Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ07N6ZHS7EF6YSHQ2WEGMHV

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Duration:
33.5s
Cost:
$0.005657
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon of The Raven's Nest sign buzzed faintly through the window, casting its familiar pallor over the wet pavement. It was nearly eleven on a Tuesday, and the bar was quiet — a handful of regulars scattered along the length of the mahogany, their conversations low and unhurried. Rory wiped down the counter with measured strokes, her shoulder-length black hair tucked behind both ears, exposing the sharp line of her jaw. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the light each time she turned her hand, a pale comma against her skin. She heard the door before she saw anyone — that particular creak of the hinge Silas kept meaning to oil — and the rush of cold London air that followed. She didn't look up. Tuesday nights drew a predictable crowd: Silas's contacts in their careful suits, a few tourists who'd stumbled in from Soho's theatre crowd thinking this was some quaint local pub, and the regulars who came for the gin and the silence. She could catalogue the room by sound alone now, the way a sailor reads weather. "Sorry — is this open? I just need a glass of water, if that's all right." The voice stopped her hand. Not because it was loud or unusual, but because something in its cadence — a particular lift on the word *sorry*, the way the vowels drew slightly long — landed somewhere beneath her ribs and pulled. She looked up. The woman standing at the bar was thinner than Rory remembered. Sharper, somehow, as though the years had whittled away everything soft. Her auburn hair was cut shorter now, close to the skull, and there were lines at the corners of her eyes that hadn't been there before. She wore a dark wool coat over what looked like a navy suit, and her hands — those long, expressive hands Rory remembered from lecture halls and kitchen tables — gripped the strap of a leather bag with both fists. For a long moment, neither of them moved. Then the woman's eyes — green, still green, though dimmer now, as if lit from further away — widened. Her lips parted. "Rory?" The name landed like a stone in still water. Not *Aurora*, which was what her father called her, stiff and formal, like a legal summons. Not *Carter*, which was what Silas called her when he wanted her attention. *Rory*. The name she'd been called by people who'd known her before — before London, before the flat above the bar, before the Golden Empress and the delivery routes and the long nights of learning to sleep without checking the locks three times. "Ellie," Rory said. Ellie Brennan. Her roommate at Cardiff. Third year of Pre-Law, in the cramped flat on Charles Street that always smelled of someone else's curry and damp wool. Ellie, who'd stayed up until three in the morning helping her outline torts cases, who'd laughed so hard at Rory's impression of their constitutional law professor that milk had come out of her nose. Ellie, who'd been the first person Rory had told about Evan. Ellie, who hadn't been the last. "You work here?" Ellie asked, and the surprise in her voice was almost accusatory, as though Rory had deliberately failed to mention this during some conversation that had never happened. "Something like that," Rory said. She reached beneath the counter for a glass. "Water — still or sparkling?" "Still. Please." Ellie sat down on a barstool, settling her bag on the hook beside her, and Rory saw that her knuckles were white around the strap even now. "I didn't know you were in London." "I've been here a while." "How long?" "Four years. Maybe five." Rory filled the glass from the pitcher she kept behind the bar. She placed it down on a coaster without looking, the way she'd learned to do — Silas insisted on coasters, said it was a matter of principle, and Rory had stopped arguing about which principles mattered most. "Since just after we graduated." "Right." Ellie wrapped both hands around the glass. "I looked for you, actually. After graduation. You'd changed your number." "I changed a lot of things." The silence that followed was thick with everything they hadn't said in five years. Rory could feel it pressing against her skin, against the neat composure she'd built like armor over the long months of starting over. She turned back to the counter, began wiping at a spot that was already clean. Ellie's gaze tracked her movements, taking in the quiet authority of the way Rory moved through the space — the economy of her gestures, the way her bright blue eyes assessed and catalogued without appearing to stare. "You look different," Ellie said. "People do." "No, I mean — you look *good*, Rory. You look steady." She paused. "I didn't expect that." Rory set the rag down. "What did you expect?" "I don't know. When you left Cardiff, when you just — disappeared, basically — I thought..." Ellie trailed off. She lifted the water to her lips, drank, set it down. "After everything with Evan, I thought you might fall apart." "Someone suggested I might. Fall apart." Rory's voice was