Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ07P56QYM5PFM7F9SK8PM3E

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Duration:
37.9s
Cost:
$0.006170
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The slick pavement reflected fractured neon as Harlow Quinn vaulted a overflowing bin, the sickly green glow of The Raven’s Nest sign smearing across her vision. Her quarry, a wiry man in a too-large jacket, didn’t look back. He didn’t need to. The thud of her boots on wet tarmac was drumming a frantic rhythm behind him. “Stop! Police!” The words ripped from her throat, swallowed by the downpour and the blare of a nearby siren. He ducked right, down a narrow service alley reeking of stale beer and grease. Quinn followed, her worn leather watch catching the meagre light. The chase had started with a dropped phone, a panicked face, a whisper of “the Nest” and a name she recognised: Tommy Herrera. Paramedic. Clique physician. Now a ghost in the system. He was fast, but she was relentless. Eighteen years had carved the chase into her muscle memory. The alley spat them out onto a broader back street, slick with reflected red from a kebab shop sign. Herrera veered left, aiming for the hulking silhouette of Camden Market’s daytime carcass, shuttered and silent now. “Herrera! I just want to talk!” A lie. She wanted answers about DS Morris, about the three-year-old case file that stank of things not meant for daylight. He didn’t slow. His hand flew to his chest, clutching something under his shirt. The glint of metal. A Saint Christopher medallion. She’d seen it in his file photo. He dodged a lorry, its headlights blinding her for a second. When she blinked the spots away, he’d vanished. Not into a building. Into the ground. A set of steps led down to a rusted, graffiti-scarred door, propped open with a brick. An abandoned Tube entrance. The air smelled different here, of damp earth and ozone and something coppery that made the hairs on her arms stand up. She stopped at the top of the steps, rain plastering her salt-and-pepper hair to her skull. The beam of her torch cut a shaky path down. Unfamiliar. Dangerous. Every rule she’d ever learned screamed *back-up*. Call it in. Contain the perimeter. Then she thought of Morris. His empty desk. The way his wife looked at her, like she’d failed him in some fundamental, cosmic way. The strange symbols found scrawled at the scene, dismissed as vandalism. *Supernatural origins.* The phrase from the old, unredacted report echoed. “Damn it,” she muttered, and took the first step down. The iron door groaned shut behind her with a final, metallic clang, the sound echoing up the concrete throat of the station. The rain’s hiss cut off, replaced by a low, subsonic hum that vibrated in her teeth. The stairs led to a tiled corridor, the old advertisements for Sunlight Soap and Ovaltine faded to ghosts. Water dripped from the ceiling in a steady, funereal beat. Her torch beam danced ahead, catching on graffiti that wasn’t tags but intricate, flowing symbols that seemed to shift if she looked too long. She walked past a toppled bench, its wooden slats rotten. Then another set of stairs, spiralling deeper. The air grew warmer, thick with the scent of strange incense, curing leather, and the metallic tang of blood, old and new. The hum solidified into a low murmur of voices, the clink of glass, the skitter of unseen things in the shadows. A faint, multi-coloured light bled from around a final bend in the tunnel. She killed her torch. Leaned against the cold tile wall, her heart hammering against her ribs. *The Veil Market.* The whispers in the precinct were half-joke, half-superstition. A ghost market. For ghosts, and things that weren’t quite. She’d never believed. Or had she? Her hand brushed her service pistol, its familiar weight a small comfort against the pressing wrongness of the place. Around the corner, the tunnel opened into a vast, vaulted chamber—the cavernous ghost of a platform. The ceiling was lost in gloom, but the floor was alive. Stalls made of draped cloth, overturned crates, and glowing orbs lit a bustling, shadowed bazaar. Figures moved with a liquid grace or a shuffling gait that wasn’t human. She saw scales beneath a cloak, a face with too many angles, eyes that reflected her torch beam with an internal luminescence. The murmur was a dozen languages, human and otherwise. And there, on the far side, slipping between a stall displaying jars of glowing viscera and another selling blades that drank the light, was Tommy Herrera. Quinn flattened herself behind a concrete pillar, its surface cool against her cheek. The crowd was a tapestry of the impossible. To follow him into that was suicide. Career suicide, certainly. Probably the regular kind too. She thought of Morris’s empty locker. She thought of his funeral. Her hand closed around the cool metal of her badge in her pocket. It felt like a child’s toy here. A relic from a world that didn’t know this one existed. Herrera was her only lead. He was the thread she could pull. Taking a breath that tasted of ancient dust and dark magic, Detective Harlow Quinn stepped away from the pillar and into the chaotic, kaleidoscopic throng of The Veil Market. She kept to the shadows at the edge, her eyes locked on the small, olive-skinned man moving with purpose towards a dark archway at the rear of the cavern. The crowd parted for him. They knew him. A medic for this den of things. She followed, staying three stalls back. A creature with moth wings and a human face offered her a glimpse into a shimmering orb; she brushed it aside. The low hum vibrated up through the soles of her boots. Herrera turned into the archway, a passage tunneling even deeper into the earth. Quinn paused at its threshold. The air from within was cold, dead. No incense here. Just the smell of stone and waiting. The sounds of the market faded behind her, replaced by a silence so profound it felt like a pressure on her eardrums. She drew her pistol, the action feeling clumsy, inadequate. She flicked on her torch again. The beam showed rough-hewn walls, a downward slope. Somewhere in the dark ahead, a stone skittered across the floor. Herrera, or something else. She followed the sound.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.75
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1043
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1043
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"hulking"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count2
7
word"intricate"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count1
11
word"tapestry"
count1
12
word"chaotic"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"profound"
count1
15
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"whisper"
2"hulking"
3"glint"
4"echoed"
5"echoing"
6"vibrated"
7"intricate"
8"familiar"
9"weight"
10"gloom"
11"tapestry"
12"chaotic"
13"silence"
14"profound"
15"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences99
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords6
totalWords1042
ratio0.006
matches
0"back-up"
1"Supernatural origins."
