Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHRVW4Y0BA5TZ5MMBQNC8EP

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn slammed into a cluster of revellers spilling from a Soho doorway, her shoulder connecting with one's back. The man ahead accelerated, curly hair flattened to his scalp, Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest. "Herrera. You stop right now." He did not. Tomás Herrera vaulted a low barrier and cut across the road, tyres hissing on wet tarmac behind him. Quinn followed, badge already in her left hand, right clenched around her baton. Eighteen years on the force had taught her the rhythm of a chase: keep the suspect in sight, conserve breath, watch for traps. He knew the streets better than most. A former paramedic turned shadow medic for every dodgy crew in North London. Her intel said he ran with the clique now, patching up things that should not need patching. Things that had taken DS Morris three years ago. She still saw the scene in flashes: Morris's face drained of colour, a wound that smoked like dry ice. Her boots slapped through puddles. Rain streamed down her closely cropped hair and stung her eyes. She ignored it. Focus on the gap. Fifteen metres. Twelve. He glanced back once, olive features tight with fear, scar on his left forearm vivid under a passing streetlight. "You think this ends with you losing me in Camden?" she called. "Might buy me time," he shouted without breaking stride. His Spanish accent clipped the words, turned them brisk. "Time I don't have if you drag me in." He veered left at the next junction, past the distinctive green neon of The Raven's Nest. The sign flickered, casting sickly light across damp cobbles. Quinn's lungs burned but her pace held steady, military precision in every stride. She knew what waited if she let him reach whatever bolthole he had prepared. Another unsolved file. Another night staring at photographs that made no sense. The streets narrowed. Camden's evening crowd thinned into something seedier, groups huddled under awnings, voices lowered. Tomás ducked beneath a half-lowered shutter and disappeared into the shadows of an old warehouse. Quinn skidded after him, shoulder brushing rust-flecked metal. Inside, the air changed, heavier, laced with damp concrete and something sharper. Incense. Iron. Old magic. He was already halfway down a flight of concrete steps, footsteps echoing. She took them three at a time, hand grazing the wall for balance. The stairs spiralled deeper than any legitimate Tube station had any right to be. Her watch strap grew slick against her wrist. Somewhere above, distant sirens wailed, but they belonged to another world now. At the bottom, a rusted gate stood ajar. Beyond it stretched an abandoned platform, tiles missing like missing teeth. Flickering bulbs swung on bare wires. Tomás stood twenty paces ahead, chest heaving, facing a blank stretch of curved wall. In his fingers he held something small and pale. A bone token, finger-length, etched with marks that hurt to look at directly. "Last chance, Detective," he said quietly. "Walk away. This isn't your fight." "Everything that crawls out of holes like this becomes my fight eventually." She advanced slowly, baton extended. "You treated a man last week. Name of Vickers. Stabbed with a blade that left silver residue. Same signature as the weapon that killed Morris. Explain that." His warm brown eyes flicked to the token, then back to her. "Some wounds need more than stitches. You wouldn't understand." "Try me." A low rumble sounded. The wall shimmered, tiles dissolving into a jagged archway. Figures moved beyond it, silhouettes against lantern light. The Veil Market. She'd heard rumours, of course. Every detective with a supernatural cold case had. An underground sprawl that shifted location every full moon, selling things that should not be sold. She had never seen it. Never wanted to. Tomás stepped through without another word. The archway began to fade. Quinn's stomach tightened. Procedure said call for backup, establish a perimeter, wait for specialist support that did not exist. Instinct said Morris had waited once, and it cost him. She thought of the file on her desk, the one with Tomás's name circled in red. The clique protected their own. If she let him vanish now, she might never find the thread again. She crossed the threshold just as the stones knitted shut behind her. The market assaulted every sense at once. Stalls crammed the old platform, makeshift tables draped in deep velvet and frayed canvas. Lanterns floated without visible strings, casting shifting amber pools. The air smelled of myrrh, hot metal, and something sweet-rotten underneath. Creatures, people, whatever they were, turned to watch her. Some had eyes too large. Others moved with liquid grace that belonged to no human skeleton. Tomás had melted into the crowd. She caught a flash of his medallion near a stall piled with stoppered vials. Quinn pushed forward, ignoring the way the ground seemed to tilt beneath her feet. A woman with iron rings pierced through her cheeks hissed as Quinn brushed past. Another figure, tall and thin as a shadow, smiled with too many teeth. "Buy something or leave, copper," the tall one murmured. His voice carried the cadence of old graveyards. She kept moving. Her free hand dropped to the concealed holster. The market stretched further than the station's physical bounds allowed, tunnels branching off in impossible directions. Stalls offered jars of luminous fluid, books bound in what she suspected was not leather, amulets that whispered when no one touched them. A small creature no taller than her knee tried to sell her a map that rearranged itself every few seconds. "Path to lost things," it squeaked. "Very reasonable price." "Not today." She sidestepped it, eyes locked on Tomás. He had stopped at a stall draped in black silk, speaking urgently to the vendor, a hunched man with glass lenses over all four eyes. The vendor nodded once, produced a small velvet pouch. Tomás reached for it. Quinn closed the distance in three strides and seized his wrist. The scar tissue under her fingers felt raised and old. "Whatever that is, you're not taking it anywhere." He froze. Around them, the market noise dimmed. Heads turned. The floating lanterns drifted closer, as though eager for the coming drama. "You don't know what you're interrupting," Tomás said, voice low. His sentence carried the clipped rhythm of someone who had learned English in Seville hospitals and London back alleys. "This pouch holds answers about your partner. Real ones. Not the ones your superiors fed you." She tightened her grip. "Convenient