Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ090W73AA9A1KJJBDNYMH23

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Duration:
30.3s
Cost:
$0.004863
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The neon sign above The Raven’s Nest painted a toxic green slash across the rain-slicked pavement. Rory pushed through the door, the bell’s chime swallowed by the low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses. The air inside was thick with the smell of old wood, spilled ale, and something vaguely metallic, like old pennies. She kept her head down, shoulders hunched against the weight of the day’s deliveries, the damp chill of her jacket still clinging to her. Her shift at the Golden Empress had run late, and Yu-Fei’s parting nod had been particularly weary. She slid onto a stool at the bar, the worn leather cool against her jeans. The place was doing a modest trade. A couple in the corner booth leaned close over a shared plate of chips. Two men in sharp suits occupied a table by the window, their voices low, businesslike. Silas was nowhere in sight, probably in his office or the hidden back room, dealing with whatever it was Silas dealt with. That was fine. She just needed a minute, a breath, before climbing the narrow stairs to her flat and the quiet, relentless hum of her own thoughts. “Just a water, please,” she said to the bartender, a young woman with a nose ring and tattoo sleeves. As the glass was set down, a voice cut through the ambient noise, sharp with disbelief. “Rory Carter?” Rory froze, the glass halfway to her lips. The voice was deeper than she remembered, but the cadence, the specific lilt of Cardiff tucked in the vowels—it was unmistakable. She turned slowly on her stool. He stood a few feet away, having just shed a dripping raincoat. Ewan Davies. Or, he had been Ewan Davies. The boy she’d shared lecture halls and cheap pints with at Cardiff University was gone. In his place stood a man in a tailored navy overcoat that fell in clean lines to his knees. His hair, once a shaggy, rebellious mop, was cut short and expertly styled. He looked… solid. Expensive. The only familiar thing was the wide, surprised smile that broke across his face, crinkling the corners of his eyes. “Bloody hell, it is you,” he said, taking a step closer. He smelled of rain, expensive cologne, and something else—a faint, clean scent of new leather. “Ewan Davies. It’s been, what? Six years? Seven?” “Seven,” Rory said, her voice coming out flatter than she intended. She set the glass down. “Since graduation.” “Since you vanished off the face of the earth,” he corrected, but his tone was warm, not accusatory. He took the stool beside her, flagging the bartender with a familiar ease. “A Macallan 12, neat. Please.” He turned back to Rory. “God. Look at you. I almost didn’t… The hair’s different.” She’d cut it shoulder-length and dyed it black in London. A deliberate shedding of the girl who’d had chestnut curls. “Yeah,” she said. “Changes.” “You can say that again.” He laughed, a short, confident bark. “I’m a solicitor now. In the City. Can you believe it? Me, defending corporate mergers.” He shook his head, as if amused by the cosmic joke. “What about you? Still doing that brilliant thing with the European Human Rights law thesis? I always said you were the smart one.” The question landed like a stone in her stomach. Smart. The girl who’d written a scathing, footnote-heavy takedown of systemic judicial bias was now delivering Kung Pao chicken to hedge fund managers. The girl who’d believed in systems and their potential for justice now lived above a bar owned by a retired spy and sorted through information that could never see the light of a courtroom. “I didn’t finish,” she said. The words were simple, but they carried the weight of the abandoned flat in Cardiff, the screaming match with Evan that had finally shattered her patience, the frantic phone call to Eva in London. “Life happened.” Ewan’s smile softened into something commiserating. “Ah. Well, these things do. No shame in it. Takes guts to admit when a path isn’t working.” He took his whisky as it arrived, swirling the amber liquid. “So what are you doing now? Still in London?” “I live here,” she said, with a small gesture that encompassed the bar. “Upstairs.” His eyes widened, genuinely surprised. “You work here? For the owner?” He nodded towards the back. “Silas? Quiet bloke, bit of a limp? Seems alright.” “He’s the owner, yeah. I help out.” The lie was smooth, worn thin by repetition. Delivery girl, barmaid, factotum—the official cover story for anyone who asked. Silas’s network ran on shadows and half-truths. “And that’s it? Just… helping out?” The curiosity in Ewan’s voice wasn’t predatory, but it was there, probing. He was looking for the connection, the link between the fiery law student and this dim, quiet bar. “You always said London was where things happened. For you.” Things had happened. Just not the kind you put on a CV. The safehouse in Brussels. The coded messages in library books. The late-night meetings in this very bar’s hidden room, with people whose real names she didn’t know, discussing events that would never be in the papers. She’d traded precedent for pragmatism, the letter of the law for its unwritten edges. “London is what you make it,” she offered, the platitude tasting like ash. Ewan nodded, seeming to accept it. He launched into a recounting of his own life—the training contract, the gruelling hours, the recent purchase of a flat in Clapham, a ski trip to Verbier planned for February. His life was a series of clear, ascending steps. As he spoke, Rory traced the faint, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist with her thumb, a hidden metronome beneath her sleeve. Childhood accident. That was the story. The reality was a shard of glass and a door, a moment of pure, animal fear that had redrawn her entire map. She let his words wash over her, a foreign language of bonuses and property values. She nodded in the right places. She felt a strange, detached pity for him, this man who wore his achievements like his expensive coat, unaware of the invisible currents