Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0NKJR4XZ7R8YNBTS9TBT4W

Run Details

Duration:
2m 10s
Cost:
$0.172790
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain had come down sideways all evening, needling the windows of The Raven’s Nest until Soho blurred into a slick of amber lights and black umbrellas. Rory Carter came in through the back door with two empty insulated delivery bags hooked over one shoulder, her fringe pasted to her forehead, the smell of sesame oil and wet pavement clinging to her coat. Silas looked up from polishing a glass. He had that way of looking that made a room feel briefly measured and found wanting. His silver signet ring flashed under the low bar light as he turned the glass in his hand. “Drowned rat,” he said. “Working-class mermaid,” Rory said, peeling off her coat. “Less glamorous, more MSG.” He gave a low hum that might have been amusement. “Yu-Fei feed you?” “Yu-Fei threatened me with soup. I escaped.” “That woman does not threaten. She foretells.” Rory smiled despite herself and hung her coat on the peg behind the bar. The Nest was warm in the particular way of old wood and bodies, heat collected and held. Old maps browned the walls; black-and-white photographs watched from their frames with the fixed patience of the dead. Above the entrance, the green neon sign bled its colour through the rain-streaked glass, painting the floorboards a strange underwater shade. It was late enough that the after-work crowd had thinned, but not late enough for the lonely ones to claim the corners. A couple argued softly near the window. Three men in suits leaned over a table as if money had weight and could be summoned by posture. Someone had left half a lime floating in a gin and tonic, its green skin shining like an eye. Rory ducked behind the bar to stow the delivery bags beneath the counter. Her left sleeve rode up, exposing the crescent scar on her wrist, pale against rain-reddened skin. She tugged the fabric down without thinking. Some habits had begun as self-protection and stayed on as superstition. “You’re upstairs tonight?” Silas asked. “Unless the ceiling’s fallen in.” “It hasn’t. I checked.” “You check my ceiling now?” “I check all my ceilings.” “Former spies and their hobbies.” Silas’s mouth twitched. His limp was worse in weather like this; he had been favouring the left leg all week, though he would have rather eaten the bar towels than admit it. He reached beneath the counter and took out a clean glass. “Whisky?” “Tea.” “That bad?” “That damp.” He poured from the kettle he kept for himself and for lost causes, dropping in a teabag without asking how she took it. After a year living above the bar, Rory found it unsettling how many of her preferences Silas had acquired and filed away. He knew she hated coriander, slept badly after midnight sirens, and kept money in three places because once, years ago, someone had emptied her purse and called her careless. She wrapped both hands around the mug. The heat bit pleasantly into her fingers. Then the front door opened, and a gust of rain and cold air crossed the room. Rory did not look up at first. People came in all night. That was the nature of bars and storms: both invited the unprepared. She watched steam coil from the surface of her tea. She heard the new arrival shake out an umbrella, heard heels tap twice against the floorboards, heard Silas’s voice change by a fraction. “Evening,” he said, polite and neutral. “Hi. God, it’s foul out there.” A woman’s voice. Light, a little breathless. Familiar in the way a half-remembered song was familiar: not the words, not at once, but the ache of its shape. Rory looked up. For a second, she saw a stranger. The woman by the door wore a cream coat belted tight at the waist, the kind of coat that did not forgive public transport. Her hair, once a riot of copper curls, had been cut to the jaw and dyed a clean, expensive brown. Her face was narrower than Rory remembered, sharpened at the cheekbones, lips painted the colour of old wine. She carried herself like someone who had learned how to enter rooms without apologising. Then she turned toward the bar, and the years loosened their grip just enough. Eva. Rory’s hand tightened around the mug. Heat spilled over her knuckle, but she barely felt it. Eva’s eyes moved over Silas, the bottles, the maps, and then landed on Rory. They stopped. The expression that crossed her face was too quick to name. Surprise, yes. Fear, perhaps. Something like guilt, smoothed over almost immediately by a smile Rory had never seen on her before. “Rory?” No one had said her name like that in years. Not the London version, casual and clipped, not the Cardiff version