Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8Z90VF8EB9CR1HPP45QRHN

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Model:
Grok 4.3
Duration:
34.1s
Cost:
$0.008728
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect bolted left through an oily puddle, trainers slapping concrete. Quinn shoved past a stumbling tourist and lengthened her stride, leather watch band tight against her wrist. Three weeks of surveillance, and now he ran like a man with something real to lose. Rain hammered her shoulders, soaked through her collar, ran cold down her spine as she pushed harder. The figure ahead cut under a streetlamp. Tomás. She’d known the medallion would catch the light eventually. He ducked into an alley between a boarded chemist and a betting shop. Quinn followed, shoes sliding on wet brick. The air smelled of rotting cardboard and petrol. Tomás glanced back once, expression wide, then dropped to a metal grate and dragged it free with both hands. The opening gaped black. Quinn reached the edge as his legs disappeared below. The Saint Christopher glinted once more before shadow swallowed it. She crouched. Stairs hewn into brick dropped into damp darkness. Music thumped from somewhere below, faint but recognisable, layered under voices in languages she didn’t know. She’d chased him from the Raven’s Nest, through three blocks of Soho, and now he wanted her underground. The market moved every full moon. Tonight the moon sat full and white behind the clouds. Quinn checked her phone. No signal. She pulled her coat tighter and took the first step, then the second. The air changed at once, cool and thick with clove smoke and something copper-sweet. Her boots echoed on metal landings. Footsteps below picked up speed. The tunnel narrowed, then opened into a platform lit by strung bulbs and flickering strip lights. Stalls crowded the old tracks, canvas awnings sagging under rainwater that leaked through cracks above. A woman in a long red coat weighed bone tokens on a brass scale. A man with sigils burnt into his forearms argued with a buyer over a jar that glowed faint green. Quinn kept low behind a stack of crates and watched Tomás weave through the crowd, head down, one hand pressed to his chest. She stepped out, shoulders squared, and the nearest vendor glanced up, then away. The medallion, she reminded herself. Follow the medallion. Tomás reached a stall draped in black cloth and spoke quickly to the seller, an older woman whose eyes flicked over Quinn’s approaching figure twice. Quinn drew nearer. The woman raised one hand and the canvas folded shut around Tomás like a stage curtain. Quinn stopped short. Two men stepped from either side of the next stall, both broader than her, both smiling as if the moment had been rehearsed. “Wrong way, love,” the taller one said. His accent flattened the vowels into East London. “Market rules. Token or gone.” Quinn kept her posture straight. “Metropolitan Police. I’m looking for the man who just went in there.” The shorter man chuckled. “Police don’t carry tokens. You don’t belong.” She reached into her pocket, felt the cold weight of her warrant card, and left it where it was. Behind her, two more bodies closed the path she’d taken. She turned slightly, keeping everyone in view. Her fingers brushed the leather band of her watch. The stairs back up looked a long way off now. Tomás’s voice drifted from behind the curtain, low and hurried, someone else answering in Spanish. She caught the name Herrera, then nothing more useful. The market noise swallowed the rest. The taller man held out a hand. “Token means you pay your way. No token means someone else pays for you. Understand?” Quinn measured the distance between herself and the curtain. Six paces, maybe seven. She could push past one of them, but the second would grab her. She could retreat and lose Tomás for good. She could stand here and argue protocol that meant nothing to these people. Her phone now showed a single trembling bar. She thumbed it on anyway and hit record. The screen stayed dark. The bar vanished. Right. She met the taller man’s eyes. “Tell him Detective Quinn is here. Tell him he still owes me answers about DS Morris.” The man’s smile thinned. He looked past her to the other side of the platform. Quinn caught the movement in her peripheral vision: a small crowd forming, faces half-hidden beneath hoods and scarves. Some held phones up. Others watched with the quiet interest of people who’d seen this show before. The shorter man shifted his weight. Bone tokens clinked in his coat lining. “Three years ago,” Quinn said, voice steady, “a detective died in a case no one closed. His name was on a file that disappeared the same night your friend here lost his NHS licence. I want the file back. I want to know why the body never reached the morgue.” The curtain twitched. Tomás’s profile appeared in silhouette against the inner light, head bent as he spoke to someone out of sight. He raised his hand, the scar along his forearm catching the glow. Then he turned, saw her through the gap, and froze. Quinn didn’t move. The two blockers waited. The market sellers behind their stalls had gone quieter, conversations dropping to murmurs. She heard water dripping onto canvas. She heard the low hum of the old station’s electrics. She heard Tomás’s breath hitch once, sharp enough to reach her. He stepped fully into view. The Saint Christopher rested against his shirt collar, darker than she remembered. Rain still clung to his curls. His eyes met hers across the platform. “Detective,” he said. The word sounded careful. Quinn gave a single nod. Neither of them smiled. The taller blocker glanced between them, uncertain now. The shorter