so much as a shift in *being*. The air grew warmer, thick with the scent of honey and damp earth and something else, something metallic and sweet like blood-orange. Wildflowers—poppies of impossible black, lilies that pulsed with a soft, bioluminescent green—carpeted the clearing, blooming defiant in the chill. At the center, a ring of standing stones, not granite but petrified oak, hummed with a silence that felt ancient and listening. Time felt… syrupy. The frantic, clock-watching anxiety that had dogged her for years, since Evan, since fleeing Cardiff, had simply ceased. Here, there was only the present moment, stretched and deep. This was the place from the old stories her Welsh mother used to tell, the place where time slipped its leash. It was beautiful. It was terrifying. “Okay,” she murmured, the word loud in the stillness. Her voice didn’t echo; it was absorbed instantly. She was here for a reason. She just didn’t know what it was yet. “I’m here.” Nothing. Only the silent, watchful stones and the perfumed air. She walked slowly toward the center, her boots making no sound on the lush turf. That was the first wrong thing. Her boots had thick, treaded soles. They should have crushed stems, snapped twigs. They made no impression at all. A cold finger traced the length of her spine. She stopped, hand instinctively going to the Heartstone under her shirt. It was warm. Not its usual, faint ambient warmth, but a distinct, radiating heat, as if a tiny coal had been placed against her skin. She pulled it out, holding the deep crimson gem in her palm. Its faint inner glow, usually a subtle ember, now pulsed in time with her heartbeat, a sluggish, urgent throb. The warmth spread up her arm, a warning. From the edge of the clearing, where the wildflowers gave way to the deeper, darker woods, came a sound. A soft, rhythmic *shushing*. Like someone dragging heavy silk across the grass. It circled, clockwise. She turned slowly, her gaze fixed on the treeline. She saw nothing but the dancing shadows of leaves, cast by a moon that seemed far larger and paler than it should be. “Who’s there?” Her cool-headedness was fraying at the edges. She was a delivery girl who’d stumbled into a fairy tale, and fairy tales, she remembered, were often just sanitized horror stories. The *shushing* stopped. The silence that followed was heavier, pregnant with attention. Then, a new sound. A faint, wet clicking, like beetles skittering over stone. It came from everywhere and nowhere. The air grew colder again, a localized chill that moved around her. The wildflowers nearest her feet began to wilt, their luminescent greens fading to a sickly grey, their petals curling as if touched by a sudden, killing frost. Her breath came faster. This was wrong. The codex Eva had reluctantly shared mentioned the Grove as a place of power, a nexus. It didn’t mention this feeling of being *hunted*. A shadow detached itself from the base of one of the standing stones. It wasn’t a natural shadow; it was too dense, too absolute. It moved with a fluid, boneless grace, pooling and elongating, stretching toward her across the glowing flowers. Where it passed, the light died. Panic, cold and sharp, tried to claw its way up her throat. She choked it down. *Think, Rory. Out of the box.* The pendant was a beacon, heating up. It reacted to Hel portals, the codex said. Was this a portal? Or was it reacting to something that had come *through* one? The shadow was halfway to her now. The clicking sound intensified, coming from within its inky mass. She could see shapes shifting inside it—long, thin limbs, too many joints. She took a step back. Her heel sank into soft earth. She looked down. The ground where she stood was no longer turf. It was a patch of pale, fibrous moss, and it was slowly, visibly, *growing* over the toe of her boot. With a gasp, she wrenched her foot free. The moss released her with a soft, tearing sound. Her heart hammered against the pendant’s warmth. She was being assimilated. The Grove was trying to make her part of its wrong, timeless landscape. The shadow-thing paused. It seemed to sense her fear. It rose up, forming a taller, more defined shape. Not human. Arachnid, perhaps, but with a central, pulsating core that the clicking emanated from. It had no eyes she could see, but she felt its attention like a physical pressure. It took a gliding step toward her. The flowers in its path didn’t just wilt; they turned to ash. This was it. The slow-burn horror she’d anticipated had ignited. She was alone, in a place where the rules didn’t apply, and something fundamentally *other* was stalking her. Her mind raced. Running was pointless; it was faster, and the Grove itself seemed to conspire against movement. Fighting was laughable. That left her wits. And the pendant. Why was the pendant so hot? Not just warm, *hot*. She looked down at it. The crimson glow was intense now, a miniature red sun in her palm. It pulsed rapidly, not matching her heartbeat anymore, but driving it. *Near a Hel portal.