Run: 2026-03-12-01KKFRMHWG33X9A6TFJ325S0Q5

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Duration:
54.2s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest bled a sickly, aquatic light onto the wet pavement of the Soho alley. Aurora Carter pushed the door open with her shoulder, the familiar chime of the bell above lost in the low thrum of conversation and the clink of glasses. The air inside was thick with the scent of old wood, lemon polish, and something deeper—the ghost of spilled whisky and secrets. It was a smell she’d grown used to, the smell of her second home, perched as she was in the flat directly above. She worked her way toward the bar, weaving through clusters of after-work drinkers and tourists. Her motorcycle helmet was tucked under her arm, its glossy black surface reflecting the dim, buttery light from the low-hanging lamps. A delivery for Yu-Fei was done for the night; now, she just wanted a quiet pint and to not think about the cold dread that had been coiling in her gut since she’d left Cardiff two years ago. That’s when she saw him. Not Silas, behind his usual post at the scarred mahogany bar, polishing a glass with methodical grace. But someone else. A man at the far end, half-turned away from her, studying the wall of framed black-and-white photographs. He had a stillness about him, a coiled readiness that didn’t belong to the casual patrons. His hair, once a shock of unruly auburn, was now meticulously cropped, shot through with distinguished threads of silver. He wore a dark, impeccably tailored suit that looked far more expensive than anything the usual crowd sported. The hand holding a lowball glass of amber liquid was steady, but on the right ring finger, a flash of silver caught the light—a signet ring, a raven’s head etched into its surface. Her breath hitched. It couldn’t be. The man turned his head slightly, his profile coming into view. The jawline was harder, sharpened by time or discipline. There was a faint, silvery scar tracing his left temple, disappearing into his hairline. But the eyes—hazel, intelligent, missing nothing—were the same. They swept the room with a casual, assessing gaze that was anything but casual. A gaze she hadn’t seen in eight years. Evan. He hadn’t seen her yet. Every instinct screamed at her to turn around, to leave the helmet on the bar, slip back out into the neon-drenched rain, and never come back. But her legs were lead. And then, as if sensing the weight of her stare, his gaze locked onto hers. The recognition was a physical blow. His eyes widened fractionally, the cool assessment shattering into a storm of something more complex—shock, a flicker of raw pain, and then, a terrifyingly blank neutrality that settled over his features like a mask. Rory moved. Not toward the door, but toward the bar, her movements stiff. She placed the helmet on the polished wood with a thud that sounded unnaturally loud in her own ears. “The usual, Rory?” Silas’s voice was a low rumble, a familiar anchor. He was already pulling a pint of the dark stout she favored. “Please,” she managed, her voice rough. She didn’t look at Silas, couldn’t tear her gaze from the approaching reflection in the mirror behind the bar. She saw Evan push off from the wall, saw the slight, almost imperceptible adjustment he made to his gait—the old knee injury from that stupid skateboarding accident at university, now healed but leaving a ghost of a memory in his movement. He moved with a predator’s economy, all wasted motion gone. He stopped a few feet from her. Up close, the changes were more stark. The boyish charm she remembered had been burned away, replaced by something colder, more polished. The scar at his temple looked older, deeper than a simple fall. “Laila,” he said. The name, her old middle name he’d always used as a private endearment, sounded foreign in this new, clipped accent. Not Cardiff Welsh. Something flatter, more London, with an edge of something else. “It’s been a long time.” She finally turned to face him fully, wrapping her fingers around the pint Silas had placed before her. The condensation was freezing against her skin. “Evan. It has.” She didn’t correct the name. Let him use it. It was a shield. “You look… well,” he said, his gaze traveling over her—her practical leather jacket, the black t-shirt beneath, the straight, shoulder-length black hair she’d stopped fussing with years ago. “Different.” “So do you.” The understatement hung between them, vast and ridiculous. He looked like a corporate executive, or a high-end private security consultant. He looked like everything her father had wanted her to become, everything she had run from. “I didn’t expect to see you here. In London. In… this bar.” “Business,” he said simply, his hazel eyes flicking briefly to Silas, who was meticulously wiping down a spotless section of bar, his expression carefully neutral. Silas missed nothing. “And you? Still playing at being a barrister?” The barb was soft, but