softened by childhood. It found some old door inside her and knocked once. “Eva,” Rory said. Silas glanced between them. He was too practiced to ask a question out loud. “What can I get you?” Eva kept looking at Rory. “I—red wine, please. Whatever’s open.” Silas selected a bottle without comment. Rory set her tea down carefully, as if sudden movements might wake something. Eva crossed to the bar. Up close, the changes multiplied. Fine lines bracketed her mouth. There was a faint shadow beneath the makeup at her jaw, not a bruise, not quite, perhaps only exhaustion. A thin gold band circled her left ring finger. Her nails were immaculate, almond-shaped and pale, nothing like the bitten stubs Rory remembered from school exams and bus stops and nights spent passing a cheap bottle between them in Bute Park. “I didn’t know you worked here,” Eva said. “I live upstairs.” “Here?” “Above here. Not on the pool table.” Eva laughed, a second late. “Right. Of course.” Silas placed the wine before her. “On the house,” he said. Rory shot him a look. He ignored it with the bland serenity of a man who had survived governments. “I’ll be in the back if needed.” He moved away, his limp discreet but visible, and disappeared toward the bookshelf that hid the room most customers never noticed. Eva watched him go. “Your boss?” “Landlord. Friend. Occasional nuisance.” “He looks like he knows where bodies are buried.” “He’d say that’s vulgar. He knows where records are misfiled.” This time Eva’s laugh was real enough to hurt. It had the same bright crack in it, the same lift. Rory felt the years between them compress and then spring back, leaving them on opposite sides of the bar with their hands full of things they didn’t know how to put down. “You look…” Eva began. Rory braced herself. Better. Tired. Different. Alive. Eva touched the stem of her glass. “You look like yourself.” It was such an unexpected mercy that Rory had to look away. Eva had once known every version of her: Rory with grazed knees and jam on her school jumper; Rory at sixteen, furious and clever, arguing with teachers because rules were easier to fight than grief; Rory at university in Cardiff, buried under Pre-Law textbooks she had no desire to read, trying to become the kind of daughter who did not worry her parents. Eva had known the early Evan too, the charming one, the one who brought flowers to the pub and called Rory “brilliant” as though he’d discovered her. Eva had also known the later Evan, or enough of him. Enough to say, over the phone one wet Tuesday, Pack a bag. Come to London. Don’t tell him until you’re gone. And Rory had gone. For a while, Eva had been there. She had given Rory a sofa, clean sheets, a spare toothbrush. She had taken the first frightening days and divided them into instructions: eat this, sleep now, block his number, breathe. Then Eva’s new job had thickened around her. Meetings. Weekends away. Friends with glass offices and surnames Rory forgot. Rory had found work at the Golden Empress, then the room above the Nest. Calls became texts. Texts became heart emojis under photographs. Then even those had thinned into birthdays remembered by the machinery of social media. Three years, Rory thought. No, nearly four. Time was a thief, but sometimes people handed it the keys. “What are you doing in Soho?” Rory asked. “Work thing.” Eva lifted the wine but didn’t drink. “Client dinner near Dean Street. I left early.” “You? Leaving a client dinner early? Are you ill?” Eva smiled. “I’ve become very rude.” “You used to be pathologically polite. You once apologised to a lamppost.” “It hit me first.” “You walked into it.” “Details.” There it was again: the old rhythm, easy as a borrowed coat. Rory wanted to slip into it. She wanted it badly enough that caution rose in her like a hand. Eva’s gaze dropped to Rory’s wrist. The sleeve had shifted again, the crescent scar visible in the bar light. “You still have that,” Eva said softly. “Most scars are stubborn.” “I remember when you did it. Your mum was so angry with your dad for leaving that broken mug in the sink.” “He said it was an object lesson in paying attention.” “He was such a barrister.” “He still is.” “And your mum?” “Still teaching. Still pretending she doesn’t know Dad eats biscuits before dinner.” Eva’s face warmed. “I miss your house.” Rory did not say, You could have visited. She did not say, You vanished so completely my mother stopped asking after you. Instead she took a cloth and wiped a clean patch of counter that did not need wiping. “How are they?” Eva asked. “Older. Same as everyone.” “And you?” Rory looked at her. “Older. Same as everyone.” Eva accepted that with a small nod, as if she deserved