* The words from the codex flashed in her memory. Was this thing a guardian? A warden? Or was it something that had slipped through a weakening seal? The entity made a sound—a low, harmonic drone that vibrated in her teeth. It was communicating, or perhaps just anticipating. It was close now, ten feet away. The clicking was deafening. She had to do something. Anything. The out-of-the-box thinking Eva always teased her about. The pendant wasn’t just a detector. It was an artifact. It had properties. Holding it up before her, she focused on the heat, the light. She didn’t know any spells, any words of power. She only had her will, her desperate need to not end as fertilizer for impossible flowers. “Stop,” she said, her voice firmer than she felt. The entity paused. The drone softened. It was listening. Or it was curious. She took a breath, the sweet, cloying air burning her lungs. “What do you want?” The only answer was another gliding step. The pulsating core in its shadow-body brightened to a sickly yellow. The clicking resumed, faster. Defiance warred with primal terror. She was Rory Carter. She’d run from Evan, rebuilt a life from nothing in a new city, delivered hot noodles through rain and sleet. She would not be consumed by a shadow in a fairy circle. She took a step *toward* it, thrusting the glowing pendant forward like a talisman. “I said, stop!” The effect was immediate and violent. The entity recoiled, its form rippling. A high-pitched whine replaced the drone. The pendant’s red light flared, cutting through the darkness like a laser, and for a fleeting second, she saw what lay within the shadow—a core of chitinous plates, weeping a black, viscous fluid, and clusters of multifaceted eyes that reflected her own terrified face back at her a thousand times. It saw her. It *knew* her. Then it folded in on itself, collapsing like a deflating balloon, and slithered back toward the standing stones with shocking speed. It poured itself into a fissure in the ancient oak that she hadn’t noticed before, and was gone. The oppressive wrongness didn’t lift. It merely retreated, pulling back to the edges of the clearing. The wildflowers near her feet slowly regained their color, but the patch of ash where the creature had passed remained. The air still tasted of honey and decay. She was alone again. But not alone. The Grove was aware of her now. The time-slip felt less like a gift and more like a cage. She had been tested, or perhaps merely sampled. The Heartstone’s glow dimmed to a steady, watchful ember, its heat fading to a familiar warmth. It had protected her, or at least, repelled that specific threat. She stood there for a long time, her mind reeling, trying to catalog every detail, to make sense of the nonsensical. The note had been right. The Grove required her. But for what? To be a meal? A curiosity? Or to bear witness? A new sound reached her, soft and close. A whisper, carried on the perfumed breeze, seeming to come from the stones themselves. It was a single word, felt more than heard, in a voice that was both ancient and childlike. *…Laila…* Her blood ran cold. That was a name she hadn’t used in years. A name from a life before London, before the fear, a name she’d buried. The Grove knew her. All of her. She didn’t run. She turned, slowly, and walked back the way she had come, between the slick-barked oaks. The transition back to the mundane Richmond Park was a jarring snap—sudden cold, the distant hum of the city, the smell of damp soil and exhaust. The moon was its normal size, the stars hazy. She stood at the edge of the park, her heart still pounding, the pendant a faint warmth against her skin. She was shaking, not from the cold, but from the profound, unshakable certainty that she had just glimpsed the true face of the world she had stumbled into. And that face was vast, hungry, and knew her name. The walk back to her flat above Silas’ bar felt longer than ever. Every shadow seemed to hold a fluid motion, every rustle of leaves a nascent click. She kept her hand closed around the pendant, a small, warm anchor in a reality that had just revealed its terrifying, hidden depth. The note hadn’t been an invitation. It had been a summons. And something, she knew with dreadful clarity, was just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1962
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count5
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
5.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1962
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"uncanny"
count1
4
word"intricate"
count1
5
word"silence"
count3
6
word"profound"
count2
7
word"pulsed"
count3
8
word"chill"
count2
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count5
12
word"throb"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"silk"
count1
15
word"dancing"
count1
16
word"beacon"
count1
17
word"raced"
count1
18
word"vibrated"
count1
19
word"anticipating"
count1
20
word"fleeting"
count1
21
word"oppressive"
count1
22
word"sense of"
count1
23
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"familiar"
2"weight"
3"uncanny"
4"intricate"
5"silence"
6"profound"
7"pulsed"
8"chill"
9"echo"
10"traced"
11"warmth"
12"throb"
13"rhythmic"
14"silk"
15"dancing"
16"beacon"
17"raced"
18"vibrated"
19"anticipating"
20"fleeting"
21"oppressive"
22"sense of"
23"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences191
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences191
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences194
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords29
totalWords1954
ratio0.015
matches
0"The Grove requires you. After midnight. Come alone."
