Run: 2026-03-18-01KM0A9N0YMYVSNKAANNETR27C

Run Details

Duration:
16.2s
Cost:
$0.014531
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The station had been dead for decades, but tonight it breathed. Not with trains. With people. Detective Harlow Quinn paused at the mouth of the disused Tube platform and took in the scene with the flat, economical stare that had unnerved sergeants and suspects for eighteen years. The air smelled of damp concrete, ozone, and something metallic beneath it, as if a storm had been caged underground and left to rot. Old tiling peeled from the walls in white scales. The overhead lights had long since died, yet the platform glowed anyway, lit by banks of lanterns strung from rusted brackets and the dim, indecisive shimmer of colored charms hanging from makeshift stalls. The Veil Market. She had been told it moved every full moon. Tonight it had settled beneath Camden like a secret with a pulse. Quinn’s gaze moved first to the body, because bodies always told the truth before people did. It lay near the edge of the platform, half in shadow, half in the sickly gold wash from a hanging lantern. Male, late thirties maybe. Dark coat. One shoe missing. The throat was opened to the spine in one clean, savage line, too neat to be panic and too precise to be frenzy. There was blood, but not much of it. Not enough for the wound she saw. That was the first thing that bothered her. The second was the posture. He wasn’t collapsed where he had fallen. He was placed. Left arm drawn across his chest, right hand slack beside a small brass object near his fingertips. Quinn’s own boots clicked softly on the concrete as she stepped closer, her worn leather watch brushing her wrist with the familiar weight of habit. She hated coming into scenes with civilians on site, but this one came with a crowd already, though the crowd was quieter than any she’d seen at a murder. Cloaked figures stood in loose knots near the stalls, their faces turned away. Some wore masks, some kept their hoods low. A few had already started packing their wares with a speed that suggested this sort of thing was an inconvenience, not a shock. At the far end of the platform, Detective Harlow Quinn spotted the flash of copper curls and knew before she saw the face. Eva Kowalski stood near a ticket barrier that hadn’t seen a ticket in half a century, a worn leather satchel hanging from one shoulder and a stack of books under one arm as if she’d brought them to a picnic. Her round glasses caught the lantern light. She was speaking to a uniformed constable with the patient intensity of someone explaining a medieval funerary practice to a man who had no interest in the dead beyond whether they stayed dead. Eva looked up, saw Quinn, and visibly relaxed. Then, as if remembering she was among police, she straightened and tucked a strand of curly red hair behind her left ear. “Harlow,” she said, her voice careful and low. “You got here fast.” “I was in the area,” Quinn said. Eva gave her a look that said she was not fooled and did not care enough to argue. The constable, a young man with a pallid face and a radio clutched in both hands, took one step back from Quinn as if her reputation had physical density. Good. She liked that. “Who’s in charge?” Quinn asked. “A side of the station’s been sealed by Met units,” the constable said. “Forensics are on their way. We were told to hold the perimeter.” “Sealed by whom?” Quinn asked. He glanced toward the platform entrance. “You, ma’am.” Quinn ignored the irritation that prickled beneath her skin. Somebody had used her authority without asking. That was not a new experience, but it never improved the taste in her mouth. She moved closer to the body. The man’s skin had gone waxy gray around the mouth, and there was a faint film on his lips, like ash or pollen. She crouched without touching him. The nearest lantern swayed imperceptibly though the air was still. Eva came to her side, the satchel bumping softly against her hip. “I think you’re looking at the wrong wound.” Quinn glanced at her. “Oh?” Eva nodded toward the dead man’s chest. “See that?” On the sternum, just visible above the open coat, was a mark about the size of a coin. A perfect circle, red at the rim and black in the center, as if something had been pressed there with heat. Quinn leaned closer. The skin around it was blistered. “Cautery?” she said. “Not exactly.” Eva’s tone had that restrained excitement she got whenever the world started behaving badly in a way that matched a book she’d read. “It’s a seal. Or it was. I’ve seen similar marks in restricted archive rubbings. Usually on warded vessels or… things meant to prevent crossing.” “Crossing where?” Eva made a small face. “That is the problem.” Quinn’s eyes drifted to the brass object near the corpse’s hand. She extended a gloved finger and nudged it just enough to catch the light. A small compass, brass gone green with age, the casing patinated with verdigris. Fine etchings crawled over the face in a ring of protective sigils. The needle was not still. It quivered, shivered, then jerked hard toward the far wall of the station. Quinn’s throat tightened in a way she didn’t acknowledge. “What is it?” she asked. Eva’s gaze snapped to it, and for the first time Quinn saw unease cut through her composure. “A Veil Compass.” “Helpful.” “It’s used to locate supernatural rifts or portals.” Quinn looked at the needle again. It was no longer quivering. It was fixed now, pointed