Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ068MBPP04QNXR4MS4946A0

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Duration:
1m 51s
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The moon hung low over Richmond Park, a thin dagger of cold light that cut the world in half. Aurora Carter slipped the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant over her head, the tiny crimson gem pulsing a muted warmth against the hollow of her throat. She paused at the edge of the ancient oak standing stones, their bark black as soot, their silhouettes like sentinels frozen in a forgotten war. The grass beneath her boots was a carpet of wildflowers—poppies, foxgloves, even the occasional night-blooming cereus—that glowed faintly in the moonlight, as if the very soil remembered the sun. She had come alone, because the message from the unknown benefactor had mentioned “no witnesses” and “only the stone will know.” Her fingers, calloused from loading trays of steaming bao in Yu-Fei’s kitchen, brushed the scar on her left wrist—a crescent the size of a quarter, the scar of a childhood accident that now felt like a tide mark on her skin. The scar tingled, as if the pendant’s faint heat had found a conduit. “Okay, Rory,” she whispered to herself, the nickname slipping out with a smile that was part defiance, part nervousness. “Just a quick drop-off. In, out, no drama.” The voice was steadier than she felt. The stones seemed to breathe. A low, almost imperceptible sigh rose from the circle, a sound that could have been wind or the exhale of something far larger. Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed, hunting for the source. The night was silent beyond the grove, the park’s usual chorus of crickets and rustling hedges muffled by an unseen weight. She stepped forward, the pendant’s glow intensifying just enough to catch the glint of dew on a stone’s edge. The air grew cooler, the scent of damp earth mixing with a metallic tang that made her throat constrict. She could hear the faint ticking of a heart—her own, perhaps, or something else mimicking the rhythm. The feeling of being observed pressed against the back of her neck, light as a feather yet undeniable. Aurora pressed the back of her hand into the bark of a stone, feeling the ridges like the veins of an ancient creature. “I’m not crazy,” she muttered. “Just nerves. My mind plays tricks when I’m alone at night.” She pulled the small leather satchel from her shoulder, the weight of it thudding against her side as if it wanted to be felt. Inside lay a thin envelope, the cream paper bearing no address, sealed with a wax imprint of a rose. The note inside had been brief: *Deliver the Heartstone at the stroke of midnight. The grove will open for you.* No signature, no warning, just that. A rustle slipped through the grass at the edge of her vision—a quick flicker of movement that could have been a rabbit, a fox, or something more deliberate. Aurora turned, squinting into the darkness where the stones formed a perfect circle. The wildflowers swayed as if a breeze brushed them, though the night was still. The sound was a whisper, a soft sigh that seemed to emanate from the very ground. “Who’s there?” she asked, voice low, half expecting an answer that would be nothing more than an echo. The stones gave no reply, but the pendant’s glow pulsed brighter, a crimson heartbeat syncing with an unseen rhythm. Time felt thinner here. Aurora’s watch—its digital face a stubborn reminder of London’s relentless tick—stopped at 11:58. The seconds stretched, each one a rubber band pulling tighter. She could see the minute hand tremble, stuck, as if the grove resisted the passage of ordinary time. She took a step deeper into the circle, the purple hue of the night deepening around her. The pendant warmed, its inner glow now a soft ember that lit the space in the palm of her hand. Shadows clung to the stone, lengthening, stretching, as if reaching for her. Aurora’s breath fogged in the air, a white plume disappearing into the night. A low hum rose from the stones, a chord resonating at a frequency she could feel in her teeth. It was not a sound but a vibration, a tremor that made the hair on her arms rise. The wildflowers at her feet seemed to pulse in time, each blossom opening and closing in a slow, deliberate bloom. Aurora’s heart hammered; the heartbeat she thought she heard was her own, amplified, a drum in rhythm with the grove. “Okay,” she whispered again, more to steady herself than to the stones. “I’m here. I’m doing what you asked.” The pendant’s glow intensified, casting a scarlet light that reflected off the stone’s bark, turning the ancient oaks into towering crimson monoliths. That light caught something in the center of the circle—a shape, half-hidden, a dark silhouette that seemed to fold in on itself like a cloud of ink. Aurora’s eyes darted to it; the outline was vague, shifting like a mirage, but it moved with purpose. A laugh—thin, brittle, or