no more. The couple by the window left, bringing another slice of wet air with them. Rory went to collect their glasses, grateful for the task. On the way back, she felt Eva’s eyes following her—not appraising, not exactly, but searching. Rory wondered what she saw. A woman of twenty-five in black jeans and a faded jumper, hair cut blunt to the shoulders, eyes too bright when she was tired. A delivery girl, bar back, tenant. Someone who had once been on track to become a lawyer and now knew the best alleys for avoiding traffic between Soho and Covent Garden. When Rory returned, Eva had finally drunk some wine. “I’m married,” Eva said. “I saw the ring.” “Six months.” “Congratulations.” “Thank you.” The words stood between them in their formal clothes. “What’s his name?” Rory asked. “Martin.” “Does Martin have a surname, or is he like Madonna?” Eva’s mouth twitched. “Kendall. He’s in finance.” “Course he is.” “That sounded very judgemental.” “It was. I’m broadening my range.” “He’s kind,” Eva said quickly. Too quickly. “Steady. Very decent.” Rory heard the defence in it and hated herself for hearing. Once, Eva would have mocked herself first, sparing everyone else the trouble. Now she arranged sentences like furniture, blocking access to the untidy rooms behind them. “I’m glad,” Rory said, and meant it as far as she could. Eva turned the glass by its stem. “We bought a place in Battersea. New build. There’s a concierge who looks about twelve and always says ‘perfect’ no matter what you ask him. The lift smells like fresh plaster. Everything’s white. Martin loves it.” “And you?” Eva looked toward the maps on the wall, the old photographs, the dark varnished bar scarred by years of elbows and coins. “I’m learning to.” Rory leaned back against the shelves. Bottles pressed cool against her shoulder blades. “You hated new builds.” “I hated a lot of things on principle.” “You hated beige.” “I still hate beige. We call it oatmeal now.” Rory laughed, and for a moment Eva’s face loosened, showing the girl underneath—the one who had danced barefoot in Rory’s kitchen while Jennifer Carter shouted that the neighbours would think they’d raised wolves. Then the looseness closed. “I thought about calling,” Eva said. The rain ticked against the windows. Somewhere behind the bookshelf, a pipe groaned. Rory kept her voice even. “When?” “Lots of times.” “That’s not when.” Eva flinched. Not dramatically. Just the smallest tightening around the eyes. Rory had not meant to strike, but there it was: the mark. “After,” Eva said. The word needed no companion. After Evan. After the sofa. After the weeks when Rory woke at every footstep in the corridor. After Eva had returned one evening with a work friend named Tamsin and two bottles of prosecco, and Rory had understood, sitting in borrowed pyjamas, that her emergency had become inconvenient. “You did call,” Rory said. “For a bit.” “I know.” “Then you stopped.” Eva looked down. “Yes.” Rory waited. She had learned from Silas that silence was not empty; it was a room people furnished with the truth if you let them stand in it long enough. “I didn’t know how to be around you,” Eva said. Her voice had lost its polish. “That sounds awful.” “It’s honest.” “You were so… I don’t know. Not broken. I hated when people said that. But far away. And I was useless. Everything I said felt either too much or not enough. I’d go to ring you and think, what if she’s having a good day and I drag her back? Or what if she’s having a terrible day and I can’t help? Then I’d wait. And the waiting became its own thing.” Rory stared at the bar top. Its surface was scored with fine scratches, each one catching the light. “I needed you,” she said. Eva shut her eyes. It was not a dramatic confession. It came out flat, almost plain. That made it worse. Rory had spent years making reasonable allowances. Eva had been young. Eva had a life. Eva had already done more than most. Eva had saved her, in the practical sense: the train ticket, the sofa, the insistence. Gratitude could be a gag if you tied it tight enough. “I know,” Eva whispered. “No, you don’t. You know it as an idea. You don’t know what it was like to sit upstairs in that first bedsit and count the cracks in the ceiling because if I slept I might dream he’d found me. You don’t know what it was like when my phone lit up and it wasn’t you, and I hated myself for caring because you’d already given me more than I had any right to ask.” Eva’s eyes shone. “Rory—” “I’m not saying this to punish you.” “Aren’t you?” The question cut cleanly. Rory’s first instinct was anger, bright and useful. Then it faltered. She looked at Eva—really looked—and saw that Eva was trembling, one hand