Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEMXPSJF1SVFEYKFKTHGC8

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Duration:
1m 11s
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$0.001634
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign above The Raven's Nest buzzed with a familiar hum, casting a sickly glow on the rain-slicked pavement of Soho. Aurora Carter—Rory to those who had known her well—stood under its light, watching the raindrops race each other down to the sidewalk. At twenty-five, she had developed an immunity to London's persistent drizzle, but tonight it seemed particularly relentless, matching the gloom that had taken up residence in her chest since receiving the phone call. She pushed through the heavy wooden door of the bar, and the warmth hit her first—a welcome change from the autumn chill. The Raven's Nest hadn't changed much since she'd last been here two years ago, though she hadn't been a regular—far from it. The same dim lighting created shadows that danced across walls covered with maps from ages long past. The scent of whiskey and pine hung in the air, welcoming patrons like an old friend. As her eyes adjusted to the lighting, her gaze caught a figure at the far end of the bar. He was tall, with hair that once had been auburn but was now mostly gray, streaked through with silver. There was a neatness to his appearance that she remembered—the same precision with which he had always approached his work. A silver signet ring glinted faintly on his right hand as he wiped down a glass with practiced, economical movements. Rory's breath caught. "Silas?" The name felt foreign in her mouth, as if she'd forgotten how to say it. The man turned, and recognition flashed across his features. He dropped the glass onto the bar with a quiet clink and took a limping step forward. His slight limp seemed almost endearing, a reminder that time had touched him too, undeterred by his power and precision. "Aurora," he said, her name like a melody in his baritone voice. "I thought that was you coming through the door. You've—" He paused, his hazel eyes scanning her face. "I'm sorry, it's been too long." "Too long," she echoed, moving further into the bar. The leather soles of her boots squeaked softly on the polished floor. "I didn't know you owned this place now." "Just over two years," Silas replied, motioning for her to take a seat at the bar. "Can I get you something? It's on the house, seeing as you're practically family these days." A bitter laugh escaped Rory as she slid onto the worn leather stool. "Family? That's one way to put it." A moment passed between them, heavy with the weight of what wasn't said. Silas eventually nodded and retrieved a bottle of something amber-colored from a shelf behind the bar. "You still remember that I prefer Bushmills," Rory said, surprise tinging her voice. "I'm impressed." "Some things you don't forget," he replied, pouring the whiskey and sliding the glass toward her. Rory took the drink, the first real warmth she'd felt all evening seeping into her palms. She watched Silas as he nodded a greeting to a patron who had just come through the door, placing a freshly wiped glass on the bar in front of the man. "You look well," she finally said, taking a sip. The whiskey burned pleasantly down her throat, sharp and banner. "As do you." Silas turned back to face her, leaning against the bar. "London's been treating you alright?" "Alright enough, I suppose." Rory traced the rim of her glass with her finger. "I'm a delivery person now, actually. For the Golden Empress. Pays the bills." Silas raised an eyebrow. "A far cry from the future lawyer we all thought you'd become." "Life has a way of changing plans," she said curtly. "Indeed it does." Silas watched her for a moment, as if gauging whether to press further. "I heard about Cardiff. And about Evan." Rory's fingers stilled on the glass. "News travels fast around here." "In this business, information is currency," he replied, his tone gentle but firm. "I'm sorry, Aurora. No one deserved what he did to you." The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist twinged, a ghost pain that sometimes surfaced when she felt particularly vulnerable. She saw Silas' eyes flicker down to it before returning to her face. "What business is that these days, Silas? Running a bar in Soho?" A small, knowing smile touched his lips. "Many things. Sometimes I think of myself as a keeper of secrets." "So you've always been, in your own way." Rory took another sip of her whiskey, the alcohol beginning to relax the tight muscles in her shoulders. "But you used to have an office and a title. Now you have customers and a blender." "And yet," Silas said, his voice lowering slightly, "some things never change. I still keep track of certain... developments. Especially concerning certain people I care about." There it was—The Spymaster, even in civilian guise, still watched, still measured, still knew more than he let on. "Why didn't you say something when I was here before?" Rory asked. "When you knew what was happening?" Silas sighed, running a hand through his silver-streaked hair. "Would you have believed me? And more importantly," he added, leaning closer, "would you have listened?" "Maybe not," she admitted grudgingly. "I was... different back then." "Were you?" His question hung in the air between them, a challenge