Run: 2026-05-19-01KS0TKG3EM66KJ504ZKBY9BME

Run Details

Duration:
34.0s
Cost:
$0.067655
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Tomás Herrera’s trainer clipped the edge of an overturned plastic bin, scattering sour cabbage and shredded flyers across the wet alley pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn did not break her stride. She vaulted the obstacle, landing hard on both heels before driving herself forward into the darkness. "Stop!" Her shout ricocheted off the narrow brick walls. Herrera did not freeze. He rounded a sharp corner, his soggy dark curls bouncing, the silver Saint Christopher medallion swinging wildly against his chest. Harlow checked her watch. The worn leather strap chafed her left wrist. Her forty-one-year-old knees throbbed with every impact, but eighteen years on the force had drilled a stubborn, relentless momentum into her bones. She kept her gaze locked on the suspect’s retreating white jacket. Herrera was fast, but he breathed heavily, his shoulders hunching as he struggled for air. He was a paramedic, not an athlete. And he was guilty. They darted past a shuttered Italian deli, the scent of rancid olive oil and wet cardboard filling Harlow's nose. Herrera leaped over a low iron chain, stumbling into the derelict courtyard of an abandoned Camden estate. He scrambled toward a concrete stairwell that descended into the earth, disappearing beneath the surface. Harlow halted at the lip of the stairs. The rusted iron gate at the entrance hung off its hinges, fresh grease gleaming on the snapped padlock. A yellow sign, faded and spray-painted with jagged graffiti, read: *London Underground - Closed.* Below, the darkness yawned, thick and silent. No backup would arrive in time. Even if she called it in, explaining why she pursued a struck-off paramedic into a sealed Tube station would sound like madness. The higher-ups still called Morris’s death a tragic gas leak. Harlow knew better. She had seen the claw marks on his chest. She drew her Glock, her thumb flicking off the safety, and went down. The air changed with every step. The distant hiss of tyres on wet London asphalt faded, replaced by the heavy, echoing silence of the subterranean world. Moisture dripped from a criss-cross of rusty iron pipes overhead. *Drip. Drop.* The rhythmic sound echoed through the tiled vault like a slow tick-tock of a clock. Harlow crept forward, holding her weapon in a double-handed grip. Her boots made no sound on the slime-slick tiles. Up ahead, a faint, flickering amber glow spilled from a blocked-off platform. Not electrical light. Torches. Lanterns. A low murmur of voices hummed through the tunnels, a discordant chorus of bartering in languages she did not recognise. She pressed her back against the cool tiles of a soot-stained archway. Ten yards away, Herrera stood before a heavy, iron-reinforced oak door fitted directly into the brickwork of the old platform tunnel. A massive figure blocked his path. The gatekeeper wore a filthy, woolen trench coat, the hood pulled low to obscure his face. "The price," a voice rumbled, deep and grating like grinding stones. Herrera reached into his jacket pocket. He held up a small, polished piece of bone. Harlow stepped out of the shadow of the archway. "Put your hands where I can see them, Herrera." The paramedic stiffened. He slowly turned his head to look over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes reflecting the dim torchlight from the tunnel wall. "Detective Quinn. You are a long way from your patch." "Step away from the gate." "You don't want to do this here." "I want answers about Morris." Harlow lowered her sight to his chest. "And I want them now." "The police have no authority in this place," the gatekeeper sneered. "I have fifteen rounds of lead that say otherwise." The gatekeeper took a step forward. Slitted yellow eyes beneath his hood flashed with sudden, predatory interest. "A dry one," the gatekeeper whispered, his tongue clicking against black teeth. "No token. No passage." "This is your last warning," Harlow said. Herrera shifted his weight, his fingers twitching near his St. Christopher medallion. "Quinn, listen to me. If you step through that door, you don't come back. The people down here... they aren't citizens. They don't have rights." "Is that why you patch them up, Tomás? Off the books?" "Someone has to." "They found Morris with his ribs crushed from the inside out." "He went looking for things he shouldn't have," Herrera said, his voice dropping to a harsh whisper. "Just like you." "He was my partner." "And he's dead. Go home, Harlow. While you still can." "I don't walk away from a lead." "Then you've signed your own death warrant." Herrera pressed the bone token into the gatekeeper's gray, swollen hand. The massive door ground open. A wave of heat and sound hit Harlow's face. Beyond the threshold lay a sprawling, subterranean cavern of chaos. Stands constructed from scrap metal and bone lined the old railway tracks. Vendors shouted in tongues that rasped like dry leaves. A pungent mixture of burning sage, roasted meat, and ozone filled the air. Cages hung from the iron rafters, containing small, weeping creatures with too many limbs. "No!" Harlow lunged forward. She grabbed Herrera's arm. Her grip was iron, her fingers digging into his sleeve. Herrera wrenched his arm back, but Harlow used her momentum to spin him against the stone doorframe. "You're coming with me." "Look behind you, Quinn," Herrera whispered, his face pale under the amber torches. Harlow did not look. She kept her weapon pressed against Herrera's ribs. "A cheap trick." "Not a trick." A cold, wet hand clamped onto Harlow’s wrist. The grip was impossibly strong, squeezing until her bones creaked. Her fingers lost their feeling, and her Glock slipped from her hand, clattering against the stone floor. She spun, her free elbow driving backward with military precision, aiming for a soft target. The blow struck something hard as steel. A towering figure stood behind her, wearing a butcher's apron stained with old, black blood. The creature's face was a mass of writhing, pale tentacles where a mouth should be. "Fresh meat," the butcher hissed. "Get off her!" Herrera yelled, reaching for his medical bag. The gatekeeper grabbed Herrera by the shoulder, hurling him into the crowd of the market. Two more figures emerged from the swirling smoke of the bazaar, their fingers elongated into sharp, black talons. Harlow reached for her backup weapon at her ankle, but the butcher lifted her off her feet, her boots dangling three inches above the stone floor. The heavy oak door slammed shut behind her, locking out the world above.
created_at"2026-05-19T19:15:04.444Z" 5/19/2026, 7:15:04 PM
model"google/gemini-3.5-flash-20260519"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency1708
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time33902
tokens_prompt4663
tokens_completion4255
native_tokens_prompt4507
native_tokens_completion6766
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning5273
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
num_fetches(null)
web_search_engine(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"STOP"
service_tier"standard"
usage0.0676545
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"bd50061c-e1d8-469e-96b1-d322e77378f8"
id"uLYMauyOKLzSz7IPsp3BoA4"
is_byokfalse
latency1708
model_permaslug"google/gemini-3.5-flash-20260519"
provider_name"Google AI Studio"
status200
user_agent"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.15.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer(null)
request_id"req-1779218104-DgvliQPvGk5YFB2E4Xad"
session_id(null)
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1779218104-FER0sDYxY97tsIH0VTcm"
upstream_id"uLYMauyOKLzSz7IPsp3BoA4"
total_cost0.0676545
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"Google AI Studio"
response_cache_source_id(null)

