Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHSANQM0D27G7QZKN97Q312

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1m
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$0.015590
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xAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn's fingers closed on empty air as the suspect tore free from her grip and bolted down the alley. She gave chase, sharp jaw locked, legs driving with military precision. The man ahead dodged a cluster of revellers spilling from a late-night club, shoulder clipping one hard enough to send the stranger staggering into a brick wall. "Met Police! Stop!" she shouted. He didn't. His silhouette cut left at the next junction, trainers skidding on slick tarmac. Quinn followed, breath steady, worn leather watch heavy on her wrist. Three years since Morris disappeared and every pursuit still carried his ghost in her peripheral vision. This one felt different. The suspect moved like someone who knew exactly which shadows would swallow him. She vaulted a stack of discarded crates he had toppled in his wake. Glass cracked under her boots. The alley narrowed, brick walls pressing close, and the distant hum of traffic faded behind her. Camden lay ahead. She knew the territory on paper: markets, tourists, hidden corners the guidebooks never mentioned. This runner seemed intent on every single one. He burst onto the high street, weaving between black cabs that blared their horns. Quinn stayed ten metres back, close enough to see the courier bag slung across his back. Whatever it held had triggered the raid on the Raven's Nest two hours earlier. Silas had stonewalled her, of course. The barman always did. But the moment this man slipped out the hidden back room through the bookshelf door, Quinn had known. The same instinct that had once kept her and Morris alive now pulled her forward like a leash. The suspect glanced back. Fear sharpened his features. He plunged down a side road lined with shuttered shops, then disappeared behind a rusted chain-link fence that guarded an abandoned entrance to the old Tube station. Quinn slowed only long enough to wrench the fence aside. Metal groaned. A faded sign warned of structural danger. She ignored it and descended the concrete stairs two at a time. Damp air thickened around her. The stairs spiralled deeper than any legitimate station should allow. Strange. Her torch beam caught odd symbols spray-painted on the curved walls, lines that hurt to follow for too long. At the bottom, a makeshift barricade of old turnstiles had been pushed aside. Beyond it, light flickered. Not the sterile glow of London Underground fluorescents. This was warmer, erratic, like dozens of lanterns floating at different heights. Quinn killed her own torch. Voices drifted up the tunnel, layered with unfamiliar accents and the low chime of something metallic struck repeatedly. She pressed her back to the curved tile wall and eased forward. The tunnel opened into a wide platform that should have been derelict. Instead it teemed. Stalls constructed from mismatched scaffolding and faded velvet awnings lined both sides of the tracks. No trains had run here for decades, yet the air vibrated with commerce. A woman with too many joints in her fingers haggled over a tray of small glass spheres that swirled with captive smoke. Further along, a man missing half his face offered phials of deep crimson liquid that moved against gravity. The smell hit Quinn in layers: ozone, old blood, incense, and something sweeter that turned her stomach. This was no ordinary black market. Her fingers tightened on the grip of her baton. Every instinct screamed to call for backup. Every memory of Morris warned her what happened when police blundered into places they weren't meant to see. The suspect appeared twenty metres ahead, pushing through the crowd toward a stall draped in deep green fabric. Tomás Herrera stood behind the counter, olive-skinned hands steady as he wrapped a fresh bandage around a customer's lacerated forearm. The former paramedic's Saint Christopher medallion caught the lantern light. Quinn recognised him from the file: struck off the medical register after treating patients the NHS refused to acknowledge. Patients like the ones who had apparently claimed Morris. The suspect reached Tomás and spoke in a rushed whisper. Quinn moved closer, using the press of bodies for cover. A vendor thrust a bone token at her, yellowed and carved with tiny runes. She brushed it aside. "Back room. Now," the suspect hissed at Tomás. "They're right behind me." Tomás's warm brown eyes flicked up, scanned the crowd, and locked on Quinn. Recognition tightened his mouth. He did not look surprised to see a detective in his illegal sanctuary. Instead he reached beneath the counter and produced a small leather case. "Payment first," Tomás