Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2HAKQS8N5QGMC6CJC7TQBJ

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Duration:
20.4s
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$0.000511
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The envelope slipped from the suspect's hand, spinning end over end through the rain before slapping against wet asphalt. Quinn gained two strides, her boots finding purchase on the slick cobblestones. The man ahead had a limp, favouring his right leg, but he knew these streets. He moved through the narrow Soho alleys like water through a pipe, never hesitating at junctions, never slowing. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" He didn't stop. They never stopped. The envelope. She'd seen it tucked under his arm at the Raven's Nest, caught the familiar green wax seal as he'd slipped out the back. Watts' seal. The same seal she'd found stamped into her partner's palm three years ago, pressed so deep the coroner had to photograph it separately. The chase led north, away from the neon glow of the Nest's sign, past the shuttered market stalls and into the warren of streets behind Camden Town station. Rain hammered against the corrugated awnings of abandoned storefronts. The man glanced back, his eyes catching the dim streetlight. She knew that face. Marcus Webb. Small-time fence, big-time coward. Three arrests, zero convictions because he always rolled on someone higher. "Webb! I'm not chasing you for the handbag you nicked!" He laughed, a wet, breathless sound. "Then why are you running, Detective?" Because the last person I saw with that seal ended up in the morgue with his throat cut. Webb turned sharply, disappearing through an iron gate that should have been locked. It swung open, hinges freshly oiled. Quinn followed, her hand moving to the Glock holstered beneath her jacket. The gate led to a service alley, cluttered with drainage pipes and rusted grates. At the far end, Webb was already hauling open a maintenance hatch set into the ground, the kind that accessed Tube tunnels. "Don't." He dropped into darkness. Quinn reached the hatch, her torch beam cutting through the black. Steel rungs led down to what looked like a disused platform. Old tiles. Faded advertisements for 1980s hairdressing. The air rising from below smelled strange, copper and cloves and something floral that didn't belong in a drain. Above her, the city hummed. Traffic, sirens, the ordinary noise of a London night. Below, silence. The wrong kind of silence. The kind that waited. She checked her watch. Quarter past midnight. Backup would take twenty minutes minimum, and by then Webb would be long gone, along with whatever he'd delivered to the Nest tonight. *Eighteen years on the force, Harlow. Eighteen years of following evidence through doors you shouldn't open.* She descended. The rungs were dry, which made no sense given the rain above. No water dripped through. No dampness slicked the metal. By the time her feet hit the platform, she'd stopped feeling the cold. The tunnel stretched in both directions, but torchlight caught a door on the far end, heavy steel with a simple latch. No signs. No warnings. Just a blackened handle worn smooth by countless hands. Quinn pressed her ear to the metal. Muffled sounds. Voices, maybe. A rhythm like machinery. Or drums. *This is how Morris died. Following something strange into somewhere dark.* She pushed the door open. The corridor beyond was narrow, barely shoulder-width, its walls lined with chalk symbols she didn't recognise. Not Greek. Not Latin. Something older, scratched deep into the brick by someone who knew exactly what they were drawing. Fifty feet ahead, a curtain of beads hung across the passage, and through them she saw light. Yellow. Flickering. And heard the unmistakable murmur of a crowd. Webb's scent lingered in the air. Sweat, fear, and that copper note she'd smelled in the hatch. He'd come this way. She pushed through the beads. The market stretched before her, carved into what must have been an abandoned Tube station. The old ticket hall had been transformed into a warren of stalls and tents, their awnings strung with candles that burned without smoke. The tracks below were filled with people, hundreds of them, moving between vendors selling things that Quinn's brain refused to catalogue. Teeth arranged in patterns. Bottles filled with smoke. Animals she didn't recognise in cages that hummed. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian caught Quinn's stare and smiled, revealing a mouth full of gold. "New face," she said, her voice sliding like oil over gravel. "Bone token." "Just looking." "Tokens aren't optional, love." Quinn's hand found her badge. "Metropolitan Police. I'm pursuing a suspect." The woman laughed, high and sharp, and the crowd around them rippled, heads turning. "Oh, she's fresh. Sweet thing. Do you know where you are, Detective?" "I know I'm still in London." "You're in the Veil Market." The woman stepped closer. Her nails were long, filed to points. "And down here, your warrant's worth exactly what I say it is." Webb was gone. Swallowed by the crowd, his trail lost among a hundred other scents and sounds. But somewhere in the depths of this labyrinth, he was still carrying that envelope. Still delivering his message to whoever had killed Morris. The obsidian-eyed woman watched her weigh the decision. "You can turn around," she offered. "Find the hatch again. Pretend you never saw us." "And if I don't?" The woman's smile widened, teeth glinting like coins. "Then we have much to discuss."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.31% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount878
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount878
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"depths"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
2"depths"
3"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences87
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords27
totalWords878
ratio0.031
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force, Harlow. Eighteen years of following evidence through doors you shouldn't open."
