Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ01SR49CDNNS2FGGYB0FQSB

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Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.003439
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The night air in Richmond Park carried an unusual weight as Aurora Carter pushed her bicycle through the iron gates, the tires crunching softly on the gravel path. The moon hung low and pale, casting long, distorted shadows across the landscape. She tightened her grip on the handlebars, her knuckles white in the dim light. She should have been used to the late shifts by now, delivering for Yu-Fei's Golden Empress until the early hours, but tonight felt different. At the edge of the park, near the familiar cluster of ancient oaks that marked the boundary to the Fae Grove, she paused. The standing stones usually rose like silent sentinels, their weathered surfaces faintly luminescent even in darkness. Tonight, they seemed to absorb the moonlight rather than reflect it, appearing as dark, gaping teeth against the sky. Aurora ran a hand through her straight black hair, her fingers catching on a strand that had escaped her ponytail. She shouldn't be here. She knew that. The grove was supposed to be a secret, a place between worlds that few knew about. But her pendant—the deep crimson Heartstone given to her by an unknown benefactor—had been growing warmer against her chest all evening, its faint inner glow pulsing insistently through the fabric of her shirt. She'd been having strange dreams lately. Dreams of ancient forests that shifted and changed when she wasn't looking, of voices calling her name in languages she didn't recognize, of flowers that seemed to follow her with their gaze. The dreams always ended with the pendant glowing so brightly it woke her, her left wrist—where the small crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident rested—tingling with an odd energy. "Rory? Are you out there?" The voice was faint, carried on a wind that shouldn't exist. There was no wind in Richmond Park tonight; the air had been still as glass when she arrived. Yet the voice whispered through the trees, familiar yet distorted, like the memory of a childhood friend playing tricks on her. "Eva?" Aurora called back, her voice barely a whisper. Her childhood friend Eva had been the one to encourage her to leave Cardiff and escape her abusive ex, Evan. But Eva was back in Wales, visiting family. She couldn't possibly be here. A shiver ran down Aurora's spine despite the unusual warmth of the night. She fingered the pendant beneath her shirt, its surface now warm against her skin. It was definitely stronger than usual. The grove was calling to her, but not in the way it normally did. There was a wrongness in the air, a taut feeling that made the hairs on the back of her neck stand up. She dismounted her bicycle, leaning it against the rough bark of one of the standing stones. The stone felt unnaturally cold beneath her fingers, as if it had been pulled from some frozen wasteland rather than sitting in the middle of an English park. The usual path into the grove seemed to be missing. Where she expected to find a barely visible trail between the trees, there was only impenetr darkness. The wildflowers that bloomed year-round in the grove were nowhere to be seen. Instead, the undergrowth seemed to twist away from her, creating a wall of thorns and shadow. "Hello?" Aurora called again, her voice sounding thin and small in the oppressive silence. The air in the grove was thick with an unnatural stillness, broken only by occasional rustles that sounded too deliberate to be caused by animals. She took a step forward, her boots crunching on fallen leaves that shouldn't have been there. The foliage beneath her feet was too dry, too brittle, as if it had been dead for years rather than moments ago. The moonlight above seemed to dim as she entered what should have been the clearing, replaced by an eerie, greenish glow that emanated from nowhere and everywhere. Time in the grove was known to behave strangely—an hour inside could be minutes or days outside. But this felt different. This felt like time was folding in on itself, stretching and warping until Aurora couldn't tell if moments or hours had passed since she'd arrived. Something moved at the edge of her vision—a flicker of white between the trees. Aurora turned her head, but it was gone. When she looked back, the path she'd come in by had vanished completely, replaced by an unbroken wall of ancient oaks with bark that seemed to writhe and shift. A cold dread began to settle in her stomach, colder than the stone she'd touched earlier. She wasn't alone. She could feel eyes on her from every direction, watching her with patient, ancient curiosity. The pendant against her chest pulsed with warmth, its rhythm accelerating as if in response to whatever unseen presence surrounded her. "Who's there?" Aurora demanded, her voice stronger now, though it trembled slightly. She wasn't a woman who spooked easily—her quick thinking and cool-headedness had seen her through many difficult situations. But this was different. This wasn't just a strange place; it was a wrong place, a place that had somehow become twisted and alien. The rustling came again, closer this time. It wasn't the sound of leaves in the wind but something more deliberate, something that sounded