that she couldn't quite meet. "People have a tendency to remain who they are at their core, Aurora. Life changes circumstances, but rarely who we are underneath." "Is that what you tell yourself each night?" she shot back, the whiskey loosening her tongue. "That you're still the same man who worked intelligence in Prague? The one who knew how to take three people out with one perfectly placed inscription?" Silas's expression didn't change, but something shifted in his eyes. "That man retired, along with his knee. This man serves a different sort of purpose now." "Playing bartender to people who might be fugitives or spies?" The words were out of her mouth before she could stop them. "What kind of purpose is that?" "A patient one," Silas replied calmly. "One that understands that rushing things generally leads to broken kneecaps and dead informants." Rory laughed despite herself, the tension between them easing slightly. "Some habits really do die hard, don't they?" "Some do, some don't." Silas poured himself a whiskey and raised his glass in a silent toast. "To second chances and unfinished business." "Unfinished business?" Rory asked, taking her cue and clinking her glass against his. "You came here tonight for a reason, Aurora. Don't tell me it was just to reminisce about old times." His piercing hazel eyes held hers captive, demanding truth. "You look like you haven't slept in days. There's something haunting you." The warmth from the whiskey spread through her, loosening the knot in her stomach. She took a deep breath, the story she'd been carrying for months suddenly begging to be told. "It's my mother," she began, the familiar weight pressing down on her chest. "She's been diagnosed with early-onset Alzheimer's. The specialists say it's progressive, and there's nothing they can do to stop it." Silas's expression softened. "I'm sorry to hear that, Rory. Truly." "Thank you." She swallowed, running her thumb over the rim of her glass. "I haven't been back to Cardiff since I left. I haven't seen her or my father in two years. But she's asking for me now. And I don't know if I can face them. Not after everything that happened, not after what she did—or didn't do—when I needed her most." "You're trying to decide whether the past is worth forgiving to be with a mother who may not even remember what hurt you," Silas said, understanding in his voice. Rory stared down at her scarred wrist, the physical mark of the crisis that had driven her from home. "Is it worth it? To go back and face everything that happened? The way they all looked at me like I'd brought it on myself? The way my father tried to 'protect' me by telling me to be more careful, to not make such a fuss?" "It's never as simple as it seems," Silas replied, the lactic acid that burned her, the itching the sweater made against her scar making her more prickly. "And decisions about family rarely have perfect answers. But one thing I've learned, both in my work and in life, is that without closure, we carry our baggage wherever we go. And I do mean 'we,' because I've carried my share too." "You? The untouchable Spymaster?" Rory couldn't help the skepticism in her voice. "Everyone has their Prague," Silas said, a shadow passing over his features. "That's where I got this limp, you know. Not by falling down the stairs. By being too slow, too trusting. By believing a man who had spent years cultivating that trust. The cost was my knee and my career. But it was also, in some ways, my innocence." The old one that he once was. The one with the signet ring. "The weight of regret is heavier than any physical burden." Rory found herself staring at the limp, really seeing it for the first time as more than just a physical consequence. "It's not too late to go back, you know," Silas continued, his voice gentle now. "It might never be easier, but deciding to go home is still a choice you get to make." "I have a delivery job, Silas. And a flat above a bar that I'm renting because it's cheap and convenient. How can I just pick up and leave?" she argued. "Cost is rarely the real obstacle," Silas replied, his tone firm. "You've been doing exactly what you told me you would never do—you've been disappearing. And the people who love you are the ones paying the price." The truth of that statement hit Rory with the force of a physical blow. She had thought she was building a new life, one where no one knew what had happened to her, where she could start fresh. But all she had really done was create a comfortable solitude, one that she had been hiding behind. "Everyone runs from something at some point," Silas said, realizing he'd struck a nerve. "Most of us, eventually, run back. Not because the past is easier the second time, but because stopping running feels more important than the matter you were running from." Rory took a final sip of her whiskey, the liquid fire burning smoothed in her chest. "How do you know so much about running?" "Because I was the best in the business at it," Silas replied with a wry smile. "For decades, I made living a double life seem effortless. But there comes a point where the layers start to chafe, and the weight doesn't feel like protection anymore; it feels like a prison." His eyes met hers, holding a depth of understanding that she hadn't expected. "The human elements of this work—those are the parts that never quite let you go. The mistakes