one kept his hand inside his coat. Tomás lifted the canvas aside with two fingers. Behind him, rows of glass jars lined a narrow counter. Some contained teeth. Others contained light. The woman who had closed the stall watched Quinn with patient interest, as if deciding whether this interruption would cost her a sale or entertain her for the evening. “You shouldn’t be here,” Tomás said. The scar on his arm flushed darker. “Not without an escort. Not after what happened to your partner.” Quinn held his gaze. “Then tell me what happened.” The market noise swelled again around them. Someone laughed at a distant stall. A bone token clattered onto a scale and rang clear. Tomás looked at the blockers, then back at Quinn. The rain above found a new crack and began to fall between them in a thin line, soaking the platform edge at Quinn’s feet. He let the canvas drop back into place but didn’t move. The taller blocker spoke first. “She pays, or she pays. Your call, Herrera.” Quinn kept her hands visible. She felt the leather watch strap against her skin, the recording app still attempting to capture sound it would never reach. She waited for the next decision, hers or his, while the underground market continued its trade around them. Tomás exhaled. The medallion shifted against his clavicle as he stepped forward. “Walk with me,” he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1172
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1172
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"down her spine"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"down her spine"
1"echoed"
2"footsteps"
3"flicked"
4"weight"
5"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
91.84% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences112
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1172
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
58.30% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1036
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.83
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Saint2
Christopher2
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Tomás13
Quinn19
East1
London1
Spanish1
Herrera1
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Tomás"
3"Quinn"
4"Herrera"
places
0"Raven"
1"Soho"
2"East"
3"London"
4"Spanish"
globalScore0.583
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if deciding whether this interruption would cost her a sale or entertain her for the evening"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1172
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean30.05
std20.61
cv0.686
sampleLengths
011
167
213
357
460
539
65
787
865
926
1020
1117
1211
1355
1430
1522
1647
1730
1816
1950
2013
2150
2244
237
2440
2530
267
279
2817
2953
3024
319
3223
3333
3411
3513
3644
3712
385
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"been rehearsed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs184
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences120
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1038
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.029865125240847785
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004816955684007707
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean9.77
std6.79
cv0.695
sampleLengths
011
117
216
317
47
51
69
713
87
98
1019
114
129
1310
142
158
1616
1718
186
1910
204
212
2213
2314
246
255
2616
2715
2814
2919
3023
3113
325
333
3425
353
3616
373
3823
397
408
415
425
4312
444
457
4619
4710
487
499
43.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.30833333333333335
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners37
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then he turned, saw her"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences104
matches
0"She’d known the medallion would"
1"He ducked into an alley"
2"She’d chased him from the"
3"She pulled her coat tighter"
4"Her boots echoed on metal"
5"She stepped out, shoulders squared,"
6"His accent flattened the vowels"
7"She reached into her pocket,"
8"She turned slightly, keeping everyone"
9"Her fingers brushed the leather"
10"She caught the name Herrera,"
11"She could push past one"
12"She could retreat and lose"
13"She could stand here and"
14"Her phone now showed a"
15"She thumbed it on anyway"
16"She met the taller man’s"
17"He looked past her to"
18"He raised his hand, the"
19"She heard water dripping onto"
ratio0.26
3.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences104
matches
0"The suspect bolted left through"
1"Quinn shoved past a stumbling"
2"The figure ahead cut under"
3"She’d known the medallion would"
4"He ducked into an alley"
5"Quinn followed, shoes sliding on"
6"The air smelled of rotting"
7"Tomás glanced back once, expression"
8"The opening gaped black."
9"Quinn reached the edge as"
10"The Saint Christopher glinted once"
11"Stairs hewn into brick dropped"
12"Music thumped from somewhere below,"
13"She’d chased him from the"
14"The market moved every full"
15"Tonight the moon sat full"
16"Quinn checked her phone."
17"She pulled her coat tighter"
18"The air changed at once,"
19"Her boots echoed on metal"
ratio0.913
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Stalls crowded the old tracks, canvas awnings sagging under rainwater that leaked through cracks above."
1"Two men stepped from either side of the next stall, both broader than her, both smiling as if the moment had been rehearsed."
2"The woman who had closed the stall watched Quinn with patient interest, as if deciding whether this interruption would cost her a sale or entertain her for the …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn said, voice steady,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.8452%