Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ09ZCK09KQH0QKW2PJ6GQFP

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The alley mouth spat her out into a narrow street slick with rain, where Tomás Herrera was already twenty metres ahead, his dark coat flapping like broken wings. He vaulted a low wall separating the pavement from a row of derelict lock-ups. Quinn followed, her polished shoes skidding on the wet brickwork. She vaulted the same wall, landing hard in a puddle that soaked her trousers to the knee. “Metropolitan Police!” Her voice cut through the drumming rain, sharp and authoritative. No response. He just ran faster, glancing over his shoulder. The brief flash of his face showed fear, not surprise. He’d been expecting her. He turned down another alley, this one narrower, the buildings leaning in as if conspiring to swallow him whole. Bins overflowed with sodden cardboard, forcing him to slow, to weave. She closed the distance. Ten metres. His breathing was audible now, ragged and wet. He knew these streets. He’d picked this route. He burst out of the alley’s far end and skidded to a halt, chest heaving. A chain-link fence topped with razor wire blocked the path, its padlock gleaming new. He spun, back to the fence, eyes wide in the gloom. The rain plastered his dark curls to his forehead. He had nowhere left to run. Quinn slowed to a walk, her own breath controlled, even. Her hand rested on the butt of her sidearm, but she didn’t draw it. Not yet. “Tomás Herrera.” Her voice was low, conversational. “You’re under arrest for the assault on Elias Vance. Stop running and we can do this the easy way.” He let out a breathless, bitter laugh. “You think you know what you’re arresting me for, Detective?” “I know what the evidence shows. A paramedic with a grudge and a set of skills.” She took another step. The green glow from a distant sign reflected in the wet ground, painting a sickly light on his face. “What was Vance to you?” “Vance was a monster.” The words were a rasp. “He deserved what he got.” “Is that your professional diagnosis?” His jaw tightened. “You wouldn’t understand.” “Try me.” For a second, it looked like he might. His shoulders slumped, the fight draining out of him. Then his eyes flicked past her, to something in the street behind. His posture changed. He straightened, a new tension in his frame. Quinn didn’t turn. She heard it, too. The soft, deliberate crunch of footsteps on wet asphalt. More than one set. She risked a glance over her shoulder. Three figures stood at the alley mouth they’d just exited. They were motionless, rain dripping from the hoods pulled low over their faces. One was very large, blocking the light. Another held a long, thin shape at his side. A bat. The third was slighter, but stillness was its own kind of threat. They weren’t police. They didn’t look like common street thugs. They looked… organised. “Friends of yours?” she called to Tomás, her voice tight. “If they were, you’d already be dead.” The large figure took a step forward. Then another. The bat tapped a slow, rhythmic beat against his thigh. *Thwack. Thwack. Thwack.* The sound carried over the rain. Quinn drew her service pistol, the metallic click sharp in the alley. She kept it low, pointed at the ground, but her stance shifted, widening, ready. “Metropolitan Police. This is a crime scene. Stay back.” The figure with the bat laughed. It was a wet, gurgling sound. “You’re a long way from your jurisdiction, copper.” Jurisdiction. The word snagged. They weren’t just thugs. They were territorial. Tomás moved. He slammed his shoulder into a rusted service door set into the brick wall beside the fence. It gave with a groan of tortured metal. He stumbled inside, into darkness. “Herrera!” Quinn yelled. She took a half-step after him, then stopped, caught between two dangers. The men behind her were advancing now, not running, but walking with predatory purpose. The man with the bat swung it once, a lazy, threatening arc that cut the air. She backed towards the door Tomás had used. Her gun tracked the approaching men. “Don’t come any closer.” “You’re the one backed into a corner, Detective.” The lead man’s voice was a low rasp. “Maybe you ought to think about finding a different corner.” She was at the door now. She could feel the darkness behind her, smell damp concrete and old rot. It smelled like a place things went to be forgotten. The footsteps accelerated. She had seconds. Quinn holstered her weapon, grabbed the edge of the door, and pulled it shut. She threw her weight against it just as a heavy impact slammed into the other side. The metal frame shuddered. Once. Twice. A third time that left a dent. Then silence. They were talking in low, angry tones