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Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0NPEH5JTZETS40T57VS3YC
Run Details
Model:
GPT-5.5 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.091640
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
75.19%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
58.33%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
53.96%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
40.40%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
25.13%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
91.7667%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
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Detective Harlow Quinn hit the
bonnet hard enough to dent it, rolled across wet metal, and came off with her warrant card still clenched between her teeth.
The minicab driver screamed something
through the windscreen.
Quinn spat the card into
her palm, landed on one knee, and saw the suspect vanish round the corner past a shuttered chemist. “Police,”
she snapped, though no one
in the street looked keen to help. “Move.”
A man in a puffer
jacket stepped the wrong way.
Quinn drove her shoulder into
him, caught the sour stink of lager on his breath, and kept running.
Her shoes slapped through oily
puddles. Blue light
flickered
somewhere behind her, cut into pieces by passing buses and black railings.
The suspect had a name
on paper, Elias Voss, but names meant little after what Quinn had seen him do in the alley behind The Raven’s Nest.
Men did not climb brickwork
with their fingers bent backwards.
Men did not leave black
handprints steaming on stone.
Men did not whisper into
a dead rat’s mouth and make it point north.
Quinn touched the radio clipped
inside her coat. “Quinn to control. Suspect eastbound from Greek Street, male, late thirties, grey coat, injured left leg. I’m in pursuit.”
Static answered first, then a
young voice too calm for the mess. “Received. Units en route. Maintain visual, Detective.” “Tell them not to maintain anything. Tell them to block Charing Cross Road.”
She skidded round the corner
and almost lost him.
The green neon sign above
The Raven’s Nest buzzed behind her, staining the rain-slick pavement the colour of old absinthe.
The bar’s black door hung
open, spilling heat, gin fumes, and the low thump of a bassline into Soho’s narrow throat. Old maps and black-and-white photographs lined the walls inside, glimpsed between bodies that had frozen mid-drink when Voss bolted through them. Silas’ bar.
That was how the informant
had described it.
A place where cops got
bad looks and worse drinks.
Quinn had gone in alone
because the file had begun to rot in her hands. Missing persons. Unlicensed surgeries. Cash transfers through dead accounts.
Her old partner’s name written
in pencil on the back of a photograph taken three months after his funeral. DS Morris. Smiling. Alive. Or something that wore him well enough to fool a camera. Voss had sat in the back beneath a map of plague pits, nursing a glass of milk. When Quinn showed the photo, he had stopped breathing. Then the lights blew.
Now he crashed into a
bin outside a late-night noodle shop, rolled, and came up with his grey coat torn at the sleeve. Thin blood marked his left wrist. Too dark.
Almost purple under the shop’s
red sign. “Elias Voss.” He looked back.
His face had changed since
the bar. Not much. Enough. The skin around his eyes had pulled tight, and his mouth looked packed with needles. “Detective Quinn, go home.” “Funny thing. People keep suggesting that.” “You don’t know what you’re chasing.” Quinn lifted her baton and walked towards him with military precision, each step placed, shoulders square, breath controlled.
Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair
clung to her skull. Rain tracked down the sharp line of her jaw and into her collar. “I know you ran.” Voss’s gaze dropped to the worn leather
watch
on her left wrist. His expression
flickered
. Quinn saw it. Filed it. “What?” “Ask Morris.” The name cut through traffic noise, drunk laughter, sirens. Quinn crossed the last few feet faster than his injured leg could handle. Voss flung something at the ground.
It cracked like a tooth
between them. White smoke burst up, bitter with bone ash and vinegar. Quinn covered her mouth with her sleeve and surged through it blind. Her fingers brushed wet wool. Voss twisted away, but she caught his collar and drove him into the noodle shop window. Glass bowed. A woman inside shrieked over a steaming bowl. Voss reached back, grabbed Quinn’s left wrist, and pressed two fingers against the face of her
watch
. The hands spun. Not tick-tock. Whirr. Whirr. Whirr. Quinn’s
stomach
lurched
. The street stretched long, then snapped short. For one second she stood in another place, a hospital corridor with no doors, where DS Morris pounded on the inside of a vending machine and mouthed her name through the glass.
Then she was back in
Soho with Voss’s elbow smashing into her cheek. Pain flashed white. Her grip broke. He ran. Quinn staggered, tasted blood, and spat it onto the pavement. “Control.” Nothing. She slapped the radio. “Control, respond.” Static hissed, then a low voice breathed through the speaker. “Wrong line, Detective.” Quinn ripped the radio from her coat and threw it into a gutter.