that swirled just beneath the surface of their world. Unaware of what she saw, who she knew, or what she did in the quiet hours when this bar was closed and the real work began. “You’re quiet,” he observed, his monologue finally winding down. He studied her, his head tilted. “You were always quiet, I suppose. Watchful. But now it’s different. There’s a… stillness.” He swirled his whisky again. “You look tired, Rory.” It was the most perceptive thing he’d said. The fatigue wasn’t just physical. It was the constant, low-grade vigilance, the habit of scanning faces for lies, of listening for the subtext in every sentence. It was the weight of secrets, some of which could get people killed. “It’s been a long week,” she said. He fell silent for a moment, the sounds of the bar swelling to fill the space. “I’m glad I saw you,” he said, finally. “It’s good to see you’re… you’re okay. I worried, after everything. With Evan. Eva told me it was bad.” The name Evan made her jaw tighten, an involuntary clench. Eva had broken the unspoken pact of their friendship by telling him, but Ewan had always been a gossip, even back then. “It’s in the past,” she said, her voice cool and final. “Right. Of course.” He drained his glass. “Look, I’m having some people over next Friday. Drinks. Nothing fancy. You should come. It’d be great to catch up properly, away from… here.” His eyes flicked around the bar, taking in the faded maps, the black-and-white photos of forgotten places, the dim, atmospheric lighting. It was a clear assessment: a place to visit, not to be. The invitation was kind, and it was impossible. The thought of explaining her life to his City friends, of pretending to be the person they would expect her to be, was exhausting. She didn’t belong in their world of straightforward conversations and scheduled lives. She belonged here, in the grey spaces, in the silence between the words. “I don’t think I can,” she said. “But thank you.” He nodded, a flicker of disappointment quickly masked. “No pressure. Just… the offer’s open.” He pulled a sleek business card from his wallet and slid it across the bar. “In case you change your mind. Or if you ever need a lawyer.” He gave that same wide, easy smile. She picked up the card. Ewan Davies. Senior Associate. Hartwell, Finch & Sterling. The title felt like it belonged to a stranger. “Thanks, Ewan.” “It was good to see you, Rory. Really.” He stood, pulling on his perfect raincoat. “Take care of yourself.” “You too.” He left, the bell chiming his exit, the door swinging shut behind him, swallowing him back into the rain-slicked London night. Rory looked down at the business card in her hand, the crisp, embossed letters a testament to a life she had almost lived. She set it down on the bar, next to her half-empty water glass. The bartender came to collect it, her eyes lingering for a second on the card before sweeping it away with the damp coaster. Rory stayed on her stool for a long time after that, staring at the scarred wood of the bar top, feeling the distance between the girl Ewan Davies remembered and the woman who sat here now—a distance measured not in years, but in choices, and doors slammed shut, and the quiet, constant hum of a world hidden in plain sight. The weight of it settled in her bones, a familiar, heavy cloak. She finally stood, leaving a crumpled note on the counter, and headed for the stairs in the back, the ones that led up to her flat, and to another night of waiting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He turned back [back]"
1"His eyes flicked around [around]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.581
leniency1
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.08
87.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1657
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
2"quickly"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1657
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count3
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"potential"
count1
6
word"carried the weight"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"coded"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count1
12
word"flicked"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"flicker"
count1
15
word"perfect"
count1
16
word"testament"
count1
17
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"chill"
2"lilt"
3"familiar"
4"stomach"
5"potential"
6"carried the weight"
7"shattered"
8"coded"
9"traced"
10"scanning"
11"unspoken"
12"flicked"
13"silence"
14"flicker"
15"perfect"
16"testament"
17"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"p with disbelief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences127
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1652
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1358
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity0.59
worstName"Ewan"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Ewan"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Silas3
Cardiff3
Davies4
Ewan8
University1
Rory7
London3
Kung1
Pao1
Evan2
Eva2
Delivery1
Brussels1
Clapham1
Verbier1
February1
City1
Associate1
Finch1
Sterling1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Empress"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Silas"
5"Davies"
6"Ewan"
7"Rory"
8"Evan"
9"Eva"
places
0"Golden"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Brussels"
4"Clapham"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like it belonged to a stranger"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.605
wordCount1652
matches
0"not in years, but in choices"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean44.65
std28.8
cv0.645
sampleLengths
097
1100
219
318
435
591
634
718
851
924
1060
1166
1241
1344
1414
1525
1633
1746
1862
1913
2095
2179
2238
2347
247
2543
2643
2764
2857
2910
3049
3122
322
3319
342
3580
36104
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs213
matches
0"was doing"
1"was looking"
30.37% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences127
ratio0.039
matches
0"The voice was deeper than she remembered, but the cadence, the specific lilt of Cardiff tucked in the vowels—it was unmistakable."
