Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHQVVHHCGRWXEFD58EE9JXY

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1m 5s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn barrelled after the hooded figure, lungs burning as her boots pounded the slick pavement. The suspect vaulted a low fence beside the off-licence. She followed without breaking stride, shoulder clipping the metal and sending a jolt through her frame. "Met Police. Stop now." He did not stop. His coat whipped behind him like broken wings. Quinn’s closely cropped hair clung to her scalp. She kept her breathing measured, military precision in every placement of her feet. This was the man who had been at the edge of Morris’s last known location three years ago. She would not lose him again. They spilled from the alley into the broader flow of Camden High Street. Revellers scattered. A woman with bright shopping bags cursed as the suspect shoulder-checked her. Quinn dodged the same obstacle, eyes locked on his retreating back. The scar on his forearm flashed under a streetlamp as he pumped his arms harder. She knew that mark from the files. Knife fight in Seville before he crossed paths with the clique. He veered left, down a side road lined with shuttered cafes. Quinn closed the gap by three metres. Her worn leather watch slid on her wrist. She ignored it. The suspect’s breathing grew ragged. Good. Let him tire. Another turn. He slammed through a rusted gate that led to the old maintenance access for the disused Tube platform. Quinn drew her baton. The gate clanged shut behind her but she wrenched it open again, metal screeching in protest. “Enough games,” she called, voice flat. “You know what I want.” A muffled laugh floated back. The sound sent ice across her shoulders. She descended the concrete steps two at a time. Graffiti covered the walls in overlapping colours, symbols that hurt to look at directly. The air thickened, heavy with incense and something sharper, like burnt wiring. The suspect reached a blank stretch of brick at the tunnel’s end. He pulled a small object from his pocket, a yellowed bone token no larger than a matchbox. He pressed it against the wall. A section of bricks shimmered, then parted with a grinding sigh. Warm light spilled out. He stepped through. Quinn slowed. Her pulse beat loud in her ears. The Veil Market. She had heard the name in hushed interviews, in files that refused to stay closed. An underground black market that shifted location every full moon, selling things no legitimate trader would touch. Entry required the token. She had none. Morris had gone somewhere like this. His final radio call had mentioned bone and shadow before the line filled with screams that still lived behind her eyes. She flexed her fingers around the baton. Backup would take twenty minutes. The trail would be cold. The man who might explain why her partner had been found three days later with his eyes burned to glass would vanish into the clique’s protection. Quinn rolled her shoulder once, sharp jaw set. She drove her elbow into the same patch of brick. Pain flared, but the barrier gave. The hidden mechanism clicked in protest. She pushed through. Stale air washed over her, thick with the scent of dried herbs and hot metal. The abandoned platform stretched ahead, transformed. Stalls constructed from scaffolding and faded Underground signage lined both sides of the tracks. Lanterns floated without strings, casting sickly green light across goods that should not exist. A woman with too many joints in her fingers sold vials of liquid starlight. Further down, a man missing half his face offered maps drawn on what looked like dried skin. Quinn kept to the shadows beside a pillar. Her free hand brushed the grip of her concealed pistol. Procedure screamed at her to retreat, to call this in. Instinct told her the answers she needed lay ten metres ahead. The suspect stood at a makeshift table draped in deep green cloth. Opposite him, Tomás Herrera wiped his hands on a rag. The former paramedic’s olive skin glistened under the strange lights. His short curly dark brown hair was damp with sweat. A fresh bandage lay unrolled beside a collection of glass syringes filled with substances that swirled on their own. The Saint Christopher medallion swayed as he leaned forward to inspect the package the suspect had handed over. “Clean?” Tomás asked, voice carrying the soft lilt of Seville tempered by years in London. “Fresh from the Nest. No traces.” The suspect’s tone dripped triumph. “You can patch up the next batch without worrying about coppers sniffing round.” Quinn stepped out. Her boots scraped grit across the platform floor. “Metropolitan Police. Both of you, hands where I can see them.” Tomás straightened slowly. His warm brown eyes met hers without surprise. He looked almost sorry. “Detective Quinn. You really should not be down here.” The suspect spun. Recognition twisted his features into something ugly. “How did you—” “Bone token left a residue on the gate,” she cut in. “Sloppy. Now tell me what you sold Silas at the Raven’s Nest last week. The same night my former partner’s case file grew another red stamp.” Tomás placed both palms flat on the table. The medallion caught the light as he breathed out. “This is neutral ground, Detective. Market rules. No badges. No arrests. You force the issue, every stallholder here becomes your enemy.” Quinn scanned the periphery without moving her head. Figures had begun to drift closer. A creature with eyes like cracked opals watched from a spice stall. Two tall men with identical tattoos on their necks blocked the exit tunnel. The air itself felt heavier, charged. She kept her voice level. “I’m not here for the market. I’m here for him.” She pointed the baton at the suspect. “You ran from me twice. Third time ends with cuffs or answers. Your choice.” The suspect grinned. His teeth looked too sharp. “Morris chose answers. Look what it cost him.” The name hit like a slap. Quinn’s grip tightened until the baton creaked. She took one measured step forward. Tomás moved between them, hands raised in a calming gesture that did nothing to ease the tension. “Harlow, listen.” His use of her first name sounded wrong in this place. Too familiar. “Whatever you think happened to your partner, it was bigger than one dead detective. Walk away now. I can get you out before the guards arrive.” A low chime echoed through the chamber. Every lantern flickered. The floating lights spun once, then pointed toward her like accusatory fingers. Stallholders abandoned their tables. Footsteps converged from multiple directions. Quinn drew her pistol. The weight felt solid, real, in a place that bent every other rule. “Move aside, Herrera.” Tomás shook his head once. His scar stood out pale against his forearm as he reached for something beneath the table. Not a weapon. A small glass orb that pulsed with inner light. “I cannot let you take him. The clique protects its own. And the market protects the clique.” The suspect laughed, a wet sound that echoed unnaturally. He snatched a vial from the table and hurled it at the ground between them. Glass shattered. Thick violet