It sparked once and died
under a tyre. Voss crossed Shaftesbury Avenue against traffic. A cyclist clipped his hip and went down swearing. Horns blasted. Quinn chased him through the gap between a taxi and a night bus, close enough to feel engine heat on her thighs. A memory intruded, unwelcome and sharp. Morris three years ago, stepping into a derelict chapel in Wapping. Morris laughing at her for checking corners like they were in Basra. Morris screaming once, not in fear, in surprise.
Then blood on her hands
and a report no one believed once the body disappeared from the morgue.
She crushed the memory under
her next
footfall
. Voss ducked into an alley between a betting shop and a closed bakery. Quinn followed, baton low. The alley narrowed, slick brick on both sides, old fat and yeast trapped in the mortar. A fire escape zigzagged overhead. A fox watched from beside an overflowing skip, its eyes bright as coins. At the far end, Voss shoved through a rusted service gate and limped into a small yard packed with delivery crates. Quinn entered slower. No exits. Voss stood by a brick wall painted with a faded advert for stout.
He pressed one palm to
the brick, leaving a dark print.
His other hand searched inside
his coat. “Hands where I can see them.” He laughed.
It had no humour in
it. A dry, papery sound. “Still using lines for men.” Quinn raised the baton. “I’ve used this on all sorts.” Voss brought out a small object on a string. A token. Pale, rounded, drilled through the centre. Bone, unless Quinn’s eyes lied.
He pushed it into a
crack in the wall. Brick moved. Not opened. Moved. Individual blocks sank back, slid aside, folded into the dark with the smooth care of a throat swallowing. Cool air breathed out from beyond. It smelled of iron rails, wet stone, old incense, and too many bodies packed underground. Voss stepped through. Quinn reached the opening as the bricks
began to
close.
She had half a second
to choose between the known city behind her and whatever waited below it. Her
watch
burned cold against her skin. Ask Morris. Quinn shoved her baton between the closing bricks. Metal shrieked. The wall hesitated. She turned sideways and forced herself through the gap, coat snagging, ribs scraping brick. For a moment the wall held her like a fist. She exhaled, twisted, and dropped hard onto stairs. The baton snapped behind her. The wall sealed. Darkness swallowed the yard, the rain, the sirens, the normal rules. Quinn pushed to her feet. Her left cheek
throbbed
. Her palm stung where brick had torn the skin. She drew her collapsible torch from inside her coat and clicked it on. The beam cut down a long tiled stairwell. Old Underground signs lined the walls, their lettering half scraped away. Posters for dead shows peeled in strips. Someone had painted symbols over the station name in black tar. The steps descended towards a dull red glow and a murmur that swelled and dipped like a crowd at prayer. Voss’s wet footprints marked the dust. Quinn followed. Every few steps, the city changed. The hum of traffic thinned. The air grew warmer, despite the depth. She passed an old ticket booth sealed with brass mesh. Behind it, dozens of moths beat themselves against the glass from inside, though no light burned there. A sign read TO TRAINS in cracked cream tiles. Someone had crossed it out and written TO TERMS beneath it. Her phone showed no signal. The screen glitched when she opened the camera, filling with a close-up of a man’s open mouth. She put it away. Ahead, voices sharpened. “Two measures of
grave
salt, no refunds.” “Fresh glamour, West End quality. Don’t sniff it unless you’ve paid.” “Rat king prophecy, half price if you bring your own rat.” Quinn reached the bottom step and stopped behind a row of dented lockers. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden had not stayed abandoned. Stalls crowded the old platforms and spilled over the tracks, patched together from
velvet
