Run: 2026-03-18-01KM086XQ2CDB708CATRYP2FZG

Run Details

Duration:
31.1s
Cost:
$0.002131
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
She had followed the pull of the pendant like a compass needle dragged toward true north, its faint ruby glow pressing against her sternum as she navigated the dark lanes of Richmond Park. The Heartstone had gone from dormant to insistent the moment she stepped past the old rugby pitches, as if the invisible thread connecting it to its origin had tightened in her grasp. Now, standing in the cramped darkness between two hulking oaks with their roots snaking across the path like serpents frozen mid-strike, Rory hesitated. The air here tasted of iron and damp earth, noxious in a way that didn’t match the park’s usual leaf-mold sweetness. No birds. No rustle of hedgehogs in the undergrowth. Just a suffocating silence, as if the land itself had exhaled and forgotten to inhale again. She glanced down at the pendant, tucked beneath her t-shirt but warm against her skin. It pulsed once, a slow thud of light behind the crimson depths, like a heartbeat too deep to feel but impossible to ignore. "Okay," she muttered, tugging the chain out so the gem hung free. Her fingers brushed the silver links and recoiled—too hot. The pendant vibrated faintly, the pulse matching the one she felt beneath her ribs. Not just warm. Feverish. "So this is where it wants me to go." She stepped forward. The moment she crossed the threshold between the oaks, the world folded. The dense canopy above—usually a sieve for moonlight—cut it off entirely, plunging her into darkness so complete it didn’t feel like darkness but absence. Her breath hitched. Not even starlight leaked through. She waited, eyes straining, but there was only black, so absolute it throbbed in her skull. Then—light. Not from any visible source. A soft, lambent glow seeped from the ground, a sickly silver-green that defined shapes without illuminating them. She stood in the center of an oval clearing. The wildflowers that should have been dormant at night were in full bloom: foxgloves nodding with purple bells, blood-red poppies folded shut but trembling, as though stirred by a wind she couldn’t feel. The scent of them was cloying, overly sweet, like rotting fruit left in sun. And the stones. She counted seven, though she knew there were more out of sight—ancient oak monoliths arranged in a rough circle, their surfaces carved with spirals worn smooth by centuries of unseen fingers passing over them. They should have glistened with rain, but their bark was dry, the grooves empty of moss. No lichen, no cracks knitting with black soil. Just...clean stone. Too clean. Cut just yesterday. And unnaturally still. Rory exhaled slowly, forcing her shoulders to relax. "Fae-touched horticulture. Maybe they just...keep things tidy." A sound cut through the silence. It wasn’t the chirr of crickets or the hoot of an owl. It was a wet, clicking noise, like bones tapping together under slick skin. It came from somewhere inside the stone ring. She froze. It stopped. She exhaled, took a step toward the nearest stone— —and the world blinked. One moment she was standing, the next her knees buckled and she dropped, hands slamming into cold moss she hadn’t seen a second before. The pendant scorched her chest as it swung free. Above her, the sky wasn’t night anymore. It was dusk. The same filthy green light suffused everything, but the horizon glowed with a low, bruised bruise of sunset that hadn’t been there a second ago. "Oh, you’ve got to be kidding me," she whispered. She looked down at the pendant. It pulsed twice in rapid succession, then dimmed to a dull ember. She pushed up onto her knees. Something glinted beside her hand—a fallen flower, its petals not red but black, curling in on itself like a mushroom cap. When she touched it, it crumbled into dust that tasted of ash. Rory wiped her fingers on her jeans. "Okay. Time gets weird here. Got it." She stood again, slower this time. The clearing felt... crowded. Not with people. With something pressing inward, like the air itself had become too dense to breathe. She listened. Silence. Then—a whisper. Not from any direction. Not to either ear. It formed inside her mind like a shape emerging from fog: *You came alone.* Her pulse spiked. She spun. Nothing. "You trying to freak me out?" she called, injecting a bite into her voice. "Eva, if that’s you—" Another sound: a soft *shhh* of fabric sliding against fabric. From the shadows beneath the standing stones. Rory swallowed. "Alright. New plan. We’re leaving." She took one step toward the gap between the oaks—the exit she’d come through— —and the gap wasn’t there. In its place stood another standing stone, identical to the others. Carved. Primitive spirals in its face. Its bark looked fresh. She exhaled through her nose. "Nope. Not happening." She pivoted, scanning the ring. Seven stones. She’d entered between two, so there were five ahead of her now: three to her left, two to her right, all identical. Greenish glow puddled at their bases. Shadows pooled like ink beneath them. She moved toward the rightmost stone, keeping her eyes ahead. Behind her—footsteps. Not crunching leaves. Squelching. Like something heavy and soft stepping in mud. On the stone path that