like dry fingers brushing against bark. Aurora took a step back, her heel catching on an exposed root. She stumbled but caught herself, her hand flying out to steady herself against a tree trunk. The bark beneath her fingers felt like skin—warm and yielding. It pulsed with a slow, rhythmic beat that matched the rhythm of the pendant against her chest. Aurora snatched her hand back as if burned, staring at the tree in horror. The bark had shifted where she'd touched it, forming something that might have been a face if she squinted. A whispering started then, dozens of voices all speaking at once in languages she didn't recognize but somehow understood. They spoke of promises and warnings, of gifts and curses, of a debt that needed to be paid. "It's not time," Aurora murmured, more to herself than to the voices. "Not yet." The voices stopped abruptly, replaced by an absolute silence so complete it felt like pressure against her eardrums. The greenish glow intensified, illuminating the clearing with an eerie light. And there, in the center of the grove, stood a figure. It was tall and slender, dressed in what looked like bark and leaves, with hair like trailing vines and eyes that reflected the unnatural green light. It raised a hand, and the wildflowers that Aurora had expected to see blooming around her feet sprang up from the ground in an instant, their petals curling and twisting into shapes that weren't natural. "You shouldn't be here, daughter of Carter and Ellis," the figure said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. "The grove is not what it was. The boundaries have thinned." Aurora clutched the pendant, its warmth now almost painful against her skin. "What do you want?" The figure tilted its head, its face a mask of shifting bark and shadow. "We want what belongs to us. The heart of the grove is fading. The pendant... it could restore balance. Or it could destroy everything." The green light flickered, and for a moment, Aurora thought she saw the grove as it truly was—not a hidden clearing in Richmond Park but something vast and ancient, stretching into realms she couldn't comprehend. The standing stones weren't boundary markers but prison bars, holding back something that should never be released. The pendant pulsed once, twice, then a third time, each beat more urgent than the last. Against her will, Aurora felt her fingers uncurl from the chain, felt the silver sliding between her skin and the fabric of her shirt. "No," she whispered, trying to pull her hand away, but it was as if something else was guiding her movements, something in the grove itself that reached through the pendant and into her. The figure smiled, a terrible expression that revealed rows of needle-like teeth. "Yes. Give it to us. The balance must be maintained." The air around Aurora grew thick, the green light intensifying until it seemed to pour from every surface. The whispering started again, louder this time, insistent and demanding. The pendant slipped from her grasp, hovering in the air between her and the figure, its crimson glow pulsing in time with the whispering voices. Aurora's mind raced. She was cool-headed, intelligent, known for quick out-of-the-box thinking. There had to be a way out, a way to break whatever spell had taken hold of her. She thought of her training as a pre-law student, of her father's advice about finding loopholes in contracts, about the importance of precise language. "Balance," Aurora said, her voice cutting through the whispering. She focused on the figure, on the pendant hovering between them. "You said balance must be maintained. But you didn't specify whose balance." The figure's smile faltered. "What do you mean?" "The grove exists between Earth and the Fae realm," Aurora continued, the words coming faster as she found her rhythm. "The pendant bridges that boundary. But you're asking me to give you a tool without specifying what it will be used for. That's not balance—that's theft." The pendant pulsed, its crimson glow brightening. The green light in the clearing dimmed slightly. The whispering voices grew softer, more uncertain. "You can't bargain with us, human," the figure said, though its voice lacked some of its earlier certainty. "The grove demands what is its due." "The grove doesn't demand anything," Aurora countered, her voice gaining strength. "It's a place. And places don't have rights; people do. Or in this case... whatever you are." She took a step forward, another, her eyes locked on the pendant. The green light flickered, and for a moment, the clearing seemed to shift again, revealing glimpses of the real world outside—London streets, apartment buildings, the familiar warmth of her flat above Silas' bar. "The pendant was a gift," Aurora said, reaching out. This time, her fingers closed around the warm gemstone, and she didn't let go. "Gifts come with conditions. Unspoken agreements. And I don't agree to this." The figure hissed, and the wildflowers around Aurora's feet curled inward, thorns extending from their petals. "You have no choice." "I do," Aurora said, squeezing the pendant. The warmth spread through her hand, up her arm, until it felt as if her entire body was glowing with the same crimson light. "I choose to leave." The ground beneath her feet seemed to fall away. The grove dissolved around her, the figure screaming in a sound that wasn't sound but pure emotion, the