1"He smelled of rain, expensive cologne, and something else—a faint, clean scent of new leather."
2"Delivery girl, barmaid, factotum—the official cover story for anyone who asked."
3"He launched into a recounting of his own life—the training contract, the gruelling hours, the recent purchase of a flat in Clapham, a ski trip to Verbier planned for February."
4"Rory stayed on her stool for a long time after that, staring at the scarred wood of the bar top, feeling the distance between the girl Ewan Davies remembered and the woman who sat here now—a distance measured not in years, but in choices, and doors slammed shut, and the quiet, constant hum of a world hidden in plain sight."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1375
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"scathing, footnote-heavy takedown"
1"faint, crescent-shaped scar"
2"same wide, easy smile."
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.029818181818181817
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.008727272727272728
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean13.01
std9.57
cv0.735
sampleLengths
016
120
220
324
417
515
67
714
815
922
103
1124
1219
1316
142
158
1621
176
1812
192
206
2115
2219
2313
242
251
261
2720
2811
2915
308
3111
325
332
3418
3513
3610
3710
3810
3910
403
411
4211
4326
4423
459
461
4722
4834
495
52.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3700787401574803
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners47
34.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"Just not the kind you"
ratio0.01
11.84% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount51
totalSentences98
matches
0"She kept her head down,"
1"Her shift at the Golden"
2"She slid onto a stool"
3"She just needed a minute,"
4"she said to the bartender,"
5"She turned slowly on her"
6"He stood a few feet"
7"His hair, once a shaggy,"
8"he said, taking a step"
9"He smelled of rain, expensive"
10"She set the glass down."
11"he corrected, but his tone"
12"He took the stool beside"
13"He turned back to Rory"
14"She’d cut it shoulder-length and"
15"He laughed, a short, confident"
16"He shook his head, as"
17"He took his whisky as"
18"she said, with a small"
19"His eyes widened, genuinely surprised."
ratio0.52
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences98
matches
0"The neon sign above The"
1"Rory pushed through the door,"
2"The air inside was thick"
3"She kept her head down,"
4"Her shift at the Golden"
5"She slid onto a stool"
6"The place was doing a"
7"A couple in the corner"
8"Silas was nowhere in sight,"
9"That was fine."
10"She just needed a minute,"
11"she said to the bartender,"
12"Rory froze, the glass halfway"
13"The voice was deeper than"
14"She turned slowly on her"
15"He stood a few feet"
16"The boy she’d shared lecture"
17"His hair, once a shaggy,"
18"The only familiar thing was"
19"he said, taking a step"
ratio0.929
51.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"Or, he had been Ewan"
ratio0.01
14.29% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The only familiar thing was the wide, surprised smile that broke across his face, crinkling the corners of his eyes."
1"The girl who’d written a scathing, footnote-heavy takedown of systemic judicial bias was now delivering Kung Pao chicken to hedge fund managers."
2"The girl who’d believed in systems and their potential for justice now lived above a bar owned by a retired spy and sorted through information that could never …"
3"The words were simple, but they carried the weight of the abandoned flat in Cardiff, the screaming match with Evan that had finally shattered her patience, the …"
4"Delivery girl, barmaid, factotum—the official cover story for anyone who asked."
5"The late-night meetings in this very bar’s hidden room, with people whose real names she didn’t know, discussing events that would never be in the papers."
6"She felt a strange, detached pity for him, this man who wore his achievements like his expensive coat, unaware of the invisible currents that swirled just benea…"
7"The bartender came to collect it, her eyes lingering for a second on the card before sweeping it away with the damp coaster."
8"Rory stayed on her stool for a long time after that, staring at the scarred wood of the bar top, feeling the distance between the girl Ewan Davies remembered an…"
5.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Rory said, her voice coming out flatter than she intended"
1"he corrected, but his tone was warm, not accusatory"
2"He shook, as if amused by the cosmic joke"
3"he observed, his monologue finally winding down"
4"he said, finally"
5"she said, her voice cool and final"
56.98% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he corrected (correct)"
1"He laughed (laugh)"
2"there probing (probe)"
3"he observed (observe)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.326
leniency0.651
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.186
75.3093%