flat on the bar, ring gleaming under the green wash of neon. Not the poised woman in the cream coat. Not the girl from Cardiff. Someone caught between. “I don’t know,” Rory said. “Maybe a little.” Eva nodded as if that, too, was deserved. A man at the far end of the bar raised two fingers for another pint. Rory turned to serve him. The motions steadied her: glass angled, tap pulled, foam watched and corrected. Ordinary work had saved her more often than advice. Work did not ask who you had been. When she returned, Eva had taken off her wedding ring. It lay on the bar beside the wine glass, a small gold circle under the low light. Rory looked at it, then at her. “I’m not having an affair,” Eva said, with a breath that was almost a laugh. “That’s what people usually mean when they do dramatic things with rings, isn’t it?” “What are you doing?” “My finger swelled in the rain.” She smiled without conviction. “No. That’s not true.” Rory waited. Eva touched the ring but did not put it back on. “Martin is kind. I said that already. He is. He’s never cruel. He doesn’t shout. He doesn’t scare me. That should be enough, shouldn’t it?” Rory felt the old reflex, the trained caution around other people’s homes. “Enough for what?” “For gratitude to become love.” Eva’s mouth twisted. “Listen to me. I sound like one of those women we used to make fun of in cafés. ‘My husband is decent but I’m spiritually undernourished.’” “We were horrible.” “We were eighteen.” “Same thing.” Eva let out a breath. “I married him because I was tired of being the person who could leave. Does that make sense?” More than Rory wanted it to. “Yes.” “You left Evan and it was brave. Everyone said so. I said so. But after you came to London, I kept looking at my own life and thinking, if Rory can blow hers apart to survive, what excuse do I have for staying anywhere I don’t want to be? Jobs, flats, men, friendships. Everything felt provisional. I hated it. I wanted one door to close and stay closed.” “So you got married.” “So I got married.” Eva pressed her thumb into the pale mark the ring had left. “And then tonight I was sitting at dinner while Martin explained mortgage rates to a man with no chin, and I thought, I have become a room with no windows.” Rory could not help it. “Bit harsh on Martin.” Eva laughed, wetly. “It’s not his fault. That’s the worst part. There’s no villain. Just choices. Mine.” The bookshelf at the back opened a few inches. Silas emerged, took in the scene with one sweep of his hazel eyes—the ring, Eva’s face, Rory’s stillness—and retreated toward the other end of the bar without a word. His discretion had edges; it protected by cutting away the unnecessary. Rory picked up her tea. It had gone lukewarm. She drank it anyway. “I used to be jealous of you,” Eva said. Rory nearly choked. “Of me?” “Of how certain you were, even when you were miserable. You hated law, but you had language for the hate. You loved things loudly. You fought. I was always arranging myself around people, trying to be easy to keep.” “I was not easy to keep.” “No,” Eva said. “You weren’t. That was part of it.” The words landed softly, then sank. Rory thought of Cardiff rain on school blazers, Eva’s hand gripping hers as they ran for the bus. She thought of the night she left Evan, suitcase wheels catching on the pavement, Eva’s voice in her ear through cheap headphones: Don’t look back, Rory. Just get on the train. She thought of all the months after, when looking back was all she did. “You could have told me you were scared,” Rory said. Eva looked at her. “Would you have had room for it?” Rory opened her mouth, then closed it. The honest answer was cruel to them both. “Maybe not,” she said. Eva nodded. “I’m sorry I left you alone with it.” Rory stared at the ring. There were apologies that tried to purchase absolution cheaply, and apologies that simply sat down beside the damage and did not look away. This one felt like the latter. It did not fix anything. That was how she knew it was real. “I’m sorry I made you a test of whether people stay,” Rory said. Eva’s eyes filled properly then. She wiped beneath one quickly, careful of the makeup. “God. We’re very grown-up and tragic.” “We’re in a Soho bar discussing abandonment over mid-range wine. It’s practically a rite of passage.” “Is the wine mid-range?” “Generous description.” Eva laughed again, and this time Rory did too. The laughter did not erase the ache. It moved through it, like light through dirty glass. For a while they said nothing. Rory served another customer. Eva put her ring back on, not with ceremony but with a tired little push over the knuckle. Outside, the rain softened. The neon sign hummed above the