Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ85DDDB0MAYVSXH2PERSWE

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20.6s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The wet asphalt hissed under Quinn’s boots as she launched off a fire escape landing. Her left heel caught the wall, sent a chunk of brick rainwater splintering into the gutter. One more story, one more rung. The suspect’s jacket flared ahead—black wool gelled to his back in the downpour, the collar frayed like it’d been cut with a knife. Not just cut. Emergency release shears, the kind used in garages or aircraft. Quinn’s fingers burned around her own all-weather lanyard. Breath came in sharp huffs, synced to the syncopated clang of metro lines overhead. She rounded the corner, skidded, swore in time with thunder. There. The figure vaulted over an overturned fruit stall in Soho. Grapes sprawled across the deluge like spider-leg marks. Quinn’s knee buckled but she drove forward, still spinning as she passed under a flickering green neon sign for *The Nest*. Her suspect hit the lobby of the bar’s side entrance. Pushed through. A shadow darted back to slam the door. *Locked.* Quinn didn’t pause. She slid sideways, shoulder-checked the doorframe and rammed it with her hip. The lock gave an audible *pop*. Her hand went to her holster but froze. The bar stank of old wine and damp earth. A curtain of hanging herbs whispered in the draft she’d made. No movement. No heartbeat all the same. Her eyes locked onto the exit marked *Employees Only*—a false wall between the bar and the Tube. She’d only ever seen it from files: alcoved Transit Police cells in west London, sealed in the 90s after the riots. Her fingers found the damp panel in the wall. The suspect had used the usual method: a cracked mirror to hide the exit. She followed it down, booted each step as she dropped into the tunnel. The air turned fetid. *Smelled like drowning.* She remembered DS Morris’s body found the same way, waterlogged and claw-scarred. Now her jacket was soaked, skin prickling at the memory. The tunnel curved. A green bioluminescent tile appeared—glazed, cracked, lighting the path. The Veil Market’s cagy welcome. Quinn’s watch stopped at 9:37 as she slipped beneath the surface. Rain was gone here, replaced by the low-rise hum of machines. The air was a chemical mix: ozone, fermented grain, and something metallic. Her left hand brushed the right wall, pressed it. A switch. Lights flared up. The Veil’s current location—abandoned Northern Line station at Chalk Farm. Spidersweb concrete pillars, damaged escalators, the whole place gutted for cashless kings. But the crowd was new. They’d come for full moon. A hundred shrouded figures, faces in shadows, bartering in half-heard dialects. Stalls hawked re-cycled guns that had died in wars, potions in jagged vials, and dead ones’ teeth in lockets. Quinn felt the stares—indifferent, sharp-as-needles. She stalked forward, joints throbbed under her bureau coat. The suspect’s trail was easy: every turning booth, every stall offering instant anonymity. She saw him now, broad-shouldered, lean, face half-hidden in the proprietor’s hood. His left forearm bore a gash—new blood seeped through a torn gauze. *Tomás’s work*? Quinn’s pulse bottomed. He dropped a bone token. Quinn’s grip yanked out her sides. The token hit the floor with a clatter. **“Exchange’s invalid.”** She aimed at his ribs. “You know the rules. No weapons in. No bones out. No more.” The man’s voice was young, guttural. **“Rules don’t work if you don’t understand the market.”** His fingers twitched, brushed the counter. A rolled treaty, marked in ink and surgical staples. The bar’s name on the back. *The Raven’s Nest*. Tea spill on the paper, smeared like brain matter. Quinn’s eyes narrowed. **“Silas’s doing?”** Her voice was sharp as the knife she kept in her boot. **“He’s in with the draugr again, isn’t he? Feeding corpse prizes to his friends?”** The man snorted. **“Sir, this is beyond your jurisdiction. Your station won’t even listen when you mention them.”** Quinn’s exhaled fire-hot. **“My stone pushes where the wind builds its walls.”** She kicked the token. **“Try again.Slowly.”** He left the gash unbandaged. Tossed the gauze with deliberate bait. **“You know how they spot you? Your eyes. Look at the colors now. Change, right before the blighting of the moon.”** Quinn flinched. **“They take your color before your name,”** he hissed. **“You’re not Quinn now, are you? That woman couldn’t make the first step.”** The shopkeeper’s fingers moved—practices. Sign of a seller handling something alive. Quinn’s pulse thumped like a domino drop. The gash was real. Herbal cauterizing. *Silas’s work.* She had the briefest flash—Tomás’s hands, bloodied, careful. *They’re tied. Both of them.* She stepped closer. **“You told them about Morris. His name in the ledger. His death date unrecorded.”** The suspect flexed his head. **“His death’s not done yet.”** Her vision darkened at the edges. But the Market’s lights had gone out—all save the bone token. It glowed now, in her path. A choice held in her palms. Omitting the motion. Her hand hovered. One second. Two. She let it drop. Strode out. Let the Market’s patrons see her stance—*I walked away. But they can see the coin under my shoe. I know the rules.* She thought of Tomás’s file again. The censored line about unauthorized supernatural patients. Of DS Morris’s last breath, whispered through blocked lungs: *“They aren’t dead. Just waiting.”* Quinn’s jaw tightened. She turned on the stairwell. Footsteps in her wake—no. He’d gone deeper. Came back to the token for another reason. She made her own path. Toward the escalator wreckage. Toward an exit marked *Staff Only. Still Operational 4/15*. A postcode too soon. She’d arrived in a gutter and came out here. Now she had the underground by the throat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount946
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount946
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences111
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
2"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans24
markdownWords160
totalWords938
ratio0.171
matches
0"The Nest"
1"Locked."