curtains, train doors, butcher hooks, church pews, and polished mahogany counters. Lanterns burned with blue flame inside jam jars. Cages hung from signal posts, some holding birds, some holding hands that crawled finger over finger round the bars. People moved through the crush in coats, cloaks, hospital scrubs, evening gowns, and things stitched from skins no animal had owned. The Veil Market. She had heard the name once from a heroin addict with silver teeth who begged her not to write it down. A black market for the things London pretended not to know. It moved every full moon, he had said. You needed a bone token to enter, or an invitation from something that enjoyed debt. Quinn
scanned
the crowd. Voss shoved past a stall selling tiny glass coffins. His limp had worsened, but the market bent around him. Stallholders saw his face and found other work to do. Quinn stepped out from the lockers. Three heads turned. Then ten. Then too many. A tall woman with a shaved head and golden eyes smiled from behind a table of bottled whispers. “Lost, love?” Quinn held up her warrant card. The woman’s smile widened. “Oh, that’s adorable.” A ripple moved through the nearest stalls. Laughter, soft and hungry. Someone clicked claws against a teacup. A child with an old man’s face sniffed the air and pointed at Quinn’s
watch
. “Police,” Quinn said. “Move aside.” No one moved. A broad man in a butcher’s apron blocked the platform edge. His apron looked fresh. His hands did not. “Market law says no Crown business below the tiles.” “Then market law can file a complaint.” “Sharp tongue.” “Sharp everything.” He leaned closer. His breath smelled of cloves and spoiled meat. “Humans come down here with guides, debts, or body bags. Which one are you carrying?” Quinn drew her second baton from the inside sleeve holster. Morris had called it paranoid. Morris had also died first. The butcher’s eyes dipped to it. “Little stick.” “Little skull.” His smile faded. Behind him, Voss reached the far end of the platform. An old service tunnel waited there, chained and marked with red wax seals. He cut his palm with a thumbnail and smeared blood across the wax. The seals
began to
smoke. Quinn moved. The butcher lunged. She struck his wrist, stepped inside his reach, and slammed the heel of her hand under his chin. Bone clicked. He reeled into the bottled whispers stall. Glass burst. Released voices flooded the air. Don’t marry him. The river keeps what it’s owed. Morris isn’t dead. Quinn’s stride faltered. The market noticed. A small grey thing with too many elbows dropped from the roof and landed on her back. Its fingers clawed for her eyes. She grabbed one wrist, felt three joints bend the wrong way, and threw herself backwards against a pillar. The thing squealed. Tiles cracked. She did it again. It fell away, twitching. Voss pulled the chain from the tunnel door. “Quinn.” His voice carried despite the chaos. He stood framed by the service tunnel, face slick with rain and sweat, his hand black to the wrist. “You cross this line, your badge won’t matter. Your name won’t matter. He won’t thank you for finding him.” Quinn pushed through a knot of shoppers. A woman in a fox-fur stole hissed as Quinn clipped her shoulder. A stall collapsed under someone’s panicked shove, spilling charms, teeth, and small brass bells that rang without being touched. “Where is Morris?” Voss backed into the tunnel. “Still bargaining.” “With who?” The market went quiet. Not silent. Quiet in the way a ward went quiet before a patient
coded
. Breath held. Eyes lowered.
Even the hanging hands stopped
crawling. A new sound came from the service tunnel. Tap. Tap. Tap. A walking stick, or a cane, or a bone striking concrete. Voss’s face emptied of colour. Quinn stopped ten feet from him. The darkness behind Voss thickened. It gathered shape without accepting the torchlight. Tall. Narrow. Patient. A smell rolled out ahead of it, cold ash, surgical spirit, and river mud. The worn leather
watch
on Quinn’s left wrist stopped dead.
Then DS Morris stepped out
of the tunnel wearing the suit they had buried him in, and smiled with someone else’s mouth. “Harlow,” he said. “You took your time.” Voss dropped to his knees. The thing inside Morris lifted one pale hand, and every lantern in the Veil Market went black.
