Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09X69WCDNC7657JXNZXSRS

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Duration:
15.4s
Cost:
$0.001568
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain came down like an army of iron-marching ants, skittering across the wet pavement in Soho. Detective Harlow Quinn hugged the brick wall, her leather watch glinting under a flickering streetlamp as she adjusted the grip on her gun. Three steps ahead, shadows fleeing. One step behind, the city holding its breath. She hadn't seen his face yet—just the tense set of his shoulders, the desperate stride of someone with something vital to lose. His hood was pulled low, but the fabric clung to his olive skin, outlining the hitch of every ragged breath. She knew that pace. Knew the way men ran when corners still existed but the maze was closing in. “Herrera,” she whispered into the rain, her voice swallowed by the downpour. Not a name often given voice outside this chase. The street narrowed ahead, a bottleneck of neon and brick. A pub’s green sign buzzed intermittently. *The Raven’s Nest*. The name mocked her. It was where the clique gathered, where the whispers of magic and malice intertwined like cigarette smoke. Not tonight. Not for the likes of him. Herrera darted left, into a narrow alley slick with rainwater and something darker. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She lunged after him, boots splashing through puddles that reflected neon signs like fragments of broken glass. Her mind raced—he wasn’t a brawler, wasn’t trained to fight. But he knew London’s underbelly. Knew how to vanish. The alley spat them out onto a wider avenue near Shaftesbury Avenue. Quinn’s lungs burned. There—Herrera’s silhouette again, slipping between two food trucks parked late at night. He wasn’t heading toward the Tube. He was going lower. She cursed under her breath and ran. The trucks’ generators hummed like angry hornets. Quinn vaulted over a greasy metal crate, her gaze locked on Herrera’s retreating shape. He glanced over his shoulder once—dark eyes wide, frantic—and that was all she needed to know: he was afraid. Of her? Of what came after? He ducked beneath an awning, pressed against a boarded-up shopfront. Quinn slowed, crouched, gun raised. The rain drummed the metal blinds, turning them into war drums. “Stop right there,” she said, voice steady despite the adrenaline. Herrera didn’t turn. His body trembled. “Tomás,” she said, softer now. The name felt like a knife twist. She’d trusted him once. In the early days. Before she knew the truth—that he was part of the clique. Before DS Morris was found with his ribs cracked open under a full moon. Still, he didn’t move. The air thickened. Not just rain—something else. A scent like old blood and burnt copper. Quinn’s fingers tightened around the grip. The gun’s cold metal grounded her. Herrera exhaled, slow. Then, like a puppet cut from its strings, he collapsed forward through the boarded-up door he’d been hiding against. Wood splintered. Dust flew. Quinn lunged. She kicked the broken planks aside and rolled into the darkness behind him, gun leveled. The space was black as oil. A storage room, maybe. Crates of rotting fruit and rat droppings. The stench was suffocating. Herrera lay crumpled in the corner, gasping. Blood trickled from his lip. “Don’t make me shoot you, Tomás,” she said, standing over him, voice low and lethal. He coughed, wiped his mouth with the back of his hand. “You always were dramatic, Harlow.” The name felt like a silk cord tightening around her throat. “You don’t get to call me that.” “I know.” His voice broke. He reached into his jacket. Quinn’s trigger finger twitched. Herrera froze. Slowly, he pulled out a small, curved bone—pale as chalk. Roughly carved with jagged spirals. A token. “Bone market,” he whispered. “They’ll kill me if I don’t go.” Quinn’s heart slammed. *The Veil Market.* She knew the stories. A black market beneath London, hidden in the bones of the earth. Moved every full moon. Traded in blood, curses, secrets. Bone tokens were the price of entry. One life to cross the threshold. Many never came back. She stepped closer, gun still raised. “What are you hiding?” Herrera’s eyes flickered—wild, trapped. “Not me. *Her.*” A shadow shifted behind him. Not from the door. From the crate he’d fallen against. The rotting planks split further. A skeletal hand, wrapped in threads of black cloth, burst through the wood like a blooming nightmare. Bits of masonry rained down. The hand closed around Herrera’s ankle. He screamed. Quinn fired. The shot tore through the wrist. Bone fragments exploded. The hand recoiled into the darkness, shrieking in a language that clawed at the back of her skull. Herrera scrambled back, his Saint Christopher medallion flaring with brief, desperate light—like a candle in a gale. “Shit—Quinn, *run!*” She didn’t need telling twice. Quinn grabbed Herrera’s arm and yanked him up just as more hands erupted from the floorboards—skittering like spiders, long-nailed and hungry. The planks groaned as something beneath them stirred. The storage room wasn’t a storage room. It was a hatch. And the market was calling. Herrera’s medallion swung wildly, casting fitful light over the writhing mass of limbs below. The scent of damp soil and rotting meat rose like a tide. “They’re cicada things,” he gasped. “Once every generation they wake. They build the tunnels in blood and silence.” Quinn had no idea what he meant, but she knew danger when it writhed beneath her feet. Herrera’s body tensed. “Open the floor panel—it’s the entrance. If you go down, you die. But if you don’t—” His voice cracked. “They’ll follow us out. They always do.” Quinn glanced at the shattered door behind them. The street was gone. The world had narrowed into this rotting tomb. She made a decision. “Where does it lead?” she demanded. “To the market,” he said. “To answers. To *her.*” A sound like cracking ice filled the room. The floorboards split open further, revealing a yawning maw of darkness lined with chitinous limbs. Herrera’s breath came in ragged bursts. “Last chance, Detective.” Quinn holstered her gun with a snap. She pulled a second pistol from her ankle holster—small, silver-plated, not standard issue. Superstition? Maybe. But she’d learned the hard way. With a deep breath, she dropped the silver bullet into the chamber and whispered, “Tell me who she is.” Then she stepped into the dark. The moment her boot touched the first rung of the ladder, the hatch slammed shut behind her like a coffin lid. Herrera was right behind. The ladder descended into hell.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.524
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1081
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1081
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"raced"
count1
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"shattered"
count1
7
word"maw"
count1
8
word"standard"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"raced"
2"trembled"
3"silk"
4"flickered"
5"silence"
6"shattered"
7"maw"
8"standard"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences130
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences140
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords9
totalWords1069
ratio0.008
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"The Veil Market."
