Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09TRZBP5M1SFQM7BK4KNZB

Run Details

Duration:
34.4s
Cost:
$0.002067
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The neon sign flickered like a dying insect above the cobbled street, its sickly green light casting a jaundiced glow across the puddles of January sleet. Rory hesitated with her bicycle propped against the damp brickwork of the pub’s exterior, hands tucked deep into the pockets of her waxed jacket, thumbs worrying the frayed edges of a five-pound note. The Raven’s Nest had once been a place of refuge—smoke-stained and candlelit, the scent of stale lager and older secrets—but now it looked smaller. The photos along the frontage, yellowed by decades of greasy fingerprints, seemed to tilt forward with the weight of their own memories. She adjusted the delivery bag across her chest, the insulated pouches pressing against her collarbones like small, insistent fists. Inside, the familiar gloom enveloped her, thick as the fog outside. The bar smelled of Guinness stout and lemon polish, of bitter and burnt toast. Rory blinked as her pupils adjusted, cataloguing the changes with the quiet precision of someone assessing a crime scene. The mahogany had been polished to the sheen of wet coal. The maps on the walls—mostly Eastern Europe, blue-inked borders drawn tight as skin—had been rearranged, continental shapes shifted like tectonic plates under Silas’s restless hands. A new photograph hung above the fireplace, black-and-white, of what looked like Berlin in the ’70s. Or maybe Prague. Her stomach tightened. A silence fell that wasn’t absolute—there was the clink of glass, the murmur of two men in the corner, snippets of Polish drifting over like cigarette smoke—but it pressed against her eardrums like cotton wool. Then she saw him. Silas stood behind the bar, polishing a glass with a snowy rag, elbow crooked, forearm corded with veins mapped in blue like tributaries back to some long-flooded river. His auburn hair had surrendered ground to winter, streaks of iron defining temples and jawline. The grey had crept like frost toward his beard, neatly trimmed, and when he shifted his weight to rest his left leg, the old limp caught the light, a flicker of strain just beneath disguise. His right hand moved—the one with the silver signet ring, Orion’s belt pressed in miniature on the face—and set the glass down with the care of a man who handles fragile truths daily. Rory’s breath hitched. She felt eighteen again, standing in this same bar, a bruise forming a storm cloud on her upper arm, Evan’s laughter echoing off the toilets where Silas had smuggled her through the back door. She stepped forward; her Doc Martens squeaked on the checkerboard tiles. Silas glanced up. His hazel eyes, still sharp as broken bottle glass, locked onto her, and for a heartbeat he missed the swipe of his rag across the mahogany, leaving a streak of condensation like ghosted breath on a mirror. “Evening,” she said. Her voice surprised her—level, almost calm. She wondered if he heard the years trembling beneath. Silas placed both hands on the bar, knuckles whitening. “You’re late.” A laugh bubbled up, thin and fragile as the ice forming at the rim of a glass. “Delivery’s prompt as hell, usually. But tonight the sleet decided to sprint.” She patted the delivery bag. “Golden Empress sent pie and Chiang’s crispy duck. Made a mess of the turn at Great Marlborough, but the duck’s intact.” Silas exhaled through his nose, a ghost of a smile. “You always did have a flair for understatement.” He pushed off the bar, the limp more pronounced now she was watching. “Come on, then. Let’s get you a drink while we sort this.” He called over his shoulder, “Oi, Marek—keep the optics warm—closing early tonight, innit?” The younger man behind the bar—polish-shaven skull, tattoo of a raven on his throat—nodded without looking up from his ledger. Silas led her through the crush of the lounge, where a pocket watch chained to a portly man’s vest glinted under a reading lamp. Rory’s pulse stuttered when she saw the bookshelf—ebony, pillars carved with ravens in flight, the one that hid the secret room. She wondered if he had ever stood there, hand on the spine of a fake Agatha Christie, watching the hours pass while she slept upstairs in the flat above, curled beneath a duvet that still smelled of detergent and hospital wards. The back room offered a paradox: intimate and claustrophobic, lit by a brass desk lamp that leaked copper light onto a blotter stained with what looked like red wine—or blood. Silas shut the door with a soft click that sealed them inside the sanctuary of old ghosts. A bottle of malt whisky sat half-empty on a tray with two glasses. The scent of peat curled into Rory’s throat like invitation, or warning. “I’d rather not,” she said quickly, though her mouth