we make with people we care about. That's the part of the job that has no endings." The phone call that had sent her here(Model) had seemed like fate when she'd heard it in the middle of another shift at the Golden Empress, delivering steaming boxes of sesame chicken and lo mein to people who thought they knew what they wanted. Now, sitting in the dim light of her old friend's bar, Rory wondered if fate was a lie people told themselves to Death. "I need another drink," she said, pushing her empty glass across the bar. Silas took it, the familiar clink of glass on wood a sound that felt somehow comforting. "For the road, or for fortification?" he asked, refilling her glass without waiting for an answer. "Maybe both," she replied, running her finger along the new rain trails now appearing in the window behind him. They sat in comfortable silence for a few minutes, watching patrons come and go, the ups and downs of the bar's business. Rory amused that she never imagined she'd see the renowned spy again, much less in a business apron. "One more thing," Silas said as he dried his hands on a towel. "If you decide to go back—which I believe you will—know that whatever happens, this place will still be here. And so will I." Rory studied the man before her—the respected operative turned bar owner, the mentor who seemed to know more than he should, the friend who was still something more than just a friend. The weight of all she carried suddenly felt slightly lighter, as if he were carrying some of it with her. "Thank you," she said finally. "For knowing me better than I knew myself, for sharing too much, and for being exactly who I remember, even if you're not anymore." Silas smiled as he placed her fresh drink in front of her. "That, Aurora, is what time does to us all. Transforms, doesn't destroy." He gestured to her glass. "To tomorrow, whatever it brings." Rory raised her glass, the weight of her decision still pressing on her, but no longer insurmountable. The buzz of the neon sign outside seemed to dance now, a gentle remembrance that some places, like some people, keep a light on for you, regardless of how long you've been away. "To tomorrow," she echoed, taking a sip.
created_at"2026-05-27T10:10:56.869Z" 5/27/2026, 10:10:56 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags45
adverbTagCount6
adverbTags
0"she finally said [finally]"
1"Silas turned back [back]"
2"she said curtly [curtly]"
3"she admitted grudgingly [grudgingly]"
4"Silas replied calmly [calmly]"
5"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.542
leniency1
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.133
75.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2252
totalAiIsmAdverbs11
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count3
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count3
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
5
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
2"perfectly"
3"really"
4"suddenly"
5"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2252
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"race"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"chill"
count1
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count2
8
word"weight"
count6
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"eyebrow"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"perfect"
count1
16
word"comfortable"
count2
17
word"effortless"
count1
18
word"comforting"
count1
19
word"silence"
count1
20
word"dance"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"race"
2"gloom"
3"warmth"
4"chill"
5"reminder"
6"scanning"
7"echoed"
8"weight"
9"traced"
10"eyebrow"
11"flicker"
12"measured"
13"tension"
14"stomach"
15"perfect"
16"comfortable"
17"effortless"
18"comforting"
19"silence"
20"dance"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count2
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
98.21% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"happened to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2239
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1260
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Soho1
Carter1
Rory20
London1
Silas22
Spymaster1
Golden1
Empress1
Death1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Empress"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Golden"
3"Death"
globalScore0.627
windowScore0.5
58.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed particularly relentless matching the gloom that had taken up residence in her chest since receiving the phone call"
1"as if gauging whether to press further"
2"quite meet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2239
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences134
matches
0"understanding that she"
1"amused that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean32.93
std20.32
cv0.617
sampleLengths
078
177
278
33
416
546
636
729
832
920
1029
1115
1216
1347
1419
1518
1627
1716
1810
1923
2011
2124
2233
2312
2419
2543
2626
2719
2818
2925
3010
3139
3242
3326
3428
3520
3618
3723
3813
3940
4031
4133
4210
4363
4429
4565
4669
4712
4883
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs219
matches
0"was building"
1"were carrying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences134
ratio0.052
matches
0"Aurora Carter—Rory to those who had known her well—stood under its light, watching the raindrops race each other down to the sidewalk."