perhaps a sigh—floated through the air. It was not a human laugh. It tasted of rust and pine, an echo of something that had been there before the world had names. Aurora’s pulse surged as the shape resolved into a figure, tall and gaunt, its limbs elongated, its skin a pale wash of moonlight over bark. It stood at the far edge of the circle, its back turned, but the space where a head should have been was a hollow void that seemed to swallow light. She swallowed, feeling the scar on her wrist throb anew, as if the pendant had found a conductor in the old wound. The figure turned slowly, revealing no face, only darkness, but Aurora could feel eyes within that void, infinite, unblinking. The air grew heavier, every inhalation a pull against a tide. “Who… what are you?” Aurora forced out, the words sounding raw in the night. The figure made no sound, but the ground beneath her boots quivered, as if the earth itself was holding its breath. A breeze brushed past, cold and scented with iron. The wildflowers shivered, closing their petals in a rapid, synchronized snap. The sound was crisp, like a thousand tiny bells ringing in unison, then stopping as abruptly as it began. Aurora’s mind raced. She reached into her satchel, fingers brushing the envelope, feeling the weight of the paper, the wax seal still intact. The note was there, the rose imprint still crisp. She held the pendant out, its glow now a vivid pulse that seemed to beat in time with the void’s emptiness. The temperature in the circle dropped further, her breath forming frosted shapes that clung to the stone before melting away. The figure lifted an arm—no hand materialized, only a wavering shadow that reached toward the pendant. The Heartstone’s glow flared, a sudden surge of crimson that cut the darkness like a blade. The figure recoiled, a sound like tearing fabric echoing in the night, and the hollow where its face should have been swirled with a vortex of dark mist. Aurora felt a tug on her very soul, a pressure that tried to pull her into the whirl. She tightened her grip on the pendant, the chain biting into her scalp, the crimson stone humming against her chest. “Leave,” she hissed, the word a sharpened steel edge. “I’m not… I’m not your—” The vortex pulsed, and for a moment Aurora thought she saw the outline of a door—a fleeting glimpse of a doorway made of entwined branches and flickering light, as if the grove itself could open to something else. The sound of a clock chimed somewhere far away, tolling midnight, but the chime was muffled, as if underwater. She stepped back, the light from the pendant casting long shadows that stretched across the stone, each one trembling like a living thing. The figure’s darkness receded, the void pulling itself back into the stone’s base, the shape dissolving into a cascade of leaves that evaporated into the night air. The air warmed slightly, the iron tang fading, replaced by the scent of pine and earth. Aurora’s hands trembled, the pendant now a steady glow, no longer pulsing, but holding a calm, steady heat. She inhaled sharply, the scar on her wrist tingling faintly, a reminder that she had survived. The time displayed on her watch flicked forward; the minute hand jumped to 12:00, as if the grove had finally yielded to the world’s regular cadence. She stood alone among the standing stones, the wildflowers returning to their gentle sway, the night breathing around her in a rhythm that felt less oppressive. The Heartstone Pendant lay heavy against her chest, its glow a soft ember that would not fade. She turned to leave, the path through the oak circle opening like a curtain pulled back. The moon, now a thin sliver, cast a pale ribbon of light across the grass, guiding her steps. Aurora’s mind raced, cataloguing the sensations, the sight of that void, the tug of the vortex. She kept her eyes forward, the scar on her wrist a pulse of reassurance. As she stepped beyond the stones, a soft rustle rose behind her, the sound of a leaf brushing against bark, but when she glanced back, the stones were just stones, the night just night. The pendant’s glow dimmed to a faint warmth, as if it had fulfilled its purpose. Only at the very edge of the grove, where the trees thickened, did Aurora hear a low, melodic hum that seemed to echo from nowhere and everywhere at once—a song without words that settled in her bones. She pulled the pendant tighter, feeling its steady heat against her pulse, and whispered, “I’m not—” The words were swallowed by the night, and the only answer was the distant call of an owl, its hoot stitching the darkness back together. Aurora walked on, the path lit by the faintest silver of moonlight, her steps quiet, her mind alight with the knowledge that some doors, once opened, never truly close. The feeling that she was being watched lingered like a cold draft, but she kept moving, the Heartstone pulsing softly against her skin, a reminder that whatever lingered in the grove had chosen to stay where the shadows belong.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she whispered again [again]"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.75