on the other side. She was in a concrete stairwell. It led down. The air was colder here, and carried a strange, layered scent—old dust, ozone, and something else. Something like spices and hot metal. At the bottom, a faint green light pulsed. Tomás was nowhere to be seen. She drew her pistol again, flicking on the tactical light mounted beneath the barrel. The beam cut a stark white tunnel through the gloom, illuminating scuffed concrete steps, graffiti that looked more like diagrams than tags. She descended. The air grew thicker, more stagnant with each step. The sounds of the rain and the men above faded, replaced by a low, distant hum, like a million bees in a stone hive. The stairs ended at a wide, arched tunnel. It stretched ahead, the green light coming from neon strips attached to the ceiling at irregular intervals. The walls were lined with stalls, most shuttered behind heavy metal grates. Some were open, revealing cluttered displays of strange, glinting objects. Not antiques. Not junk. Things that seemed to writhe in the dim light. Bottles of inky liquid, bundles of dried herbs that looked vaguely organic, crystals that seemed to suck the light from the air. The tunnel was a market. The Veil Market. She’d heard whispers. Urban legends fed to her by informants who were usually too scared or too high to be reliable. A place where you could buy anything, if you knew the right people and had the right payment. Not always money. The air hummed with a noise that felt like pressure against her eardrums. Figures moved between the stalls, hunched under hoods, speaking in murmurs. No one looked at her. They flowed around the edges of the tunnel, giving her a wide berth, their eyes on the ground. The light from her torch seemed to make them flinch. “Tomás Herrera!” Her voice echoed down the long space. The murmuring stopped. Every hooded head froze. Then, slowly, they turned back to their business, the silence heavier than before. She moved forward, her tactical beam sweeping left and right. A stall to her left sold what looked like antique medical equipment—syringes with multiple needles, leather-bound books held shut with heavy clasps. The vendor, a skeletal figure in a grey robe, slowly pulled a curtain across the display as she passed. Her foot kicked something small and hard. She looked down. A small, intricately carved bone token lay in the dirt, half-buried. She didn’t touch it. Her light caught another set of fresh, wet footprints in the grime, leading deeper into the market. Toward a section where the stalls were wider, more permanent. Where the shadows seemed to cling more thickly. She heard a cough from a darkened doorway. “He went left.” The voice was a dry whisper. “Past the alchemist. Through the curtained arch. You’ll need a token.” Quinn turned. The doorway was empty. A draft of cold air smelling of herbs and decay washed over her. The men from the alley would be searching for a way in. She was alone, in a place that operated by its own laws, laws she didn’t understand. Her gun felt suddenly inadequate, a relic from a different world. Following Tomás meant going deeper, into the heart of this shadowed place. Staying here meant confronting whatever had followed her down, or leaving without the suspect, without answers. Her hand went to her worn leather watch, a nervous habit. The face was cracked. The time was wrong. It had been wrong ever since the night Morris died. She looked at the archway ahead, draped in a heavy, black curtain embroidered with patterns that shimmered when her light hit them. Beyond it, the green glow seemed to intensify. Quinn holstered her pistol. The metal clicked home. She pushed the curtain aside and stepped through.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.182
leniency0.364
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1444
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.67% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1444
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"gleaming"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"stark"
count1
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"whisper"
count1
14
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"gleaming"
1"gloom"
2"flicked"
3"tension"
4"footsteps"
5"rhythmic"
6"could feel"
7"weight"
8"silence"
9"pulsed"
10"stark"
11"glinting"
12"echoed"
13"whisper"
14"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences152
matches(empty)
86.47% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences152
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences165
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1442
ratio0.002
matches
0"Thwack. Thwack. Thwack."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount1303
