Run: 2026-05-10-01KR90JXZNS7J8DFM9J6B0G5MP

Run Details

Duration:
8.4s
Cost:
$0.003381
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heavy spray of the London night slicked the pavement, turning the asphalt into a black mirror that fractured under the rhythmic pound of my boots. My chest burned with the familiar, rhythmic thud of a hunt. Ahead, the hooded figure swerved around a corner, damp trainers splashing through puddles, fleeing toward the derelict entrance of the abandoned Camden Tube station. "Stop right there, Herrera!" My voice cut through the downpour, sharp and unwavering. Tomás glanced over his shoulder, his face a tight mask of agitation, before ducking into the dark maw of the station stairs. I didn't hesitate. I vaulted over the rusted turnstiles, my salt-and-pepper hair plastered against my forehead. The air below shifted instantly, turning from the metallic scent of rain to something stagnant, thick with the smell of wet earth and copper. This was the Veil Market. Its location drifted like a ghost, tethered to the lunar cycle, and tonight, it had settled deep in this hollowed-out concrete tomb. I hit the bottom of the escalator, my hand dropping instinctively to the holster at my hip. The transition from the silent streets to the subterranean cavern was jarring. The dark space hummed with an unnatural, vibrating frequency that made my teeth ache. Stalls lined the derelict platforms, draped in heavy, velvet fabric, selling items that held no place in any police evidence locker. Glass jars filled with swirling, opalescent smoke sat beside daggers etched with languages that twisted when I tried to focus on the runes. Herrera was weaving through the crowd, his olive skin pale against the dim, flickering lanterns hung from the grimy pipes. He didn't look like a man running from justice; he looked like a man running from his own shadow. "Herrera, I have questions about the Morris case," I shouted, my words swallowed by the low, guttural chanting echoing from a nearby stall. "The trail ends with you." He didn't stop. He pushed through a cluster of hooded figures, his hand clutching a small, bone-white token. He vanished behind a stack of rotted, damp wooden pallets, heading toward the deeper, restricted tunnels. I paused, my boots skidding to a halt on the grime-streaked floor. The energy here tasted like ozone. My pulse hammered in my ears, yet my mind remained tactical, precise. I checked the watch on my left wrist. Thirteen years of service had taught me that survival was not about the chase; it was about knowing when the risk shifted from investigation to suicide. The market creatures watched me now, their eyes reflecting the sickly, greenish light of the neon signs further back. They saw the badge; they saw the scent of the surface world clinging to my coat like cheap perfume. I reached the pallets just as a heavy, iron-bound door slammed shut at the end of the tunnel. It wasn't just a door. It was a barrier, reinforced with wards that pulsed with a faint, crimson light. My hand hovered over the cold steel of the handle. I breathed in, tasting the metallic tang of the ward. If I turned back, I’d lose him. I’d lose the only link to the night DS Morris vanished, the night the rules of my reality snapped like glass. If I bargained my way through, I was crossing a line no detective was supposed to navigate. A ragged, stooped figure draped in tattered grey wool stepped from the shadows of a booth, a tray of polished crow skulls rattling in his hands. "The girl in the coat wants the truth," the figure rasped, his voice sounding like dry leaves skittering on concrete. "But the truth is a heavy coin, Detective Quinn. Do you have the currency to pay for what lies behind that door?" I didn't answer. I reached into my pocket, pulling out a tarnished silver lighter—a relic from my father. I didn't blink. I shoved past the crone, ignoring the frantic whispers that erupted from the nearby stalls. The door hissed as I forced it open, the ward flaring hot against my skin. Beyond the threshold, the world felt thinner, frayed at the edges. I wasn't just chasing a suspect anymore. I was stepping into the architecture of a nightmare. Herrera stood at the edge of a deep, flooded maintenance shaft. He held his left arm, the scar along his forearm looking jagged, pulsating beneath his sleeve. He looked desperate, his warm brown eyes wide, searching for an exit that didn't exist. "You shouldn't have followed me, Harlow," he breathed, his voice trembling. "Some doors are meant to stay locked." "Not when the bodies won't stay buried," I countered, keeping my distance, my focus anchored by the steady, familiar weight of my duty. "They aren't bodies anymore," he said, and he pointed a shaking finger at the darkness swirling in the shaft below. A low, resonant sound—a hum that vibrated through the very marrow of my bones—began to intensify. The water at the bottom of the shaft surged upward, not like a tide, but like a reach. It possessed intent. I froze. The smell of copper turned sharp, nauseating. It wasn't blood. It was something older, something metallic and ancient. "What did you do?" I took a step back, the soles of my shoes echoing against the wet, stained concrete. "I tried to heal him," Herrera whispered, his gaze locked on the rising dark mass. "But the debt was too high, and the Market collects its interest in souls, not currency." The light from the surface world seemed to extinguish, casting us into a suffocating, absolute gloom. I drew my weapon, but the cold metal felt wrong against my palm, as if the reality of the tool no longer applied to the geometry of this place. The shadow in the pit breached the surface. It wasn't a man. It was a silhouette stitched together from half-remembered faces and shifting, ink-black smoke. And at the center of the distortion, clear and terrifyingly familiar, was a worn leather watch, identical to mine, hanging from a spectral wrist. My breath hitched. The air turned frigid, turning my exhales into white clouds of panic. "Morris?" I whispered, my voice sounding foreign in the hollow space. The figure didn't speak, but the shadow surged forward, the walls of the tunnel groaning under the pressure of its presence. Herrera threw himself against the far wall, his face drained of all color, his lips moving in a silent, frantic prayer. I found myself back-pedalled to the edge of the shaft, the darkness clawing at my vision, the barrier behind me sealed shut. I was out of time, out of territory, and staring directly into the abyss that had spent three years hunting me. The shadow reached out, a hand made of static and sorrow grasping for my throat, and I realised with a jolt of pure, unadulterated terror that I was the one who had finally been caught.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.615
