Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09JA5E80P9Z2A90GG7SZZF

Run Details

Duration:
18.5s
Cost:
$0.016424
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon above The Raven’s Nest bled into the wet Soho pavement, painting the rain in sickly streaks. Rory pushed through the door with a delivery bag slung over one shoulder and damp hair clinging to her cheekbones, the bell over the frame giving a thin, tired chime. Warmth hit her first. Then smoke, old wood, and the low churn of voices under a brass lamp glow. Silas stood behind the bar with a glass in one hand and his silver signet ring flashing when he turned. He looked up from the till, his hazel eyes taking her in from trainers to collar. “You’re late,” he muttered, but the corner of his mouth shifted. Rory dropped the bag onto the counter. “You’re welcome.” His gaze flicked to the paper sachets inside. “Yu-Fei’s keeping you busy.” “Yu-Fei’s keeping everyone alive.” She pushed wet hair off her forehead and glanced past him at the room. A few regulars hunched over their drinks beneath black-and-white photographs and old maps pinned to the walls. “Busy night?” “It was.” He tipped his head toward the back. “Take the stairs if you’re keeping that bag there. I’m not having curry steam settling over the optics.” Rory snorted and was already turning when the door opened again behind her. The bell rang once more. A gust of cold air swept in with a woman in a charcoal coat, her hair gone silver at the temples and cut sharp just below her jaw. She paused just inside, one hand still on the door. Her eyes tracked the room with a reflex Rory recognised before her brain caught up with it. The woman’s gaze snagged on Rory. For a second neither of them moved. The bar noise thinned around them, the room narrowing to the thin line of a scar near the woman’s mouth, the set of her shoulders, the way she held herself like she expected a blow and had already calculated where it would land. Rory’s fingers tightened on the delivery bag. The woman’s breath left her in a single, rough exhale. “No,” she said, and then her face changed, the hard line breaking for one startled heartbeat into something raw and young. “Rory?” The name landed like a hand around the throat. Rory stared. “Eva.” Silas’s head lifted sharply from behind the bar. His eyes moved between them once, then settled into stillness. He said nothing. Eva took a step forward, then another, as if the floor had shifted under her. “Jesus.” Rory laughed once, but it had no humour in it. “That was my line.” Eva’s mouth trembled, and she covered it with her hand for a second before dropping it again, the gesture gone before it could soften her. “You look different.” Rory looked her over in the strip of light by the door. “So do you.” Eva barked out a short laugh. “Fair.” The years sat between them, thick and ugly and silent. Rory could still see the girl Eva had been at sixteen, all scuffed boots and too-fast speech, a grin that made teachers furious. This woman wore a tailored coat, sensible leather gloves, and the kind of expression that came from long use and little sleep. Something heavy pressed against the line of her right shoulder under the fabric, a habit or a holster; Rory couldn’t tell. Her face held itself in careful planes, but the eyes gave her away. They were still the same eyes Rory had once trusted with every stupid, terrified thought she’d ever had. “Are you—” Eva stopped, swallowed, and tried again. “Are you here working?” Rory lifted the delivery bag. “Apparently.” Eva glanced toward the bar, then back. “In Silas’s place?” “Above it.” Rory hooked a thumb up toward the ceiling. “Flat’s cheap if you don’t mind hearing men lie about foreign policy until two in the morning.” Silas gave a dry cough from the bar. “I heard that.” “You were meant to.” Eva’s lips twitched, but the smile didn’t settle. She looked at Silas with a flicker of recognition and caution, then back to Rory. “I didn’t know you were in London.” “Been here a while.” “Right.” Eva rubbed the side of her thumb against the seam of her glove. “Right.” Rory waited. The old rhythm of them had once been easy. Eva filled silence with whatever it needed, half joke, half dare. Rory had covered the gaps with questions, always questions. Now both of them seemed to have lost the map. “God,” Eva said softly, almost to herself. “You’re really here.” Rory’s jaw tightened. “You look like you’ve seen a ghost.” “I have.” The words sat between them. Rory felt Silas move behind the bar, the faint clink of glass and bottle, but he kept his distance, a deliberate absence. Eva drew in a breath and let it out through her nose. “I left messages.” Rory stared at her. “You didn’t.” “I did.” “You didn’t.” Eva’s eyes flashed. “I called your flat in Cardiff twice. Then the number changed.” Rory’s hand went unconsciously to the scar on her left wrist, thumb brushing the crescent mark under her sleeve. “Funny. I remember standing outside that flat with two bags and a bruise the size of Wales and waiting for