Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEQ23N5EJX488BF14GXNTM

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Duration:
1m 11s
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$0.001417
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Parasail

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter tiptoed past the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of the Fae Grove. The iron chain she had stretched across the path three weeks ago was broken and hanging slack, leaves caught in its twisted links. She knelt, the damp ground seeping through her jeans, and ran her fingers along the severed chain. The edges were ragged, torn not cut—something had broken through with considerable force. Her breath clouded in the unnaturally cold night air. It was the beginning of October, yet the Grove clung to autumn like a lover, refusing to surrender to winter. The ever-present chill wasn’t just from the cooling weather; it seemed baked into the very soil of this place between worlds. Aurora glanced at her watch. 8:47 PM. She had been standing at the entrance to the Grove for exactly three minutes. Three minutes that had stretched into decades in her mind. She straightened and pulled the Heartstone Pendant from beneath her sweater. The deep crimson gem—the one that had been given to her by an unknown benefactor just before her world had unraveled—pulsed faintly against her palm. There it was again, that unmistakable warmth when near a Hel portal, the same warmth she’d felt every night for the past seven days since first noticing the disturbances in London. Her eyes drifted to the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a constant reminder of the childhood accident that had left her with a strange second sight she’d kept hidden from everyone save her childhood friend Eva. That second sight told her the Grove wasn’t empty tonight, despite every logical piece of evidence suggesting otherwise. Years of legal studies had taught her to doubt everything, to examine every angle, to question every assumption. Yet here she stood, alone in a listed park in Richmond—a park where a normal person would find simply deer, foxes, and the occasional escaped pheasant—behind standing stones that should only be a historical curiosity. And she knew, with a certainty that defied rational explanation, that she was being watched. “Okay,” she whispered to herself, more to hear a normal human sound than to actually form a plan. She tucked the pendant back under her sweater, feeling the slight pulse of its silver chain against her neck. “Everything has an explanation. Everything.” As if in response to her statement, the breeze died completely. The last few moments held a faint rustling of leaves—a normal forest sound. Now, silence. Aurora took another step forward. The Grove materialized around her rather than revealed itself. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors— midnight violets and blood oranges—even in darkness, their bioluminescence creating an eerie half-light that made her think of fireflies caught in amber. The first thing she noticed was the wrong sound. At home in her flat above Silas’ bar in London, she’d hear the continuous hum of the city—cars, people, appliances. In normal parks, she’d hear night creatures and rustling leaves. Here, there was only the humming. It began as a high-pitched oscillation, nearly imperceptible, beneath the threshold of normal hearing. As she walked deeper into the clearing, the hum grew slightly in volume. She focused on it, ignoring the hamstrung chain left behind by the mysterious trespasser who had been leaving offerings to a blasphemous god she could feel but not see. The wrongness expanded. The ambient light from the impossible flowers seemed to warp slightly around the edges of her vision, like viewing through a shattered mirror. She blinked, and it resolved, but the feeling remained—a slight pretrained distortion to reality that made her stomach tighten. The second abnormal sound appeared. It started as a whisper—a faint skittering across dead leaves. From the left, then the right, then ahead of her, then behind her. Too many points of origin for a single animal. Aurora stopped dead, her heartbeat suddenly loud in her ears. Not an animal. Too many origins. Her hand instinctively went to the small dagger sheathed at her belt—a self-defense measure Eva had insisted she carry after the incident with Evan. The metal felt cold, impossibly so. She resisted the urge to draw it, telling herself she was being paranoid. Just the wind, Rory. Just the wind. But there was no wind. The third abnormality struck her senses. The temperature took a nosedive. It wasn’t a chilling breeze but rather as if someone had cracked the door to a meat locker directly into the clearing. Aurora shivered, her breath now coming in visible clouds despite the balmy October night outside the Grove’s boundary. That's when she saw it. It was at the far edge of her peripheral vision, and when she tried to focus, it was only the distorted perception of light. Yet when she didn’t look directly, an impossible figure crouched behind a thicket of wildflowers. Its outline seemed too elongated, limbs too thin, shoulders too broad. Impossible shadows attached to it like oil on water. Aurora took a slow, deliberate step backward. Her training taught her that in danger, one must assess, appreciate, and avoid rather than confront blindly. Yet the Heartstone chose that moment to warm significantly against her neck, throbbing in cadence with her frantic pulse. The humming grew louder. The figure shifted behind the flowers. And then the penultimate realization struck her with the force of physical impact. The lack of moon. The impossible flowers were darker now, their light receding as if swallowed by something. The ambient glow from the Fae-touched soil extinguished completely. The Grove plunged into a darkness so absolute, so complete, that she couldn’t tell if her eyes were open or closed. Yet in that profound darkness, Aurora sensed it—all of them. Not just the one figure, but many. Thirty, perhaps forty separate