it struck true. “Not anymore. I deliver food for a living. It’s honest.” A faint, almost pitying smile touched his lips. “A waste of a first from Cardiff.” Rory took a long swallow of her stout, the bitter taste grounding her. “I found I had a talent for more practical things. Like knowing when to walk away.” The air between them crackled. The low hum of the bar seemed to fade into a distant roar. This was the chasm that had opened between them eight years ago—the final, screaming argument in the hallway of their shared student flat. His ambition, turning from charming drive to something possessive, suffocating. Her dreams, shrinking under the weight of his expectations. The way his hand had closed around her wrist, not to harm, but to hold, a grip that said *mine, you can’t leave, you’re part of my plan*. She’d wrenched free, the cheap bracelet she wore snapping, its metal edge slicing a neat crescent into the skin of her left wrist. That small, physical scar had been easier to heal than the one he’d left on her sense of self. “Walking away is easy,” Evan said, his voice dropping, becoming the intimate murmur she remembered from late-night study sessions, now laced with something harder. “Staying, building something real… that takes fortitude.” “And which are you building?” she asked, nodding toward his expensive suit, the signet ring. “Empires?” “Solutions,” he corrected. “I solve problems. For people who have significant problems.” His eyes held hers. “I heard about your father. The firm. I was sorry to hear he retired under a cloud.” Rory’s grip tightened on her glass. Brendan Carter’s once-sterling reputation as a QC had been tarnished in his final years by association with a client later exposed as a crime lord. It had been the final, humiliating blow that sent her fleeing to London, to Eva, to anonymity. “You keep tabs.” “Old habits,” he said with a shrug that was anything but casual. “I always wondered where you went. You just… vanished. After the degree, after everything.” “I found a life that doesn’t require a spreadsheet and a five-year plan,” she said, the old defiance flaring. “I have a flat, a job. Friends. It’s enough.” “Is it?” The question was genuine, laced with a sudden, disarming curiosity. He looked around the dim, warm confines of The Raven’s Nest, at the old maps on the walls, the clusters of people talking, laughing. His gaze landed on Silas, who was now engaged in a low conversation with a regular. “This is your world now? A dingy bar in Soho?” “It’s not dingy. It’s lived-in. And yes. It’s mine.” The possessiveness in her own voice surprised her. He was quiet for a moment, taking another sip of his drink. The ice cubes clicked. “You always did collect strays and lost causes, Rory. The stray cat with the broken leg, the girl from the estate who needed help with her A-levels… me, back when I was just a scholarship kid with a chip on his shoulder.” He set the glass down. “I suppose some things don’t change. You’ve just found a bigger, more permanent stray to shelter under.” Before she could process the insult, a shadow fell over them. Silas was there, leaning on the bar with his forearms, his hazel eyes, so different from Evan’s, resting calmly on the newcomer. He didn’t look at Rory. “Evening,” Silas said, his voice a low, rumbling counterpoint to Evan’s polished tones. “Everything alright here, Rory?” It wasn’t a question. It was a statement of position. *I’m here. I’m with her.* Evan’s eyes narrowed slightly as he took in Silas—the grey-streaked auburn hair, the neatly trimmed beard, the quiet authority that seemed to emanate from him despite the simple act of polishing a glass. His gaze dropped to Silas’s right hand, to the silver signet ring with the raven. Recognition, or something like it, flickered in his expression. He’d always been good at reading power structures. “Everything’s fine,” Evan said smoothly, offering a hand. “Evan Thorne. An old friend of Rory’s from university.” Silas didn’t take the hand. He gave a slow, deliberate nod. “Silas Blackwood. I own the place.” The unspoken *this is my house* hung in the air. Evan’s smile didn’t waver, but it became a thin, cool thing. He withdrew his hand. “I was just leaving,” Evan said, his eyes returning to Rory. The mask was back in place, but she saw the tension in his jaw. “It was… unexpected. Seeing you, Laila. You seem settled.” “And you seem successful,” she replied, the words tasting like ash. He held her gaze for a beat longer, a whole universe of unresolved things passing between them—regret, anger, a faint, haunting question of what might have been. Then he turned, placed a few crisp notes on the bar far exceeding the cost of his drink, and walked out. The door closed softly behind him, the chime of the bell a final, punctuation mark. The ambient noise of the bar rushed back in, filling the vacuum he’d left. Rory let out a breath she hadn’t realized she’d been holding. Her hands were trembling slightly. She wrapped them