1"being"
2"shushing"
3"shushing"
4"hunted"
5"Think, Rory. Out of the box."
6"through"
7"growing"
8"other"
9"hot"
10"Near a Hel portal."
11"toward"
12"knew"
13"…Laila…"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1935
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.41
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Aurora1
Carter2
Heartstone3
Golden1
Empress1
Grove8
London2
Fae1
Evan2
Cardiff1
Welsh1
Eva2
Rory2
Hel2
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Evan"
3"Eva"
4"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Heartstone"
3"Grove"
4"London"
5"Fae"
6"Cardiff"
7"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences130
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed far larger and paler than it should be"
1"it was slowly, visibly, *growing* over the"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.047
wordCount1954
matches
0"not granite but petrified oak, hummed with a silence"
1"Not its usual, faint ambient warmth, but a distinct, radiating heat, as if a tiny coal had been place"
2"not matching her heartbeat anymore, but driving it"
3"not from the cold, but from the profound, unshakable certainty"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences194
matches
0"flat that afternoon"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean39.88
std26.34
cv0.661
sampleLengths
084
1117
287
326
4111
527
633
750
876
98
1066
1131
1212
1358
1431
1547
1652
1729
1860
1924
2049
2119
2228
2328
2470
2531
2627
2737
289
299
304
3115
3222
3341
3417
3568
366
3739
3844
3934
4027
4143
4240
431
4427
457
4653
4758
4872
92.40% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences191
matches
0"was swallowed"
1"was absorbed"
2"been placed"
3"being *hunted"
4"being assimilated"
5"was gone"
6"been tested"
18.18% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs330
matches
0"was only beginning"
1"was fraying"
2"was trying"
3"was stalking"
4"was communicating"
5"was deafening"
6"was listening"
7"was shaking"
8"was just beginning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences194
ratio0.062
matches
0"The city’s glow was a muted amber smear behind her; ahead, the park dissolved into a deeper, more absolute darkness."
1"The pendant—her only link to a world she was only beginning to understand—had been a gift from another such note."
2"The low hum of distant London traffic didn’t just fade; it was swallowed, erased, replaced by a silence so profound it felt pressurized in her ears."
3"Wildflowers—poppies of impossible black, lilies that pulsed with a soft, bioluminescent green—carpeted the clearing, blooming defiant in the chill."
4"Her voice didn’t echo; it was absorbed instantly."
5"It wasn’t a natural shadow; it was too dense, too absolute."
6"She could see shapes shifting inside it—long, thin limbs, too many joints."
7"The flowers in its path didn’t just wilt; they turned to ash."
8"Running was pointless; it was faster, and the Grove itself seemed to conspire against movement."
9"The entity made a sound—a low, harmonic drone that vibrated in her teeth."
10"The pendant’s red light flared, cutting through the darkness like a laser, and for a fleeting second, she saw what lay within the shadow—a core of chitinous plates, weeping a black, viscous fluid, and clusters of multifaceted eyes that reflected her own terrified face back at her a thousand times."