presences surrounding her, encircling her. They emanated no sound, no heat, no warmth of any kind. Only menace. Her fingers trembled as they closed around the hilt of the dagger. She drew it slowly, the sound seeming impossibly loud in the void. The figure stumbled forward, emerging from the complete darkness just feet in front of her. It stood nearly seven feet tall, limbs twisted at impossible angles, its skin—if skin it could be called—was like polished obsidian with cracks of Sapphire blue light pulsing beneath. Its head was elongated, eyes like voids broader than any human’s, yet with ancestral intelligence glimmering in their absolute emptiness. She had read dim rumors of such beings, dismissed them as urban legends until now. Hollow Men. The harbingers. The exiters. Such names were whispered among theorists of Fae-touched phenomenon, copies of suspicion and fear. It lifted a clawed hand, not threatening but enticing, like one might offer a carrot to a mouse to breed. A silent invitation, a call to something beyond. And that was when Aurora noticed the last abnormality, the one she had deliberately refused to see until this moment. Another of them, smaller, stood among the impossible flowers a few yards away. Its form was more human, yet wrong—too thin, eyes too bright, movements too smooth. It beckoned to her with a flicker of pale fingers. With impossible purpose, she realized this entity held something she had lost years ago. In the darkness, the impossible glow gave it away—a silver music box she hadn’t seen since Evan had destroyed it. “Not possible,” she whispered, her voice cracking. The figure smiled, jagged teeth glimmering faintly, and gestured again to the music box. The choice was suddenly overwhelmingly clear. The Heartstone burned against her throat as if trying to warn her away while simultaneously drawing her forward. Everything she had studied whispered that this could not be real, yet everything her second sight had developed screamed that it was. The legend held that stepping through to join the Hollow Man entities meant losing your old self, becoming one with the endless hum that made up the realm between worlds. To embrace oblivion voluntarily. The Heartstone pulsed with warning energy, its warmth spreading through her chest despite the increasing cold of the Grove. Aurora held the dagger between her and the entities, not as a threat, but as one last tether to the world she knew. Tears froze on her cheeks as she looked from the music box back to the elongated Hollow Man, whose ancient eyes promised a release from all pain, all memory, all fear. She took half a step forward, tempted. Half a step toward another entity that appeared in the darkness, holding an impossible key—one that looked exactly like the front door key to her childhood home in Wales. With each new apparition showing a beloved memory in tangible form, the Grove’s call grew stronger. The humming wrapped around her mind like swaddling clothes, promising rest from a conscious life fraught with loss and danger. The Heartstone pulsed furiously, nearing pain. Aurora closed her eyes, the only refuge from the seductive promises that kept appearing. She pictured Eva in her mind, the steady stream of customer complaints at Golden Empress restaurant, the actual empty space above Silas’ bar where her things waited. The normalcy of her previous life. With effort, she reached for the last anchor she had left to this reality. Her decisions shouldn’t be made from betraying loss but from honoring life. It had taken her fleeing Evan and rebuilding in London to understand that truth. Aurora spun toward the standing stones marking the entrance to the Grove. She didn’t run. Pace was deliberate, measured. She needed disbelief every passing second or she might do something unforgivable. The humming intensified, borders of her vision warping sickeningly. Shadow entities materialized in her path, reaching for her with non-existent claws, but never quite touching as she passed. Hollow promises of the Grove now proven illusions. When she finally broke the tree line and crossed beneath the ancient oaks marking the Grove’s boundary, the muffled sounds of London night rushed back into her senses—the unfamiliar friend, a car horn, distant sirens. She stumbled once, then again, and found herself on her knees in the damp grass outside the Grove. Aurora looked back, forcing herself to see past the false illusion of normalcy. The standing stones still marked an entrance, but for the first time since she’d arrived, she saw the truth of what lay beyond. The Heartstone cooled against her skin. The Grove wasn’t just a clearing but a prison. A cage not of stones and earth, but of forgotten potential and what-ifs. The Hollow Men weren’t entities emerging from it, but pieces of humanity they had trapped in a state of yearning for everything they had lost. In the safety of the outside world, Aurora realized the Guardian at Grooted a pure Fascination with the Harvest that Lured one toward the center of the maze, never to return. The humming wasn't coming from the Grove itself but was an internal calling only the vulnerable could hear—a seductive whisper of all one had ever loved and lost. Her music box. Her childhood home. These weren't from the Hollow Men, but from the fragments of herself she had left behind since moving to London. A trap for the repentantly lonely and vulnerable—not with force, but with utmost gentleness and forgiveness. Aurora pushed to her feet, her breath ragged. She had nearly lost herself to the promise of reunion with parts of her past she had intentionally buried. The night air outside the standing stones was clean and fresh, free from the psychic pollen the Grove emitted to lure people back. She pictured Eva waiting for her call, worrying as always since Rory had started these nighttime expeditions, determined to unravel the mysteries behind increasing portal activity in London. Aurora Carter, the delivery girl pretending to be something else, was back. She was Rory again. And she knew now what she was truly running from—and why she couldn’t let herself run too far.