said, voice carrying the faint musical trace of Seville softened by years in London. Calm. Professional. The tone of a man who had sewn wounds that should not exist. "You know the rules, mate. No token, no treatment. No escape." The suspect fumbled in his courier bag and slapped a bone token onto the counter. It looked fresher than the one Quinn had been offered, edges still sharp. "Quinn's here. The one who lost her partner. She can't be allowed to—" "Finish that sentence and every stall in the Market will hear you." Tomás slid the token into his pocket without looking away from the suspect. "I treat bodies. I don't dispose of detectives. Different skill set." Quinn stepped out from behind a stall selling maps that appeared to redraw themselves. "Herrera. Interesting choice of consulting rooms." Both men turned. The suspect's hand darted toward his jacket. Quinn drew her baton faster, extending it with a metallic click that cut through the Market's murmur. Several nearby conversations died. Heads turned. The floating lanterns seemed to drift closer, as though the Market itself had grown curious. "Detective Quinn," Tomás said. His curly dark hair fell across his forehead as he tilted his head. The scar along his left forearm flexed when he rested both palms flat on the counter. Non-threatening. Smart. "You look tired. Long night chasing shadows?" "Longer than you know." She kept her gaze split between them. The suspect had begun edging sideways, using a rack of dried herbs as partial cover. "That bag. Hand it over. Slowly." The suspect laughed once, a brittle sound. "You have no jurisdiction here, detective. This isn't your city anymore." "It became mine the moment you ran from the Nest." Quinn advanced a step. The crowd had formed a loose semicircle now. She smelled copper again, stronger, recent. Someone had bled here not long ago. "Morris taught me to finish what I start. Whatever you're carrying, it ends tonight." Tomás sighed. He lifted the leather case and set it down with deliberate care. "DS Morris. I remember the name. Terrible thing that happened to him. Some cases... they don't stay buried." His eyes met hers directly. No hostility, only clinical assessment, the way a paramedic might study a patient already bleeding out. "You sure you want to open this one down here?" A stallholder to Quinn's left slid a small blade from beneath his coat. The blade reflected lantern light in colours that did not exist on any spectrum she recognised. Others shifted their weight. The Market held its breath. Quinn raised her baton higher. "Last chance. Both of you. On your knees." The suspect chose that moment to run again. He snatched a glowing vial from the nearest table and hurled it at her feet. Glass shattered. Thick purple smoke erupted upward, burning her nostrils, clawing at her eyes. Quinn staggered back, coughing. Through streaming vision she saw Tomás vault the counter with surprising grace for a man who claimed only to treat the wounded. "Bad decision," Tomás muttered, not to her. He grabbed the suspect's arm, the one with the courier bag. "You brought her straight to us. Now we all pay." Quinn wiped her eyes. The smoke clung, oily and wrong. When her vision cleared, the Market had changed. The crowd no longer watched with curiosity. They moved as one, slow and deliberate, closing the exits. Lanterns swung lower, casting long distorted shadows that seemed to reach for her. She pulled her warrant card free and held it high. "Metropolitan Police. Stand down." A low chuckle rippled through the gathered faces. The woman with too many knuckles in her fingers stepped forward, palms open. In them rested another bone token, this one pulsing like a tiny heartbeat. "Market law, detective," the woman said, voice like dry leaves. "You followed without invitation. That makes you inventory." Quinn's grip on the baton tightened until the leather creaked. Tomás had disappeared with the suspect into a narrow service door at the platform's far end. The hidden back room, no doubt. Similar to the one at the Raven's Nest. Same pattern. Same people protecting the same secrets that had swallowed Morris whole. She took one step toward that door. The crowd took two steps closer. From somewhere deeper in the tunnels came a new sound, wet and dragging, like something large learning how to walk again. The lanterns flickered in unison. Quinn felt the first real thread of fear coil around her spine, but she did not stop. Morris had gone through a door like that one. She would not lose another night to the same mistake. She broke into a run. The Market surged after her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.75% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1537
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1537