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
73.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"very"
count4
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"truly"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"sharply"
4"truly"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"echo"
count3
8
word"pulsed"
count2
9
word"reminder"
count3
10
word"could feel"
count2
11
word"pulse"
count5
12
word"resolved"
count1
13
word"throb"
count1
14
word"quivered"
count1
15
word"synchronized"
count1
16
word"raced"
count2
17
word"wavering"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
19
word"fleeting"
count1
20
word"trembled"
count1
21
word"flicked"
count1
22
word"oppressive"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"sentinels"
2"weight"
3"glint"
4"flicker"
5"perfect"
6"whisper"
7"echo"
8"pulsed"
9"reminder"
10"could feel"
11"pulse"
12"resolved"
13"throb"
14"quivered"
15"synchronized"
16"raced"
17"wavering"
18"echoing"
19"fleeting"
20"trembled"
21"flicked"
22"oppressive"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences89
matches
0"felt a tug"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences89
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"hear"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords14
totalWords1712
ratio0.008
matches
0"Deliver the Heartstone at the stroke of midnight. The grove will open for you."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
95.75% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount1659
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.08
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Carter1
Heartstone5
Pendant2
Yu-Fei1
London1
Aurora18
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Aurora"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"London"
globalScore0.958
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like a tide mark on her skin"
1"sigh that seemed to emanate from the very ground"
2"as if reaching for her"
3"silhouette that seemed to fold in on itself like a cloud of ink"
4"void that seemed to swallow light"
5"pulse that seemed to beat in time with the void’s emptiness"
6"hum that seemed to echo from nowhere and everywhere at once—a song without words that settled in her bones"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.584
wordCount1712
matches
0"not a sound but a vibration, a tremor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"feeling that she"
63.08% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean59.03
std21.89
cv0.371
sampleLengths
0100
175
234
377
477
516
669
771
837
945
1062
1177
1219
1367
1490
1552
1635
1771
1857
1982
2014
2157
2266
2360
2443
2564
2649
2753
2893
89.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences89
matches
0"been was"
1"been swirled"
2"was muffled"
3"were swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs252
matches
0"was holding"
1"was being"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences92
ratio0.141
matches
0"The grass beneath her boots was a carpet of wildflowers—poppies, foxgloves, even the occasional night-blooming cereus—that glowed faintly in the moonlight, as if the very soil remembered the sun."
1"She had come alone, because the message from the unknown benefactor had mentioned “no witnesses” and “only the stone will know.” Her fingers, calloused from loading trays of steaming bao in Yu-Fei’s kitchen, brushed the scar on her left wrist—a crescent the size of a quarter, the scar of a childhood accident that now felt like a tide mark on her skin."
2"She could hear the faint ticking of a heart—her own, perhaps, or something else mimicking the rhythm."
3"A rustle slipped through the grass at the edge of her vision—a quick flicker of movement that could have been a rabbit, a fox, or something more deliberate."
4"Aurora’s watch—its digital face a stubborn reminder of London’s relentless tick—stopped at 11:58."
5"Aurora’s heart hammered; the heartbeat she thought she heard was her own, amplified, a drum in rhythm with the grove."
6"That light caught something in the center of the circle—a shape, half-hidden, a dark silhouette that seemed to fold in on itself like a cloud of ink."
7"Aurora’s eyes darted to it; the outline was vague, shifting like a mirage, but it moved with purpose."
8"A laugh—thin, brittle, or perhaps a sigh—floated through the air."
9"The figure lifted an arm—no hand materialized, only a wavering shadow that reached toward the pendant."
10"The vortex pulsed, and for a moment Aurora thought she saw the outline of a door—a fleeting glimpse of a doorway made of entwined branches and flickering light, as if the grove itself could open to something else."
11"The time displayed on her watch flicked forward; the minute hand jumped to 12:00, as if the grove had finally yielded to the world’s regular cadence."