around the pint glass again. Silas watched the door for a moment, then turned his calm, assessing gaze to her. He didn’t ask who he was. He didn’t ask what had been said. He simply reached under the bar and produced a clean, folded cloth, pushing it toward her. “You’re bleeding,” he said quietly. Rory looked down. In her clenched fist, her nails had dug into the soft skin of her left palm, right over the old, crescent-shaped scar on her wrist. A few, tiny beads of fresh, crimson blood welled up from the tiny, half-moon indentations. She hadn’t even felt it. She took the cloth, pressing it to the small wounds. The pressure was a dull, familiar ache. “Thanks, Silas,” she murmured, her voice sounding hollow to her own ears. He nodded once, his expression unreadable but not unkind. He went back to polishing his glasses, leaving her to the silence and the ghosts, both old and newly risen, that now haunted the dark corners of The Raven’s Nest. Outside, the green neon sign reflected in the puddles, casting long, wavering shadows that looked like grasping fingers.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
53.66% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"he said simply [simply]"
1"Evan said smoothly [smoothly]"
2"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.488
leniency0.976
rawRatio0.15
effectiveRatio0.146
86.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1898
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1898
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"methodical"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"complex"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"predator"
count1
8
word"stark"
count1
9
word"charm"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"unspoken"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"unreadable"
count1
15
word"silence"
count1
16
word"wavering"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"methodical"
2"etched"
3"tracing"
4"weight"
5"complex"
6"flicker"
7"predator"
8"stark"
9"charm"
10"sense of"
11"flickered"
12"unspoken"
13"tension"
14"unreadable"
15"silence"
16"wavering"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches5
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
2
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
3
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"eyes widened"
2"eyes narrowed"
3"clenched fist"
4"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences128
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords18
totalWords1888
ratio0.01
matches
0"mine, you can’t leave, you’re part of my plan"
1"I’m here. I’m with her."
2"this is my house"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1606
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.81
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Nest3
Soho1
Carter2
Yu-Fei1
Cardiff2
Silas13
Evan9
Welsh1
London2
Let1
Rory7
Eva1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Silas"
4"Evan"
5"Let"
6"Rory"
7"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"as if sensing the weight of her stare, his gaze locked onto hers"
1"looked like a corporate executive, or a h"
2"looked like everything her father had wan"
3"authority that seemed to emanate from him despite the simple act of polishing a glass"
4"something like it, flickered in his expressi"
5"looked like grasping fingers"
94.07% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.059
wordCount1888
matches
0"Not toward the door, but toward the bar, her movements stiff"
1"not to harm, but to hold, a grip"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean39.33
std28.1
cv0.714
sampleLengths
094
174
25
3123
46
564
61
751
840
932
1024
1176
1241
1341
1441
1529
1651
1736
1818
1915
2029
21130
2231
2316
2433
2551
2626
2728
2862
2917
3080
3138
3217
3315
3465
3517
3617
3725
3834
3911
4063
4138
4244
435
4448
4517
4612
4757
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences128
matches
0"was tucked"
1"been burned"
2"been tarnished"
3"been said"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs262
matches
0"was already pulling"
1"was meticulously wiping"
2"were trembling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences147
ratio0.068
matches
0"The air inside was thick with the scent of old wood, lemon polish, and something deeper—the ghost of spilled whisky and secrets."
1"A delivery for Yu-Fei was done for the night; now, she just wanted a quiet pint and to not think about the cold dread that had been coiling in her gut since she’d left Cardiff two years ago."
2"The hand holding a lowball glass of amber liquid was steady, but on the right ring finger, a flash of silver caught the light—a signet ring, a raven’s head etched into its surface."
3"But the eyes—hazel, intelligent, missing nothing—were the same."
4"His eyes widened fractionally, the cool assessment shattering into a storm of something more complex—shock, a flicker of raw pain, and then, a terrifyingly blank neutrality that settled over his features like a mask."