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1155
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
17.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1155
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count2
2
word"familiar"
count3
3
word"unwavering"
count1
4
word"maw"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count2
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"navigate"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"vibrated"
count1
13
word"gloom"
count1
14
word"spectral"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"rhythmic"
2"familiar"
3"unwavering"
4"maw"
5"velvet"
6"etched"
7"echoing"
8"pulse"
9"pulsed"
10"navigate"
11"weight"
12"vibrated"
13"gloom"
14"spectral"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences75
matches
0"looked desperate"
66.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences75
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences79
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1152
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount1055
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.38
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
London1
Camden1
Tube1
Tomás1
Veil1
Market1
Morris1
Herrera4
persons
0"Tomás"
1"Morris"
2"Herrera"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
70.63% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a man running from his own sh"
1"tasted like ozone"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.868
wordCount1152
matches
0"not like a tide, but like a reach"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
94.99% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean38.4
std18.53
cv0.482
sampleLengths
061
113
262
327
487
539
628
734
864
938
1047
1155
1226
1342
1436
1542
1642
1718
1823
1920
2037
2120
2220
2331
2445
2549
2615
2711
2842
2978
95.91% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"was supposed"
1"been caught"
9.52% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs175
matches
0"was jarring"
1"was weaving"
2"was crossing"
3"wasn't just chasing"
4"was stepping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences79
ratio0.063
matches
0"He didn't look like a man running from justice; he looked like a man running from his own shadow."
1"Thirteen years of service had taught me that survival was not about the chase; it was about knowing when the risk shifted from investigation to suicide."
2"They saw the badge; they saw the scent of the surface world clinging to my coat like cheap perfume."
3"I reached into my pocket, pulling out a tarnished silver lighter—a relic from my father."
4"A low, resonant sound—a hum that vibrated through the very marrow of my bones—began to intensify."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1067
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"small, bone-white token."
1"rotted, damp wooden pallets,"
2"heavy, iron-bound door"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.019681349578256794
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006560449859418931
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences79
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences79
mean14.58
std7.32
cv0.502
sampleLengths
026
111
224
313
422
53
613
724
85
922
1017
1112
1214
1321
1423
1520
1619
1723
185
193
2015
2116
2212
236
2412
258
2626
2719
2819
2918
305
3114
3210
3310
347
3521
3617
3726
3820
3922
403
4115
423
4315
4415
4511
467
479
4811
4916
36.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.31645569620253167
totalSentences79
uniqueOpeners25
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences74
matches
0"My chest burned with the"
1"My voice cut through the"
2"I didn't hesitate."
3"I vaulted over the rusted"
4"Its location drifted like a"
5"I hit the bottom of"
6"He didn't look like a"
7"I shouted, my words swallowed"
8"He didn't stop."
9"He pushed through a cluster"
10"He vanished behind a stack"
11"I paused, my boots skidding"
12"My pulse hammered in my"
13"I checked the watch on"
14"They saw the badge; they"
15"I reached the pallets just"
16"It wasn't just a door."
17"It was a barrier, reinforced"
18"My hand hovered over the"
19"I breathed in, tasting the"
ratio0.581
0.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences74
matches
0"The heavy spray of the"
1"My chest burned with the"
2"My voice cut through the"
3"Tomás glanced over his shoulder,"
4"I didn't hesitate."
5"I vaulted over the rusted"
6"The air below shifted instantly,"
7"This was the Veil Market."
8"Its location drifted like a"
9"I hit the bottom of"
10"The transition from the silent"
11"The dark space hummed with"
12"Stalls lined the derelict platforms,"
13"Glass jars filled with swirling,"
14"Herrera was weaving through the"
15"He didn't look like a"
16"I shouted, my words swallowed"
17"He didn't stop."
18"He pushed through a cluster"
19"He vanished behind a stack"
ratio0.919
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences74
matches
0"If I turned back, I’d"
1"If I bargained my way"
ratio0.027
66.87% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The dark space hummed with an unnatural, vibrating frequency that made my teeth ache."
1"Stalls lined the derelict platforms, draped in heavy, velvet fabric, selling items that held no place in any police evidence locker."
2"He held his left arm, the scar along his forearm looking jagged, pulsating beneath his sleeve."
3"He looked desperate, his warm brown eyes wide, searching for an exit that didn't exist."
4"A low, resonant sound—a hum that vibrated through the very marrow of my bones—began to intensify."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"the figure rasped, his voice sounding like dry leaves skittering on concrete"
1"he breathed, his voice trembling"
2"I whispered, my voice sounding foreign in the hollow space"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"I shouted (shout)"
1"he breathed (breathe)"
2"Herrera whispered (whisper)"
3"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.615
67.8946%