level. "I considered it. Decided it wasn't efficient." Ellie let out a breath that was almost a laugh. "Still Rory." "Still me." Rory picked up the rag again. "What are you doing in London, Ellie?" "Conference. Legal affairs — something boring about regulatory compliance." Ellie waved a hand, as though the specifics were irrelevant. "I'm with a firm in Manchester now. We merged last year." She paused. "I'm a solicitor." "Of course you are." "What's that supposed to mean?" "Nothing. You were always going to be." Rory meant it as a compliment, but it came out flatter than she'd intended, tinged with something she didn't want to name. She saw the flicker cross Ellie's face — the quick, sharp calculation of someone who'd learned to read professional subtext — and felt a small twist of guilt. "Congratulations, Ellie. Really." "Thanks." Ellie turned the glass in her hands. "Your dad asked after you, you know. Last Christmas. Jennifer mentioned it when I ran into her at the Tesco on Albany Road. She said you were in London but she didn't have much more than that." "My mother has my number." "I know." "I call her. Sundays. She talks about the garden. I listen." "Rory—" "I'm not—" Rory stopped herself. She pressed her lips together, breathed in through her nose. The bar hummed its low hum around them. Somewhere in the back, a tap dripped its steady metronome. "I'm not punishing anyone. I'm just — I had to go somewhere that wasn't there." Ellie was quiet for a moment. Then: "Did you find it?" "Find what?" "Somewhere that wasn't there." Rory considered the question. She looked around The Raven's Nest — at the old maps papering the walls, at the black-and-white photographs Silas had collected over the years, faces from another century staring out at strangers with their unknowable lives. At the bookshelf in the back that concealed a door to a room where secrets were traded like currency. At the life she'd built in the spaces between other people's stories, delivering food by day and drinks by night, living above a retired spy's bar in the middle of London as though invisibility were a kind of freedom. "I'm getting there," she said. Ellie studied her. "He's out, you know. Evan. He got out in March." The rag stilled in Rory's hand. She didn't turn around. She felt the information settle into her body like cold water, seeping into spaces she'd tried to seal shut. "I know," she said. "You *know*?" "Silas told me. He keeps track of things." She resumed her wiping. "It's what he does." "And you're not — I mean, doesn't that—" "No." "Rory—" "I said no." Her voice was quiet, but there was a wall in it now, something Ellie would have recognized from those last weeks in Cardiff — the same tone Rory had used when Ellie had tried, gently, desperately, to convince her to go to the police. "I'm not doing this here. Not tonight." Ellie nodded slowly. She lifted the water glass again, then set it down without drinking. "I'm sorry I wasn't there. When you left. I should have — I don't know what I should have done, but it feels like I should have done something more." "You told me to leave." "I told you to be safe. There's a difference." "Is there?" The question hung between them, raw and honest in a way that felt almost indecent in the dim warmth of the bar. Rory turned to face Ellie fully, leaning her back against the counter behind her. Under the low light, the crescent scar on her wrist was just visible, a pale sliver where her sleeve had ridden up. "You were the one who said it first," Rory said. "That it wasn't right. That what he was doing — the way he controlled everything, the way I'd stopped being — that it wasn't love. You were the one who made me see it." She paused. "And then you were there when I packed the bag. You held my keys while I couldn't stop shaking." Ellie's eyes glistened. "I remember." "You kept my spare copy for six months. Until I told you I was settled." "I kept it longer than that, actually." They looked at each other across the bar, and the years between them compressed and expanded in the same breath — five years of distance, of unanswered texts and birthdays passed in silence, of Rory learning to be someone new and Ellie watching from afar, not knowing how to reach the person her friend was becoming. "I should have called," Ellie said. "Yes." "I didn't know what to say." "I know." "I kept thinking you'd come back. That London was just — a phase. That I'd see you at someone's wedding or a funeral, and we'd pick up where we left off." She exhaled. "But you didn't come back. And I realized I didn't even know where you were, and that maybe that was the point." Rory felt something shift in her chest — not a breaking, exactly, but a loosening. Like a knot she'd been working at for years had finally given way. She reached beneath the counter and produced a bottle of the Welsh whisky Silas kept for occasions he deemed worthy. He'd given her the bottle on her thirtieth — no, her twenty-fifth birthday, and she'd been saving it, though she hadn't known for what. "It's not a wedding," she said. "And I hope it's not a funeral." "I hope not too." Rory poured two fingers into