2"pop"
3"Employees Only"
4"Smelled like drowning."
5"Tomás’s work"
6"“Exchange’s invalid.”"
7"“Rules don’t work if you don’t understand the market.”"
8"The Raven’s Nest"
9"“Silas’s doing?”"
10"“He’s in with the draugr again, isn’t he? Feeding corpse prizes to his friends?”"
11"“Sir, this is beyond your jurisdiction. Your station won’t even listen when you mention them.”"
12"“My stone pushes where the wind builds its walls.”"
13"“Try again.Slowly.”"
14"“You know how they spot you? Your eyes. Look at the colors now. Change, right before the blighting of the moon.”"
15"“They take your color before your name,”"
16"“You’re not Quinn now, are you? That woman couldn’t make the first step.”"
17"Silas’s work."
18"They’re tied. Both of them."
19"“You told them about Morris. His name in the ledger. His death date unrecorded.”"
20"“His death’s not done yet.”"
21"I walked away. But they can see the coin under my shoe. I know the rules."
22"“They aren’t dead. Just waiting.”"
23"Staff Only. Still Operational 4/15" 4/15/2001, 12:00:00 AM
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount804
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.62
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn13
Soho1
Tube1
Transit1
Police1
London1
Morris2
Veil2
Market3
Northern1
Line1
Chalk1
Farm1
Raven1
Tomás3
Operational1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Veil"
3"Market"
4"Raven"
5"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Chalk"
3"Farm"
globalScore0.692
windowScore0.5
71.88% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"Smelled like drowning.* She remembered DS"
1"appeared—glazed cracked, lighting the path"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount938
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean40.78
std43.82
cv1.074
sampleLengths
0165
11
2159
387
45
591
65
733
848
931
1018
1118
1232
132
1422
1511
1645
1710
1829
1937
2027
2145
2217
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs149
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences119
ratio0.092
matches
0"The suspect’s jacket flared ahead—black wool gelled to his back in the downpour, the collar frayed like it’d been cut with a knife."
1"Her eyes locked onto the exit marked *Employees Only*—a false wall between the bar and the Tube."
2"A green bioluminescent tile appeared—glazed, cracked, lighting the path."
3"The Veil’s current location—abandoned Northern Line station at Chalk Farm."
4"Quinn felt the stares—indifferent, sharp-as-needles."
5"His left forearm bore a gash—new blood seeped through a torn gauze."
6"The shopkeeper’s fingers moved—practices."
7"*Silas’s work.* She had the briefest flash—Tomás’s hands, bloodied, careful."
8"But the Market’s lights had gone out—all save the bone token."
9"Let the Market’s patrons see her stance—*I walked away."
10"Footsteps in her wake—no."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount559
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.025044722719141325
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0017889087656529517
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean7.88
std4.87
cv0.618
sampleLengths
015
116
26
323
43
510
68
714
810
91
1010
118
1221
1310
142
158
161
173
1812
196
208
219
2211
232
245
2517
2621
279
2814
2913
304
3115
3210
333
349
355
3611
3711
3812
399
402
413
4210
4312
445
455
4611
4719
485
499
64.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.40336134453781514
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
ratio0
97.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences98
matches
0"Her left heel caught the"
1"She rounded the corner, skidded,"
2"Her suspect hit the lobby"
3"She slid sideways, shoulder-checked the"
4"Her hand went to her"
5"Her eyes locked onto the"
6"She’d only ever seen it"
7"Her fingers found the damp"
8"She followed it down, booted"
9"Her left hand brushed the"
10"They’d come for full moon."
11"She stalked forward, joints throbbed"
12"She saw him now, broad-shouldered,"
13"His left forearm bore a"
14"He dropped a bone token."
15"She aimed at his ribs"
16"His fingers twitched, brushed the"
17"Her voice was sharp as"
18"She kicked the token"
19"He left the gash unbandaged."
ratio0.306
51.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences98
matches
0"The wet asphalt hissed under"
1"Her left heel caught the"
2"The suspect’s jacket flared ahead—black"
3"Emergency release shears, the kind"
4"Quinn’s fingers burned around her"
5"Breath came in sharp huffs,"
6"She rounded the corner, skidded,"
7"The figure vaulted over an"
8"Grapes sprawled across the deluge"
9"Quinn’s knee buckled but she"
10"Her suspect hit the lobby"
11"A shadow darted back to"
12"Quinn didn’t pause."
13"She slid sideways, shoulder-checked the"
14"The lock gave an audible"
15"Her hand went to her"
16"The bar stank of old"
17"A curtain of hanging herbs"
18"Her eyes locked onto the"
19"She’d only ever seen it"
ratio0.816
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"Now her jacket was soaked,"
1"Now she had the underground"
ratio0.02
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he hissed (hiss)"
1"last breath whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.286
80.5561%