wasn’t a path. The sound came from her left, from the direction she’d just left. She didn’t look. Couldn’t. If it was behind her, she’d know it in seconds anyway. But the footsteps didn’t stop. They walked up behind her. She clenched her fists. "Who’s there?" No answer. The footsteps stopped. She turned slowly. The clearing seemed empty. The stones stood still. The flowers trembled slightly—wait, no, that wasn’t flowers. The poppies by the nearest stone... their petals weren’t trembling. The petals were lifting. Not pushed by wind. Pulled. As if invisible hands gathered the edges and raised them like veils. Then the petals peeled back. And beneath each poppy bloom wasn’t orange flesh. It was a mouth. Rory’s breath left her in a rush. The mouths were small, child-sized, lined with slick pink tissue and needle-thin teeth. They opened in unison, revealing black cavities that didn’t glow—didn’t reflect light at all. A chorus of sighs rose from them, a wet exhalation of breath that stank of rotting mint. It rippled through the clearing, vibrating in her ribs. She stumbled back. As one, the poppies closed their mouths and the petals returned to normal—watertight, normal red. Rory’s mind raced. "Photosynthesis with teeth," she muttered numbly. "Okay. That’s new." She wanted to run. But her body refused. The pendant pulsed again, a frantic thud against her sternum. She looked down. The stone’s crimson glow wasn’t steady. It flickered. Like it was afraid. She risked a glance upward. Between two of the standing stones, the green glow of the clearing had thinned. Through the gap, she saw not darkness or park shadows— She saw stars. But the wrong stars. Not the familiar W-shaped Cassiopeia. Not Orion’s belt. These stars formed patterns she didn’t recognize, spirals that hurt to look at, as if they drew the eye into a vortex. And between them, a pale disc hung. Not the moon. Not any natural satellite. It was too smooth. Too white. Its surface marred by symmetrical indentations—rows of tiny craters arranged in geometric order, as though pressed by machinery. She lurched sideways as nausea twisted her gut. The pendant’s glow flared hot enough to scald. She gasped, clawing at the chain, breaking free. It tumbled to the moss with a soft chime, rolling until it glowed upward at the alien sky. Rory stared at the pendant, then at the moon-that-wasn’t. "Hel portal." She’d read the intelligence briefings. Hel portals weren’t just doors. They were instruments. And whatever was on the other side— It noticed her. The pendant’s glimmer turned urgent. Then painful, burning like a brand. Rory snatched it up, fingers slipping on the seared silver. It curled into her palm, and for a terrifying second she felt it *pull*, not toward the portal, but *through* it. A sound erupted behind her—not from the poppies. From the shadows beneath the standing stones. Not footsteps anymore. Groaning. Deep. Multilayered. Like stone grinding against stone mixed with the sigh of wet wool. The air pressure dropped. Her ears popped. The green glow drained from the clearing, not flickering out but *retracting*, as though a tide had turned and was dragging the light back into the earth. Rory fell to one knee, still clutching the pendant. The world constricted. The alien moon swelled above her. The spiral stars writhed. And from beneath the stones, things began to rise. Knee-high. Bent. Clad in ragged cloaks of moss and bark. Their fingers—too long, too jointed—curled around the stone tops and hauled their bodies up. Their faces were smooth and featureless except for a vertical slash where a mouth should be—stitched shut with silvery thread that pulsed like maggots in moonlight. Seven figures. One at each standing stone. The mouths opened. The stitches snagged and tore. Black fluid wept from the wounds. Rory’s vision tunnelled. One of the figures tilted its head—not enough joint to do that. Its neck spiralled unnaturally. It reached toward her with a hand that ended not in fingers but in a cluster of thorny vines. The pendant in her grip *exploded* into ruby light. The world went white. She didn’t fall. She didn’t run. She *shattered*. At least that was the sensation—her mind splintered like glass struck by a hammer. Images flooded in not through her eyes, not through her ears, but through every cell in her body: centuries of night beneath standing stones, centuries of the poppy-mouths singing in the dark, centuries of something vast and cold watching from the other side of the alien moon. She knew then—without memory, without reason—that these things were not the watchers. They were the *messengers*. And the watcher was coming. The pendant’s light peaked. The standing stones cracked. Not from heat. From *song*. A keening, resonant vibration that made her teeth ache and her bones hum. The messenger at the nearest stone collapsed inward, its cloak dissolving into black mist that swirled toward her— — —and Rory jerked awake sprawled on damp earth, the pendant cold against her sternum. She was outside the standing stones, back in Richmond Park. Breath sawing in and out. The night buzzed with normal sounds: distant traffic, a fox barking, leaves trembling. No human voices. No chanting. No stone groaning. She stared at her hands. They were steady. The pendant hung limply from its chain. Lifeless. No pulse. No glow. She sat up slowly, scanning the grove’s entrance—the two oaks. She’d come through them. She could leave the same way. She took a step. The moon above was the right moon. The air smelled like pine and wet grass. The only wrong thing was the absence of sound from the clearing behind her—a forest doesn’t fall silent when you turn your back. Rory didn’t look back. She walked into the lane and didn’t stop until she reached the main path, where the sodium lamps of London glowed yellow in the distance. She touched the pendant once, beneath her shirt. It felt inert. Cold. She unclenched her jaw enough to say it aloud: "I am *never* doing that again." She paused, then added under her breath: "Eva owes me *so* much whiskey."