you to pick up.” Eva went still. “I was there,” Rory went on, each word clipped clean. “On the stairs. He’d shoved me into the banister the night before and I was ringing you with one hand because the other was shaking too much to hold the phone straight. You let it go to voicemail.” Eva’s face drained. “Rory—” “No. Don’t.” Rory took a step closer, lowering her voice so the room lost the shape of it. “Don’t start making that face like it can fix anything.” Eva’s shoulders drew in hard. “I was in hospital.” Rory blinked. That had not been in the script her memory kept reciting. “What?” “I’d been hit by a car two days before,” Eva said, the words fast now, pushed out like she feared they’d rot in her mouth. “Broken collarbone. Concussion. Mum was in a state, the whole mess. My phone got nicked in A&E and by the time I replaced it, your number was dead. I sent letters.” Rory let out a short, breathless laugh that sounded like pain. “Letters.” “I did.” “Where?” Eva’s eyes shone, angry now, or desperate. “To your parents’ place. To the university address you gave me. To your old landlord. I didn’t know where you’d gone after Cardiff. I didn’t know you’d left with nothing but a bag and that stupid blue notebook.” Rory stared at her, the bar’s low hum pressing in around the edges. Letters. Messages. A dead number. The shape of her leaving shifted, not into something kind, but into something more complicated and uglier, with all its old assumptions intact and now cracked open. “You could’ve found me,” Rory said. Eva shook her head once. “You could’ve found me too.” Rory almost smiled at that, almost let the bitterness go, but it stuck in her teeth. “I was busy surviving.” Silas set a clean glass on the bar. “You both look as if you’ve forgotten how to drink.” Neither of them answered him. Eva turned her head briefly toward the bar, then back to Rory. “I heard about Evan.” Rory’s body went cold. “Not from gossip,” Eva added quickly. “From an old friend from Cardiff. She said you’d vanished after the split.” Rory’s mouth went flat. “You checked up on me through other people.” “You think I didn’t want to know?” Eva’s voice sharpened, then faltered. “I wanted to know where you were every day for years. I just didn’t know how to show up without making it worse.” Rory looked at her friend’s face and saw it now: the strain at the eyes, the faint line between the brows, the careful stillness of someone who had spent too long in rooms where any sudden movement could cost something. It had been a long time since Eva had laughed with her whole mouth. Maybe longer than Rory had realised. “You changed jobs?” Rory asked. Eva glanced down at her coat, then let out a tired breath. “Among other things.” “That’s not an answer.” “Not one you’d like.” Rory huffed. “Try me.” Eva’s gaze held for a second too long. “I work for a government contractor.” Rory stared. “You’re joking.” “I wish I was.” Silas made a low sound that might have been a laugh, if he’d been in the mood for it. Rory looked from Eva to Silas and back. “This is ridiculous.” Eva’s shoulders rose and fell. “You’re telling me.” Rory dragged a hand through her hair, slicking it back from her face, and the movement exposed the crescent scar on her wrist when her sleeve slipped. Eva saw it and flinched. “That from him?” Eva asked. “No.” Rory yanked her cuff down. “Childhood. Car door. Long story.” Eva nodded, but her eyes stayed on the scar for a beat too long. “You always said you were fine.” Rory let the silence answer that. Eva took a slow breath and tucked a strand of silvered hair behind her ear. “I heard you’d gone to London. I didn’t know where in London. I asked around. People said all sorts of things. Some said you were in law. Some said you were abroad. One idiot said you’d joined a cult.” Rory gave a short laugh despite herself. “That one’s the closest.” Silas looked toward them, one brow lifting. “We have a back room and a shelf of old maps. Call it what you like.” Eva’s mouth flickered again. The tiniest crack in the armour. Rory studied her. “You’re not what I expected.” Eva’s chin rose. “Good.” “You look like you sleep with your phone on silent and a gun on the table.” Eva’s face gave her away before her words did. “Not on the table.” Rory barked a laugh. “There it is.” For the first time since she’d walked in, Eva smiled properly, and the old shape of it hit Rory in the chest with a force she hadn’t braced for. It looked wrong on the older face and right all at once. Like hearing a song from your childhood played on instruments you didn’t know. “You were always better at reading people,” Eva said. “You were always better at lying.” “That was your line.” “It was both of ours.” The smile slipped. Eva’s gaze dropped to the bar top, where rings from old glasses marked the wood. “I never meant to leave you hanging.” Rory’s throat tightened. She looked at the crowd instead, at the dark map of London on the wall, the pinned photographs with faces long dead or long gone, the dim amber glass lamps making everyone seem a