1"She pushed through the heavy wooden door of the bar, and the warmth hit her first—a welcome change from the autumn chill."
2"The Raven's Nest hadn't changed much since she'd last been here two years ago, though she hadn't been a regular—far from it."
3"There was a neatness to his appearance that she remembered—the same precision with which he had always approached his work."
4"There it was—The Spymaster, even in civilian guise, still watched, still measured, still knew more than he let on."
5"\"For decades, I made living a double life seem effortless. But there comes a point where the layers start to chafe, and the weight doesn't feel like protection anymore; it feels like a prison.\" His eyes met hers, holding a depth of understanding that she hadn't expected."
6"Rory studied the man before her—the respected operative turned bar owner, the mentor who seemed to know more than he should, the friend who was still something more than just a friend."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1365
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"respected operative turned bar"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.03956043956043956
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.01684981684981685
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean16.71
std9.7
cv0.581
sampleLengths
023
122
233
322
422
517
616
719
819
920
1020
113
1216
139
1417
1520
1612
1718
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199
2012
218
2216
2316
2413
257
2613
2716
2813
292
3016
3116
3231
339
3410
3513
365
3714
3813
394
4012
4110
4216
437
446
455
4613
4711
4820
4913
58.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3880597014925373
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners52
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences93
matches
0"She pushed through the heavy"
1"He was tall, with hair"
2"He dropped the glass onto"
3"His slight limp seemed almost"
4"he said, her name like"
5"He paused, his hazel eyes"
6"she echoed, moving further into"
7"he replied, pouring the whiskey"
8"She watched Silas as he"
9"she finally said, taking a"
10"she said curtly"
11"he replied, his tone gentle"
12"he added, leaning closer"
13"she admitted grudgingly"
14"His question hung in the"
15"she shot back, the whiskey"
16"His piercing hazel eyes held"
17"She took a deep breath,"
18"she began, the familiar weight"
19"She swallowed, running her thumb"
ratio0.312
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences93
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Aurora Carter—Rory to those who"
2"She pushed through the heavy"
3"The Raven's Nest hadn't changed"
4"The same dim lighting created"
5"The scent of whiskey and"
6"He was tall, with hair"
7"A silver signet ring glinted"
8"Rory's breath caught."
9"The name felt foreign in"
10"The man turned, and recognition"
11"He dropped the glass onto"
12"His slight limp seemed almost"
13"he said, her name like"
14"He paused, his hazel eyes"
15"she echoed, moving further into"
16"The leather soles of her"
17"Silas replied, motioning for her"
18"A bitter laugh escaped Rory"
19"A moment passed between them,"
ratio0.935
53.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"Now, sitting in the dim"
ratio0.011
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"At twenty-five, she had developed an immunity to London's persistent drizzle, but tonight it seemed particularly relentless, matching the gloom that had taken u…"
1"The phone call that had sent her here(Model) had seemed like fate when she'd heard it in the middle of another shift at the Golden Empress, delivering steaming …"
2"Rory studied the man before her—the respected operative turned bar owner, the mentor who seemed to know more than he should, the friend who was still something …"
2.78% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags45
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"The name felt, as if she'd forgotten how to say it"
1"He paused, his hazel eyes scanning her face"
2"Silas watched, as if gauging whether to press further"
3"he replied, his tone gentle but firm"
4"Silas said, his voice lowering slightly,"
5"His question hung, a challenge that she couldn't quite meet"
6"she shot back, the whiskey loosening her tongue"
7"she began, the familiar weight pressing down on her chest"
8"Silas said, a shadow passing over his features"
9"Silas continued, his voice gentle now"
10"Silas replied, his tone firm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he added (add)"
1"she admitted grudgingly (admit)"
2"Silas continued (continue)"
3"she argued (argue)"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.627
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.096
74.5384%