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she muttered numbly [numbly]"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.267
leniency0.533
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.133
89.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1914
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count3
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1914
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"navigated"
count1
1
word"hulking"
count1
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"pulsed"
count4
4
word"depths"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"throbbed"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count2
10
word"footsteps"
count4
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count1
15
word"lurched"
count1
16
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"navigated"
1"hulking"
2"silence"
3"pulsed"
4"depths"
5"vibrated"
6"pulse"
7"throbbed"
8"whisper"
9"scanning"
10"footsteps"
11"trembled"
12"raced"
13"flickered"
14"familiar"
15"lurched"
16"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count2
highlights
0"clenched her fists"
1"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences229
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences229
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences240
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords13
totalWords1891
ratio0.007
matches
0"You came alone."
1"shhh"
2"pull"
3"through"
4"retracting"
5"exploded"
6"shattered"
7"messengers"
8"song"
9"never"
10"so"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1819
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.66
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Heartstone1
Rory12
Cassiopeia1
Orion1
London1
One3
Like3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Rory"
2"Orion"
3"Like"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"One"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences111
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"smelled like pine and wet grass"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.173
wordCount1891
matches
0"not red but black, curling in on itself like a mushroom cap"
1"not toward the portal, but *through* it"
2"not flickering out but *retracting*, as though a tide had turned"
3"not in fingers but in a cluster of thorny vines"
4"not through her eyes, not through her ears, but through every cell in her body: centuries of night beneath s"
5"not through her ears, but through every cell in her body: centuries of night beneath s"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences240
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs105
mean18.01
std20.62
cv1.145
sampleLengths
0134
138
248
33
460
51
678
73
868
915
106
1133
122
132
149
154
1668
179
1818
1939
2014
2127
222
231
2424
256
2618
2717
287
2914
305
3121
328
3341
3410
352
3632
3715
3810
396
402
413
423
4326
444
4517
465
478
484
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences229
matches(empty)
95.51% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs319
matches
0"was cloying"
1"was standing"
2"were lifting"
3"was dragging"
4"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount31
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences240
ratio0.113
matches
0"Her fingers brushed the silver links and recoiled—too hot."
1"The dense canopy above—usually a sieve for moonlight—cut it off entirely, plunging her into darkness so complete it didn’t feel like darkness but absence."
2"Then—light."
3"She counted seven, though she knew there were more out of sight—ancient oak monoliths arranged in a rough circle, their surfaces carved with spirals worn smooth by centuries of unseen fingers passing over them."
4"She exhaled, took a step toward the nearest stone—"
5"—and the world blinked."
6"Something glinted beside her hand—a fallen flower, its petals not red but black, curling in on itself like a mushroom cap."
7"Then—a whisper."
8"She took one step toward the gap between the oaks—the exit she’d come through—"
9"—and the gap wasn’t there."
10"Behind her—footsteps."
11"The flowers trembled slightly—wait, no, that wasn’t flowers."
12"They opened in unison, revealing black cavities that didn’t glow—didn’t reflect light at all."
13"As one, the poppies closed their mouths and the petals returned to normal—watertight, normal red."
14"Through the gap, she saw not darkness or park shadows—"
15"Its surface marred by symmetrical indentations—rows of tiny craters arranged in geometric order, as though pressed by machinery."
