Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ8VTFFA9ZZDNEC19JPXJ87

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Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.001811
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Together

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The fire escape groaned under Quinn’s weight as she vaulted the final railing and hit the alley in a roll. Her shoulder flared—old injury, same fire, three years back—but she drove forward, boots splashing through oily puddles. Ahead, the shadow flitted between stacked crates, pale hands flashing like bone in the sodium glare. Male. Lean. Wearing a coat too light for the weather. Rain needled her neck, cold and insistent. He turned. Just once. A flash of profile beneath a torn hood—olive skin, tight curls soaked flat. Then he was gone, swallowed by the warren of Soho’s backstreets. Quinn pushed off the brick, breath ragged. She’d seen that face before. Not in a file. Not on a missing persons board. In the margins of a case she shouldn’t remember. Blood on tiles. A medallion in the sink. *Saint Christopher.* Tomás Herrera. She reached her left wrist instinctively, fingers brushing the worn leather strap of her watch. Still ticking. Still holding. The alley spat her onto Wardour Street. Neon signs bled colour into wet tarmac—red, gold, sickly green. Taxis hissed past. Couples huddled under umbrellas, laughing. Normal lives. Unhaunted. And there—halfway down the block—Tomás paused beneath the flickering green glow of *The Raven’s Nest.* Not entering. Scanning. Then a glance over his shoulder. Straight at her. Quinn didn’t slow. He bolted. The heavy oak door of the Nest swung shut behind him with a thud. She followed, shoulder first, crashing through into warmth and smoke. Jazz hummed low beneath the murmur of voices. Whiskey and damp wool clung to the air. The bar stretched left, polished mahogany beneath rows of amber bottles. To the right, booths lined the wall, shadows thick in the corners. No sign of him. Then—a flicker behind the shelves. Floor-to-ceiling, crammed with leather-bound tomes and dust-laden travelogues. One shelf shifted. Just once. A whisper of wood on wood. Quinn drew her pistol, kept it low at her side. Crossed the room in three strides. Grabbed the edge of the bookshelf. Pulled. It didn’t budge. She slammed her palm against the spine of a volume titled *Flora & Fauna of the Carpathians.* A click. The shelf swung inward, silent on oiled hinges. Beyond: stairs. Steep. Narrow. Lit by bare bulbs strung along the wall. The air changed—older, drier. Smelled of chalk, iron, and something sweet like rotting apples. She descended. The steps emptied into a tunnel. Not modern. Arched brick. Low ceiling. Pipes hissed overhead, dripping condensation onto cracked tiles below. A sign, half-peeled, read *Charing Cross—Disused 1963.* Tomás stood thirty feet ahead, silhouetted by the faint green radiance of a second doorway. He wasn’t running now. Waiting. “You shouldn’t be here, Quinn.” His voice echoed, calm. Too calm. “You lost your license,” she said, gun steady. “Then you vanished. Now I find you in a secret room under a dive bar. Running.” He turned fully. Rain still glistened in his curls. His left hand gripped the scar along his forearm beneath his sleeve. The medallion at his throat—silver, dented—caught the light. “Lost implies I had a choice.” “You broke the rules.” “I treated people the NHS wouldn’t touch. Because they didn’t *believe.*” His laugh was short, bitter. “You know what happens when you see what they don’t?” “I know what happened to DS Morris.” The name hung between them. Tomás flinched. Just once. “You were there that night,” she said. “St. Thomas’ ER. Midnight shift. You treated a John Doe—the one with the burns, no ID. You vanished an hour later.” “I didn’t vanish. I was *removed.*” “By who?” He looked past her, down the tunnel. “By people who know that some things don’t belong in police reports.” “Like what?” “Like why Morris didn’t die in that warehouse fire.” His eyes locked on hers. “Like why his body was found two miles away. No smoke in the lungs. Pulse still faint. And his watch—” “My watch.” “—still ticking, despite the heat that melted steel.” Quinn’s fingers tightened on the grip. “You think I don’t know?” she said. “I was there. I *dragged* him out. The flames… they didn’t touch him right. Didn’t burn *even.* Like they were avoiding him.” Tomás stepped closer. “They weren’t flames, Quinn. Not the kind you understand.” “You’re a paramedic. Not a priest. Not a witch doctor.” “I’m the one who stitched him up after something *else* tried to tear him apart.” He pulled the medallion over his head, held it out. “This isn’t just faith. It’s a ward. One of many. And you’re standing in a place protected by older things.” “I don’t care.” “You should.” He slipped the chain back around his neck. “Because what killed Morris wasn’t a fire. It was a *hedge.* A boundary. And you crossed it the moment you followed me down here.” A noise echoed from the tunnel behind him—the green doorway. A shuffle. Then another. Footsteps. Dozens. Uneven. Some dragging. Some skittering. Tomás didn’t turn. “They know you’re armed,” he said. “They taste iron from a mile off. And they *hate* order. Discipline. Police.” Quinn glanced back. Darkness. But movement. Shapes shifting in the periphery. “You want to arrest me?” Tomás said. “Go ahead. But not here. Not now.” The footsteps quickened. She lowered her gun. Just an inch. “Where does this lead?” “The Veil Market,” he said. “Under Camden. Full moon shift tonight. They’re moving stock. Information. Weapons.” Her jaw clenched. “You’re smuggling.” “I’m *preventing*. What’s traded down here—it leaks. Onto your streets. Into your hospitals. Into your homes.” He took a step toward the light. “I keep it contained.” “Or you profit from it.” Another step. The footfalls were closer. Whispers now. Guttural. Like stones grinding together. “You followed me,” he said. “You could’ve turned back at the alley. At the bar. At the stairs. But you didn’t.” “Because I need answers.” “Then answer this.” He reached into his coat. Quinn raised the gun. He pulled out a key. Brass. Ornate. Not modern. “This was on Morris’s body when they brought him in.” He tossed it at her feet. “Never made it into evidence. Too strange. Too—*warm.*” She stared at it. The metal glowed faintly, pulsing like a slow heartbeat. The whispers became a growl. Behind her, something scraped along the wall. Wet. Heavy. Tomás turned to the doorway. “They’re coming through the old access tunnels. You’ve got three choices. Walk back to your world and forget this. Die here trying to arrest a ghost. Or come with me and learn what really killed your partner.” The growl became a roar. Quinn holstered her weapon. Grabbed the key. And followed him into the green light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.578
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count2
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count2
8
word"quickened"
count1
9
word"jaw clenched"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"scanning"
2"warmth"
3"flicker"
4"whisper"
5"echoed"
6"pulse"
7"footsteps"
8"quickened"
9"jaw clenched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences134
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences165
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans13
markdownWords23
totalWords1102
ratio0.021
matches
0"Saint Christopher."