with ugly certainty toward the service tunnel at the end of the platform, where a heavy steel door had been chained shut with a lock the size of a brick. A dim wash of blue light leaked from beneath the frame. Quinn stood slowly, her mind assembling the scene into shapes that didn’t like one another. “The compass was beside the body,” she said. “So either he used it, or someone wanted it found.” “Yes.” “And the seal on his chest wasn’t a wound.” “No.” “Then why the cut throat?” Eva hesitated. “That may not be the cause of death.” Quinn turned her head. “Explain.” Eva adjusted her glasses, the gesture betraying nerves she tried to hide. “If he passed through something he shouldn’t have, the body might have been opened after the fact. A kind of… rupture. Internal pressure. The wound could be a secondary effect.” Quinn stared at her. “That’s your interpretation?” Eva’s mouth twitched. “It’s one interpretation.” One of the market sellers—a tall woman in layered black silk with silver rings up every finger—was watching them from behind a stall draped in velvet pouches and sealed jars. Quinn noticed the woman notice her, then glance away too quickly. Noted. Quinn crouched again, this time beside the corpse’s hand. The fingertips were blue-black. There was dirt under the nails, but not the coarse grit of the station floor. Fine white powder. Plaster, maybe. Or something ground from stone. She touched nothing, just looked. “His right hand,” Quinn murmured. “Finger pads torn.” Eva leaned in. “He was climbing?” “No.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed. “Gripping.” She pointed, without touching, to the dead man’s clenched left hand. Inside the slack fingers was a thread. Thin. Dark red, almost black in the lantern light. “Silk?” Eva asked. Quinn didn’t answer. She followed the line with her eyes and found its mate snagged on a fractured bench leg six feet away. A line of similar thread pieces marked a path across the platform, invisible unless you knew to look for them. Tiny glints of red caught on the cracked tiles, leading not away from the body but in a broad arc toward the service tunnel. Quinn rose. “No one saw him stumble here,” she said. “He was moving.” Eva frowned. “Maybe he ran.” “Not with a seal on his chest. Not if he thought the tunnel was the destination.” Quinn looked toward the chained door again. The blue light beneath it had deepened. It now pulsed with a low, steady rhythm, almost like breathing. Beyond the platform, the market continued in a hush of whispered bargains and hands folded into sleeves. Nobody looked at the door. That was wrong too. The Veil Market sold impossible things; fear should have been thick as smoke around that tunnel. Instead, she saw calculation. Avoidance. The behavior of people who had agreed not to know. She turned to the constable. “Who found the body?” He swallowed. “A vendor. Said he heard glass breaking near the tunnel.” “Name?” The constable hesitated, then glanced toward the silk-draped stall. “She wouldn’t give one.” Quinn looked at the woman in black silk. The woman lifted two fingers in a polite, almost mocking salute, then turned and disappeared behind her hanging goods. “Convenient,” Quinn said. Eva shifted her satchel strap higher on her shoulder. “Harlow, there’s something else.” Quinn waited. Eva lowered her voice. “The market’s been here for maybe an hour, maybe less. But the body—” She glanced down. “He’s been dead longer than that.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she considered it. The lividity around the neck, the stiffness in the hand, the drying at the wound edges. Yes. At least two hours. Maybe more. “And yet,” Quinn said, “the market only arrived tonight.” Eva nodded. “Exactly.” Quinn looked around again, and the whole scene shifted under her gaze. The lanterns were not merely lighting the stalls; they were masking shadows, breaking lines of sight. The crowd had formed a ring without realizing it. A ritual circle made of people pretending to shop. The corpse wasn’t dumped here after the market opened. The market had opened around him. That was the part nobody had seen. The body had been here before the market came through, and the market had arranged itself around it as if it were a landmark. A landmark meant to be hidden. “Show me the tunnel door,” Quinn said. Eva’s eyes widened a fraction. “You think it’s connected?” “I think somebody wanted us to look at a throat and not ask why a dead man was left on an old platform beneath a market that only exists by permission of things no one names.” Her tone made a few nearby heads turn, then dip quickly away. They crossed the platform. The closer Quinn got to the service door, the stronger the pressure in the air became. It pressed against her eardrums, a subtle internal insistence, as if the station itself objected to being observed. The chains around the door were new. That was another wrongness. Bright metal, crude padlock, no rust. Somebody had secured the tunnel after the fact, and in a hurry. Quinn knelt by the threshold. A smear of dried black residue streaked the floorboards under the gap. She touched it with the edge of a gloved finger, then lifted it to the light. Ash. Not ordinary ash. It shimmered faintly, as if powdered mica had been mixed through it. Eva drew in a breath. “That’s from ward-fire.” “So something burned on the other side.” “Yes.” “Or something came through and was burned going back.” Quinn stood, every line in her posture sharpening. “The