door, green and insistent. “Do you like it here?” Eva asked. Rory followed her gaze around the Nest: the maps, the photographs, Silas leaning at the far end of the bar pretending not to watch, the dark corners where secrets sat with their drinks. Above them, her small flat waited with its sloped ceiling and temperamental radiator. It was not what she had imagined at twenty. It was not what Brendan Carter had imagined when his daughter enrolled in Pre-Law. It was, however, hers. “Yes,” she said. “I do.” Eva smiled. “Good.” “What about you? Battersea and oatmeal walls?” “I don’t know.” Eva looked embarrassed by the uncertainty, as if at thirty—no, not thirty yet, Rory corrected automatically; they were still absurdly young in every way that mattered—she should have outgrown not knowing. “I think I need to find out what I like when no one is grading me on it.” “That sounds inconvenient.” “I know. I was hoping to avoid it.” “Never works.” “No.” Eva’s gaze returned to Rory. “Could we… I don’t want to do the thing where we promise to meet and then don’t. But could we maybe have coffee? Properly. Not tonight. Not as a grand reconciliation with strings and violins. Just coffee.” Rory felt the old door inside her again. This time it did not knock. It stood ajar, and beyond it lay no guarantee at all. She could say yes and be disappointed. She could say no and be safe in the narrowest way. She had built a life from narrow safeties at first, then widened it inch by inch: a job, a room, a bar where the owner checked ceilings and kept tea, streets she knew by their back routes and smells. Perhaps friendship was another street. Perhaps you did not have to know where it led before you turned onto it. “Coffee,” she said. “No strings. No violins.” Eva exhaled. “Okay.” “But if you cancel, don’t invent a client emergency. Just say you panicked or forgot or decided you’d rather reorganise your oatmeal cupboards.” “I don’t have oatmeal cupboards.” “You absolutely do.” “I might,” Eva admitted. Rory took a napkin from beneath the bar and slid it over with a pen. “Number.” “You haven’t changed yours?” “I changed everything.” Eva’s face flickered. “Right.” Rory softened. “Write yours.” Eva did. Her handwriting had changed too—smaller, more controlled—but the E still looped extravagantly, refusing discipline. Rory looked at it and felt a foolish tenderness. The door opened again. A group tumbled in, loud and wet, bringing the night with them. Silas straightened, the publican returning to the front of his face. Rory folded the napkin once and tucked it into her back pocket. Eva drained the last of her wine. “I should go before I turn into a pumpkin.” “You were always more likely to turn into a lecture.” “True.” She belted her cream coat, then hesitated. “Can I hug you?” There had been a time when Eva would not have asked. There had been a time when Rory would not have needed her to. The question was its own measure of what had happened and what remained. Rory came around from behind the bar. They stood awkwardly for half a second, two women trying to negotiate the ghosts of girls. Then Eva stepped in, and Rory let herself be held. Eva smelled of rain, expensive perfume, and underneath it, faintly, the same citrus shampoo she had used at seventeen. Rory’s throat tightened with such sudden force that she had to stare over Eva’s shoulder at a black-and-white photograph of Piccadilly in 1962 until the feeling passed. “I’m glad you’re alive,” Eva whispered. Rory closed her eyes. There were things one said lightly because the alternative was unbearable. This was not one of them. “Me too,” she said. Eva let go first. Her face was composed again, but imperfectly. Rory liked it better that way. At the door, Eva looked back once. Green neon traced the edge of her cheek, making her seem briefly younger, or perhaps only less finished. Then she opened her umbrella and stepped into the wet London night. Rory watched through the glass until the cream coat dissolved among black ones, swallowed by rain and distance and the city’s restless shine. Silas appeared beside her, moving quietly despite the limp. “Old friend?” Rory kept her hand in her back pocket, fingers pressed to the folded napkin. “Yes.” He nodded. “The old ones are troublesome.” “You’d know.” “I know many troublesome things.” Outside, the rain thinned to mist. Inside, someone called for another round. Rory turned back to the bar, to the work waiting under the warm lights, carrying the weight of the encounter not as a wound exactly, and not as a cure, but as something newly named. Time had not returned anything to her. It never did. But it had set one small, battered thing back on the counter between them, and for tonight, that was enough.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags43