2"Her."
3"run!"
4"her."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount962
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn14
Raven1
London2
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Herrera15
Tube1
Morris1
Veil1
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Shaftesbury"
3"Avenue"
4"Tube"
globalScore0.72
windowScore0.667
74.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a knife twist"
1"felt like a silk cord tightening around"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1069
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences140
matches
0"knew that pace"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean18.43
std14.98
cv0.813
sampleLengths
053
161
221
348
452
537
67
746
826
910
106
1145
124
1327
1426
152
1636
1712
1815
1916
2018
2110
224
2319
2411
256
2642
276
284
297
305
3110
3233
332
342
3527
3619
375
3829
397
404
415
4226
4318
4417
4529
4620
474
486
499
97.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences130
matches
0"was pulled"
1"was found"
2"was gone"
28.18% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs194
matches
0"was closing"
1"wasn’t heading"
2"was going"
3"was suffocating"
4"was calling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences140
ratio0.079
matches
0"She hadn't seen his face yet—just the tense set of his shoulders, the desperate stride of someone with something vital to lose."
1"Her mind raced—he wasn’t a brawler, wasn’t trained to fight."
2"There—Herrera’s silhouette again, slipping between two food trucks parked late at night."
3"He glanced over his shoulder once—dark eyes wide, frantic—and that was all she needed to know: he was afraid."
4"Before she knew the truth—that he was part of the clique."
5"Not just rain—something else."
6"Slowly, he pulled out a small, curved bone—pale as chalk."
7"Herrera’s eyes flickered—wild, trapped."
8"Herrera scrambled back, his Saint Christopher medallion flaring with brief, desperate light—like a candle in a gale."
9"Quinn grabbed Herrera’s arm and yanked him up just as more hands erupted from the floorboards—skittering like spiders, long-nailed and hungry."
10"She pulled a second pistol from her ankle holster—small, silver-plated, not standard issue."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount346
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.023121387283236993
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.005780346820809248
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences140
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences140
mean7.64
std5.26
cv0.689
sampleLengths
017
123
25
38
422
520
64
715
812
99
1010
116
123
134
1417
152
166
1713
183
1917
2010
215
224
2312
243
2512
266
274
287
297
3014
3119
322
334
3410
355
3611
3710
383
393
405
417
424
434
4411
4514
464
473
484
498
53.81% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35714285714285715
totalSentences140
uniqueOpeners50
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences114
matches
0"Then, like a puppet cut"
1"Slowly, he pulled out a"
2"Roughly carved with jagged spirals."
3"Then she stepped into the"
ratio0.035
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences114
matches
0"She hadn't seen his face"
1"His hood was pulled low,"
2"She knew that pace."
3"she whispered into the rain,"
4"It was where the clique"
5"She lunged after him, boots"
6"Her mind raced—he wasn’t a"
7"He wasn’t heading toward the"
8"He was going lower."
9"She cursed under her breath"
10"He glanced over his shoulder"
11"He ducked beneath an awning,"
12"she said, voice steady despite"
13"His body trembled."
14"she said, softer now"
15"She’d trusted him once."
16"She kicked the broken planks"
17"she said, standing over him,"
18"He coughed, wiped his mouth"
19"His voice broke"
ratio0.246
78.42% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences114
matches
0"The rain came down like"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn hugged the"
2"She hadn't seen his face"
3"His hood was pulled low,"
4"She knew that pace."
5"she whispered into the rain,"
6"The street narrowed ahead, a"
7"A pub’s green sign buzzed"
8"*The Raven’s Nest*."
9"The name mocked her."
10"It was where the clique"
11"Herrera darted left, into a"
12"Quinn didn’t hesitate."
13"She lunged after him, boots"
14"Her mind raced—he wasn’t a"
15"The alley spat them out"
16"Quinn’s lungs burned."
17"There—Herrera’s silhouette again, slipping between"
18"He wasn’t heading toward the"
19"He was going lower."
ratio0.763
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences114
matches
0"Before she knew the truth—that"
1"Before DS Morris was found"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She lunged after him, boots splashing through puddles that reflected neon signs like fragments of broken glass."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, voice steady despite the adrenaline"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"he whispered (whisper)"
2"he gasped (gasp)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.381
leniency0.762
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.381
83.9832%