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"a voice rumbled deep [deep]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.067
95.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1079
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1079
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"gleaming"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"constructed"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"gleaming"
2"echoing"
3"silence"
4"rhythmic"
5"echoed"
6"weight"
7"whisper"
8"constructed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences85
matches
0"was guilty"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences85
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences104
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords6
totalWords1080
ratio0.006
matches
0"London Underground - Closed."
1"Drip. Drop."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount898
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Herrera15
Harlow15
Quinn1
Saint1
Christopher2
Italian1
Camden1
Underground1
Tube1
Morris1
Glock2
London2
St1
persons
0"Herrera"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Saint"
4"Morris"
5"Glock"
places
0"London"
1"St"
globalScore0.665
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1080
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean17.14
std13.59
cv0.793
sampleLengths
022
124
29
324
471
519
632
78
832
97
1050
1113
1253
1336
1420
1512
1621
1722
1811
1915
209
219
2225
2310
245
257
2617
2711
289
2917
3016
317
3237
3311
343
3511
3620
374
3810
397
407
4111
425
439
4458
454
4614
4717
484
4913
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs151
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences104
ratio0.01
matches
0"A yellow sign, faded and spray-painted with jagged graffiti, read: *London Underground - Closed.*"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount910
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"heavy, iron-reinforced oak"
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.015384615384615385
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005494505494505495
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences104
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences104
mean10.38
std5.77
cv0.556
sampleLengths
022
18
216
39
44
520
64
78
822
911
1015
117
124
1319
1417
1515
168
1718
1814
197
206
2122
2210
233
249
2513
266
2720
2810
291
3016
3110
329
3312
343
351
361
3720
3812
3921
406
4116
4211
436
449
459
469
473
4822
4910
66.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.41346153846153844
totalSentences104
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences80
matches
0"She vaulted the obstacle, landing"
1"Her shout ricocheted off the"
2"He rounded a sharp corner,"
3"Her forty-one-year-old knees throbbed with"
4"She kept her gaze locked"
5"He was a paramedic, not"
6"They darted past a shuttered"
7"He scrambled toward a concrete"
8"She had seen the claw"
9"She drew her Glock, her"
10"Her boots made no sound"
11"She pressed her back against"
12"He held up a small,"
13"He slowly turned his head"
14"She grabbed Herrera's arm."
15"Her grip was iron, her"
16"She kept her weapon pressed"
17"Her fingers lost their feeling,"
18"She spun, her free elbow"
ratio0.238
35.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences80
matches
0"Tomás Herrera’s trainer clipped the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn did not"
2"She vaulted the obstacle, landing"
3"Her shout ricocheted off the"
4"Herrera did not freeze."
5"He rounded a sharp corner,"
6"Harlow checked her watch."
7"The worn leather strap chafed"
8"Her forty-one-year-old knees throbbed with"
9"She kept her gaze locked"
10"Herrera was fast, but he"
11"He was a paramedic, not"
12"They darted past a shuttered"
13"Herrera leaped over a low"
14"He scrambled toward a concrete"
15"Harlow halted at the lip"
16"The rusted iron gate at"
17"A yellow sign, faded and"
18"The higher-ups still called Morris’s"
19"Harlow knew better."
ratio0.85
62.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"Even if she called it"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He scrambled toward a concrete stairwell that descended into the earth, disappearing beneath the surface."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"the gatekeeper whispered, his tongue clicking against black teeth"
1"Herrera said, his voice dropping to a harsh whisper"
2"Herrera whispered, his face pale under the amber torches"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Her shout (shout)"
1"the gatekeeper sneered (sneer)"
2"the gatekeeper whispered (whisper)"
3"Herrera whispered (whisper)"
4"the butcher hissed (hiss)"
5"Herrera yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.267
leniency0.533
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.4
82.0395%