Run: 2026-05-20-01KS25TAGGYKZD142REA0SKK8G

Run Details

Duration:
9.7s
Cost:
$0.013992
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heel of Detective Harlow Quinn’s left boot caught the slick edge of a discarded wooden crate, sending a spray of muddy water across the brickwork. She didn't stumble. Her focus remained locked on the bobbing, hurried shadow thirty yards ahead, a figure frantically weaving through the claustrophobic alleys of Camden. Rain pelted her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, plastering the wet strands to her forehead, but she ignored the stinging cold. "Stop! Police!" The figure, a local runner for a suspected magical smuggling ring, ignored the command, rounding a sharp corner with a desperate scramble. Quinn pressed her arm against her ribs, stabilizing her heavy service weapon beneath her wet coat, and surged after him. Her forty-one-year-old knees protested the sudden burst of speed, but her military precision kicked in, forcing her muscles to comply. She checked her worn leather watch. Nearly midnight. Three years ago to the day, DS Morris had vanished into a dark, unexplained void just like this one, leaving behind nothing but cold ashes and a shattered partnership. She wouldn't let this lead slip away too. The runner lunged toward a crumbling concrete stairwell, descending rapidly into the bowels of an abandoned Tube station. Quinn halted at the lip of the entrance. A heavy, iron-scented draft drifted up from the dark gaping maw, smelling faintly of sulfur, old copper pennies, and damp earth. A faded sign, rusted and half-obscured by grime, marked the entrance as private property. Below, the faint, chaotic hum of a crowd reverberated through the concrete walls, accompanied by the strange clinking of glassware and muttered bartering. She reached into her coat, her fingers brushing the cold metal of her handcuffs. *Do it now, Quinn. Before he gets lost in the crowd.* She descended the slick steps, descending deeper into the subterranean dark. At the base of the stairs, a massive, broad-shouldered bouncer in a heavy wool coat blocked the path, his face obscured by a low-brimmed cap. "Token." Quinn flashed her Metropolitan Police badge, thrusting it directly into his face. "Official business. Step aside." The bouncer didn't blink. He pointed a thick, scarred finger toward a small brass tray resting on a nearby barrel. "No badge works down here, love. Bone token. Or you turn around." "I don't have time for this." Quinn shifted her weight, preparing to sweep his legs, but the bouncer remained unmoved, his hand sliding toward a heavy iron bar resting behind the door. A hand reached over Quinn's shoulder, dropping a small, polished white sliver of animal rib into the brass tray. It clinked softly. "She is with me," a calm, accented voice said. Quinn spun round, her hand instantly dropping to her holster. Tomás Herrera stood behind her, his short curly dark brown hair glistening with beads of sweat. He wore a heavy canvas jacket, the collar turned up against the damp underground chill, and his Saint Christopher medallion glinted in the dim orange light of the entry torches. "Herrera," Quinn said, her voice dropping into a dangerous, low register. "What the hell are you doing here?" "Saving your life, Detective. Move along, my friend. We are inside." The bouncer bagged the bone token and gestured them through with a grunt. They stepped through a heavy leather curtain into the Veil Market. The abandoned station platform had been transformed into a labyrinth of wooden stalls, heavy velvet drapes, and flickering torches. A thick, sweet haze of burning lavender and metallic copper stung Quinn's nostrils. Vendors shouted prices in languages she didn't recognize, offering jars of shimmering blue liquid, dried roots that twitched in their glass containers, and ancient, leather-bound books that smelled of rot. "You lost your license for a reason, Tomás," Quinn said, keeping her eyes scanning the dense crowd for the runner. "Using unsanctioned medical treatments on... whatever these things are." "I saved lives, Harlow. The NHS didn't care about the people who don't exist on their forms." "The law cares." "The law is blind." Tomás walked past a stall selling dried silver moths, his hand brushing against his left forearm, where a jagged knife scar peeked out from beneath his sleeve. "You are hunting a ghost." "That runner has answers about Morris." "That runner is already deep in the market. If you pull a gun here, these people will tear you apart before you can clear your holster." Quinn stepped closer, her sharp jaw tightening as she glared at the former paramedic. "You're shielding them. Just like you shield Silas at that Soho dive." "The Raven's Nest is a peaceful sanctuary. We do not want trouble." "Then tell me where the runner went." Tomás hesitated, his warm brown eyes reflecting the flickering orange torchlight of a nearby potion merchant. He looked down at his medallion, then back to Quinn. "He went toward the old northbound tracks. The black market dealers. He is selling what he stole." "What did he steal, Tomás?" "Something that belonged to your partner." Quinn felt a cold spike of adrenaline hit her chest. She pushed past Tomás, elbowing her way through a throng of tall, pale figures wrapped in heavy silk cloaks. The scent of ozone and old dust filled her lungs as she neared the dark railway tunnel. The crowd began to thin, replaced by heavier, more dangerous-looking sentries guarding the darker corners of the platform. She spotted the runner. He was standing by a low wooden table, pleading with a merchant who was examining a small, brass pocket watch. *Morris's watch.* "Police! Don't move!" Quinn drew her weapon, aiming it straight at the runner's chest. The market instantly went silent. Dozens of eyes, some glittering with unnatural amber light, locked onto her. The merchant, a withered man with grey, paper-thin skin, slowly lowered the watch onto the table. "You shouldn't have brought that iron in here, human," the merchant whispered. The runner didn't hesitate. He grabbed the watch, turned, and bolted straight into the dark, yawning abyss of the subway tunnel. "Quinn, don't!" Tomás shouted from behind her. "The third rail is still live down there! Not with electricity!" Quinn didn't listen. She vaulted over the edge of the platform, her boots slamming onto the wooden ties of the track, and chased the shadow into the black.