12"Only at the very edge of the grove, where the trees thickened, did Aurora hear a low, melodic hum that seemed to echo from nowhere and everywhere at once—a song without words that settled in her bones."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1675
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay heavy against her"
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.029850746268656716
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.00835820895522388
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean18.61
std8.59
cv0.462
sampleLengths
019
127
225
329
462
513
619
715
85
923
109
1121
1219
1319
1417
1518
1623
175
1811
1924
2019
2114
2212
2328
2413
2514
2616
2718
2819
294
3013
3110
3218
3317
3420
3512
3613
3719
3818
3920
4020
4112
427
4322
4427
4518
4610
476
4819
4925
38.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.17391304347826086
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners16
37.88% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Only at the very edge"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences88
matches
0"She paused at the edge"
1"She had come alone, because"
2"she whispered to herself, the"
3"She stepped forward, the pendant’s"
4"She could hear the faint"
5"She pulled the small leather"
6"she asked, voice low, half"
7"She could see the minute"
8"She took a step deeper"
9"It was not a sound"
10"she whispered again, more to"
11"It was not a human"
12"It tasted of rust and"
13"It stood at the far"
14"She swallowed, feeling the scar"
15"She reached into her satchel,"
16"She held the pendant out,"
17"She tightened her grip on"
18"she hissed, the word a"
19"She stepped back, the light"
ratio0.284
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences88
matches
0"The moon hung low over"
1"Aurora Carter slipped the silver"
2"She paused at the edge"
3"The grass beneath her boots"
4"She had come alone, because"
5"The scar tingled, as if"
6"she whispered to herself, the"
7"The voice was steadier than"
8"The stones seemed to breathe."
9"A low, almost imperceptible sigh"
10"Aurora’s bright blue eyes narrowed,"
11"The night was silent beyond"
12"She stepped forward, the pendant’s"
13"The air grew cooler, the"
14"She could hear the faint"
15"The feeling of being observed"
16"Aurora pressed the back of"
17"She pulled the small leather"
18"The note inside had been"
19"The grove will open for"
ratio0.966
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"The moon hung low over Richmond Park, a thin dagger of cold light that cut the world in half."
1"The grass beneath her boots was a carpet of wildflowers—poppies, foxgloves, even the occasional night-blooming cereus—that glowed faintly in the moonlight, as i…"
2"A low, almost imperceptible sigh rose from the circle, a sound that could have been wind or the exhale of something far larger."
3"The air grew cooler, the scent of damp earth mixing with a metallic tang that made her throat constrict."
4"A rustle slipped through the grass at the edge of her vision—a quick flicker of movement that could have been a rabbit, a fox, or something more deliberate."
5"Shadows clung to the stone, lengthening, stretching, as if reaching for her."
6"The pendant’s glow intensified, casting a scarlet light that reflected off the stone’s bark, turning the ancient oaks into towering crimson monoliths."
7"That light caught something in the center of the circle—a shape, half-hidden, a dark silhouette that seemed to fold in on itself like a cloud of ink."
8"It tasted of rust and pine, an echo of something that had been there before the world had names."
9"She swallowed, feeling the scar on her wrist throb anew, as if the pendant had found a conductor in the old wound."
10"The figure made no sound, but the ground beneath her boots quivered, as if the earth itself was holding its breath."
11"The temperature in the circle dropped further, her breath forming frosted shapes that clung to the stone before melting away."
12"The vortex pulsed, and for a moment Aurora thought she saw the outline of a door—a fleeting glimpse of a doorway made of entwined branches and flickering light,…"
13"The sound of a clock chimed somewhere far away, tolling midnight, but the chime was muffled, as if underwater."
14"She stepped back, the light from the pendant casting long shadows that stretched across the stone, each one trembling like a living thing."
15"The figure’s darkness receded, the void pulling itself back into the stone’s base, the shape dissolving into a cascade of leaves that evaporated into the night …"
16"She stood alone among the standing stones, the wildflowers returning to their gentle sway, the night breathing around her in a rhythm that felt less oppressive."
17"The Heartstone Pendant lay heavy against her chest, its glow a soft ember that would not fade."
18"Only at the very edge of the grove, where the trees thickened, did Aurora hear a low, melodic hum that seemed to echo from nowhere and everywhere at once—a song…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Aurora forced, the words sounding raw in the night"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"she whispered again (whisper)"
3"she hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.667
65.0165%