5"She saw Evan push off from the wall, saw the slight, almost imperceptible adjustment he made to his gait—the old knee injury from that stupid skateboarding accident at university, now healed but leaving a ghost of a memory in his movement."
6"“You look… well,” he said, his gaze traveling over her—her practical leather jacket, the black t-shirt beneath, the straight, shoulder-length black hair she’d stopped fussing with years ago."
7"This was the chasm that had opened between them eight years ago—the final, screaming argument in the hallway of their shared student flat."
8"Evan’s eyes narrowed slightly as he took in Silas—the grey-streaked auburn hair, the neatly trimmed beard, the quiet authority that seemed to emanate from him despite the simple act of polishing a glass."
9"He held her gaze for a beat longer, a whole universe of unresolved things passing between them—regret, anger, a faint, haunting question of what might have been."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1630
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"old, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.03190184049079755
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.014723926380368098
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean12.84
std8.56
cv0.667
sampleLengths
021
128
222
323
415
521
638
75
817
93
1017
1116
1219
1318
1433
153
163
1711
189
1914
208
2114
228
231
245
2526
265
2715
286
2934
302
3111
3219
3312
3412
356
3619
3741
3810
397
407
4115
4212
433
4420
453
4610
475
4818
497
38.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.29931972789115646
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners44
27.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"Then he turned, placed a"
ratio0.008
31.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences123
matches
0"It was a smell she’d"
1"She worked her way toward"
2"Her motorcycle helmet was tucked"
3"He had a stillness about"
4"His hair, once a shock"
5"He wore a dark, impeccably"
6"Her breath hitched."
7"It couldn’t be."
8"They swept the room with"
9"He hadn’t seen her yet."
10"His eyes widened fractionally, the"
11"She placed the helmet on"
12"He was already pulling a"
13"she managed, her voice rough"
14"She didn’t look at Silas,"
15"She saw Evan push off"
16"He moved with a predator’s"
17"He stopped a few feet"
18"She finally turned to face"
19"She didn’t correct the name"
ratio0.472
20.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount108
totalSentences123
matches
0"The green neon sign of"
1"Aurora Carter pushed the door"
2"The air inside was thick"
3"It was a smell she’d"
4"She worked her way toward"
5"Her motorcycle helmet was tucked"
6"A delivery for Yu-Fei was"
7"That’s when she saw him."
8"A man at the far"
9"He had a stillness about"
10"His hair, once a shock"
11"He wore a dark, impeccably"
12"The hand holding a lowball"
13"Her breath hitched."
14"It couldn’t be."
15"The man turned his head"
16"The jawline was harder, sharpened"
17"They swept the room with"
18"A gaze she hadn’t seen"
19"He hadn’t seen her yet."
ratio0.878
40.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"Before she could process the"
ratio0.008
31.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"A delivery for Yu-Fei was done for the night; now, she just wanted a quiet pint and to not think about the cold dread that had been coiling in her gut since she…"
1"He wore a dark, impeccably tailored suit that looked far more expensive than anything the usual crowd sported."
2"She placed the helmet on the polished wood with a thud that sounded unnaturally loud in her own ears."
3"This was the chasm that had opened between them eight years ago—the final, screaming argument in the hallway of their shared student flat."
4"His ambition, turning from charming drive to something possessive, suffocating."
5"The way his hand had closed around her wrist, not to harm, but to hold, a grip that said *mine, you can’t leave, you’re part of my plan*."
6"It had been the final, humiliating blow that sent her fleeing to London, to Eva, to anonymity."
7"Evan’s eyes narrowed slightly as he took in Silas—the grey-streaked auburn hair, the neatly trimmed beard, the quiet authority that seemed to emanate from him d…"
8"He went back to polishing his glasses, leaving her to the silence and the ghosts, both old and newly risen, that now haunted the dark corners of The Raven’s Nes…"
9"Outside, the green neon sign reflected in the puddles, casting long, wavering shadows that looked like grasping fingers."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she managed, her voice rough"
1"she said, the old defiance flaring"
2"Evan said, his eyes returning to Rory"
3"she murmured, her voice sounding hollow to her own ears"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he corrected (correct)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.683
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.098
68.3875%