whispering voices rising in a crescendo of rage and fear. Then, as suddenly as it had begun, it was over. Aurora found herself back on the path outside the grove, leaning against one of the standing stones. The moon hung high in the sky, its light bright and clear. Her bicycle was where she'd left it. The pendant was cool against her skin, its faint inner glow dimmed but not extinguished. She took a deep breath, the night air tasting normal again. Glancing at her wrist, she saw the crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident, pale against her skin. It tingled faintly, as if remembering something. The grove was still there. She knew that. But something had changed. Something fundamental. And as she mounted her bicycle and pedaled away, she couldn't shake the feeling that the eyes of the grove were still on her, that the boundary between worlds had been permanently altered. And that the pendant, warm against her chest, was no longer just a gift but a responsibility—one that would change her life in ways she couldn't yet imagine.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Aurora called again [again]"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.077
84.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1980
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"truly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"completely"
2"slightly"
3"truly"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1980
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count3
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count5
5
word"oppressive"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count4
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"rhythmic"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count2
14
word"raced"
count1
15
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"familiar"
2"sentinels"
3"whisper"
4"warmth"
5"oppressive"
6"silence"
7"flicker"
8"stomach"
9"could feel"
10"pulsed"
11"trembled"
12"rhythmic"
13"flickered"
14"raced"
15"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences116
matches
0"d with warmth"
1"e in horror"
19.70% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount10
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1968
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1779
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.35
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
Aurora24
Carter1
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Fae1
Grove1
Heartstone1
Eva2
Cardiff1
Evan1
Wales1
English1
London1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Heartstone"
4"Eva"
5"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Cardiff"
5"Wales"
6"English"
7"London"
globalScore0.825
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"flowers that seemed to follow her with their gaze"
1"felt like time was folding in on itself"
2"bark that seemed to writhe and shift"
3"sounded like dry fingers brushing against"
4"felt like skin—warm and yielding"
5"felt like pressure against her eardrums"
6"looked like bark and leaves, with hair li"
7"it was as if something else was guiding her movements, something in the grove itself that reached through the pendant and into her"
8"as if remembering something"
98.37% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.016
wordCount1968
matches
0"not a hidden clearing in Richmond Park but something vast"
1"no longer just a gift but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
72.21% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean43.73
std17.61
cv0.403
sampleLengths
079
158
276
367
45
550
642
769
844
956
1039
1165
1246
1351
1455
1554
1657
1760
1837
1914
2040
2161
2231
2316
2438
2552
2640
2733
2822
2953
3054
3132
328
3346
3422
3525
3628
3745
3835
3920
4035
4147
4251
4335
4475
90.14% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences116
matches
0"been used"
1"was supposed"
2"been pulled"
3"was known"
4"was gone"
87.77% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs297
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was calling"
2"was folding"
3"was guiding"
4"was glowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences130
ratio0.092
matches
0"But her pendant—the deep crimson Heartstone given to her by an unknown benefactor—had been growing warmer against her chest all evening, its faint inner glow pulsing insistently through the fabric of her shirt."
1"The dreams always ended with the pendant glowing so brightly it woke her, her left wrist—where the small crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident rested—tingling with an odd energy."
2"There was no wind in Richmond Park tonight; the air had been still as glass when she arrived."
3"Time in the grove was known to behave strangely—an hour inside could be minutes or days outside."
4"Something moved at the edge of her vision—a flicker of white between the trees."
5"She wasn't a woman who spooked easily—her quick thinking and cool-headedness had seen her through many difficult situations."
6"This wasn't just a strange place; it was a wrong place, a place that had somehow become twisted and alien."
7"The bark beneath her fingers felt like skin—warm and yielding."
8"The green light flickered, and for a moment, Aurora thought she saw the grove as it truly was—not a hidden clearing in Richmond Park but something vast and ancient, stretching into realms she couldn't comprehend."