created_at"2026-05-27T10:12:06.913Z" 5/27/2026, 10:12:06 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
74.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1996
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"deliberately"
count1
6
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"completely"
2"slightly"
3"suddenly"
4"slowly"
5"deliberately"
6"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
24.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1996
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count3
2
word"warmth"
count4
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"resolved"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count2
11
word"chilling"
count1
12
word"profound"
count1
13
word"trembled"
count1
14
word"flicker"
count1
15
word"tangible"
count1
16
word"normalcy"
count2
17
word"measured"
count1
18
word"potential"
count1
19
word"yearning"
count1
20
word"determined"
count1
21
word"unravel"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"reminder"
4"pulse"
5"silence"
6"could feel"
7"shattered"
8"resolved"
9"stomach"
10"whisper"
11"chilling"
12"profound"
13"trembled"
14"flicker"
15"tangible"
16"normalcy"
17"measured"
18"potential"
19"yearning"
20"determined"
21"unravel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences141
matches
0"t with loss"
92.20% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences141
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1974
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1946
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Fae3
Grove16
October2
Heartstone6
Pendant1
Hel1
London5
Eva4
Richmond1
Evan3
Rory3
Fae-touched2
Aurora15
Sapphire1
Men3
Hollow6
Man2
Wales1
Golden1
Empress1
Guardian1
Grooted1
Fascination1
Harvest1
Lured1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Rory"
6"Aurora"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Hel"
3"London"
4"Richmond"
5"Fae-touched"
6"Men"
7"Hollow"
8"Wales"
9"Golden"
10"Grooted"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed baked into the very soil of this place between worlds"
1"as if trying to warn her away while simultaneously drawing her forward"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.533
wordCount1974
matches
0"Not just the one figure, but many"
1"not threatening but enticing, like one might offer a carrot to a mouse to breed"
2"not as a threat, but as one last tether to the world she knew"
3"not of stones and earth, but of forgotten potential"
4"not with force, but with utmost gentleness"
72.77% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences142
matches
0"chose that moment"
1"whispered that this screamed that it"
2"understand that truth"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean29.03
std17.83
cv0.614
sampleLengths
070
150
221
310
467
554
653
715
842
926
1041
1145
1256
1345
145
1542
166
1743
187
195
206
2145
225
2359
2443
2510
2613
274
2844
2939
3024
3164
3215
3320
3428
3520
3637
3734
387
3914
406
4140
4234
4319
4454
4536
4636
476
4841
496
97.80% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences141
matches
0"been given"
1"was elongated"
2"were whispered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs293
matches
0"was being"
1"was being"
2"wasn't coming"
3"was truly running"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences142
ratio0.134
matches
0"The edges were ragged, torn not cut—something had broken through with considerable force."
1"The ever-present chill wasn’t just from the cooling weather; it seemed baked into the very soil of this place between worlds."
2"The deep crimson gem—the one that had been given to her by an unknown benefactor just before her world had unraveled—pulsed faintly against her palm."
3"Her eyes drifted to the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a constant reminder of the childhood accident that had left her with a strange second sight she’d kept hidden from everyone save her childhood friend Eva."
4"Yet here she stood, alone in a listed park in Richmond—a park where a normal person would find simply deer, foxes, and the occasional escaped pheasant—behind standing stones that should only be a historical curiosity."
5"The last few moments held a faint rustling of leaves—a normal forest sound."
6"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors— midnight violets and blood oranges—even in darkness, their bioluminescence creating an eerie half-light that made her think of fireflies caught in amber."
7"She blinked, and it resolved, but the feeling remained—a slight pretrained distortion to reality that made her stomach tighten."
8"It started as a whisper—a faint skittering across dead leaves."
9"Her hand instinctively went to the small dagger sheathed at her belt—a self-defense measure Eva had insisted she carry after the incident with Evan."