watered. Silas poured anyway. The amber liquid hit the glass bottom with a quiet *thud* that echoed in her ribcage. He slid the drink toward her. “You look like hell.” Rory took the glass, fingers brushing the rim, feeling the tarnish of his ring on the base. “Pot. Kettle.” She held his gaze. “Metaphorically.” A flicker of amusement cooled the burn in his eyes. “Fair.” He leaned against the edge of the desk, crossing his bad leg behind him. The signet ring caught the lamp light, casting a miniature constellation onto the blotter. “Used to bring you tomato soup and Saltines when that bastard laid hands on you.” Rory’s stomach clenched, but she kept her lips sealed. “Then you vanished.” His voice stayed neutral, the way a pathologist might say *cadaver went missing mid-autopsy*—factual, registering loss without drama. “Cardiff. Your mother’s sister, wasn’t it?” “Aunt Siân.” Rory traced the rim of her glass with a thumbnail. “Housed me till I could breathe again. Changed my name back to Carter—too many Evan-shaped shadows in lieu of ID.” She avoided his eyes. “University kept the mess quiet. Pre-Law still smelled like Evan’s cologne sometimes—old books and bad decisions.” Silas nodded, slow. “And now?” “Now I deliver patty pans and kung pao chicken. Balance sheets of bad choices instead of bad men.” She lifted the whisky. “Cheers to small victories.” Silas didn’t laugh. He swirled his glass, watching the liquid climb the sides like tides retreating from shore. “You lived above me for six months. I was in Prague when shit went south.” A beat. “I could’ve been here.” Rory’s knuckles whitened around the glass. “And done what, Silas? Hand me a burner phone and a one-way ticket to Berlin?” She set the whisky down untouched. “You taught me too well—legs to run, arms to hit, mind to plan—but Evan had friends in low places. Ones even you couldn’t root out without sinking your entire network.” She stared at the photographs on the wall—grainy faces she didn’t recognise. “You wouldn’t have chosen sides. You choose the long game, remember?” Silas’s jaw tightened. He drank, neat, no grimace. “I choose people.” “Not when it costs everything.” The words slipped out sharp as broken glass. She wished she could call them back. Silas exhaled, long and steady, like fog over a grave. “You think I haven’t scanned every pub from Shoreditch to Clapham? You think I didn’t wire half the delivery bikes in London just hoping the transponder would ping?” Rory’s breath stopped. “You put trackers on couriers?” “When the couriers are parolees for grief and fear, yes.” He rubbed the back of his neck, where the signet ring rested heavy as a manacle. “Learned from a bloke in Zagreb that Evan had a cottage in the Brecon Beacons. Surveillance photos, Rory. Calls logged. But you weren’t there. You weren’t anywhere.” A pause. “Silent means safe, sometimes.” Tears burned behind Rory’s eyes, hot and unwanted. She blinked, staring at the scar on her left wrist—the crescent moons carved by a kitchen drawer when she was twelve, long before Evan’s alphabetti spaghetti knives. “I buried my old life. Burned the ID, swapped the hair dye, changed my route. Moved flats four times. Never looked back because looking back was a door Evan could kick in.” Silas’s voice softened. “And now?” “I’m still running.” She met his eyes then, bright blue and bruised with unshed light. “But I’m not looking over my shoulder quite so hard.” Silas poured himself another finger. His hand didn’t shake. “You came back to London.” “I followed Eva. She got me the bike courier gig.” Rory laughed, humourless. “Of all the cosmic jokes, I’m delivering noodles in the city that almost broke me.” She glanced toward the secret door, the one that opened to midnight briefings and wetwork and solidarities made of paper-thin whispers. “You ever wonder if we’re just ghosts haunting the same old bar, Silas? Reliving the damage so we can feel like we learned something?” Silas studied her for a long, slow heartbeat. Then he reached beneath the desk and produced a worn leather case—his, she recognised the grain—and from it, a photograph curled at the edges. He slid it across. Rory picked it up. It was taken outside a greyhound track in Walthamstow, twenty years ago, grainy and sun-bleached. In the centre stood a teenage Rory in a second-hand leather jacket, grinning like she owned the rain. Behind her, Silas—thirty-eight then, salt-and-pepper auburn like a fox in autumn—his sleeve rolled up, forearm resting on her shoulder. On her wrist, a friendship bracelet: red and black thread knotted tight. She touched the image with two fingertips. “Where’d you get this?” “Kept a box in the loft above the flat. Found it when I renovated.” His voice was rough terrain. “You look happy.” She nodded, throat tight. “I think we both did, once.” Silas closed the case with a soft *snap*. “Funny thing about