2"The Veil Market."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1030
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn5
Raven1
Nest1
Tommy2
Herrera6
Camden1
Market3
Morris3
Saint1
Christopher1
Tube1
Sunlight1
Soap1
Ovaltine1
Veil2
Detective1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Tommy"
4"Herrera"
5"Market"
6"Morris"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Ovaltine"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
5.07% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"symbols that seemed to shift if she looked too long"
1"quite"
2"felt like a child’s toy here"
3"felt like a pressure on her eardrums"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1042
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
96.69% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean45.3
std22.13
cv0.488
sampleLengths
057
175
253
356
468
541
635
710
848
969
1056
1162
1286
1326
1436
1511
1643
1773
1851
1944
2023
2115
224
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"was lost"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs152
matches
0"was drumming"
85.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences99
ratio0.02
matches
0"Around the corner, the tunnel opened into a vast, vaulted chamber—the cavernous ghost of a platform."
1"A creature with moth wings and a human face offered her a glimpse into a shimmering orb; she brushed it aside."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1041
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, olive-skinned man"
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.024975984630163303
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0038424591738712775
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean10.53
std6.92
cv0.658
sampleLengths
026
112
24
315
419
514
610
723
81
92
106
117
1210
1319
1417
158
1619
173
1811
194
204
217
2211
238
244
253
2616
274
2822
2916
3010
311
321
337
343
353
365
373
3816
3911
4010
4110
4222
4316
4418
4510
4624
4710
487
4922
63.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.42424242424242425
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences94
matches
0"Then she thought of Morris."
1"Then another set of stairs,"
2"Probably the regular kind too."
3"Just the smell of stone"
4"Somewhere in the dark ahead,"
ratio0.053
96.60% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences94
matches
0"Her quarry, a wiry man"
1"He didn’t need to."
2"He ducked right, down a"
3"He was fast, but she"
4"She wanted answers about DS"
5"He didn’t slow."
6"His hand flew to his"
7"She’d seen it in his"
8"He dodged a lorry, its"
9"She stopped at the top"
10"His empty desk."
11"she muttered, and took the"
12"Her torch beam danced ahead,"
13"She walked past a toppled"
14"She killed her torch."
15"She’d never believed."
16"Her hand brushed her service"
17"She saw scales beneath a"
18"She thought of Morris’s empty"
19"She thought of his funeral."
ratio0.309
71.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences94
matches
0"The slick pavement reflected fractured"
1"Her quarry, a wiry man"
2"He didn’t need to."
3"The thud of her boots"
4"The words ripped from her"
5"He ducked right, down a"
6"Quinn followed, her worn leather"
7"The chase had started with"
8"He was fast, but she"
9"The alley spat them out"
10"Herrera veered left, aiming for"
11"She wanted answers about DS"
12"He didn’t slow."
13"His hand flew to his"
14"The glint of metal."
15"A Saint Christopher medallion."
16"She’d seen it in his"
17"He dodged a lorry, its"
18"A set of steps led"
19"An abandoned Tube entrance."
ratio0.777
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"Now a ghost in the"
1"To follow him into that"
ratio0.021
65.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The air smelled different here, of damp earth and ozone and something coppery that made the hairs on her arms stand up."
1"Her torch beam danced ahead, catching on graffiti that wasn’t tags but intricate, flowing symbols that seemed to shift if she looked too long."
2"She saw scales beneath a cloak, a face with too many angles, eyes that reflected her torch beam with an internal luminescence."
3"And there, on the far side, slipping between a stall displaying jars of glowing viscera and another selling blades that drank the light, was Tommy Herrera."
4"Taking a breath that tasted of ancient dust and dark magic, Detective Harlow Quinn stepped away from the pillar and into the chaotic, kaleidoscopic throng of Th…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.5
86.5518%