smoke billowed upward, carrying the stench of rotting lilies. Quinn staggered back. Her eyes watered. Through the haze she saw shapes detaching from stalls, too many, moving with unnatural speed. Tomás’s voice cut through the chaos. “Last chance, Detective. Run.” She raised the pistol, finger resting beside the trigger. The smoke coiled around her legs like living rope. One of the tattooed men drew closer, eyes reflecting the violet glow. Behind him, the suspect sprinted for a service door that had not existed seconds earlier. Quinn fired a warning shot into the ceiling. Concrete dust rained down. The crowd did not slow. She sprinted after the suspect, boots sliding on the sudden slickness the broken vial had created. Tomás shouted something in rapid Spanish. The words twisted into shapes that brushed her mind like spider silk. The service door slammed shut ahead of her. She hit it shoulder-first. Locked. Something on the other side dragged heavy bolts into place. Quinn spun. The entire market had turned its attention on her. Lanterns converged overhead. Tomás stood at the front of the advancing crowd, the glowing orb now held high. Its light painted his face in harsh planes of regret and resolve. “Detective Quinn,” he said, voice carrying across the platform with unnatural clarity. “You just rang the dinner bell.” The first stallholder lunged. Quinn brought her baton up hard. Impact jarred her arm. More came. She fired twice into the floor, trying to create space. The violet smoke thickened, filling her mouth with the taste of grave dirt. In the centre of the closing circle, the suspect reappeared beside Tomás. He no longer looked afraid. The bone token dangled from his fingers like a trophy. Quinn backed against the locked door. Her watch had stopped. The second hand twitched once, then froze on the three. Tomás met her eyes one final time. The regret had vanished. “Should have stayed topside.” The crowd surged. Quinn raised her weapon and started shooting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.609
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.41% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1518
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.12% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1518
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"measured"
count2
1
word"shimmered"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"constructed"
count1
4
word"lilt"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"flickered"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"shattered"
count1
15
word"silk"
count1
16
word"resolve"
count1
17
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"shimmered"
2"pulse"
3"constructed"
4"lilt"
5"scanned"
6"charged"
7"tension"
8"familiar"
9"echoed"
10"flickered"
11"footsteps"
12"weight"
13"pulsed"
14"shattered"
15"silk"
16"resolve"
17"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences155
matches
0"looked afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences155
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1518
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.45% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1313
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Morris2
Camden1
High1
Street1
Seville2
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Underground1
Tomás11
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
London1
Quinn18
Spanish1
persons
0"Morris"
1"Market"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Quinn"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Seville"
4"London"
globalScore0.815
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like dried skin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1518
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences171
matches
0"knew that mark"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean29.76
std18.34
cv0.616
sampleLengths
040
14
257
371
438
540
611
747
853
951
1027
1143
1233
1380
1439
1579
1615
1724
1811
1911
2015
219
2213
2337
2417
2521
2645
2736
2816
2936
3041
3131
3217
333
3433
3517
3637
3727
384
3945
4017
4134
4223
4341
4418
4539
4627
4720
4811
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences155
matches
0"been found"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs236
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences171
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1316
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"suspect shoulder-checked her."
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.025835866261398176
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005319148936170213
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean8.88
std5.23
cv0.589
sampleLengths
015
19
216
34
44
58
68
713
818
96
1013
112
1212
1311
1415
157
1611
1711
187
198
203
215
221
233
242
2518
264
2716
286
295
305
317
329
3314
3412
3512
3617
376
3811
394
403
412
427
433
4415
4517
464
473
486
4921
61.01% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.38011695906432746
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners65
22.83% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences146
matches
0"Further down, a man missing"
ratio0.007
96.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences146
matches
0"She followed without breaking stride,"
1"He did not stop."
2"His coat whipped behind him"
3"She kept her breathing measured,"
4"She would not lose him"
5"They spilled from the alley"
6"She knew that mark from"
7"He veered left, down a"
8"Her worn leather watch slid"
9"She ignored it."
10"He slammed through a rusted"
11"she called, voice flat"
12"She descended the concrete steps"
13"He pulled a small object"
14"He pressed it against the"
15"He stepped through."
16"Her pulse beat loud in"
17"She had heard the name"
18"She had none."
19"His final radio call had"
ratio0.308
4.52% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount133
totalSentences146
matches
0"Quinn barrelled after the hooded"
1"The suspect vaulted a low"
2"She followed without breaking stride,"
3"He did not stop."
4"His coat whipped behind him"
5"Quinn’s closely cropped hair clung"
6"She kept her breathing measured,"
7"This was the man who"
8"She would not lose him"
9"They spilled from the alley"
10"A woman with bright shopping"
11"Quinn dodged the same obstacle,"
12"The scar on his forearm"
13"She knew that mark from"
14"Knife fight in Seville before"
15"He veered left, down a"
16"Quinn closed the gap by"
17"Her worn leather watch slid"
18"She ignored it."
19"The suspect’s breathing grew ragged."
ratio0.911
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"An underground black market that shifted location every full moon, selling things no legitimate trader would touch."
1"A fresh bandage lay unrolled beside a collection of glass syringes filled with substances that swirled on their own."
2"The words twisted into shapes that brushed her mind like spider silk."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she called, voice flat"
1"he said, voice carrying across the platform with unnatural clarity"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.261
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.9356%