ghosts—most aren’t dead. They just forget how to live.” Rory folded the photograph carefully and tucked it into her jacket pocket, right over her heart. She felt the weight of it like a second scar. “I still dream about Prague. Not the operation gone wrong—the *before*. The coffee we spilled on a map of Moldau. The way you taught me to cast a shadow so I could slip through the classroom unnoticed.” She laughed, shaky. “I was practising for my future self, wasn’t I?” Silas didn’t answer. He knew the question was rhetorical. Outside, the neon sign crackled as if short-circuiting. The city’s pulse thrummed through the walls—Soho breathing in neon and nicotine, in footsteps and final goodnights. Rory stood, the delivery bag suddenly a hundred pounds of regret. “I should go. Eva’s waiting for drop-off sheets.” She hesitated. “Will you tell me if they find him? Evan?” Silas didn’t look up. “I never lose track of monsters. Just choose my moment.” He lifted his glass in a toast she couldn’t decipher. “Drive safe, Rory.” She opened the door—cool air rushed in like a held breath finally released—and looked back once. Silas stood framed in the glow of the brass lamp, left hand on the desk for balance, right hand resting heavy with its ring of constellations. The silence between them felt like a vow: *I will wait. You will return.* Rory stepped into the throttling sleet and pushed her bicycle onto the cobbles, the wheels spinning loud as her pulse. Each push of the pedal carried her away from him, but not from the photograph burning in her pocket, or the whisky aftertaste of old words unspoken. The Raven’s Nest shrank in her rear-view mirror, green neon bleeding into the London murk. She wondered if Silas watched from the back room window, waiting for a familiar silhouette to reappear. She wondered if she would.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quickly [quickly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.039
92.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1964
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"carefully"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1964
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"flicker"
count2
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count3
9
word"sanctuary"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"traced"
count1
12
word"grave"
count1
13
word"scanned"
count1
14
word"footsteps"
count1
15
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"weight"
2"familiar"
3"gloom"
4"stomach"
5"silence"
6"flicker"
7"echoing"
8"pulse"
9"sanctuary"
10"echoed"
11"traced"
12"grave"
13"scanned"
14"footsteps"
15"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"A flicker of amusement"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords13
totalWords1930
ratio0.007
matches
0"thud"
1"cadaver went missing mid-autopsy"
2"snap"
3"before"
4"I will wait. You will return."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions61
wordCount1396
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.58
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
January1
Raven2
Nest2
Guinness1
Eastern1
Europe1
Silas22
Berlin1
Prague1
Polish1
Orion1
Evan2
Doc1
Martens1
Agatha1
Christie1
Rory17
Tears1
Walthamstow1
Soho1
London1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Polish"
4"Orion"
5"Evan"
6"Martens"
7"Agatha"
8"Christie"
9"Rory"
10"Tears"
places
0"Eastern"
1"Europe"
2"Berlin"
3"Prague"
4"Walthamstow"
5"Soho"
6"London"
globalScore0.712
windowScore0.5
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like Berlin in the ’70s"
1"looked like red wine—or blood"
2"felt like a vow: *I will wait"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1930
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean37.84
std28.73
cv0.759
sampleLengths
0124
1102
239
3111
437
511
640
718
811
955
1056
1120
1286
1372
1410
1529
1624
1754
189
1927
2052
215
2226
2339
2480
2511
2620
2738
288
2959
3067
315
3225
3314
3473
3536
3668
3711
3822
3910
4020
4175
429
4325
4430
4527
4616
4740
4847
4932
95.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences110
matches
0"been polished"
1"been rearranged"
2"was taken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs232
matches
0"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences137
ratio0.109
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest had once been a place of refuge—smoke-stained and candlelit, the scent of stale lager and older secrets—but now it looked smaller."
1"The maps on the walls—mostly Eastern Europe, blue-inked borders drawn tight as skin—had been rearranged, continental shapes shifted like tectonic plates under Silas’s restless hands."
2"A silence fell that wasn’t absolute—there was the clink of glass, the murmur of two men in the corner, snippets of Polish drifting over like cigarette smoke—but it pressed against her eardrums like cotton wool."
