Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09P6FXKATX9ZHY4D6G3006

Run Details

Duration:
19.0s
Cost:
$0.016520
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The stairs down to the abandoned Tube station smelled of wet concrete, old electricity, and something sharper under it, like copper left too long in the rain. Detective Harlow Quinn took them two at a time anyway, her left wrist bent just enough for the worn leather watch to ride clear of her cuff. Habit. Discipline. The body liked to pretend it knew what came next. It didn’t. At the bottom, the platform opened beneath a low curve of blackened tile, the lights spaced too far apart and too dim to call it proper illumination. Someone had strung extra lamps along the walls—portable work lights, police issue, but their hard white glow only made the shadows between them look denser. Camden Station had been sealed years ago. Officially it was dead space. Unofficially, London had a talent for keeping its worst rooms alive. A uniformed constable waved her in, then stepped back like he was giving a predator room to pass. Quinn ignored it. She had been getting that look for eighteen years. “Detective Quinn,” said a voice from the tape cordon. She found Inspector Vale by the track bed, hands on hips, his tie loosened and his face damp with the kind of irritation that came from having arrived before dawn. He was a round-shouldered man with a red nose and a perfectly ordinary sense of smell, which meant he would miss half of what was in this station even if it bit him. “Tell me you didn’t drag me here for a burglary with theatrical lighting,” Quinn said. Vale gave her a tired look. “If it were burglary, I’d be delighted. We have a body, a missing witness, and evidence that appears to have been arranged by a lunatic.” Quinn ducked under the tape. “That’s more honest.” He gestured down the platform. “Victim’s over there. We’ve sealed the immediate area. No one touches anything.” “Good. Who found him?” “Market runner. Swears he came down with a message and found the scene already like this.” “The Market,” Quinn repeated. Vale’s mouth flattened. “You know what I mean.” She did. The Veil Market was one of those underground rumors the city pretended not to have. The kind that moved location every full moon, which made it all the more irritating when it chose to nest beneath a police jurisdiction. Quinn had seen enough impossible things over the last three years to know that when ordinary men started talking around a word instead of through it, there was usually a reason. She moved toward the far end of the platform. The station had been stripped of its advertising boards, the benches, the old route maps. Yet traces remained: faded rectangles on the tile where posters had once hung, rusted brackets above head height, the ghost of a timetable board on the wall. A place designed for waiting, now repurposed for hiding. The body lay on the yellow line. Male, mid-thirties maybe, though death had a way of making all ages look borrowed. He wore a dark coat too fine for a commuter and boots with the soles scuffed by long walks. His hands were folded neatly over his chest as if someone had posed him for a funeral portrait. No obvious blood. No sign of struggle. No visible wound. That alone was wrong. Quinn crouched at the edge of the tarp and studied the corpse without touching it. The man’s face was slack, lips slightly parted. His eyes were open. The pupils had a clouded, filmed look that made her think of old marbles submerged in bath water. His skin held a gray cast that wasn’t pallor so much as the absence of some vital argument between the body and the world. “Cause of death?” she asked. “Pending,” Vale said. “No external trauma. Ambulance thinks cardiac.” Quinn glanced up. “Ambulance thinks because they haven’t learned to stop talking?” Vale ignored that. “There’s also this.” He held out a clear evidence bag. Inside was a brass compass, small enough to fit in the palm. Its casing had a patina of verdigris that clung in the seams and around the hinge, and the face was etched with fine protective sigils so delicate they looked more like scratches until the light hit them. The needle sat motionless, not pointing north but tilted hard to the left, as if trying to escape the bag. Quinn took one look and felt the prickling awareness she always hated. Not fear, exactly. Recognition without context. The sort of unease that came before a door opened somewhere you had not seen. “Where was this found?” “Next to the body.” “No trace marks on the victim?” “Not that anyone’s spotted.” She looked at the compass again. There was something about the brass casing that felt recently handled, though the surface was old enough to have survived several administrations and probably a small war. It should have belonged in a curio cabinet or a lockbox, not on a train platform under Camden. “This is why you called me,” she said. Vale spread a hand. “Because your unit deals with unusual items now, apparently. Also because I didn’t want it getting logged as evidence in a system that can’t spell ‘occult’ without a typo.” “Flattering.” “I’m serious, Quinn.” So was she. She glanced at the body again, then at the compass, then past the cordon where a cluster of plainclothes officers hovered around a service alcove under the opposite wall. “What’s there?” Vale hesitated. “A locker room. Or something like one. One of the Market’s vendors, we think. Possibly where the victim came from.” Quinn rose and crossed the platform. The alcove doors had been forced open, their hinges bent outward. Inside was a cramped room lined with narrow metal lockers, the kind a station employee would have used before the line closed. Most of them were rusted shut. A few stood open, empty except for dust, old paper scraps, and the smell of mold. Except one. The third locker from the left had been left ajar by a hand that knew exactly how far to crack a door without making a sound. Inside, on a shelf at eye level, sat a thin layer of white powder. Beside it was a ring of black wax, melted and re-hardened