1"The Raven’s Nest."
2"Flora & Fauna of the Carpathians."
3"Charing Cross—Disused 1963."
4"believe."
5"removed."
6"dragged"
7"even."
8"else"
9"hedge."
10"hate"
11"preventing"
12"warm."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount687
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.16
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Quinn8
Soho1
Tomás8
Herrera1
Wardour1
Street1
Raven1
Nest2
Fauna1
Cross1
Disused1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
places
0"Soho"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
globalScore0.918
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1102
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences165
matches
0"seen that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean15.31
std13.93
cv0.91
sampleLengths
063
17
228
341
42
519
628
727
83
92
1063
114
1224
1323
143
1527
1626
172
1828
1920
205
216
2224
2329
246
254
2626
277
285
294
3028
316
322
3319
342
3534
362
378
386
3929
4012
4110
4245
433
4434
4521
463
4719
4811
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs129
matches
0"wasn’t running"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences165
ratio0.055
matches
0"Her shoulder flared—old injury, same fire, three years back—but she drove forward, boots splashing through oily puddles."
1"A flash of profile beneath a torn hood—olive skin, tight curls soaked flat."
2"Neon signs bled colour into wet tarmac—red, gold, sickly green."
3"And there—halfway down the block—Tomás paused beneath the flickering green glow of *The Raven’s Nest.* Not entering."
4"Then—a flicker behind the shelves."
5"The air changed—older, drier."
6"A sign, half-peeled, read *Charing Cross—Disused 1963.*"
7"The medallion at his throat—silver, dented—caught the light."
8"A noise echoed from the tunnel behind him—the green doorway."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount704
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.029829545454545456
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007102272727272727
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences165
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences165
mean6.68
std5.89
cv0.882
sampleLengths
020
117
216
31
41
58
67
72
82
913
1011
117
125
134
146
159
163
175
182
192
2015
212
222
237
2410
253
265
272
281
2917
301
316
323
333
342
3514
3610
378
388
3911
4012
414
425
438
443
452
466
4710
486
496
72.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4727272727272727
totalSentences165
uniqueOpeners78
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences86
matches
0"Then he was gone, swallowed"
1"Then a glance over his"
2"Then—a flicker behind the shelves."
3"Just an inch."
ratio0.047
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences86
matches
0"Her shoulder flared—old injury, same"
1"She’d seen that face before."
2"She reached her left wrist"
3"She followed, shoulder first, crashing"
4"It didn’t budge."
5"She slammed her palm against"
6"He wasn’t running now."
7"His voice echoed, calm."
8"she said, gun steady"
9"He turned fully."
10"His left hand gripped the"
11"His laugh was short, bitter"
12"He looked past her, down"
13"His eyes locked on hers"
14"He pulled the medallion over"
15"He slipped the chain back"
16"She lowered her gun."
17"Her jaw clenched."
18"He took a step toward"
19"He reached into his coat"
ratio0.267
93.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences86
matches
0"The fire escape groaned under"
1"Her shoulder flared—old injury, same"
2"Rain needled her neck, cold"
3"A flash of profile beneath"
4"Quinn pushed off the brick,"
5"She’d seen that face before."
6"Blood on tiles."
7"A medallion in the sink."
8"She reached her left wrist"
9"The alley spat her onto"
10"Neon signs bled colour into"
11"Taxis hissed past."
12"Couples huddled under umbrellas, laughing."
13"Quinn didn’t slow."
14"The heavy oak door of"
15"She followed, shoulder first, crashing"
16"Jazz hummed low beneath the"
17"Whiskey and damp wool clung"
18"The bar stretched left, polished"
19"Floor-to-ceiling, crammed with leather-bound tomes"
ratio0.733
58.14% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"To the right, booths lined"
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.311
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.6559%