compass is pointing there because it’s not just a portal. It’s a breach.” Eva swallowed. “A rift.” Quinn gave a short, humorless nod. “And the seal on the chest was meant to keep it shut.” She looked over her shoulder at the body, then at the market beyond, with its careful silence and its too-quick hands. The dead man had not been a customer. He had been a lock. And someone had broken him. A memory flickered then—DS Morris in a different underground place, years ago, the taste of copper in the air, the impossible sound of something moving where no corridor should have led. Quinn locked it away instantly. Not now. Never now. She reached for the compass again, careful this time, and watched the needle twitch against her touch. It fought her, then settled with a tiny metallic click toward the door. “Open it,” Quinn said. Eva looked at her. “You’re sure?” “No.” “That’s not comforting.” “It’s the best I’ve got.” A sound rippled down the platform then: a low murmur, the market waking to the fact that police attention had shifted from corpse to door. Somewhere behind them, a stall shutter slammed shut. Another. The silk-clad woman vanished into the crowd. Even the constable took a step back. Quinn’s hand rested near her holster, though she hated the feeling of relying on a gun in a place where bullets might be considered a suggestion. The door shuddered once from the other side. Not a bang. A knock. Single. Deliberate. Eva went very still, her fingers finding her hair and tucking a loose curl behind her ear without thinking. Quinn saw the movement and felt her own pulse harden. The chain rattled again, this time in a slow, testing scrape. Then, from beneath the door, a thin thread of blue light slipped across the floor and curled toward the body like smoke seeking a chimney. Quinn’s eyes dropped to the dead man, to the seal on his chest, to the compass in her hand, to the path of silk thread leading from his fingers to the tunnel. The clue all along had not been the wound. It had been the direction. “Don’t open it,” Eva whispered. Quinn’s mouth tightened, but not in answer. She was looking at the circle of market stalls, at the faces hidden behind cloth and shadow. Every one of them had moved subtly, almost imperceptibly, to watch the door. No one was watching the body anymore. That was when Quinn knew, with cold certainty, that the dead man had not been trying to get out. He had been trying to keep something in. And whatever was behind that door knew his name.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.299
leniency0.597
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2340
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"quickly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2340
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"intensity"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"restrained"
count1
6
word"quivered"
count1
7
word"silk"
count6
8
word"velvet"
count1
9
word"fractured"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"shimmered"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"comforting"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"familiar"
2"weight"
3"intensity"
4"perfect"
5"restrained"
6"quivered"
7"silk"
8"velvet"
9"fractured"
10"pulsed"
11"shimmered"
12"silence"
13"flickered"
14"comforting"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count3
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences200
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences200
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences247
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2337
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1961
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.24
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn44
Tube1
Veil2
Market2
Camden1
Detective2
Kowalski1
Eva23
Morris1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Camden"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
places(empty)
globalScore0.378
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences120
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"saw Quinn, and visibly relaxed"
1"as if remembering she was among police, she straightened and tucked a strand of curly red hair behind her left ear"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.856
wordCount2337
matches
0"not a new experience, but it never improved the taste in her mouth"
1"not away from the body but in a broad arc toward the service tunnel"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences247
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs120
mean19.48
std20.64
cv1.06
sampleLengths
011
15
297
33
421
516
676
75
827
998
1023
1180
1230
1312
147
1518
1633
175
1825
195
208
2131
2244
2320
245
259
2648
273
2849
292
309
3168
329
335
3420
351
368
3757
3815
3918
401
419
421
435
4410
455
4642
474
483
496
91.23% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences200
matches
0"been caged"
1"been told"
2"was opened"
3"was placed"
4"been pressed"
5"was blistered"
6"been chained"
7"been mixed"
74.61% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs319
matches
0"was speaking"
1"was watching"
2"were masking"
3"were not merely lighting"
4"was looking"
5"was watching"
96.59% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences247
ratio0.016
matches
0"One of the market sellers—a tall woman in layered black silk with silver rings up every finger—was watching them from behind a stall draped in velvet pouches and sealed jars."