11"The transition back to the mundane Richmond Park was a jarring snap—sudden cold, the distant hum of the city, the smell of damp soil and exhaust."
75.45% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1895
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"lay cool against her"
1"precise, ink-black script"
2"cold, diamond-hard clarity."
3"usual, faint ambient warmth,"
adverbCount77
adverbRatio0.04063324538258575
lyAdverbCount28
lyAdverbRatio0.014775725593667546
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences194
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences194
mean10.07
std7.44
cv0.739
sampleLengths
022
120
227
315
416
59
64
72
827
97
1020
1132
1210
1329
147
1526
1615
1726
184
1913
2022
2119
2222
232
241
2518
2610
2721
283
293
309
318
326
338
342
351
369
3715
386
396
407
416
429
4311
443
4522
4612
4719
488
4919
32.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats33
diversityRatio0.27319587628865977
totalSentences194
uniqueOpeners53
55.25% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences181
matches
0"Only the silent, watchful stones"
1"Then, a new sound."
2"Then it folded in on"
ratio0.017
52.04% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount76
totalSentences181
matches
0"She moved with a purposeful"
1"She’d found the note in"
2"It was a memory, a"
3"She passed between two of"
4"It wasn’t a shift in"
5"It was beautiful."
6"It was terrifying."
7"she murmured, the word loud"
8"Her voice didn’t echo; it"
9"She was here for a"
10"She just didn’t know what"
11"She walked slowly toward the"
12"Her boots had thick, treaded"
13"They should have crushed stems,"
14"They made no impression at"
15"She stopped, hand instinctively going"
16"It was warm."
17"She pulled it out, holding"
18"Its faint inner glow, usually"
19"It circled, clockwise."
ratio0.42
53.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount147
totalSentences181
matches
0"The Richmond Park gates had"
1"The city’s glow was a"
2"She moved with a purposeful"
3"She’d found the note in"
4"*The Grove requires you."
5"The pendant—her only link to"
6"The path on the map"
7"It was a memory, a"
8"The low hum of distant"
9"The stars overhead, previously veiled"
10"She passed between two of"
11"The effect was instantaneous."
12"It wasn’t a shift in"
13"The air grew warmer, thick"
14"Wildflowers—poppies of impossible black, lilies"
15"The frantic, clock-watching anxiety that"
16"Here, there was only the"
17"This was the place from"
18"It was beautiful."
19"It was terrifying."
ratio0.812
55.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences181
matches
0"Whoever this benefactor was, they"
1"To be a meal?"
ratio0.011
43.40% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She moved with a purposeful stride, her breath clouding in the unseasonably cold air, the strap of her courier bag cutting a familiar line across her chest."
1"Whoever this benefactor was, they knew where she lived, they knew what she carried, and their communications carried a weight that felt less like a request and …"
2"It was a memory, a faint depression in the grass that led toward a copse of ancient oaks, their branches gnarled and intertwined like the fingers of praying cro…"
3"At the center, a ring of standing stones, not granite but petrified oak, hummed with a silence that felt ancient and listening."
4"The frantic, clock-watching anxiety that had dogged her for years, since Evan, since fleeing Cardiff, had simply ceased."
5"Not its usual, faint ambient warmth, but a distinct, radiating heat, as if a tiny coal had been placed against her skin."
6"She was a delivery girl who’d stumbled into a fairy tale, and fairy tales, she remembered, were often just sanitized horror stories."
7"The wildflowers nearest her feet began to wilt, their luminescent greens fading to a sickly grey, their petals curling as if touched by a sudden, killing frost."
8"The pendant’s red light flared, cutting through the darkness like a laser, and for a fleeting second, she saw what lay within the shadow—a core of chitinous pla…"
9"She stood there for a long time, her mind reeling, trying to catalog every detail, to make sense of the nonsensical."
10"She kept her hand closed around the pendant, a small, warm anchor in a reality that had just revealed its terrifying, hidden depth."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, her voice firmer than she felt"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
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68.9768%