in a rough circle. On the back wall, pinpricked into the steel, were six small holes in a pattern that was not random no matter how much a policeman squinted at it. Quinn leaned in. “Did anyone photograph this before moving the body?” “Yes.” “Good. And did anyone touch the locker?” “No.” She turned to Vale. “Are you sure?” He bristled. “I know how to run a scene, Detective.” “Do you? Because the body’s been arranged, the compass is planted, and this locker has signs of a ritual in a room no one thought to search until after the fact.” Her gaze dropped to the floor. “And somebody walked in here wearing wet boots.” Vale stared. “How can you tell?” “Because they left mud,” she said, pointing to the tile just outside the locker room. “But not much. They stood here only long enough to drag the dead man to the platform and then leave by the service tunnel. The rest of the floor is dry, except that patch by the threshold. They came in from the tunnel, not from the platform stairs.” He frowned. “That’s not what the runner said.” “Runners lie when they’re frightened.” Quinn crouched and touched the edge of the mud with one gloved finger. Not mud exactly. Fine dark silt, mixed with something that glittered faintly under the light. “This isn’t street dirt. It’s from a riverbank or a tunnel sump. Someone came through service passageways from below.” Vale looked unconvinced. “And the body?” She moved back to the corpse and tilted her head. “Too clean.” He gave her a sharp look. “That is an absurd thing to say about a corpse.” “It’s the only honest thing to say about this one.” She pointed at the cuffs. “No fibers snagged on the hands. No soil under the nails. His coat’s hem is barely dirty. Yet he’s been dragged? No. Moved carefully. The hands were folded after death. Whoever did that wanted him presented, not disposed of.” Vale rubbed his jaw. “So a message.” “Maybe. But not from the killer to us.” Quinn glanced at the compass bag still in his hand. “From someone who expected us to find it.” That made him pause. She could see the thought working behind his eyes, the uncomfortable shift from routine to something he did not have a form for. Quinn had spent years watching colleagues try to fit the impossible into a paper box and slap a label on it. It never held. “Then what’s the interpretation?” he asked, though he already sounded as if he regretted the question. Quinn walked the length of the platform and stopped beneath a cracked departure sign. The old arrows still pointed toward destinations no one could reach. She folded her arms, the leather strap of her watch creasing against her wrist. “This wasn’t a mugging. Not a burglary. Not even a straightforward murder. Somebody used the Market’s own etiquette against itself. The victim came here carrying something valuable, something that draws interest. He was met in the locker room, not on the platform, which means he had an appointment. There’s a ritual mark in the locker because someone was trying to either open or seal a passage.” She nodded toward the compass. “And that compass wasn’t found beside him. It was placed there to make us think he was the kind of man who wandered into bad places and died of bad decisions.” Vale stared at her, then at the compass again. “And what is he, then?” Quinn looked down at the dead man’s face. The clouded eyes. The carefully arranged hands. The absence of blood. “He’s a courier,” she said quietly. “Or he was. He brought something in, realized he’d been set up, and tried to get out through the service tunnel. But he was stopped before he made it to the street.” “How do you know that?” She pointed to a smear near the collar of his coat, almost invisible in the poor light. “There. Wax. Black wax, same as the locker. It’s on the outside of his lapel, not the inside. That means he brushed against a sealed object or barrier on his way out. If he’d been killed first, it would be on the floor or his hands. It’s on him because he was alive when he crossed it.” Vale followed her finger. “And the compass?” “Was likely meant to locate whatever he brought.” She glanced at the brass in the evidence bag. “Or to locate the breach after it opened.” He looked uneasy now, which meant she was getting closer to whatever he hadn’t wanted to say. “You think there’s a portal down here.” “I think there was one.” “Was?” Quinn stepped back into the locker room. The circle of wax on the shelf was not entirely smooth. At one point, just beneath the flaking dust, there was a tiny groove, as if the thing once rested there had been lifted away with care. She ran her eye over the six pinholes in the steel. Not holes. Vent points. Or anchoring points. Something had been mounted here and then removed in a hurry. On the floor below the locker, she saw it: a scatter of pale granules caught in the grout. Bone dust. Her eyes narrowed. “Did anyone photograph the floor before the body was moved?” “Yes,” Vale said, slower now. “Then pull the image. Zoom the threshold.” He did not argue. Quinn could hear him calling for a tech, could hear the murmur of the team outside the cordon. While they waited, she knelt and examined the edges of the locker door. There, almost hidden in the rust, was a smear of soot-black residue that glittered faintly under the lamp. Not soot. Ash. A cold thought threaded through her. Not because she understood it fully, but because she recognized the shape of the pattern. The body had not been left as evidence; it had been left as a lock. A dead man as a seal. The compass as a baited needle. The locker as the mouth of the trap. She straightened just as a tech showed Vale the camera images on a tablet. He swore under his breath. “What is it?” Quinn asked. He turned the screen toward her. The image captured the body from a wider angle before anyone moved it. In the photograph, faint and almost transparent over the tile behind the corpse, was a circular distortion in the air. The light bent around it like heat shimmer over asphalt. At the center of the distortion hung a darkness too deep to be an absence of light. A wound in the