1"The Veil Market sold impossible things; fear should have been thick as smoke around that tunnel."
2"The lanterns were not merely lighting the stalls; they were masking shadows, breaking lines of sight."
3"A memory flickered then—DS Morris in a different underground place, years ago, the taste of copper in the air, the impossible sound of something moving where no corridor should have led."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1968
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount77
adverbRatio0.0391260162601626
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.008130081300813009
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences247
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences247
mean9.46
std8.11
cv0.857
sampleLengths
011
13
22
331
424
59
633
73
89
912
1016
1121
124
132
143
1523
168
177
188
195
207
213
2217
2325
2429
2513
268
2723
2823
2940
307
3133
328
3322
348
354
367
3718
3829
391
403
415
4213
4312
445
456
462
479
487
4915
49.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3076923076923077
totalSentences247
uniqueOpeners76
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences163
matches
0"Then, as if remembering she"
1"Dark red, almost black in"
2"Instead, she saw calculation."
3"At least two hours."
4"Somewhere behind them, a stall"
5"Even the constable took a"
6"Then, from beneath the door,"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences163
matches
0"She had been told it"
1"It lay near the edge"
2"He wasn’t collapsed where he"
3"He was placed."
4"She hated coming into scenes"
5"Her round glasses caught the"
6"She was speaking to a"
7"she said, her voice careful"
8"She liked that."
9"He glanced toward the platform"
10"She moved closer to the"
11"She crouched without touching him."
12"She extended a gloved finger"
13"It quivered, shivered, then jerked"
14"It was no longer quivering."
15"It was fixed now, pointed"
16"She touched nothing, just looked."
17"She pointed, without touching, to"
18"She followed the line with"
19"It now pulsed with a"
ratio0.209
58.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount131
totalSentences163
matches
0"The station had been dead"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn paused at"
2"The air smelled of damp"
3"The overhead lights had long"
4"The Veil Market."
5"She had been told it"
6"Tonight it had settled beneath"
7"Quinn’s gaze moved first to"
8"It lay near the edge"
9"The throat was opened to"
10"That was the first thing"
11"The second was the posture."
12"He wasn’t collapsed where he"
13"He was placed."
14"Quinn’s own boots clicked softly"
15"She hated coming into scenes"
16"Some wore masks, some kept"
17"Eva Kowalski stood near a"
18"Her round glasses caught the"
19"She was speaking to a"
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences163
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.01% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn paused at the mouth of the disused Tube platform and took in the scene with the flat, economical stare that had unnerved sergeants and su…"
1"The air smelled of damp concrete, ozone, and something metallic beneath it, as if a storm had been caged underground and left to rot."
2"Eva Kowalski stood near a ticket barrier that hadn’t seen a ticket in half a century, a worn leather satchel hanging from one shoulder and a stack of books unde…"
3"She was speaking to a uniformed constable with the patient intensity of someone explaining a medieval funerary practice to a man who had no interest in the dead…"
4"Then, as if remembering she was among police, she straightened and tucked a strand of curly red hair behind her left ear."
5"The constable, a young man with a pallid face and a radio clutched in both hands, took one step back from Quinn as if her reputation had physical density."
6"A perfect circle, red at the rim and black in the center, as if something had been pressed there with heat."
7"It pressed against her eardrums, a subtle internal insistence, as if the station itself objected to being observed."
8"A sound rippled down the platform then: a low murmur, the market waking to the fact that police attention had shifted from corpse to door."
9"Eva went very still, her fingers finding her hair and tucking a loose curl behind her ear without thinking."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, her voice careful and low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.239
leniency0.478
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.06
83.5720%