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva said softly [softly]"
1"Eva said quickly [quickly]"
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.047
effectiveRatio0.023
83.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount4154
totalAiIsmAdverbs14
found
0
adverb"softly"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count4
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count3
5
adverb"really"
count1
6
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"carefully"
2"very"
3"completely"
4"quickly"
5"really"
6"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount4154
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"desire"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"gleaming"
count1
7
word"absolutely"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"tenderness"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"encounter"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"weight"
2"familiar"
3"desire"
4"perfect"
5"silence"
6"gleaming"
7"absolutely"
8"flickered"
9"tenderness"
10"traced"
11"encounter"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences311
matches
0"looked embarrassed"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences311
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences440
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen76
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords4144
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions45
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions219
wordCount3004
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity2.86
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest4
Soho2
Carter3
Rory86
Silas14
London3
Cardiff4
Bute1
Park1
Eva80
Pre-Law2
Evan4
Tuesday1
Pack1
Golden1
Empress1
You2
Covent1
Garden1
Jennifer1
Tamsin1
Don2
Brendan1
Piccadilly1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
5"Evan"
6"You"
7"Jennifer"
8"Brendan"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
3"Bute"
4"Park"
5"Golden"
6"Covent"
7"Garden"
globalScore0.069
windowScore0
98.72% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences195
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"Something like guilt, smoothed over almost i"
1"not quite perhaps only exhaustion"
2"felt like the latter"
3"appeared beside her, moving quietly despite the limp"
31.08% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords1.689
wordCount4144
matches
0"not the words, not at once, but the ache of its shape"
1"not at once, but the ache of its shape"
2"not appraising, not exactly, but searching"
3"not exactly, but searching"
4"not with ceremony but with a tired little push over the knuckle"
5"not as a wound exactly, and not as a cure, but as something newly named"
6"not as a cure, but as something newly named"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences440
matches
0"had that way"
1"shouted that the"
2"saw that Eva"
3"better that way"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs226
mean18.34
std21.91
cv1.195
sampleLengths
063
141
24
312
413
57
67
770
867
947
105
115
124
135
145
155
1644
171
182
192
2074
2114
2216
2357
246
256
2628
273
287
2976
3014
311
3216
3348
341
3534
363
3719
3810
3919
4075
418
423
431
447
458
4611
475
4842
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences311
matches
0"gone"
1"was scored"
2"was deserved"
3"was composed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs550
matches(empty)
71.43% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences440
ratio0.025
matches
0"Old maps browned the walls; black-and-white photographs watched from their frames with the fixed patience of the dead."
1"His limp was worse in weather like this; he had been favouring the left leg all week, though he would have rather eaten the bar towels than admit it."
2"Eva had once known every version of her: Rory with grazed knees and jam on her school jumper; Rory at sixteen, furious and clever, arguing with teachers because rules were easier to fight than grief; Rory at university in Cardiff, buried under Pre-Law textbooks she had no desire to read, trying to become the kind of daughter who did not worry her parents."
3"On the way back, she felt Eva’s eyes following her—not appraising, not exactly, but searching."
4"Rory laughed, and for a moment Eva’s face loosened, showing the girl underneath—the one who had danced barefoot in Rory’s kitchen while Jennifer Carter shouted that the neighbours would think they’d raised wolves."
5"She had learned from Silas that silence was not empty; it was a room people furnished with the truth if you let them stand in it long enough."