station. Quinn’s mouth went dry. She had seen impossible things before. Some had killed people she knew. One had taken DS Morris and left behind only unanswered questions and a case file full of words no court would accept. She had never become comfortable with any of it. She had simply become practical enough to act anyway. “Who else has seen this?” she asked. Vale lowered the tablet as if it might bite. “No one. I wanted your view before I—” “Before you told the wrong room and turned a contained problem into a panic.” She met his eyes. “Good instinct, for once.” He looked offended. She didn’t care. “Get everyone off the platform except your techs. No flash photography. No radios unless you want to invite trouble. And seal the tunnel entrance at both ends.” Vale swallowed. “You’re serious.” “I have never been more serious in my life.” He hesitated, then nodded and turned away, barking orders with the stiff authority of a man trying to sound in control. Quinn stayed where she was, looking at the image on the tablet. The distortion in the air did not match the compass needle. The compass pointed left, toward the service tunnel. That meant the active breach—if breach it was—had been where the man came from, not where he died. Which meant the compass wasn’t guiding toward the danger in the room. It was warning of something under the station. She looked past the locker room wall, as if she might see through brick and old conduit and layers of forgotten infrastructure into the dark below. A hidden market beneath Camden, moving from place to place with the moon. A body posed like a message. A compass made by a Shade artisan, crafted to seek what should not be found. And someone had used all of it as a map. “Detective?” said a voice behind her. Quinn turned. An evidence officer stood at the edge of the cordon, holding a sealed sample bag. Inside was a small clump of gray material, no larger than a coin. The officer looked uncertain, as if the thing in his hand had taught him a fear he lacked the language to name. “It was in the victim’s pocket,” he said. “We almost missed it.” Quinn took the bag. Inside lay a sliver of bone, polished smooth at one end and drilled through with a narrow hole. A token. Old. Smoked at the edges. Her pulse gave one hard, precise beat. Entry requirement. Her gaze snapped to the locker, to the wax, to the ash, to the dead man’s folded hands. The whole thing clicked into place with cruel elegance. The victim hadn’t simply come from the Market. He had been admitted to it. And if he had a bone token on him when he died, then somebody wanted this scene to be read one way by anyone who knew enough to look. A message to the market. A warning to the police. A lure for whatever still waited beneath Camden. Quinn handed the bag back without looking away from the tunnel entrance. “Vale,” she called. He came back at once, a little too eager to hear what she had found and a little too afraid of the answer. She kept her voice low. “This wasn’t a murder at the Market. It was a delivery to the Market. Whoever set this up wanted us here before whatever’s under the station woke up.” Vale went still. “Woke up?” She looked at the compass one more time. The needle had begun to tremble inside the evidence bag, a fine, nervous quiver that made the brass hum against the plastic. “Yes,” she said. “And we’re standing too close to the door.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.266
leniency0.532
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.025
92.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2779
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count2
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
91.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2779
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"predator"
count1
1
word"sense of"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"comfortable"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"predator"
1"sense of"
2"etched"
3"comfortable"
4"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences195
matches
0"looked uneasy"
98.90% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences195
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
2"think"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences251
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen71
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2776
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount1981
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.21
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Harlow1
Quinn24
Station1
London1
Inspector1
Vale18
Veil1
Market2
Camden4
Morris1
Shade1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Station"
3"Vale"
4"Camden"
5"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"Market"
globalScore0.894
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if trying to escape the bag"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.36
wordCount2776
matches
0"not pointing north but tilted hard to the left, as if trying to escape the bag"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences251
matches
0"getting that look"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs116
mean23.93
std23.92
cv0.999
sampleLengths
066
12
275
330
49
563
615
731
88
917
104
1116
124
138
1472
1560
167
1761
184
1969
205
219
2212
236
2476
2533
264
274
286
294
3051
318
3233
331
343
3532
362
3722
3861
392
4083
4111
421
437
441
457
4610
4745
486
4963
85.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount11
totalSentences195
matches
0"been sealed"
1"been stripped"
2"were folded"
3"was etched"
4"been forced"
5"were rusted"
6"been left"
7"been lifted"
8"been mounted"
9"been left"
10"been left"
11"been admitted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs334
matches
0"was giving"
1"was getting"
2"was, looking"
3"wasn’t guiding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences251
ratio0.012
matches
0"Someone had strung extra lamps along the walls—portable work lights, police issue, but their hard white glow only made the shadows between them look denser."