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4/24/2026, 9:17:54 PM
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native_tokens_completion
2942
native_tokens_completion_images
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native_tokens_reasoning
59
native_tokens_cached
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234
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"OpenAI"
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
3
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
39
tagDensity
0.077
leniency
0.154
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2217
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
75.19%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2217
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
2
1
word
"whisper"
count
1
2
word
"stomach"
count
1
3
word
"lurched"
count
1
4
word
"footfall"
count
1
5
word
"throbbed"
count
1
6
word
"grave"
count
1
7
word
"velvet"
count
1
8
word
"scanned"
count
1
9
word
"coded"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"whisper"
2
"stomach"
3
"lurched"
4
"footfall"
5
"throbbed"
6
"grave"
7
"velvet"
8
"scanned"
9
"coded"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
241
matches
0
"t in fear"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
5
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
241
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
278
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
32
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2217
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
12
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
58.33%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
99
wordCount
2018
uniqueNames
21
maxNameDensity
1.83
worstName
"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow
1
Quinn
37
Elias
1
Voss
22
Raven
2
Nest
2
Soho
2
Morris
11
Shaftesbury
1
Avenue
1
Wapping
1
Basra
1
Underground
1
Tube
1
Camden
1
Veil
2
Market
2
London
1
Men
3
Whirr
3
Tap
3
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Elias"
3
"Voss"
4
"Raven"
5
"Nest"
6
"Morris"
7
"Underground"
8
"Camden"
9
"Market"
10
"Men"
places
0
"Soho"
1
"Shaftesbury"
2
"Avenue"
3
"Wapping"
4
"Basra"
5
"Veil"
6
"London"
globalScore
0.583
windowScore
0.667
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
144
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2217
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
278
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
156
mean
14.21
std
15.4
cv
1.084
sampleLengths
0
27
1
31
2
14
3
49
4
27
5
10
6
9
7
14
8
8
9
19
10
12
11
7
12
13
13
9
14
62
15
20
16
43
17
15
18
26
19
4
20
38
21
2
22
3
23
25
24
4
25
6
26
6
27
40
28
4
29
12
30
3
31
5
32
1
33
2
34
22
35
6
36
50
37
2
38
8
39
17
40
3
41
2
42
3
43
42
44
13
45
8
46
10
47
1
48
1
49
4
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
241
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
359
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
278
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
367
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
6
adverbRatio
0.01634877384196185
lyAdverbCount
1
lyAdverbRatio
0.0027247956403269754
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
278
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
278
mean
7.97
std
6.08
cv
0.762
sampleLengths
0
27
1
8
2
23
3
13
4
1
5
10
6
18
7
6
8
15
9
27
10
10
11
9
12
14
13
8
14
19
15
12
16
7
17
13
18
9
19
20
20
21
21
21
22
2
23
8
24
10
25
15
26
2
27
2
28
5
29
19
30
2
31
1
32
1
33
11
34
17
35
9
36
4
37
23
38
6
39
2
40
7
41
2
42
3
43
7
44
2
45
1
46
15
47
4
48
6
49
6
53.96%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
20
diversityRatio
0.3669064748201439
totalSentences
278
uniqueOpeners
102
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
7
totalSentences
199
matches
0
"Then the lights blew."
1
"Almost purple under the shop’s"
2
"Then she was back in"
3
"Then blood on her hands"
4
"Then too many."
5
"Even the hanging hands stopped"
6
"Then DS Morris stepped out"
ratio
0.035
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
48
totalSentences
199
matches
0
"she snapped, though no one"
1
"Her shoes slapped through oily"
2
"She skidded round the corner"
3
"Her old partner’s name written"
4
"He looked back."
5
"His face had changed since"
6
"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
7
"His expression flickered."
8
"It cracked like a tooth"
9
"Her fingers brushed wet wool."
10
"Her grip broke."
11
"She slapped the radio."
12
"It sparked once and died"
13
"She crushed the memory under"
14
"He pressed one palm to"
15
"His other hand searched inside"
16
"It had no humour in"
17
"He pushed it into a"
18
"It smelled of iron rails,"
19
"She had half a second"
ratio
0.241
40.40%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
167
totalSentences
199
matches
0
"Detective Harlow Quinn hit the"
1
"The minicab driver screamed something"
2
"Quinn spat the card into"
3
"she snapped, though no one"
4
"A man in a puffer"
5
"Quinn drove her shoulder into"
6
"Her shoes slapped through oily"
7
"The suspect had a name"
8
"Men did not climb brickwork"
9
"Men did not leave black"
10
"Men did not whisper into"
11
"Quinn touched the radio clipped"
12
"Static answered first, then a"
13
"She skidded round the corner"
14
"The green neon sign above"
15
"The bar’s black door hung"
16
"That was how the informant"
17
"A place where cops got"
18
"Quinn had gone in alone"
19
"Her old partner’s name written"
ratio
0.839
25.13%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
199
matches
0
"Now he crashed into a"
ratio
0.005
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
87
technicalSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"Old maps and black-and-white photographs lined the walls inside, glimpsed between bodies that had frozen mid-drink when Voss bolted through them."
1
"A stall collapsed under someone’s panicked shove, spilling charms, teeth, and small brass bells that rang without being touched."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
3
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
3
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences
39
tagDensity
0.077
leniency
0.154
rawRatio
0.333
effectiveRatio
0.051
91.7667%