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Tomás6
Herrera1
Veil1
Market1
Quinn8
Morris1
persons
0"Tomás"
1"Herrera"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
places
0"Market"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"as if conspiring to swallow him whole"
1"looked like he might"
2"smelled like a place things went to be for"
3"Something like spices and hot metal"
4"Things that seemed to writhe in the dim light"
5"crystals that seemed to suck the light from the air"
6"felt like pressure against her eardrums"
7"looked like antique medical equipment—syr"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.693
wordCount1442
matches
0"not running, but walking with predatory purpose"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences165
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean34.33
std20.88
cv0.608
sampleLengths
069
136
252
355
452
517
644
714
85
96
102
1140
1227
1366
1410
157
1628
1735
1820
1911
2032
2145
2218
2326
2435
2556
2639
276
2871
2982
308
3142
3257
3329
3451
3560
3628
3719
3867
3929
4030
4116
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences152
matches
0"were lined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs230
matches
0"were advancing"
1"were talking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences165
ratio0.012
matches
0"The air was colder here, and carried a strange, layered scent—old dust, ozone, and something else."
1"A stall to her left sold what looked like antique medical equipment—syringes with multiple needles, leather-bound books held shut with heavy clasps."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1310
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"faint green light pulsed."
1"open, revealing cluttered displays"
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.03435114503816794
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0061068702290076335
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences165
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences165
mean8.74
std5.61
cv0.642
sampleLengths
028
114
210
317
412
52
68
710
84
919
1011
114
122
138
144
154
1615
1714
1811
199
206
2110
2214
232
247
2519
267
2710
2820
2919
305
319
325
335
343
353
362
378
389
3912
403
418
423
434
449
454
467
4710
4813
497
42.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3090909090909091
totalSentences165
uniqueOpeners51
75.19% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences133
matches
0"Then his eyes flicked past"
1"More than one set."
2"Then, slowly, they turned back"
ratio0.023
33.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount62
totalSentences133
matches
0"He vaulted a low wall"
1"She vaulted the same wall,"
2"Her voice cut through the"
3"He just ran faster, glancing"
4"He’d been expecting her."
5"He turned down another alley,"
6"She closed the distance."
7"His breathing was audible now,"
8"He knew these streets."
9"He’d picked this route."
10"He burst out of the"
11"He spun, back to the"
12"He had nowhere left to"
13"Her hand rested on the"
14"Her voice was low, conversational"
15"He let out a breathless,"
16"She took another step"
17"His jaw tightened."
18"His shoulders slumped, the fight"
19"His posture changed."
ratio0.466
16.39% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount118
totalSentences133
matches
0"The alley mouth spat her"
1"He vaulted a low wall"
2"Quinn followed, her polished shoes"
3"She vaulted the same wall,"
4"Her voice cut through the"
5"He just ran faster, glancing"
6"The brief flash of his"
7"He’d been expecting her."
8"He turned down another alley,"
9"Bins overflowed with sodden cardboard,"
10"She closed the distance."
11"His breathing was audible now,"
12"He knew these streets."
13"He’d picked this route."
14"He burst out of the"
15"A chain-link fence topped with"
16"He spun, back to the"
17"The rain plastered his dark"
18"He had nowhere left to"
19"Quinn slowed to a walk,"
ratio0.887
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
ratio0
94.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He turned down another alley, this one narrower, the buildings leaning in as if conspiring to swallow him whole."
1"The beam cut a stark white tunnel through the gloom, illuminating scuffed concrete steps, graffiti that looked more like diagrams than tags."
2"Urban legends fed to her by informants who were usually too scared or too high to be reliable."
3"She looked at the archway ahead, draped in a heavy, black curtain embroidered with patterns that shimmered when her light hit them."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she called, her voice tight"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.091
leniency0.182
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.091
78.6752%