1"The body had not been left as evidence; it had been left as a lock."
2"That meant the active breach—if breach it was—had been where the man came from, not where he died."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1987
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount78
adverbRatio0.03925515853044791
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.010568696527428284
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences251
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences251
mean11.06
std9.95
cv0.9
sampleLengths
027
127
21
31
410
52
627
725
87
95
1011
1118
123
139
149
1530
1633
1715
186
1925
205
213
225
2312
244
2516
264
273
285
292
3015
3124
3231
339
3415
3527
369
377
3814
3919
4018
413
424
433
444
4515
468
474
4818
4924
47.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3187250996015936
totalSentences251
uniqueOpeners80
40.16% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences166
matches
0"Officially it was dead space."
1"Unofficially, London had a talent"
ratio0.012
99.52% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences166
matches
0"She had been getting that"
1"She found Inspector Vale by"
2"He was a round-shouldered man"
3"He gestured down the platform."
4"She moved toward the far"
5"He wore a dark coat"
6"His hands were folded neatly"
7"His eyes were open."
8"His skin held a gray"
9"He held out a clear"
10"Its casing had a patina"
11"She looked at the compass"
12"It should have belonged in"
13"She glanced at the body"
14"She turned to Vale."
15"Her gaze dropped to the"
16"she said, pointing to the"
17"She moved back to the"
18"He gave her a sharp"
19"She pointed at the cuffs"
ratio0.301
68.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount130
totalSentences166
matches
0"The stairs down to the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn took them"
2"The body liked to pretend"
3"Someone had strung extra lamps"
4"Camden Station had been sealed"
5"A uniformed constable waved her"
6"Quinn ignored it."
7"She had been getting that"
8"She found Inspector Vale by"
9"He was a round-shouldered man"
10"Vale gave her a tired"
11"Quinn ducked under the tape."
12"He gestured down the platform."
13"Vale’s mouth flattened."
14"The Veil Market was one"
15"The kind that moved location"
16"Quinn had seen enough impossible"
17"She moved toward the far"
18"The station had been stripped"
19"A place designed for waiting,"
ratio0.783
30.12% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences166
matches
0"While they waited, she knelt"
ratio0.006
42.12% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She found Inspector Vale by the track bed, hands on hips, his tie loosened and his face damp with the kind of irritation that came from having arrived before da…"
1"He was a round-shouldered man with a red nose and a perfectly ordinary sense of smell, which meant he would miss half of what was in this station even if it bit…"
2"The kind that moved location every full moon, which made it all the more irritating when it chose to nest beneath a police jurisdiction."
3"His hands were folded neatly over his chest as if someone had posed him for a funeral portrait."
4"Its casing had a patina of verdigris that clung in the seams and around the hinge, and the face was etched with fine protective sigils so delicate they looked m…"
5"The needle sat motionless, not pointing north but tilted hard to the left, as if trying to escape the bag."
6"On the back wall, pinpricked into the steel, were six small holes in a pattern that was not random no matter how much a policeman squinted at it."
7"Fine dark silt, mixed with something that glittered faintly under the light."
8"There, almost hidden in the rust, was a smear of soot-black residue that glittered faintly under the lamp."
9"She looked past the locker room wall, as if she might see through brick and old conduit and layers of forgotten infrastructure into the dark below."
10"The needle had begun to tremble inside the evidence bag, a fine, nervous quiver that made the brass hum against the plastic."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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fancyCount1
fancyTags
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leniency0.354
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