little bruised. “I know,” she said, and the admission cost her. “That’s the worst bit.” Eva lifted her head. “Rory—” “Don’t.” Rory met her eyes again, steady now, the anger no longer hot enough to burn. “Don’t apologise like it’s a receipt. I can’t use it.” Eva swallowed. Her hands, tucked against the front of her coat, tightened once. “Then tell me what you can use.” Rory laughed under her breath at that, because it had been years since anyone had asked her the right question. “Time,” she said. “A chair. Maybe a drink before I decide you’re a hallucination.” Silas reached for a bottle without being asked. “I can manage that.” Eva glanced at him. “You always did keep the strangest company.” He poured two measures into mismatched glasses and set them down with care. “And you always did arrive at inconvenient moments.” She accepted the drink with a brief nod, the kind that carried old training or old habit, then looked at Rory as if asking permission to step closer. Rory gave it with a tilt of the head. They moved to the end of the bar, away from the door, away from the wet street and the noise and the first shock of recognition. Up close, Rory could see the fine lines at the corners of Eva’s eyes, the pale nick at her chin, the way she held her left hand a fraction stiffer than her right. Not the girl from Cardiff. Not quite. Neither was Rory. Eva wrapped both hands round the glass without drinking. “You cut your hair.” Rory touched the ends near her jaw. “You grew up.” Eva snorted. “That’s rich.” “It is.” Silas stepped away to answer a customer, leaving them in the amber hush under the maps. Eva turned her glass slowly. “Do you ever think about those summers by the bay?” Rory looked at her over the rim of her own drink. “Every time it rains.” Eva’s expression shifted, and the distance between them seemed to flicker, not vanish, but thin enough for a heartbeat to show what lay beneath. “We used to say we’d leave together.” Rory looked at the old photographs on the wall, men in fedoras, women in gloves, a warship half obscured by cigarette smoke and time. “We used to say a lot of things.” Eva laughed once, but it broke at the edge. “You always hated when I got sentimental.” “I hated when you turned sentimental into an excuse.” Eva stared at her glass. “And now?” “Now I think maybe you were both.” That drew a real wince, a small one. Eva set the glass down with care. “I deserved that.” Rory shook her head. “No. I deserved your phone call in that hallway. That’s the part that still sits wrong.” Eva’s eyes lifted. “If I’d known—” “Yeah,” Rory cut in, softer now. “If.” The word stayed with them. Eva took a sip at last, then another, and some of the tightness in her face eased by a degree. “I almost didn’t come in.” “Why did you?” She looked at the door, then back at Rory. “The sign.” Rory glanced toward the green neon outside, then gave a faint, unwilling smile. “That’s a shit reason.” Eva’s mouth quirked. “It worked.” Rory’s phone buzzed in her pocket. She ignored it. Eva watched the movement. “Still putting everyone else before yourself?” Rory tipped her head. “Still asking questions you already know the answer to?” “Touché.” Silas cleared his throat from farther down the bar, having the decency not to interrupt with words. He set another glass in place, then moved away again with the careful limp that never quite left him. Eva followed him with a glance. “He always keep an eye on you?” Rory looked toward the back room, the hidden door masked behind the shelf of bottles and old books. “More than he admits.” Eva gave a quiet hum. “Good.” Rory turned back. “You can’t just walk in here after years and say good like that fixes the maths.” “I know.” “Do you?” Eva’s mouth tightened, then loosened. “No. But I know where you are now.” Rory held her gaze. Outside, a siren passed and faded. Inside, the bar went on breathing around them, warm and low, the kind of place where secrets came in wet coats and left with their collars turned up. Rory stared at the woman opposite her and saw every version of her at once: the girl in Cardiff stealing chips from the café by the harbour, the voice on the phone that never called back, the stranger in the coat with silver at her temples and a bruise hidden beneath the seam. Eva lifted her glass a little, not quite a toast, not quite a plea. Rory reached for hers too.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva said softly [softly]"
1"Eva added quickly [quickly]"
2"Eva’s voice sharpened then [then]"
dialogueSentences130
tagDensity0.162
leniency0.323
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.046
90.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2603
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"softly"
2"really"
3"quickly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2603
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"churn"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"calculated"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count2
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"churn"