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"constructed"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"sanctuary"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
11
word"streaming"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"constructed"
2"velvet"
3"vibrated"
4"stomach"
5"whisper"
6"flicked"
7"scanned"
8"sanctuary"
9"weight"
10"shattered"
11"streaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1537
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
76.20% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1355
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.48
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Morris6
Raven2
Nest2
Quinn20
Tube1
London2
Underground1
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás11
Seville1
Calm1
Market5
persons
0"Morris"
1"Raven"
2"Quinn"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Tomás"
7"Market"
places
0"London"
1"Seville"
globalScore0.762
windowScore0.833
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"e ones who had apparently claimed Morris"
1"shadows that seemed to reach for her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1537
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences149
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean40.45
std23.12
cv0.572
sampleLengths
057
15
259
359
490
566
672
750
885
940
1076
1138
1212
1342
1443
1541
1636
1720
1848
1942
2032
2118
2249
2363
2438
2513
2663
2728
2848
2914
3034
3118
3253
337
346
3562
365
375
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences135
matches
0"been pushed"
1"been offered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs237
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences149
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1360
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03455882352941177
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.006617647058823529
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean10.32
std5.71
cv0.554
sampleLengths
019
111
227
35
42
513
611
716
84
913
1013
115
1216
133
1414
158
1614
1716
1814
196
204
2118
2218
234
244
2527
2610
272
287
2912
305
3110
321
3319
3413
354
368
3712
385
3918
4012
4112
423
4315
4413
4522
4618
4717
486
499
70.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.436241610738255
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners65
81.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences122
matches
0"Instead it teemed."
1"Further along, a man missing"
2"Instead he reached beneath the"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences122
matches
0"She gave chase, sharp jaw"
1"His silhouette cut left at"
2"She vaulted a stack of"
3"She knew the territory on"
4"He burst onto the high"
5"He plunged down a side"
6"She ignored it and descended"
7"Her torch beam caught odd"
8"She pressed her back to"
9"Her fingers tightened on the"
10"She brushed it aside."
11"He did not look surprised"
12"It looked fresher than the"
13"His curly dark hair fell"
14"She kept her gaze split"
15"She smelled copper again, stronger,"
16"He lifted the leather case"
17"His eyes met hers directly"
18"He snatched a glowing vial"
19"He grabbed the suspect's arm,"
ratio0.205
33.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences122
matches
0"Quinn's fingers closed on empty"
1"She gave chase, sharp jaw"
2"The man ahead dodged a"
3"His silhouette cut left at"
4"Quinn followed, breath steady, worn"
5"This one felt different."
6"The suspect moved like someone"
7"She vaulted a stack of"
8"Glass cracked under her boots."
9"The alley narrowed, brick walls"
10"Camden lay ahead."
11"She knew the territory on"
12"This runner seemed intent on"
13"He burst onto the high"
14"Quinn stayed ten metres back,"
15"Whatever it held had triggered"
16"Silas had stonewalled her, of"
17"The barman always did."
18"The same instinct that had"
19"The suspect glanced back."
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
70.39% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Her torch beam caught odd symbols spray-painted on the curved walls, lines that hurt to follow for too long."
1"A woman with too many joints in her fingers haggled over a tray of small glass spheres that swirled with captive smoke."
2"Further along, a man missing half his face offered phials of deep crimson liquid that moved against gravity."
3"Thick purple smoke erupted upward, burning her nostrils, clawing at her eyes."
4"Through streaming vision she saw Tomás vault the counter with surprising grace for a man who claimed only to treat the wounded."
5"Lanterns swung lower, casting long distorted shadows that seemed to reach for her."
6"Same people protecting the same secrets that had swallowed Morris whole."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
66.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"Tomás muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.208
leniency0.417
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.167
88.3798%