each of two glasses and slid one across the counter. Ellie looked at it, then at Rory, and something passed between them — an understanding that words would come later, or they wouldn't, but that this moment, here, now, with the green neon buzzing and the rain tapping the windows and the quiet geometry of two old friends finding each other in a city that swallowed people whole, was enough. "To coming back," Ellie said, lifting her glass. Rory shook her head slightly. "Not back," she said. "Forward." She raised her glass to meet Ellie's, and the sound it made — that small, clear ring of glass against glass — cut through the low murmur of the bar like a bell. They drank. The whisky was warm and sharp and tasted of smoke and distance and the kind of time that doesn't heal so much as reshape. Rory set her glass down and held Ellie's gaze across the counter, and for the first time in five years, she didn't feel like a stranger in her own skin. Outside, the rain continued. Inside The Raven's Nest, the maps watched from the walls and the photographs kept their silent vigil, and two women who had once known each other completely sat with the terrifying, necessary work of becoming known again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1984
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"deliberately"
2"really"
3"gently"
4"slowly"
5"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1984
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"predictable"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"could feel"
count1
5
word"efficient"
count1
6
word"tinged"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"measured"
2"predictable"
3"silence"
4"could feel"
5"efficient"
6"tinged"
7"flicker"
8"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords6
totalWords2018
ratio0.003
matches
0"sorry"
1"Aurora"
2"Carter"
3"Rory"
4"good"
5"know"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions85
wordCount1479
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity2.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Nest3
Tuesday2
Silas6
London3
Soho1
Rory30
Golden1
Empress1
Ellie27
Brennan1
Cardiff2
Pre-Law1
Charles1
Street1
Evan1
Welsh1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
3"Ellie"
4"Brennan"
5"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Soho"
2"Cardiff"
3"Charles"
4"Street"
globalScore0.486
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a navy suit, and her hands —"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.496
wordCount2018
matches
0"not a breaking, exactly, but a loosening"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences149
matches
0"saw that her"
1"understanding that words"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs77
mean26.21
std27.22
cv1.039
sampleLengths
095
189
216
341
43
588
68
722
81
981
103
1178
1230
1318
1436
155
162
1758
1819
196
2052
2142
222
2317
249
2540
2617
2712
2815
2935
304
315
3260
3345
345
352
3611
371
3848
3911
402
414
4298
435
4413
4529
464
472
4816
498
98.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences99
matches
0"been called"
1"were traded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs238
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences149
ratio0.107
matches
0"It was nearly eleven on a Tuesday, and the bar was quiet — a handful of regulars scattered along the length of the mahogany, their conversations low and unhurried."
1"She heard the door before she saw anyone — that particular creak of the hinge Silas kept meaning to oil — and the rush of cold London air that followed."
2"Not because it was loud or unusual, but because something in its cadence — a particular lift on the word *sorry*, the way the vowels drew slightly long — landed somewhere beneath her ribs and pulled."
3"She wore a dark wool coat over what looked like a navy suit, and her hands — those long, expressive hands Rory remembered from lecture halls and kitchen tables — gripped the strap of a leather bag with both fists."
4"Then the woman's eyes — green, still green, though dimmer now, as if lit from further away — widened."
5"The name she'd been called by people who'd known her before — before London, before the flat above the bar, before the Golden Empress and the delivery routes and the long nights of learning to sleep without checking the locks three times."
6"She placed it down on a coaster without looking, the way she'd learned to do — Silas insisted on coasters, said it was a matter of principle, and Rory had stopped arguing about which principles mattered most."
7"Ellie's gaze tracked her movements, taking in the quiet authority of the way Rory moved through the space — the economy of her gestures, the way her bright blue eyes assessed and catalogued without appearing to stare."
8"She saw the flicker cross Ellie's face — the quick, sharp calculation of someone who'd learned to read professional subtext — and felt a small twist of guilt."
9"She looked around The Raven's Nest — at the old maps papering the walls, at the black-and-white photographs Silas had collected over the years, faces from another century staring out at strangers with their unknowable lives."