timing." "Not convenient. Necessary." He met her brown eyes without flinching. "Morris didn't die from a knife. He died because he saw what lives behind the Veil. Same as you will if you keep pushing." The hunched vendor clicked his extra lenses. "No violence in the Market. Rules." Quinn released Tomás but stayed close enough to grab him again. Her mind raced. If she arrested him here, she would never make it to the surface with him. The crowd pressed tighter, bodies radiating hostility like heat from an oven. A creature with antlers sprouting from its forehead cracked its knuckles. Further down the platform, something large shifted beneath a tarpaulin, scales rasping against stone. Her watch ticked loudly in the sudden quiet. She could feel the weight of every unsolved case on her shoulders, Morris's file the heaviest. The clique had answers. Tomás had answers. But answers in a place like this came with teeth. Tomás rubbed his wrist where she'd gripped it. The medallion caught the lantern light, spinning slowly on its chain. "You have a choice, Detective Quinn. Drag me out and learn nothing. Or buy a token of your own and follow the truth. Your call." The vendor extended one spidery hand, offering a second bone token. It looked freshly carved, still damp. Quinn stared at it. The arched entrance had vanished. No visible exit presented itself. The market breathed around her, alive and watchful. She reached for the token. A bell rang somewhere deep in the tunnels, high and sharp. Every stallholder froze. The tarpaulin bulged upward as whatever lay beneath it woke. Tomás's face drained of colour. "They're early," he whispered. Quinn's fingers closed around the bone. "Who's early?" The lights began to go out, one by one.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"She advanced slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.167
89.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1375
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1375
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count2
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
highlights
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1"footsteps"
2"echoing"
3"etched"
4"flicked"
5"shimmered"
6"stomach"
7"velvet"
8"silk"
9"raced"
10"could feel"
11"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences129
matches
0"t with fear"
65.34% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences129
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1375
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1180
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.1
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
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Saint1
Christopher1
Herrera1
North1
London2
Morris4
Spanish1
Raven1
Nest1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Tomás13
Quinn11
English1
Seville1
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Herrera"
3"Morris"
4"Raven"
5"Market"
6"Tomás"
7"Quinn"
places
0"Soho"
1"North"
2"London"
3"Seville"
globalScore0.949
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1375
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences143
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std22.33
cv0.65
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286
2934
3013
3166
3241
3344
3439
355
3629
374
388
399
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"were, turned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs233
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences143
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1184
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic turned shadow"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.03125
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.008445945945945946
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean9.62
std5.59
cv0.581
sampleLengths
018
117
25
33
418
513
623
77
813
917
109
1119
125
1311
143
154
162
171
1819
1912
209
219
229
2316
249
2513
2614
273
289
293
3013
3115
328
3312
341
351
362
3712
3813
3914
408
4112
428
4311
446
4514
469
4713
486
496
70.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.42657342657342656
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners61
56.02% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"Somewhere above, distant sirens wailed,"
1"Further down the platform, something"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences119
matches
0"He did not."
1"He knew the streets better"
2"Her intel said he ran"
3"She still saw the scene"
4"Her boots slapped through puddles."
5"She ignored it."
6"He glanced back once, olive"
7"he shouted without breaking stride"
8"His Spanish accent clipped the"
9"He veered left at the"
10"She knew what waited if"
11"He was already halfway down"
12"She took them three at"
13"Her watch strap grew slick"
14"he said quietly"
15"She advanced slowly, baton extended"
16"His warm brown eyes flicked"
17"She'd heard rumours, of course."
18"She had never seen it."
19"She thought of the file"
ratio0.294
23.03% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences119
matches
0"Quinn slammed into a cluster"
1"The man ahead accelerated, curly"
2"He did not."
3"Tomás Herrera vaulted a low"
4"Quinn followed, badge already in"
5"He knew the streets better"
6"A former paramedic turned shadow"
7"Her intel said he ran"
8"Things that had taken DS"
9"She still saw the scene"
10"Her boots slapped through puddles."
11"Rain streamed down her closely"
12"She ignored it."
13"He glanced back once, olive"
14"he shouted without breaking stride"
15"His Spanish accent clipped the"
16"He veered left at the"
17"The sign flickered, casting sickly"
18"Quinn's lungs burned but her"
19"She knew what waited if"
ratio0.874
84.03% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"If she let him vanish"
1"If she arrested him here,"
ratio0.017
79.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Quinn slammed into a cluster of revellers spilling from a Soho doorway, her shoulder connecting with one's back."
1"Procedure said call for backup, establish a perimeter, wait for specialist support that did not exist."
2"Others moved with liquid grace that belonged to no human skeleton."
3"The floating lanterns drifted closer, as though eager for the coming drama."
4"His sentence carried the clipped rhythm of someone who had learned English in Seville hospitals and London back alleys."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She sidestepped, eyes locked on Tomás"
1"Tomás said, voice low"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he shouted (shout)"
1"it squeaked (squeak)"
2"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.25
82.3090%