6"She looked at Eva—really looked—and saw that Eva was trembling, one hand flat on the bar, ring gleaming under the green wash of neon."
7"Silas emerged, took in the scene with one sweep of his hazel eyes—the ring, Eva’s face, Rory’s stillness—and retreated toward the other end of the bar without a word."
8"His discretion had edges; it protected by cutting away the unnecessary."
9"“I don’t know.” Eva looked embarrassed by the uncertainty, as if at thirty—no, not thirty yet, Rory corrected automatically; they were still absurdly young in every way that mattered—she should have outgrown not knowing."
10"Her handwriting had changed too—smaller, more controlled—but the E still looped extravagantly, refusing discipline."
93.16% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3027
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"against rain-reddened skin."
adverbCount124
adverbRatio0.04096465147010241
lyAdverbCount41
lyAdverbRatio0.013544763792533861
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences440
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences440
mean9.42
std9.5
cv1.009
sampleLengths
027
136
27
316
418
54
68
74
810
93
107
117
1214
1317
1418
1521
1622
177
1819
1919
2013
2116
227
2311
245
255
264
275
285
295
303
3129
3211
331
341
352
362
3723
3822
3929
407
417
4216
437
445
4512
4610
4723
486
496
42.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats31
diversityRatio0.2818181818181818
totalSentences440
uniqueOpeners124
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount16
totalSentences260
matches
0"Then the front door opened,"
1"Then she turned toward the"
2"Then Eva’s new job had"
3"Then even those had thinned"
4"Instead she took a cloth"
5"Once, Eva would have mocked"
6"Then the looseness closed."
7"Somewhere behind the bookshelf, a"
8"Just the smallest tightening around"
9"Then it faltered."
10"More than Rory wanted it"
11"Just get on the train."
12"Perhaps friendship was another street."
13"Perhaps you did not have"
14"Then Eva stepped in, and"
15"Then she opened her umbrella"
ratio0.062
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount56
totalSentences260
matches
0"He had that way of"
1"His silver signet ring flashed"
2"He gave a low hum"
3"It was late enough that"
4"Her left sleeve rode up,"
5"She tugged the fabric down"
6"His limp was worse in"
7"He reached beneath the counter"
8"He poured from the kettle"
9"He knew she hated coriander,"
10"She wrapped both hands around"
11"She watched steam coil from"
12"She heard the new arrival"
13"he said, polite and neutral"
14"Her hair, once a riot"
15"Her face was narrower than"
16"She carried herself like someone"
17"It found some old door"
18"He was too practiced to"
19"Her nails were immaculate, almond-shaped"
ratio0.215
67.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount204
totalSentences260
matches
0"The rain had come down"
1"Rory Carter came in through"
2"Silas looked up from polishing"
3"He had that way of"
4"His silver signet ring flashed"
5"Rory said, peeling off her"
6"He gave a low hum"
7"Rory smiled despite herself and"
8"The Nest was warm in"
9"It was late enough that"
10"A couple argued softly near"
11"Someone had left half a"
12"Rory ducked behind the bar"
13"Her left sleeve rode up,"
14"She tugged the fabric down"
15"Some habits had begun as"
16"Silas’s mouth twitched."
17"His limp was worse in"
18"He reached beneath the counter"
19"He poured from the kettle"
ratio0.785
19.23% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences260
matches
0"Now she arranged sentences like"
ratio0.004
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences117
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Rory set her tea down carefully, as if sudden movements might wake something."
1"Eva had once known every version of her: Rory with grazed knees and jam on her school jumper; Rory at sixteen, furious and clever, arguing with teachers because…"
2"On the way back, she felt Eva’s eyes following her—not appraising, not exactly, but searching."
3"There were apologies that tried to purchase absolution cheaply, and apologies that simply sat down beside the damage and did not look away."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags43
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva looked, as if at thirty—no, not thirty yet, Rory corrected automatically; they were still absurdly young in every way that mattered—she should have outgrown not knowing"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags34
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Eva pressed (press)"
2"Eva admitted (admit)"
3"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.198
leniency0.395
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.047
86.3520%