created_at"2026-05-20T07:50:16.854Z" 5/20/2026, 7:50:16 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.296
leniency0.593
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.12% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"maw"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"reverberated"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"glistening"
count1
6
word"chill"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"sanctuary"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"maw"
2"chaotic"
3"reverberated"
4"weight"
5"glistening"
6"chill"
7"velvet"
8"scanning"
9"sanctuary"
10"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences59
matches(empty)
21.79% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences59
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords13
totalWords1040
ratio0.013
matches
0"Do it now, Quinn. Before he gets lost in the crowd."
1"Morris's watch."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
53.61% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount830
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.93
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn16
Camden1
Morris2
Tube1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Veil1
Market1
Tomás5
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Market"
7"Tomás"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.536
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1040
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean26
std22.75
cv0.875
sampleLengths
071
12
2107
318
466
525
636
71
816
932
1032
1122
129
1356
1418
1511
1613
1773
1829
1917
203
2136
226
2326
2426
2512
267
2726
2817
295
306
3164
3224
332
3414
3533
3612
3721
3818
3928
93.37% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences59
matches
0"gets lost"
1"been transformed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs140
matches
0"was standing"
1"was examining"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences78
ratio0
matches(empty)
70.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount842
adjectiveStacks5
stackExamples
0"heavy, iron-scented draft"
1"massive, broad-shouldered bouncer"
2"small, polished white sliver"
3"ancient, leather-bound books"
4"grey, paper-thin skin,"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.021377672209026127
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.014251781472684086
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean13.33
std7.93
cv0.594
sampleLengths
026
13
222
320
42
522
620
720
86
92
1029
118
1218
138
1421
1514
1623
1714
184
197
2011
2125
221
2312
244
254
2616
2712
2832
2919
303
319
3210
3316
3430
3511
367
3711
3813
3911
4019
4113
4230
4320
449
4517
463
4731
485
496
64.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4230769230769231
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences57
matches
0"She didn't stumble."
1"Her focus remained locked on"
2"Her forty-one-year-old knees protested the"
3"She checked her worn leather"
4"She wouldn't let this lead"
5"She reached into her coat,"
6"She descended the slick steps,"
7"He pointed a thick, scarred"
8"It clinked softly."
9"He wore a heavy canvas"
10"They stepped through a heavy"
11"He looked down at his"
12"She pushed past Tomás, elbowing"
13"She spotted the runner."
14"He was standing by a"
15"He grabbed the watch, turned,"
16"She vaulted over the edge"
ratio0.298
3.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences57
matches
0"The heel of Detective Harlow"
1"She didn't stumble."
2"Her focus remained locked on"
3"Rain pelted her closely cropped"
4"The figure, a local runner"
5"Quinn pressed her arm against"
6"Her forty-one-year-old knees protested the"
7"She checked her worn leather"
8"She wouldn't let this lead"
9"The runner lunged toward a"
10"Quinn halted at the lip"
11"A heavy, iron-scented draft drifted"
12"A faded sign, rusted and"
13"She reached into her coat,"
14"She descended the slick steps,"
15"Quinn flashed her Metropolitan Police"
16"The bouncer didn't blink."
17"He pointed a thick, scarred"
18"Quinn shifted her weight, preparing"
19"A hand reached over Quinn's"
ratio0.912
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Before he gets lost in"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Vendors shouted prices in languages she didn't recognize, offering jars of shimmering blue liquid, dried roots that twitched in their glass containers, and anci…"
1"He was standing by a low wooden table, pleading with a merchant who was examining a small, brass pocket watch."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice dropping into a dangerous, low register"
75.93% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"the merchant whispered (whisper)"
1"Tomás shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.185
leniency0.37
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.148
82.3461%