9"\"It's a place. And places don't have rights; people do. Or in this case... whatever you are.\""
10"The green light flickered, and for a moment, the clearing seemed to shift again, revealing glimpses of the real world outside—London streets, apartment buildings, the familiar warmth of her flat above Silas' bar."
11"And that the pendant, warm against her chest, was no longer just a gift but a responsibility—one that would change her life in ways she couldn't yet imagine."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1540
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.03961038961038961
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.014935064935064935
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean15.14
std8.17
cv0.54
sampleLengths
028
113
214
324
423
516
619
720
84
93
1016
1133
126
1332
1429
155
1611
1718
1821
199
2020
218
225
2313
2414
256
2614
2722
2816
2928
3010
3117
3213
3316
3414
3525
3616
3722
3827
3917
404
4125
4214
438
4429
4516
463
4715
4821
4912
34.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.27692307692307694
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners36
57.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences115
matches
0"Instead, the undergrowth seemed to"
1"Then, as suddenly as it"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences115
matches
0"She tightened her grip on"
1"She should have been used"
2"She shouldn't be here."
3"She knew that."
4"She'd been having strange dreams"
5"Her childhood friend Eva had"
6"She couldn't possibly be here."
7"She fingered the pendant beneath"
8"It was definitely stronger than"
9"She dismounted her bicycle, leaning"
10"She took a step forward,"
11"She wasn't alone."
12"She could feel eyes on"
13"She wasn't a woman who"
14"It wasn't the sound of"
15"She stumbled but caught herself,"
16"It pulsed with a slow,"
17"They spoke of promises and"
18"It was tall and slender,"
19"It raised a hand, and"
ratio0.252
42.61% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount96
totalSentences115
matches
0"The night air in Richmond"
1"The moon hung low and"
2"She tightened her grip on"
3"She should have been used"
4"The standing stones usually rose"
5"Tonight, they seemed to absorb"
6"Aurora ran a hand through"
7"She shouldn't be here."
8"She knew that."
9"The grove was supposed to"
10"She'd been having strange dreams"
11"Dreams of ancient forests that"
12"The dreams always ended with"
13"The voice was faint, carried"
14"Aurora called back, her voice"
15"Her childhood friend Eva had"
16"She couldn't possibly be here."
17"A shiver ran down Aurora's"
18"She fingered the pendant beneath"
19"It was definitely stronger than"
ratio0.835
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences115
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.64% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Aurora ran a hand through her straight black hair, her fingers catching on a strand that had escaped her ponytail."
1"Dreams of ancient forests that shifted and changed when she wasn't looking, of voices calling her name in languages she didn't recognize, of flowers that seemed…"
2"The stone felt unnaturally cold beneath her fingers, as if it had been pulled from some frozen wasteland rather than sitting in the middle of an English park."
3"She took a step forward, her boots crunching on fallen leaves that shouldn't have been there."
4"The moonlight above seemed to dim as she entered what should have been the clearing, replaced by an eerie, greenish glow that emanated from nowhere and everywhe…"
5"The pendant against her chest pulsed with warmth, its rhythm accelerating as if in response to whatever unseen presence surrounded her."
6"She wasn't a woman who spooked easily—her quick thinking and cool-headedness had seen her through many difficult situations."
7"Aurora snatched her hand back as if burned, staring at the tree in horror."
8"The pendant slipped from her grasp, hovering in the air between her and the figure, its crimson glow pulsing in time with the whispering voices."
9"The warmth spread through her hand, up her arm, until it felt as if her entire body was glowing with the same crimson light."
10"The grove dissolved around her, the figure screaming in a sound that wasn't sound but pure emotion, the whispering voices rising in a crescendo of rage and fear…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Aurora called back, her voice barely a whisper"
1"Aurora called again, her voice sounding thin and small in the oppressive silence"
2"Aurora demanded, her voice stronger now, though it trembled slightly"
3"Aurora murmured, more to herself than to the voices"
4"Aurora said, her voice cutting through the whispering"
5"Aurora continued, the words coming faster as she found her rhythm"
6"the figure said, though its voice lacked some of its earlier certainty"
7"Aurora countered, her voice gaining strength"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Aurora called back (call back)"
1"Aurora demanded (demand)"
2"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
4"Aurora continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.423
leniency0.846
rawRatio0.455
effectiveRatio0.385
67.5121%