2"flicked"
3"calculated"
4"trembled"
5"flicker"
6"silence"
7"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"a flicker of recognition"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences173
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences281
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2603
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions138
wordCount1843
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity3.53
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Rory65
Eva55
Silas12
London1
Cardiff2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
83.04% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sounded like pain"
1"as if asking permission to step closer"
2"not quite a toast, not quite a plea"
3"not quite a plea"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.768
wordCount2603
matches
0"not into something kind, but into something more complicated"
1"not vanish, but thin enough for a heartbeat to show what lay beneath"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences281
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs151
mean17.24
std16.93
cv0.982
sampleLengths
049
119
236
311
49
512
637
727
813
95
1055
116
1250
137
1410
1522
169
172
181
1921
2016
2114
2228
2315
247
25107
2612
276
2810
2927
3011
314
3230
334
3415
3541
3610
3710
382
3927
4015
416
422
432
4414
4543
463
4748
484
4928
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences173
matches
0"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs304
matches
0"was already turning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences281
ratio0.004
matches
0"Something heavy pressed against the line of her right shoulder under the fabric, a habit or a holster; Rory couldn’t tell."
98.50% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1846
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount77
adverbRatio0.04171180931744312
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.004875406283856988
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences281
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences281
mean9.26
std8.54
cv0.922
sampleLengths
019
130
24
315
420
516
611
77
82
98
104
1118
1217
132
149
1518
1613
175
1828
1910
2017
216
227
2343
247
2510
2621
271
289
292
301
318
3210
333
3415
351
3610
374
3825
393
4012
413
426
431
4410
4523
4622
4721
4813
4918
47.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.24199288256227758
totalSentences281
uniqueOpeners68
42.19% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences158
matches
0"Then smoke, old wood, and"
1"Maybe longer than Rory had"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences158
matches
0"He looked up from the"
1"he muttered, but the corner"
2"His gaze flicked to the"
3"She pushed wet hair off"
4"He tipped his head toward"
5"She paused just inside, one"
6"Her eyes tracked the room"
7"she said, and then her"
8"His eyes moved between them"
9"He said nothing."
10"Her face held itself in"
11"They were still the same"
12"She looked at Silas with"
13"It had been a long"
14"It looked wrong on the"
15"She looked at the crowd"
16"she said, and the admission"
17"Her hands, tucked against the"
18"He poured two measures into"
19"She accepted the drink with"
ratio0.152
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount147
totalSentences158
matches
0"The green neon above The"
1"Rory pushed through the door"
2"Warmth hit her first."
3"Silas stood behind the bar"
4"He looked up from the"
5"he muttered, but the corner"
6"Rory dropped the bag onto"
7"His gaze flicked to the"
8"She pushed wet hair off"
9"He tipped his head toward"
10"Rory snorted and was already"
11"The bell rang once more."
12"A gust of cold air"
13"She paused just inside, one"
14"Her eyes tracked the room"
15"The woman’s gaze snagged on"
16"The bar noise thinned around"
17"Rory’s fingers tightened on the"
18"The woman’s breath left her"
19"she said, and then her"
ratio0.93
31.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences158
matches
0"Now both of them seemed"
ratio0.006
98.90% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Rory could still see the girl Eva had been at sixteen, all scuffed boots and too-fast speech, a grin that made teachers furious."
1"This woman wore a tailored coat, sensible leather gloves, and the kind of expression that came from long use and little sleep."
2"Rory looked at her friend’s face and saw it now: the strain at the eyes, the faint line between the brows, the careful stillness of someone who had spent too lo…"
3"She accepted the drink with a brief nod, the kind that carried old training or old habit, then looked at Rory as if asking permission to step closer."
77.38% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva said softly, almost to herself"
1"Rory went on, each word clipped clean"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he muttered (mutter)"
1"Eva added quickly (add)"
dialogueSentences130
tagDensity0.085
leniency0.169
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.031
85.0119%