10"Yet in that profound darkness, Aurora sensed it—all of them."
11"It stood nearly seven feet tall, limbs twisted at impossible angles, its skin—if skin it could be called—was like polished obsidian with cracks of Sapphire blue light pulsing beneath."
12"Its form was more human, yet wrong—too thin, eyes too bright, movements too smooth."
13"In the darkness, the impossible glow gave it away—a silver music box she hadn’t seen since Evan had destroyed it."
14"Half a step toward another entity that appeared in the darkness, holding an impossible key—one that looked exactly like the front door key to her childhood home in Wales."
15"When she finally broke the tree line and crossed beneath the ancient oaks marking the Grove’s boundary, the muffled sounds of London night rushed back into her senses—the unfamiliar friend, a car horn, distant sirens."
16"The humming wasn't coming from the Grove itself but was an internal calling only the vulnerable could hear—a seductive whisper of all one had ever loved and lost."
17"A trap for the repentantly lonely and vulnerable—not with force, but with utmost gentleness and forgiveness."
18"And she knew now what she was truly running from—and why she couldn’t let herself run too far."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount469
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.031982942430703626
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.014925373134328358
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean13.9
std8.24
cv0.593
sampleLengths
017
123
217
313
49
520
621
75
82
914
1010
1111
1225
1331
1436
1518
1618
1735
1815
1918
2019
215
2211
2313
242
255
269
2727
289
2920
3010
316
3214
3313
3429
353
3623
3719
385
3910
4013
419
4210
433
443
4524
466
4713
484
493
40.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.29577464788732394
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences135
matches
0"Too many points of origin"
1"Too many origins."
2"Just the wind, Rory."
3"Just the wind."
4"Such names were whispered among"
ratio0.037
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences135
matches
0"She knelt, the damp ground"
1"Her breath clouded in the"
2"It was the beginning of"
3"She had been standing at"
4"She straightened and pulled the"
5"Her eyes drifted to the"
6"she whispered to herself, more"
7"She tucked the pendant back"
8"It began as a high-pitched"
9"She focused on it, ignoring"
10"She blinked, and it resolved,"
11"It started as a whisper—a"
12"Her hand instinctively went to"
13"She resisted the urge to"
14"It wasn’t a chilling breeze"
15"It was at the far"
16"Its outline seemed too elongated,"
17"Her training taught her that"
18"They emanated no sound, no"
19"Her fingers trembled as they"
ratio0.296
85.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences135
matches
0"Aurora Carter tiptoed past the"
1"The iron chain she had"
2"She knelt, the damp ground"
3"The edges were ragged, torn"
4"Her breath clouded in the"
5"It was the beginning of"
6"The ever-present chill wasn’t just"
7"Aurora glanced at her watch."
8"She had been standing at"
9"She straightened and pulled the"
10"The deep crimson gem—the one"
11"Her eyes drifted to the"
12"That second sight told her"
13"Years of legal studies had"
14"she whispered to herself, more"
15"She tucked the pendant back"
16"The last few moments held"
17"Aurora took another step forward."
18"The Grove materialized around her"
19"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors—"
ratio0.748
74.07% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences135
matches
0"As if in response to"
1"To embrace oblivion voluntarily."
ratio0.015
47.62% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Aurora Carter tiptoed past the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of the Fae Grove."
1"Her eyes drifted to the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a constant reminder of the childhood accident that had left her with a strange second sight she’d…"
2"Yet here she stood, alone in a listed park in Richmond—a park where a normal person would find simply deer, foxes, and the occasional escaped pheasant—behind st…"
3"And she knew, with a certainty that defied rational explanation, that she was being watched."
4"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors— midnight violets and blood oranges—even in darkness, their bioluminescence creating an eerie half-light that made her …"
5"She focused on it, ignoring the hamstrung chain left behind by the mysterious trespasser who had been leaving offerings to a blasphemous god she could feel but …"
6"She blinked, and it resolved, but the feeling remained—a slight pretrained distortion to reality that made her stomach tighten."
7"The impossible flowers were darker now, their light receding as if swallowed by something."
8"The Heartstone burned against her throat as if trying to warn her away while simultaneously drawing her forward."
9"Half a step toward another entity that appeared in the darkness, holding an impossible key—one that looked exactly like the front door key to her childhood home…"
10"Aurora closed her eyes, the only refuge from the seductive promises that kept appearing."
11"She pictured Eva waiting for her call, worrying as always since Rory had started these nighttime expeditions, determined to unravel the mysteries behind increas…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she whispered, her voice cracking"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
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tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
76.4553%