3"His right hand moved—the one with the silver signet ring, Orion’s belt pressed in miniature on the face—and set the glass down with the care of a man who handles fragile truths daily."
4"She stepped forward; her Doc Martens squeaked on the checkerboard tiles."
5"Her voice surprised her—level, almost calm."
6"The younger man behind the bar—polish-shaven skull, tattoo of a raven on his throat—nodded without looking up from his ledger."
7"Rory’s pulse stuttered when she saw the bookshelf—ebony, pillars carved with ravens in flight, the one that hid the secret room."
8"The back room offered a paradox: intimate and claustrophobic, lit by a brass desk lamp that leaked copper light onto a blotter stained with what looked like red wine—or blood."
9"“You taught me too well—legs to run, arms to hit, mind to plan—but Evan had friends in low places. Ones even you couldn’t root out without sinking your entire network.” She stared at the photographs on the wall—grainy faces she didn’t recognise."
10"She blinked, staring at the scar on her left wrist—the crescent moons carved by a kitchen drawer when she was twelve, long before Evan’s alphabetti spaghetti knives."
11"Then he reached beneath the desk and produced a worn leather case—his, she recognised the grain—and from it, a photograph curled at the edges."
12"Behind her, Silas—thirty-eight then, salt-and-pepper auburn like a fox in autumn—his sleeve rolled up, forearm resting on her shoulder."
13"The city’s pulse thrummed through the walls—Soho breathing in neon and nicotine, in footsteps and final goodnights."
14"She opened the door—cool air rushed in like a held breath finally released—and looked back once."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1436
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"sickly green light casting"
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.02437325905292479
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.006267409470752089
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean14.09
std9.98
cv0.708
sampleLengths
026
133
224
322
419
511
614
719
811
925
1016
113
123
1335
144
1528
1615
1735
1833
193
2034
2111
223
2337
243
256
269
279
282
2917
3017
3121
3210
3321
3425
3520
3624
3721
3841
3930
4017
4113
4212
4310
443
4516
466
474
4817
496
51.58% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3357664233576642
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners46
62.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences106
matches
0"Then she saw him."
1"Then he reached beneath the"
ratio0.019
57.74% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences106
matches
0"She adjusted the delivery bag"
1"Her stomach tightened."
2"His auburn hair had surrendered"
3"His right hand moved—the one"
4"She felt eighteen again, standing"
5"She stepped forward; her Doc"
6"His hazel eyes, still sharp"
7"Her voice surprised her—level, almost"
8"She wondered if he heard"
9"She patted the delivery bag"
10"He pushed off the bar,"
11"He called over his shoulder"
12"She wondered if he had"
13"she said quickly, though her"
14"He slid the drink toward"
15"She held his gaze"
16"He leaned against the edge"
17"His voice stayed neutral, the"
18"She avoided his eyes"
19"She lifted the whisky"
ratio0.406
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences106
matches
0"The neon sign flickered like"
1"Rory hesitated with her bicycle"
2"The Raven’s Nest had once"
3"The photos along the frontage,"
4"She adjusted the delivery bag"
5"The bar smelled of Guinness"
6"Rory blinked as her pupils"
7"The mahogany had been polished"
8"The maps on the walls—mostly"
9"A new photograph hung above"
10"Her stomach tightened."
11"A silence fell that wasn’t"
12"Silas stood behind the bar,"
13"His auburn hair had surrendered"
14"The grey had crept like"
15"His right hand moved—the one"
16"Rory’s breath hitched."
17"She felt eighteen again, standing"
18"She stepped forward; her Doc"
19"Silas glanced up."
ratio0.925
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.18% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"His right hand moved—the one with the silver signet ring, Orion’s belt pressed in miniature on the face—and set the glass down with the care of a man who handle…"
1"She felt eighteen again, standing in this same bar, a bruise forming a storm cloud on her upper arm, Evan’s laughter echoing off the toilets where Silas had smu…"
2"The back room offered a paradox: intimate and claustrophobic, lit by a brass desk lamp that leaked copper light onto a blotter stained with what looked like red…"
3"The amber liquid hit the glass bottom with a quiet *thud* that echoed in her ribcage."
4"He swirled his glass, watching the liquid climb the sides like tides retreating from shore."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she said quickly, though her mouth watered"
1"Rory laughed, humourless"
2"She laughed, shaky"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory laughed (laugh)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.098
leniency0.196
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.078
77.4504%