1"This is how Morris died. Following something strange into somewhere dark."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount782
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Webb"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest3
Camden1
Town1
Webb6
Glock1
Tube2
London1
Harlow1
Morris2
Greek1
Latin1
Quinn7
persons
0"Nest"
1"Webb"
2"Tube"
3"Morris"
4"Quinn"
places
0"Soho"
1"Raven"
2"Camden"
3"Town"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
98.98% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a disused platform"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount878
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean20.9
std15.3
cv0.732
sampleLengths
019
145
23
36
450
547
621
710
812
918
1031
1136
121
134
1448
1525
1630
1716
182
1934
2034
2117
2211
235
2436
2527
2621
275
2859
2916
3031
312
324
3311
3426
356
3628
3740
388
3915
404
4114
89.13% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences87
matches
0"been locked"
1"been transformed"
2"were filled"
3"was gone"
55.07% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs138
matches
0"was already hauling"
1"were drawing"
2"was still carrying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount155
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount3
adverbRatio0.01935483870967742
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0064516129032258064
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean8.61
std6.34
cv0.737
sampleLengths
019
112
215
318
43
53
63
72
823
92
1023
1128
129
1310
144
152
164
1711
1810
196
206
2118
2213
236
2412
2514
2622
271
284
2911
3011
312
325
3319
345
359
362
375
384
394
403
4123
426
4310
442
4512
464
475
4813
4921
83.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.5490196078431373
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners56
92.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"Just a blackened handle worn"
1"Still delivering his message to"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences72
matches
0"He moved through the narrow"
1"He didn't stop."
2"They never stopped."
3"She'd seen it tucked under"
4"She knew that face."
5"He laughed, a wet, breathless"
6"It swung open, hinges freshly"
7"He dropped into darkness."
8"She checked her watch."
9"She pushed the door open."
10"He'd come this way."
11"She pushed through the beads."
12"she said, her voice sliding"
13"Her nails were long, filed"
ratio0.194
98.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences72
matches
0"The envelope slipped from the"
1"Quinn gained two strides, her"
2"The man ahead had a"
3"He moved through the narrow"
4"He didn't stop."
5"They never stopped."
6"She'd seen it tucked under"
7"The same seal she'd found"
8"The chase led north, away"
9"The man glanced back, his"
10"She knew that face."
11"He laughed, a wet, breathless"
12"Webb turned sharply, disappearing through"
13"It swung open, hinges freshly"
14"Quinn followed, her hand moving"
15"The gate led to a"
16"He dropped into darkness."
17"Quinn reached the hatch, her"
18"Steel rungs led down to"
19"The air rising from below"
ratio0.722
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"Because the last person I"
1"By the time her feet"
ratio0.028
99.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The envelope slipped from the suspect's hand, spinning end over end through the rain before slapping against wet asphalt."
1"Something older, scratched deep into the brick by someone who knew exactly what they were drawing."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, her voice sliding like oil over gravel"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.059
leniency0.118
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.1241%