10"\"I said no.\" Her voice was quiet, but there was a wall in it now, something Ellie would have recognized from those last weeks in Cardiff — the same tone Rory had used when Ellie had tried, gently, desperately, to convince her to go to the police."
11"They looked at each other across the bar, and the years between them compressed and expanded in the same breath — five years of distance, of unanswered texts and birthdays passed in silence, of Rory learning to be someone new and Ellie watching from afar, not knowing how to reach the person her friend was becoming."
12"Rory felt something shift in her chest — not a breaking, exactly, but a loosening."
13"He'd given her the bottle on her thirtieth — no, her twenty-fifth birthday, and she'd been saving it, though she hadn't known for what."
14"Ellie looked at it, then at Rory, and something passed between them — an understanding that words would come later, or they wouldn't, but that this moment, here, now, with the green neon buzzing and the rain tapping the windows and the quiet geometry of two old friends finding each other in a city that swallowed people whole, was enough."
15"She raised her glass to meet Ellie's, and the sound it made — that small, clear ring of glass against glass — cut through the low murmur of the bar like a bell."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1463
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03212576896787423
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.008202323991797676
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean13.54
std12.36
cv0.913
sampleLengths
021
129
223
322
430
54
640
715
816
95
1036
113
1211
1311
1426
1540
168
1719
183
191
209
2116
2213
231
2442
253
262
274
2821
2934
3011
316
3230
335
348
355
3629
377
385
392
4016
4137
425
438
4411
456
4614
4723
4815
4937
46.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3422818791946309
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners51
81.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then the woman's eyes —"
1"Somewhere in the back, a"
ratio0.024
98.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences82
matches
0"It was nearly eleven on"
1"She heard the door before"
2"She didn't look up."
3"She could catalogue the room"
4"She looked up."
5"Her auburn hair was cut"
6"She wore a dark wool"
7"Her lips parted."
8"Her roommate at Cardiff."
9"She reached beneath the counter"
10"She placed it down on"
11"She turned back to the"
12"She lifted the water to"
13"She saw the flicker cross"
14"She pressed her lips together,"
15"She looked around The Raven's"
16"She didn't turn around."
17"She felt the information settle"
18"She resumed her wiping"
19"Her voice was quiet, but"
ratio0.305
45.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences82
matches
0"The green neon of The"
1"It was nearly eleven on"
2"Rory wiped down the counter"
3"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
4"She heard the door before"
5"She didn't look up."
6"Tuesday nights drew a predictable"
7"She could catalogue the room"
8"The voice stopped her hand."
9"She looked up."
10"The woman standing at the"
11"Her auburn hair was cut"
12"She wore a dark wool"
13"Her lips parted."
14"The name landed like a"
15"The name she'd been called"
16"Her roommate at Cardiff."
17"Ellie, who'd stayed up until"
18"Ellie, who'd been the first"
19"Ellie, who hadn't been the"
ratio0.829
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She heard the door before she saw anyone — that particular creak of the hinge Silas kept meaning to oil — and the rush of cold London air that followed."
1"Tuesday nights drew a predictable crowd: Silas's contacts in their careful suits, a few tourists who'd stumbled in from Soho's theatre crowd thinking this was s…"
2"Not *Carter*, which was what Silas called her when he wanted her attention."
3"Ellie, who'd stayed up until three in the morning helping her outline torts cases, who'd laughed so hard at Rory's impression of their constitutional law profes…"
4"Ellie, who'd been the first person Rory had told about Evan."
5"She saw the flicker cross Ellie's face — the quick, sharp calculation of someone who'd learned to read professional subtext — and felt a small twist of guilt."
6"At the life she'd built in the spaces between other people's stories, delivering food by day and drinks by night, living above a retired spy's bar in the middle…"
7"The question hung between them, raw and honest in a way that felt almost indecent in the dim warmth of the bar."
8"Ellie looked at it, then at Rory, and something passed between them — an understanding that words would come later, or they wouldn't, but that this moment, here…"
9"Inside The Raven's Nest, the maps watched from the walls and the photographs kept their silent vigil, and two women who had once known each other completely sat…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Ellie waved, as though the specifics were irrelevant"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.141
leniency0.282
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.9280%