16"And whatever was on the other side—"
17"A sound erupted behind her—not from the poppies."
18"Their fingers—too long, too jointed—curled around the stone tops and hauled their bodies up."
19"Their faces were smooth and featureless except for a vertical slash where a mouth should be—stitched shut with silvery thread that pulsed like maggots in moonlight."
20"One of the figures tilted its head—not enough joint to do that."
21"At least that was the sensation—her mind splintered like glass struck by a hammer."
22"She knew then—without memory, without reason—that these things were not the watchers."
23"The messenger at the nearest stone collapsed inward, its cloak dissolving into black mist that swirled toward her—"
24"—and Rory jerked awake sprawled on damp earth, the pendant cold against her sternum."
25"She sat up slowly, scanning the grove’s entrance—the two oaks."
26"The only wrong thing was the absence of sound from the clearing behind her—a forest doesn’t fall silent when you turn your back."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1853
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"together under slick skin."
1"same filthy green light"
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.03615758229897464
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.008094981111710739
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences240
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences240
mean7.88
std7.11
cv0.903
sampleLengths
033
132
223
321
42
57
616
715
823
912
109
1114
123
131
149
153
1612
1724
183
195
2016
211
225
2317
249
2533
2614
273
2834
2916
308
312
322
333
343
358
367
376
3812
3913
408
412
422
439
444
4524
469
477
483
4925
38.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.2916666666666667
totalSentences240
uniqueOpeners70
69.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences192
matches
0"Just a suffocating silence, as"
1"Then the petals peeled back."
2"Then painful, burning like a"
3"At least that was the"
ratio0.021
67.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount73
totalSentences192
matches
0"She had followed the pull"
1"She glanced down at the"
2"It pulsed once, a slow"
3"she muttered, tugging the chain"
4"Her fingers brushed the silver"
5"She stepped forward."
6"Her breath hitched."
7"She waited, eyes straining, but"
8"She stood in the center"
9"She counted seven, though she"
10"They should have glistened with"
11"It wasn’t the chirr of"
12"It was a wet, clicking"
13"It came from somewhere inside"
14"She exhaled, took a step"
15"It was dusk."
16"She looked down at the"
17"It pulsed twice in rapid"
18"She pushed up onto her"
19"She stood again, slower this"
ratio0.38
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount134
totalSentences192
matches
0"She had followed the pull"
1"The Heartstone had gone from"
2"The air here tasted of"
3"She glanced down at the"
4"It pulsed once, a slow"
5"she muttered, tugging the chain"
6"Her fingers brushed the silver"
7"The pendant vibrated faintly, the"
8"She stepped forward."
9"The moment she crossed the"
10"The dense canopy above—usually a"
11"Her breath hitched."
12"She waited, eyes straining, but"
13"A soft, lambent glow seeped"
14"She stood in the center"
15"The wildflowers that should have"
16"The scent of them was"
17"She counted seven, though she"
18"They should have glistened with"
19"Rory exhaled slowly, forcing her"
ratio0.698
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences192
matches
0"Now, standing in the cramped"
1"—and the world blinked."
2"—and the gap wasn’t there."
3"If it was behind her,"
4"As if invisible hands gathered"
5"—and Rory jerked awake sprawled"
ratio0.031
31.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The Heartstone had gone from dormant to insistent the moment she stepped past the old rugby pitches, as if the invisible thread connecting it to its origin had …"
1"Now, standing in the cramped darkness between two hulking oaks with their roots snaking across the path like serpents frozen mid-strike, Rory hesitated."
2"The air here tasted of iron and damp earth, noxious in a way that didn’t match the park’s usual leaf-mold sweetness."
3"The wildflowers that should have been dormant at night were in full bloom: foxgloves nodding with purple bells, blood-red poppies folded shut but trembling, as …"
4"The same filthy green light suffused everything, but the horizon glowed with a low, bruised bruise of sunset that hadn’t been there a second ago."
5"They opened in unison, revealing black cavities that didn’t glow—didn’t reflect light at all."
6"Its surface marred by symmetrical indentations—rows of tiny craters arranged in geometric order, as though pressed by machinery."
7"The green glow drained from the clearing, not flickering out but *retracting*, as though a tide had turned and was dragging the light back into the earth."
8"A keening, resonant vibration that made her teeth ache and her bones hum."
9"The messenger at the nearest stone collapsed inward, its cloak dissolving into black mist that swirled toward her—"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she muttered numbly (mutter)"
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